Fantasy Seiunita OOC

[Historical Storyteller]

Wait, I'm not done.

Well, one person said that I used too much flowery descriptions, made the pacing a drawl, rehashed certain issues to much, and in general, tried to establish the setting too much. Didn't keep things vague and simple, he said.

And it's got me thinking: what if he's true? What if this post of mine is truly long-winded and just filled with redundant information? And then confusion turned to paranoia...

Hmm, pacing is tricky, especially with long posts like yours. Too short and you can barely call it a post while too long and you'll have to sustain our interest just to let us finish the damn thing.

You'll probably make mistakes along the way, but that's because it really is fucking hard to pace writing.

Honestly, at times when your post is long... and I'm too tired to read it... I sleep. SORRY, ITS TRUE. YES. PLEASE.

But at other times, you really push through and you manage to make me read a really DAMN LONG POST.

And is your post redundant? HELL NAW. WHERE'D THEY GET THAT IDEA?

Generally, I think you try to move your character from one event to another and try to keep the action flowing smoothly.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Thanks, Heis, you always provide a good, external view on my work. What would I do without you, I sometimes wonder...

Well, to business, the flowery parts are usually just self-indulgence, and as such, are kept short. I usually like to keep things to point, and even more so if I had a chance, but I'll keep it in mind to strive for even better writing!!!

Please, I beg you, Eleph, use smaller words... or you're going to have to DEFINE some of the words we're unfamiliar with for us. You can use footnotes...

Like say...

Hirsute (1)

Spoiler

(1) Hirsute - Eleph, tell us what Hirsute means.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

You haven't read the entire thing, have you, Heismit™?

I've been caught red-handed!

 

[Elephantom]

Please, I beg you, Eleph, use smaller words... or you're going to have to DEFINE some of the words we're unfamiliar with for us. You can use footnotes...

Like say...

Hirsute (1)

Spoiler

(1) Hirsute - Eleph, tell us what Hirsute means.

Hirsute means hairy. I thought it was obvious.

 

[Elephantom]

I've been caught red-handed!

Hahaha, I, great detective!

 

[Elephantom]

Hirsute means hairy. I thought it was obvious.

Still, I'll remember to use a couple of notes at the end of my posts, to explain things further.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Hirsute means hairy. I thought it was obvious.

There's another word for hairy? Damn.

Hahaha, I, great detective!

. . . . .

Still, I'll remember to use a couple of notes at the end of my posts, to explain things further.

I don't know if others will appreciate it.... BUT I CERTAINLY WILL APPRECIATE IT.

 

[Elephantom]

Hmm, pacing is tricky, especially with long posts like yours. Too short and you can barely call it a post while too long and you'll have to sustain our interest just to let us finish the damn thing.

Indeed, proper composition is one of the most darnest thing to maintain. Had to edit my post a million times before I got it just right, or right enough for reading.

You'll probably make mistakes along the way, but that's because it really is fucking hard to pace writing.

Honestly, at times when your post is long... and I'm too tired to read it... I sleep. SORRY, ITS TRUE. YES. PLEASE.

I find this oddly endearing, for some reason.

But at other times, you really push through and you manage to make me read a really DAMN LONG POST.

And is your post redundant? HELL NAW. WHERE'D THEY GET THAT IDEA?

MWAHAHAHHA, I'm thinking of making a ten thousand word post next time, which introduces many different viewpoints, authorial viewpoint, world building, and extensive dialogues...

Generally, I think you try to move your character from one event to another and try to keep the action flowing smoothly.

You've caught me with my hand in the cookie jar!

 

[Elephantom]

There's another word for hairy? Damn.



. . . . .



I don't know if others will appreciate it.... BUT I CERTAINLY WILL APPRECIATE IT.

I also used 'unshorn' at one point, which means hairy too.

 

[Elephantom]

If you're wondering about it, Historical Storyteller , this is how Markas is supposed to appear:



Although, I'm also consider this one:



Though, what he really looks like is a hybrid of both of them: southern and northern. A devious combination.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Indeed, proper composition is one of the most darnest thing to maintain. Had to edit my post a million times before I got it just right, or right enough for reading.

