knightfall
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Axelgear: Great fluff. Was the Eagle's mate with him when he sealed himself away in the chamber?
Karregan: I like the concept, but it sounds like it might fit better for a Moonshadow caste. Your character seems to be more mechanically focused on killing things than on his art, which seems strange given the latter is his motivation, even if one drives the other. Also, you failed to mention his Exaltation thus far, unless the background so far is only meant to cover his mortal life.
Melcairiel & Xarvh: As previously mentioned, this game and the one at GitP, while working off the same concept, will be slightly different. You can be in either or both, but if you choose to play in both, I'd very much prefer you use one character for GitP and a different character for this one.
MorakisChosen: Excellent start. The Guild has protection rackets, yes, that's fine. I'd rather you pay for the Artifact entirely with BP or entirely with XP, if possible. I would ask how he's managing to avoid Resonance, though, or, if he isn't, how those in his cult are dealing with the dark miracles Resonance causes.
Myllinnia: I like it. Just to be clear: one sister Exalted to a Lunar, the other, a Chosen of Secrets or a Wood aspect Terrestrial?; also, remember, Abyssal motivations have to be centered around destruction or Oblivion in some way, shape, or form.
Sherwood: Necrotech/necrosurgery falls under Craft (Fire) and Medicine, and Necrotech/necrosurgery would be specialties within that domain. Keep in mind that, as stated in Abyssals, you use the lesser of these two Abilities.
Luck: Good start, but I'm curious as to how Arishat came to even know about the Monstrances of Celestial Portion.
If your names aren't mentioned, there aren't any particular issues or clarifications I need at this time, aside from those mentioned in the previous post.
Karregan: I like the concept, but it sounds like it might fit better for a Moonshadow caste. Your character seems to be more mechanically focused on killing things than on his art, which seems strange given the latter is his motivation, even if one drives the other. Also, you failed to mention his Exaltation thus far, unless the background so far is only meant to cover his mortal life.
Melcairiel & Xarvh: As previously mentioned, this game and the one at GitP, while working off the same concept, will be slightly different. You can be in either or both, but if you choose to play in both, I'd very much prefer you use one character for GitP and a different character for this one.
MorakisChosen: Excellent start. The Guild has protection rackets, yes, that's fine. I'd rather you pay for the Artifact entirely with BP or entirely with XP, if possible. I would ask how he's managing to avoid Resonance, though, or, if he isn't, how those in his cult are dealing with the dark miracles Resonance causes.
Myllinnia: I like it. Just to be clear: one sister Exalted to a Lunar, the other, a Chosen of Secrets or a Wood aspect Terrestrial?; also, remember, Abyssal motivations have to be centered around destruction or Oblivion in some way, shape, or form.
Sherwood: Necrotech/necrosurgery falls under Craft (Fire) and Medicine, and Necrotech/necrosurgery would be specialties within that domain. Keep in mind that, as stated in Abyssals, you use the lesser of these two Abilities.
Luck: Good start, but I'm curious as to how Arishat came to even know about the Monstrances of Celestial Portion.
If your names aren't mentioned, there aren't any particular issues or clarifications I need at this time, aside from those mentioned in the previous post.
