Fandom Shirou Emiya's Smithing Shop - OOC

[Hanarei]

I'm making a genderswapped servant, and as a general rule of thumb, genderswapped servants are always op

Bonus points for a female turned to male. No one ever does it that way!

 

[LostHaven]

Bonus points for a female turned to male. No one ever does it that way!

oh shit D: *looks around wildly* are you stalking me?

 

[Dalamus Ulom]

oh shit D: *looks around wildly* are you stalking me?

So Archer's a female to male genderswap?

 

[LostHaven]

So Archer's a female to male genderswap?

hahaha.

HELL NO.

 

[Hanarei]

oh shit D: *looks around wildly* are you stalking me?

What? I... um... n.. never! No.... never!

 

[HTCOR]

oh no. We have a Saber/Beserker Ship, a Stalking Lancer, Ass-assin, and now a strange Archer?

 

[Mion]

oh no. We have a Saber/Beserker Ship, a Stalking Lancer, Ass-assin, and now a strange Archer?

Rider ain't looking so bad now huh?

 

[HTCOR]

Rider ain't looking so bad now huh?

Don't even get me started on Rider.

 

[Hanarei]

oh no. We have a Saber/Beserker Ship, a Stalking Lancer, Ass-assin, and now a strange Archer?

Oh please, lancer doesn't stalk I am the stalker.

 

[HTCOR]

Oh please, lancer doesn't stalk I stalk.

But do you know who stalks the Stalker?

 

[Hanarei]

But do you know who stalks the Stalker?

Please, LostHaven is omni-pawtent. He knows I'm stalking him and allows it.

 

[LostHaven]

Please, LostHaven is omni-pawtent. He knows I'm stalking him and allows it.

*Approves of pun*

 

[Godhowsae]

Well, cojemo I look forward to bringing you victory in this war.

 

[Birdsie]

Name:Mason brown
Age:12
Gender:male
Height: 4 foot eleven inches
Weight:95 pounds
Wish:to find out who killed his father
Generation: (4)
Organization: ( unsanctioned.)
Race:Human
Alignment: neutral good

Background:Mason story starts when he blacked out at the native burial ground in a trip to the USA from japan.He then woke up in his room.Mason was wondering where he father was.Mason decided to search for him.When he found him he was killed.In his hometown short web.Mason background is Japanese with his father being a police officer and his mother a army officer.Mason then called the police to tell them about his father murder.then some doctors checked mason state of mind.They found out that mason seem to have memory lost,multiple personality disorder,

Mason with this event decided to train himself to become a police officer to find out who killed his father.He then trained with his mother in gun trained and hand to hand combat.The person who killed mason father has not be found yet.Also Mason hopes to one day put the person who killed his father in prison or death row.

Likes:video games,chocolate,gun training,
Dislikes:the person who killed his father,spawn campers,internet trolls,school
Talents: (avoiding school work.)

[

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Parameters:
Strength:C
Endurance:C
Mana: EX
Agility:C
Luck:C

Magic Circuits:
Circuit Quality:B
Circuit Quantity:B
Circuit Composition: (Normal)

Magecraft: (none)

Other: (Mason knows how to shoot guns at targets,Mason also has multiple personality disorder,and knows how to defend himself in hand to hand combat)i am going to have to pm you some stuff.
also i would like him to be the master of the saber plz(if that person is taken then just do random pick plz)

Holy vampire hunters stakin' for Jesus.
Sweet dear mother Gaia...

Let's pick this apart, shall we?

- How come he is of the fourth generation without practicing magecraft? I mean, I don't mind the fact that he has good quality of Magic Circuits. That's unlikely albeit reasonable. I want to know how come his great grandfather began the study of magecraft and didn't pass anything down, because that seems utterly absurd. As a 12-year old, he should at least have a portion of his Magic Crest available to him, right? And with the 4th Generation it's fairly reasonable that he'd probably HAVE a Magic Crest.
- Why is he unsanctioned? I mean, I get it -- he's a kid. That's good and all, but one would think that he'd try to seek out help from an adult so he can like, join the Association to pull off money for "research," or something while he really uses it for living. It'd be more believable if he was of the 2nd or 1st Generation.
- While the parameters are generally believable, I can't believe his Mana. B+B doesn't add up to make EX. He'd at least have A+++ in both. Not to mention how incredibly rare this is and how useless it is except being a living Od battery for his Servant to suck on. (Because he doesn't have magecraft knowledge, remember?)
- No magecraft? Like I explained, a 4th Generation Magus would totally have SOME KIND of Magecraft at the age of 12. If he didn't learn it from his father, there'd at least be SOME basic stuff stored in the Magic Crest, a PORTION of which he should at least have access to at the age of 12.
- Who in hell taught a 12 year old to handle, maintain, and properly clean weaponry? Or is it just shooting and not actual ownership?
- DID is fair enough, but I'm not sure what his Servant would say about that.
- How come he knows hand-to-hand combat? A 12-year old would be rather... weak... extremely weak. Without some kind of Reinforcement magecraft or being created a homunculus with special muscles, I don't see how he can defend against anything than a bully older than him by one year.
- Also, the grammar slightly hurts my eyes and brain.