Which is why its hard to get me motivated to write in the first place. Sometimes, I find it hard to cut out some of the things I write. When I do that, it feels like I'm cutting out a part of my soul. Its good to take out the trash, the unnecessary bits that keep me down, but sometimes I wonder if I should have kept it even if it was a piece of crap anyway.

I find this oddly endearing, for some reason.

I can be cute sometimes without knowing it.

MWAHAHAHHA, I'm thinking of making a ten thousand word post next time, which introduces many different viewpoints, authorial viewpoint, world building, and extensive dialogues...

....................... And I'll be sleeping while you do it!

You've caught me with my hand in the cookie jar!

Its just my opinion... I hope you can get Ace and King to look at your work.

I also used 'unshorn' at one point, which means hairy too.

For the love of all that is good in this world, use simple words. You can even use different phrases for hair!

Like, that "bush in his face" or the "grass on his head" or something! I DON'T KNOW. JUST MAKE IT SIMPLE.

If you're wondering about it, Historical Storyteller , this is how Markas is supposed to appear:

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Although, I'm also consider this one:

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Though, what he really looks like is a hybrid of both of them: southern and northern. A devious combination.

Gahhh, damn it, Eleph, stop abusing my slow internet...

I prefer the guy at the top even if I can only see his head.

The guy below looks like some stupid long-haired barbarian that likes to eat people's guts. He's no Southerner and not even the Northerners look like that. The people of the North are essentially feudal KNIGHTS, but they're barbaric because their pagan cultures haven't been extinguished yet...

 

[Elephantom]

Which is why its hard to get me motivated to write in the first place. Sometimes, I find it hard to cut out some of the things I write. When I do that, it feels like I'm cutting out a part of my soul. Its good to take out the trash, the unnecessary bits that keep me down, but sometimes I wonder if I should have kept them.

Doh, I actually keep them, for later use...

Its just my opinion... I hope you can get Ace and King to look at your work.

I'm certain they're the first who're going to be looking at my work, aside from you, of course.

For the love of all that is good in this world, use simple words. You can even use different phrases for hair!

Like, that "bush in his face" or the "grass on his head" or something! I DON'T KNOW. JUST MAKE IT SIMPLE.

Well, you could blame Skittle for that. She said my vocabulary wasn't posh enough, and I aim to refute that.

Gahhh, damn it, Eleph, stop abusing my slow internet...

I prefer the guy at the top even if I can only see his head.

The guy below looks like some stupid long-haired barbarian that likes to eat people's guts. He's no Southerner and not even the Northerners look like that. The people of the North are essentially feudal KNIGHTS, but they're barbaric because their pagan cultures haven't been extinguished yet...

Well, I wasn't talking about the theme of the artwork, I was more talking about the looks — the rough face, long hair, rugged physique etc. There are, I suppose, actual barbarians towards the far off boundary of the northern mainland, borders. They raid the northern villages too, which creates... TENSION!!!

 

[Elephantom]

I am also considering the difference of light magic when it comes to north and south, with the capitol being versatile. It could create a tense rift, both religious-wise and social-wise (in the manner that magic also entails one's rank).

 

[Historical Storyteller]

I am also considering the difference of light magic when it comes to north and south, with the capitol being versatile. It could create a tense rift, both religious-wise and social-wise (in the manner that magic also entails one's rank).

Strange, I was thinking that the North have its own unique set of magic, but I wonder if this will sit well with our GM, shadow.

Personally, I was thinking the North should have death magic, the ability to raise skeletons, ghosts, and zombies. They actually had a religion which can basically be summed up as "a cult of the living in the service of the dead". The Northerners pray for the blessings of their ancestors and ask them to grant them their power to be used in battle.

For the South, they would have some exposure to the Fire and Dark Kingdoms, so they will have some Fire and Dark magic with them.

For the Capital, they're essentially experts in light magic, but they have much less exposure to the different magics.

So I actually have a different opinion of how these types of magic can be distributed among the populace.

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Also, I still prefer the guy at the top over the the guy at the bottom. A barbarian just doesn't sit well with me.

And there are still actual barbarians attacking Northern villages? Ugh... so many things to work on...

