Fantasy The Black Ravine Hunt [OOC]

[VioletShadow]

First part it's biological meaning composed of organic matter and living and just because it's not aroused or attracted to a certain gender doesent mean it's a robot . Second it's not invisible , it's just as visible as anyone else but just colored greyish black ( except the white ring on its neck ) and lastly humanoid is anything that has the appeareance of a human ex. 2legs, 2arms, a head in which he has all three requirements. So anything you said that you don't like is falsely portrayed except the part that it cannot speak

Alright, so it seems you missed my points.

• When i said robot-like, I didn't say it was a robot. I said it was similar to a robot, due to the fact that it can't feel deep emotions, can't talk, etc.
• I didn't say invisible. I said invinsible, which was me misspelling invincible xP
• That is difficult to tell based on your drawings. But anyway, that isn't the issue. It seems you want me to actually dissect your CS? Can you compare it to the others and see what you're missing?

Nonetheless, here are a few points that might help you, but if you're going to be childish then just leave xP

• Overpowered - did you even read my interest check? I stated that the most powerful have been killed already in the war. 'lightning fast defense mode blocking , converting arms to solid impenetrable matter blocks in defense mode, can walk through walls. ' right so an impenetrable defence is not allowed or even an interesting ability ^^ 'He does not age or die because unless there literally is no matter around him ( like space) he replenishes his body mass via matter all around him ' so you're saying here he has infinite regeneration, which is also OP ^^
• Your character is not interesting. He has no personality or even a good backstory. He cannot communicate with others. There is little character development potential in him that I can see.
• You can justify your character as much as you want, but if I don't accept it as the GM, then you are not welcome here ^^
  • 'Roleplay Creators have the right to remove or reject any player from their roleplay.'

AnonyMouse Your character has been approved! I sincerely hope your character reconciles with Brynhilde one day ^^ Your characters magic is a little too powerful, but I'll accept it as she is much older than the other characters and would have had much longer to train her abilities xP

 

[Lenny2000]

Alright, so it seems you missed my points.

• When i said robot-like, I didn't say it was a robot. I said it was similar to a robot, due to the fact that it can't feel deep emotions, can't talk, etc.
• I didn't say invisible. I said invinsible, which was me misspelling invincible xP
• That is difficult to tell based on your drawings. But anyway, that isn't the issue. It seems you want me to actually dissect your CS? Can you compare it to the others and see what you're missing?

Nonetheless, here are a few points that might help you, but if you're going to be childish then just leave xP

• Overpowered - did you even read my interest check? I stated that the most powerful have been killed already in the war. 'lightning fast defense mode blocking , converting arms to solid impenetrable matter blocks in defense mode, can walk through walls. ' right so an impenetrable defence is not allowed or even an interesting ability ^^ 'He does not age or die because unless there literally is no matter around him ( like space) he replenishes his body mass via matter all around him ' so you're saying here he has infinite regeneration, which is also OP ^^
• Your character is not interesting. He has no personality or even a good backstory. He cannot communicate with others. There is little character development potential in him that I can see.
• You can justify your character as much as you want, but if I don't accept it as the GM, then you are not welcome here ^^
  • 'Roleplay Creators have the right to remove or reject any player from their roleplay.'

AnonyMouse Your character has been approved! I sincerely hope your character reconciles with Brynhilde one day ^^ Your characters magic is a little too powerful, but I'll accept it as she is much older than the other characters and would have had much longer to train her abilities xP

Lacking emotions in a complex or advanced level doesent mean robot because there are many mentally handicapped people that don't know jokes or complex emotions in which you are just being a childish bigot with stereotype views.

Invincibility is not a guarantee as if he was invincible he would have no flaws or weaknesses as I already in the most elementary way exposed it to you all of his flaws and denying that aspect is simply childish and retarded .

Since you said that my character is not special I want to add that None of your characters are special because when I review them they seem like a typical clé Che movie character that isn't special at all because all of those special powers are a general norm and oversaturated which is super boring and when I add in something different you call it not intrested , get a life plz.

