Tales of Salisonia: Rise of the Dragons [Official OOC Thread]

Who is Elva... I haven't read the series in so long. I didn't even finish


****** the third book, I skipped the last 300 pages. lol.


Wait, is Elva that child who was cursed by Eragon?
 
As for the whole thing about the raid and what killed her father specifically, I may need to ask Kai' zen to submit the character we've been working on together. Much of the information I gave was what Wynn knows, so she doesn't know exactly what killed her father. I'm revising Wynn's CS to include information that she wouldn't specifically know :P
 
paipai900 said:
I never did like the ending of the Inheritance Cycle...
Arya's already OP enough and their romance was rushed and to the point. Eragon was sent off to a far off land to train new riders? Sequel series perhaps? Anyway, back to the riders thing, I wanted Elva to be the dragon rider SO BADLY.


What do you mean rushed? Pfft ... what, just because they made it to second base in the first book?
 
Would having a merfolk character really work without being limited? Since they have can be depleted of their water source, they would have to generally be near water as there won't always be water for them to use. :i
 
Well, I'm off to take a shower. My throat hurts from doing all these voices, so perhaps it'll provide some relief. Playing a flirtatious male was more taxing than I thought.
 
[QUOTE="Lucem Tenebris]Well, I'm off to take a shower. My throat hurts from doing all these voices, so perhaps it'll provide some relief. Playing a flirtatious male was more taxing than I thought.

[/QUOTE]
I'm pretty sure you're one of the merfolk. How many times have you said you're going to take a shower?
 
paipai900 said:
Since I can barely see due to how much computer/phone radiation I've been having recently, Sebastian here has done a great job in reviewing once again. I, PaiPai900 the Queen of Likes, knight thee, Sebastian. Rise, Sir Sebastian.
Anyway, here's your review @Wynn Kamui which is Sebastian's review:


I see Sue qualities and I'd like more detail about her ability to quickly analyze a foe to make sure it's not OP. I'm not so sure about the flying machines, since it contradicts that wind is overlooked and given no importance. If people saw others flying in the sky, I'm pretty sure they wouldn't overlook it. I'm also not keen on flying being preset whatsoever, unless it's with a contracted beast.


There's no detail about the raid that killed her loved ones, which is pretty important. I'd also like information on why she wanted to follow in her father's footsteps. Just saying he died doesn't give much information on that. Also, if she was near death before she was found, why would she be determined to follow in his footsteps. In a situation like that, it doesn't make sense.


How did she survive for those two weeks she was alone? She was near death after two days before being found, so how did she manage two weeks? When she met Erina, how did they not get caught stealing sooner and how did they do it in the first place? It doesn't seem very likely that two weak and hungry little girls could evade capture for that long.


Why was the orphanage owner like that and why did he treat them badly? How did nobody find out about this? Surely someone would've taken notice. Why wasn't Erina scared? She's in the same position as everyone else, so why did she not show fear?


For the end of the history, how did Erina carry Wynn so far? Again, it doesn't make much sense. How did Mr. Slohr find out they left? How did Erina get Wynn on a boat? Did nobody notice what was happening to them? Wouldn't someone have stepped in? Wouldn't the shipowner see there was somebody getting on his boat? If Slohr had already caught up, how did Erina hold him off? When was Wynn asleep? How does a broken leg prevent her from seeing what happened to Erina?


For the Wind abilities, no making the air super cold or super hot and other things of that nature. How does Wind redirect water?
Just saying, if you can become skilled enough to manipulate wind currents on any level moving water by manipulating the air around it makes a lot of sense, like the way a hurricane sends water everywhere, it's all in the air, also if the flying machines, aren't being tested in a very populated area they could be easily overlooked or considered to be a bird depending on the height the person is flying at. (Which should have been mentioned in the info) and it says(although not in much detail) that the girls use their intelligence to pull off their small heists, in my opinion grilling people on smallish details like that leave out opportunities for cool little talents and secrets about the character, not saying that when its convenient that someone could just pop in and say "oh hey did I mention my character can do this" when it isn't at all included in the bio. If there are any questions about smaller skills ask them character to character in the rp when you meet them, it gives more depth to conversation and interaction between characters in the rp itself......but those are just my thoughts, I prolly shouldn't put in any input when I haven't even been accepted.......Yet.
 
Now I wanna make one... >->


Seriously, I might as well make a CS for every class and every race so I can just go ahead and use it when I want to be that character, I am going to end up making them one way or another.


If that did happen, hopefully this RP didn't suddenly pick up massively in speed because then I would spend the entire day writing post after post. xD
 
Okayyy...


So.


Most of the points about my CS were due to some poor wording on my part, so I fixed that.


Also, when it comes to Slohr, this town we're talking about was filled with criminals, and the justice system didn't work because most of the officials were corrupt and heavily involved in the criminal activity. Slohr was one of the bosses running the criminal system in the city- The orphanage was but one of the schemes he was involved in. I also changed it so that it was not Slohr himself who was chasing them, but instead one of his goons.


Also, I never said that Erina actuall fought him off, I was trying to delicately state that she was being a meat shield.
 
I'm going to let Sebastian handle this one once he gets back from being a mermaid his shower, time to work on that event that I'm really hoping to start already!! ^^
 
paipai900 said:
I'm going to let Sebastian handle this one once he gets back from being a mermaid his shower, time to work on that event that I'm really hoping to start already!! ^^
I miss all the events :P


I swear, I've worked harder on Wynn's CS than I have worked on all of my school work in the history of ever. Ever.
 