 

[Captain Gabriel]

Holy vampire hunters stakin' for Jesus.
Sweet dear mother Gaia...

Let's pick this apart, shall we?

- How come he is of the fourth generation without practicing magecraft? I mean, I don't mind the fact that he has good quality of Magic Circuits. That's unlikely albeit reasonable. I want to know how come his great grandfather began the study of magecraft and didn't pass anything down, because that seems utterly absurd. As a 12-year old, he should at least have a portion of his Magic Crest available to him, right? And with the 4th Generation it's fairly reasonable that he'd probably HAVE a Magic Crest.
- Why is he unsanctioned? I mean, I get it -- he's a kid. That's good and all, but one would think that he'd try to seek out help from an adult so he can like, join the Association to pull off money for "research," or something while he really uses it for living. It'd be more believable if he was of the 2nd or 1st Generation.
- While the parameters are generally believable, I can't believe his Mana. B+B doesn't add up to make EX. He'd at least have A+++ in both. Not to mention how incredibly rare this is and how useless it is except being a living Od battery for his Servant to suck on.
- No magecraft? Like I explained, a 4th Generation Magus would totally have SOME KIND of Magecraft at the age of 12. If he didn't learn it from his father, there'd at least be SOME basic stuff stored in the Magic Crest, a PORTION of which he should at least have access to at the age of 12.
- Who in hell taught a 12 year old to handle, maintain, and properly clean weaponry? Or is it just shooting and not actual ownership?
- DID is fair enough, but I'm not sure what his Servant would say about that.
- How come he knows hand-to-hand combat? A 12-year old would be rather... weak... extremely weak. Without some kind of Reinforcement magecraft or being created a homunculus with special muscles, I don't see how he can defend against anything than a bully older than him by one year.
- Also, the grammar slightly hurts my eyes and brain.

In short:
Please actually learn more about the Fate universe before actually trying to RP in it.
These are all mistakes that could've been avoided if you knew more about Fate.
Also, there's no fucking way a kid could be a master. He would be immediately kicked out of the war by the Overseer.

 

[Birdsie]

In short:
Please actually learn more about the Fate universe before actually trying to RP in it.
These are all mistakes that could've been avoided if you knew more about Fate.
Also, there's no fucking way a kid could be a master. He would be immediately kicked out of the war by the Overseer.

Actually, not really. You can't do shit once someone has the Command Seals. You need to learn too! *Slap*

 

[dwarfking1999]

i will make edits

 

[Xel]

In short:
Please actually learn more about the Fate universe before actually trying to RP in it.
These are all mistakes that could've been avoided if you knew more about Fate.
Also, there's no fucking way a kid could be a master. He would be immediately kicked out of the war by the Overseer.

That is entirely untrue. Anyone of any age can be in the war and the overseer has no ability to change that. You could have a 2 year old as a master if the Grail wanted it. Would suck for the servant having to literally babysit, but you can do it. There's also plenty examples of kids being in holy grail wars.

 

[Hanarei]

That is entirely untrue. Anyone of any age can be in the war and the overseer has no ability to change that. You could have a 2 year old as a master if the Grail wanted it. Would suck for the servant having to literally babysit, but you can do it. There's also plenty examples of kids being in holy grail wars.

*Thinks of "Yeah, Birdsie has played a Master after all" joke but doesn't say it... just thinks it in a way that can be read.*

 

[Dalamus Ulom]

I'm agnostic, but Dwarfking's CS made me look to the bible for help. 1/10, would not read again.

 

[Captain Gabriel]

I'm agnostic, but Dwarfking's CS made me look to the bible for help. 1/10, would not read again.

I must say that this message made me lmao.
Not for the message itself.
But because that is exactly how Birdsie reacted at first.

 

[Birdsie]

i will make edits

I'll give you a chance, but you need to fix your grammar and punctuation.

Don't write like a thoughtless buffon. Write like anyone else on the site. We use capital letters and full stops at the end of sentences.

 

[Dalamus Ulom]

I'll give you a chance, but you need to fix your grammar and punctuation.

Don't write like a thoughtless buffon. Write like anyone else on the site. We use capital letters and full stops at the end of sentences.

And also put spaces between periods and the start of a new sentence.

 

[Hanarei]

I'll give you a chance, but you need to fix your grammar and punctuation.

Don't write like a thoughtless buffon. Write like anyone else on the site. We use capital letters and full stops at the end of sentences.

Exactly, only birdsie can be a buffoon like that!

 

[Birdsie]

Exactly, only birdsie can be a buffoon like that!

*Slaps her* Discipline yourself! That kind of behavior is unacceptable!