You are not a GM, you are a burden upon society

 

[Reinhardt]

Hm. Interesting. You better stop now and go cool your head off before your CS and your attitude get shit on, boy.

 

[VioletShadow]

Lenny2000 Right so you're out of the roleplay ^^ Please leave now xP

CkSmalling Your CS dissection:

• This is just a suggestion, but perhaps make your characters name more fantasy-like to fit in with the others? Not a problem if you decide not to tho ^^
• 'intelligent' isn't a personality trait, and 'charming' is rather vague, do you mean good with words? I'd like an explanation of 'snake tongue' please xP
• 'Jealous' isn't a personality flaw, do you mean gets easily jealous or envious? what do you mean by 'bloodlust', do you mean bloodthirsty or has great bloodlust? I'd like at least 4 viable flaws please xP
• disliking 'peasants' and 'those in royalty' basically means almost everyone? I'm not going to allow an edgy character which hates the world and everyone thanks xD
• Alright so basically your character is a walking disaster waiting to happen? Are you planning on him becoming an anatagonist after tricking the group? I can accept it if that was your plan. If not, please give some explanation, because I don't see why he wouldn't try and kill his team members O.o
• His 'blood-lust' spell is kind of over the top without much of a flaw. Chances are this roleplay won't go on until your character begins to age and die early, so can you create a better con to this ability and nerf it, sleeping for 24 hours isn't that bad either. How long can he rampage?
• His weakness is only a con to his blood-lust spell, add at least three different prominent weaknesses ^^

I might accept your character sheet after you fix these things.

 

[VioletShadow]

Hm. Interesting. You better stop now and go cool your head off before your CS and your attitude get shit on, boy.

Thanks for defending me boi, you've earned brownie points ;3

 

[AnonyMouse]

I'm just gonna ignore the shit show going on up there and keep things positive. Why even bother debating something so ridiculous, coming from someone who clearly isn't going to be a part of this RP?

AnonyMouse Your character has been approved! I sincerely hope your character reconciles with Brynhilde one day ^^ Your characters magic is a little too powerful, but I'll accept it as she is much older than the other characters and would have had much longer to train her abilities xP

Thanks for the vote of confidence. There are limits I didn't write into the CS. Well, actually I did, but edited a lot of things out. That CS is already over 2500 words and I made a lot of cuts to keep it simple... relatively speaking. The limits still exist, (and I hope that will become apparent when the RP begins,) they're just not in writing. Of course, if you want them in writing, let me know.

Playing a healer is always kind of tricky. We're journeying into a hellmouth to fight savage beasts that can easily snap off an arm or a leg or severely maim or kill our characters. I don't wanna trivialize the danger there. But, on the other hand, it would be silly to venture into such an environment without someone who can do more than fix papercuts. I'll do my best to walk the line.

 

[VioletShadow]

I'm just gonna ignore the shit show going on up there and keep things positive. Why even bother debating something so ridiculous, coming from someone who clearly isn't going to be a part of this RP?


Thanks for the vote of confidence. There are limits I didn't write into the CS. Well, actually I did, but edited a lot of things out. That CS is already over 2500 words and I made a lot of cuts to keep it simple... relatively speaking. The limits still exist, (and I hope that will become apparent when the RP begins,) they're just not in writing. Of course, if you want them in writing, let me know.

Playing a healer is always kind of tricky. We're journeying into a hellmouth to fight savage beasts that can easily snap off an arm or a leg or severely maim or kill our characters. I don't wanna trivialize the danger there. But, on the other hand, it would be silly to venture into such an environment without someone who can do more than fix papercuts. I'll do my best to walk the line.

It's fine, I can tell you've put in a large amount of effort towards your character sheet, which I as a GM I'm grateful for, and won't stress you out further by requesting such a thing xP

Those were my thoughts as well, which was also part of the reason why I accepted your character sheet ^^

 

[Captain Spooks]

rip Lenny, boi doesn't even deserve a F in chat.