[QUOTE="Wynn Kamui]I miss all the events :P
I swear, I've worked harder on Wynn's CS than I have worked on all of my school work in the history of ever. Ever.

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Let me get out my stickers and place a heart on your forehead. :3
 
..::Raiko Moyasu::..


.:Age:.


16


.:Race:.


Human


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Appearance notes:


Raiko has amber eyes that look red when he uses his fire magic. He has a staff that he believes is one of the ones confiscated from the mages who were imprisoned shortly before his escape. The origins of the staff are thus unknown. The remainder of his garb is made up of assorted items that were confiscated from the mages, so some of it doesn't fit him very well.


Personality:


Raiko has lost his hope in the world- every time he places his trust in someone, not only have they betrayed him, they seem to have gone out of their way to harm him. He is very mistrusting of people and has little experience with dealing with them. He doesn't like being alone but he will stay that way if he has to. It is in his nature to be a kind and hopeful person, but after the betrayal he felt he has buried those feelings within himself.he is angry and determined to find his parents not stopping until he destroys them and their precious gang. Raiko's goal is the only thing that keeps him going and has sustained him.


.:History:.


When he was young, his parents led him to believe that they lived a normal life- They traveled a lot and never settled down in one place for more than a month. His parents were the leaders of a gang that was well-known for their cruelty. His parents were especially cruel and only softened when they were with each other. His mother was kind to him but mostly ever taught him to take care of himself, but his father was a gruff man who only taught him how to fight and steal. His father never showed any tenderness towards Raiko, and only ever treated him as a common bandit. One night, when Raiko was 9, their group was moving once again, in a risky attemp to ride past Bran through Samaria. A large squad of Bran's soldiers who recognized them from an investigation about a village massacre two years prior attacked, arresting a large amount of the bandits, including his parents and himself. Raiko was arrested and put in the same jail as his parents. When evaluated for placement, he was placed in the same area as his father, because they assumed that Raiko would have the same power as him. Raiko had little knowledge of his fathers power, but he had seen him light campfires and other small flames. The cell he was held in had many magical seals that were made to hinder the use of magic. For the next few years, after hearing multiple conversations about his fathers flames, he tried to conjure fire in his cell, but the most he could manage were some sparks. For all the energy he was putting into the flames, barely anything seemed to happen. One day there was a great commotion as a group of criminal mages were put into cells, and because Raiko had no history of potent magic, he was moved to another cell to accommodate the new inmates. The new cell had no magic seals to subdue mages. Next thing he knew, he saw his parents walking down the hallway. Thinking they were coming for him he called out to them, and reached out his hand. His mother stopped, gave him a look that was filled with disgust and left him, his father just ignored him completely. Shocked and deeply hurt he tried to further beckon them with his fire to make them notice him. Little did he know that those tiny sparks he was able to make while bound by magical seals would be considerably multiplied without the seals. He caused a massive explosion, creating a hole in the cell block he was in. His parents, using him as a distraction, escaped and left him in the jail. When Raiko roused he was in a tree, his prison uniform filled with holes and cuts.


.:Abilities:.


All of Raiko's abilities in magic are random and uncontrolled because he has no experience using a medium (A staff in his case). This being the case, he has much potential as a Fire Elementalist, but the lack of control over the element can cause much more harm to himself than his intended targets. When using a staff for his magic, he has much more control, but the potency is severely lowered.


(Never give up EVER!!!!!!! xD )
 
[QUOTE="Wynn Kamui]Hey guys, I did it!
All my posts are now pre-paipai liked.

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Yeah, but if anyone likes it, it gets messed up.
 
Just to point something out really quick, a medium is not needed. Cressy's character is an example of this.
 
Also, for the record, Kai'zen's character's parents are the leaders of the group that burned down my village. 


[QUOTE="Lucem Tenebris]Just to point something out really quick, a medium is not needed. Cressy's character is an example of this.

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I thought that a medium helped novice mages control the magic? Emphasis on novice. 
For the record I have no idea about any of the specifics involving Cressy's character :P
 
GUY'S, TAKE A VOTE. 1 LIKE = 1 VOTE


VOTE FOR -


FEMALE


MALE


A MAGE THAT SHOOTS MAGICS THAT ARE LIKE EARTH OR FIRE AND STUFF


OTHER MAGES AND STUFF


PEASANTS THAT ARE WORTHLESS


POINTY EAR PEOPLE


WHALES WITH HUMANS ATTACHED TO THEM


CREEPY THING WITH WINGS


DRUNK SHORT PEOPLE


NORMAL PERSON


WHATEVER ELSE THERE IS
 
MrLlama said:
GUY'S, TAKE A VOTE. 1 LIKE = 1 VOTE
VOTE FOR -


FEMALE


MALE


A MAGE THAT SHOOTS MAGICS THAT ARE LIKE EARTH OR FIRE AND STUFF


OTHER MAGES AND STUFF


PEASANTS THAT ARE WORTHLESS


POINTY EAR PEOPLE


WHALES WITH HUMANS ATTACHED TO THEM


CREEPY THING WITH WINGS


DRUNK SHORT PEOPLE


NORMAL PERSON


WHATEVER ELSE THERE IS
So how are we supposed to vote for separate things? Or do we like, and automatically vote for everything? Or am I having a derp moment, and I don't get it?
 

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