 

[VioletShadow]

BlueJay1403 wafflegirl AI10100 AnonyMouse Felix Asher Captain Spooks

Right, so I'm about to post the starter post in the IC. Do let me know if I've made mistakes somewhere O.o Feel free to extend some of the details I did not mention in my post, for example the name of the tavern itself, your characters guess of the figures gender, other buildings in the town, etc xP

I shall add AnonyMouse s CS to the character list after a break, as well as include their details in the lore ^^

 

[Lekiel]

Would there be room for one more ? Otherwise, if you don't mind, I might just post a CS (for the sake of creative exercise) and if there's room, you could consider it ?

torn between youthfulness: a human tribe-ish smith's daughter - warrior esque, a kitsune archer or mage,

or

'maturity': a winged veteran soldier or a good ol' Chubic master swordsman. :S

 

[Felix Asher]

Was just about to put up a post- but since Elliot's going by a fake name at the moment, would it easier for everyone if I wrote using 'Robin' or 'Elliot'?

 

[wafflegirl]

Felix Asher Robin is fine ^^

 

[AI10100]

I agree that Robin is fine.

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

Hoi~! Kiyoko here, asking if this RP's open or not~! If so, she would love to join, and if not, she would love to give this RP a thumbs-up anyway for looking so enjoyable!

(Don't question the third person, I'm in a strange mood because stuffs and I feel like third person)

 

[CkSmalling]

Hmmmm since most of the problems revolve around the armor and the personality, I'll remove the cursed armor and overhaul the traits section. I'll also change the chaotic evil to something neutral. Are these changes okay with you? I can't do them right now cause i have a very limited data plan so I'll do that tomorrow using school wifi.

 

[VioletShadow]

Would there be room for one more ? Otherwise, if you don't mind, I might just post a CS (for the sake of creative exercise) and if there's room, you could consider it ?

torn between youthfulness: a human tribe-ish smith's daughter - warrior esque, a kitsune archer or mage,

or

'maturity': a winged veteran soldier or a good ol' Chubic master swordsman. :S

Hoi~! Kiyoko here, asking if this RP's open or not~! If so, she would love to join, and if not, she would love to give this RP a thumbs-up anyway for looking so enjoyable!

(Don't question the third person, I'm in a strange mood because stuffs and I feel like third person)

You two may join, since I've had a few people leave recently ^^ (Been PMed and stuff) Glad we have so much interest! xP

Hmmmm since most of the problems revolve around the armor and the personality, I'll remove the cursed armor and overhaul the traits section. I'll also change the chaotic evil to something neutral. Are these changes okay with you? I can't do them right now cause i have a very limited data plan so I'll do that tomorrow using school wifi.

I'll have a look tomorrow after you've changed it, I can't say for certain at the moment ^^

 

[VioletShadow]

As much as I love everyones posts and the story that comes with them, it kind of intimidates me O.o What I was imagining as a casual roleplay has gone far beyond my expectations ^^ Is my posting speed too slow? Is my writing length not enough? I wonder if it would be better to hand over the reigns to someone who can keep up better, for everyones benefit. O.o Thoughts?

BlueJay1403 AnonyMouse AI10100 wafflegirl Felix Asher Captain Spooks

 

[AnonyMouse]

As much as I love everyones posts and the story that comes with them, it kind of intimidates me O.o What I was imagining as a casual roleplay has gone far beyond my expectations ^^ Is my posting speed too slow? Is my writing length not enough? I wonder if it would be better to hand over the reigns to someone who can keep up better, for everyones benefit. O.o Thoughts?

I'm pretty sure every GM goes through what you're going through right now, that feeling that "there are good writers, good stories, good characters here and I don't wanna fuck that up." But, bear in mind, those things only exist because of the world you made. You're one of those good writers, too. So, give yourself some credit. Also, because there are such good writers in this RP, I think they can take whatever you throw at them and work with it. You don't have to write long, flowery posts about the color of the paint on the walls and which direction the clouds are moving, because we'll fill in that. I can see there's a lot of imagination and heart in this RP and no shortage of enthusiasm.

Also, it's only the opening posts. I can't speak for everyone here, but I have a tendency to make my opening post absurdly long and try to pack as much characterization as possible into it. It's not a trend I intend to continue. First impressions are important, after all.

 

[BlueJay1403]

As much as I love everyones posts and the story that comes with them, it kind of intimidates me O.o What I was imagining as a casual roleplay has gone far beyond my expectations ^^ Is my posting speed too slow? Is my writing length not enough? I wonder if it would be better to hand over the reigns to someone who can keep up better, for everyones benefit. O.o Thoughts?

BlueJay1403 AnonyMouse AI10100 wafflegirl Felix Asher Captain Spooks

I'm pretty sure every GM goes through what you're going through right now, that feeling that "there are good writers, good stories, good characters here and I don't wanna fuck that up." But, bear in mind, those things only exist because of the world you made. You're one of those good writers, too. So, give yourself some credit. Also, because there are such good writers in this RP, I think they can take whatever you throw at them and work with it. You don't have to write long, flowery posts about the color of the paint on the walls and which direction the clouds are moving, because we'll fill in that. I can see there's a lot of imagination and heart in this RP and no shortage of enthusiasm.

Also, it's only the opening posts. I can't speak for everyone here, but I have a tendency to make my opening post absurdly long and try to pack as much characterization as possible into it. It's not a trend I intend to continue. First impressions are important, after all.

Yeah, I only made my first reply long because the starting post was. I normally write 5 lines to a paragraph. You're doing great.

 

[VioletShadow]

I'm pretty sure every GM goes through what you're going through right now, that feeling that "there are good writers, good stories, good characters here and I don't wanna fuck that up." But, bear in mind, those things only exist because of the world you made. You're one of those good writers, too. So, give yourself some credit. Also, because there are such good writers in this RP, I think they can take whatever you throw at them and work with it. You don't have to write long, flowery posts about the color of the paint on the walls and which direction the clouds are moving, because we'll fill in that. I can see there's a lot of imagination and heart in this RP and no shortage of enthusiasm.

Also, it's only the opening posts. I can't speak for everyone here, but I have a tendency to make my opening post absurdly long and try to pack as much characterization as possible into it. It's not a trend I intend to continue. First impressions are important, after all.

Thank you, that means a lot ^^

Yeah, I only made my first reply long because the starting post was. I normally write 5 lines to a paragraph. You're doing great.

Thank you for your kind words ^^ But your post was not long, it just exceeded the minimum criteria for a post xD I hope you continue writing at least that amount O.o

 

[BlueJay1403]

oH OK tHeN

 

[Captain Spooks]

I'll try an get my fisrt post up tomorow, I've been finishing up an essay this week.

 

[Felix Asher]

I think you've been doing a lovely job so far. And this speed at the moment fits my current schedule the best :') I think because of timezones too- I've noticed that most of y'all are posting when I'm dead asleep, so I'm just glad I'm not missing out on too much then

 

[AI10100]

As much as I love everyones posts and the story that comes with them, it kind of intimidates me O.o What I was imagining as a casual roleplay has gone far beyond my expectations ^^ Is my posting speed too slow? Is my writing length not enough? I wonder if it would be better to hand over the reigns to someone who can keep up better, for everyones benefit. O.o Thoughts?

BlueJay1403 AnonyMouse AI10100 wafflegirl Felix Asher Captain Spooks

I agree with the others. You're fine. The posting speed also isn't a problem since it gives me ample time to reply since I don't have to check and recheck every now and then. In any case, I do long replies out of habit and I certainly don't mind the length of your post.

Don't worry, you're doing a fantastic job.

 

[Lekiel]

Posted me CS! Lemme know if anything~