 

[Elephantom]

Strange, I was thinking that the North have its own unique set of magic, but I wonder if this will sit well with our GM, shadow.

Personally, I was thinking the North should have death magic, the ability to raise skeletons, ghosts, and zombies. They actually had a religion which can basically be summed up as "a cult of the living in the service of the dead". The Northerners pray for the blessings of their ancestors and ask them to grant them their power to be used in battle.

It shouldn't be explicitly death, as it would mimick the dark kingdom too much, but I can't argue with them having druidic powers, over nature and over the mind, something like a more distorted version of light magic — think, like Sven.

Well, it comes from how the Elysians conquered the loose tip of the uncharted mainland, where the barbarians lived, and where the men of pure light blood bred with the local woman, peppering the pure light-oriented bloodline with the less-than-dark arts of the true northerners — AKA druids.

For the South, they would have some exposure to the Fire and Dark Kingdoms, so they will have some Fire and Dark magic with them.

Theirs are more a feverish sort of light magic, one that caters to the ideal of the sun's warmth and fire, and of the bane fire. Not necessarily of the religion, and the medica, but of the furious, skilful art of bending the shapes of light magic into their own will. Very poetic, if I had to say anything.

For the Capital, they're essentially experts in light magic, but they have much less exposure to the different magics.

The capitol focuses more on complete, straight-edged light magic. Peace and serenity, for all.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

It shouldn't be explicitly death, as it would mimick the dark kingdom too much, but I can't argue with them having druidic powers, over nature and over the mind, something like a more distorted version of light magic — think, like Sven.

They would have the edge when it comes to manipulating their environment. If they have power over nature, it makes me think that they'll be able to control trees or the local flora and fauna. Be able to feel the nature of plants and talk with animals.

Well, it comes from how the Elysians conquered the loose tip of the uncharted mainland, where the barbarians lived, and where the men of pure light blood bred with the local woman, peppering the pure light-oriented bloodline with the less-than-dark arts of the true northerners — AKA druids.

Oh, I also forgot to mention that I was thinking of a Southern Kingdom that was conquered even earlier than the Northern Kingdom. You see, the people from the Capital are the original Elysians who called on the Crusades to conquer land from the pagans. And I've been wondering even more about the history of the Summer Fae and the people of the Capital. This is why I've been interested in history because there's a lot of lore that's being left out. I feel like most of the people here don't really care much about this. And I think they DON'T really care about it.

Theirs are more a feverish sort of light magic, one that caters to the ideal of the sun's warmth and fire, and of the bane fire. Not necessarily of the religion, and the medica, but of the furious, skilful art of bending the shapes of light magic into their own will. Very poetic, if I had to say anything.

Scorching light fire magic, they're good when you get up-close-and-personal. The ability to bend light magic is advantageous when you're facing multiple opponents at the same time because you can quickly change the light's directions.

The capitol focuses more on complete, straight-edged light magic. Peace and serenity, for all.

Sure, they're straight-edged but they're also the most powerful. You have to remember that they were the original Elysians and they've been practicing this magic since the dawn of time. Also, they're near the Summer Fae people who probably were the first ones to teach the humans of Light magic.

Still, they may be powerful but they're slow to cast. But they're PRETTY DAMN USEFUL in sieges and in long-range artillery strikes because they can cast a light bolt from far away with devastating effects.

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To wrap things up. Northern light magic is useful to affect the terrain. Southern light magic is useful when you're close to your opponent. Capital light magic is useful for artillery strikes.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Well, you haven't responded in an hour yet so I'm gonna head back to sleep or dick around or something.

 

[Elephantom]

Well, you haven't responded in an hour yet so I'm gonna head back to sleep or dick around or something.

I'm back, coincidentally, like right now.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

I'm back, coincidentally, like right now.

Hmm, I was thinking whether I should sleep to alleviate my exhaustion or I should continue reading that teamwork book you gave me. I'm about halfway done there.

 

[Elephantom]

They would have the edge when it comes to manipulating their environment. If they have power over nature, it makes me think that they'll be able to control trees or the local flora and fauna. Be able to feel the nature of plants and talk with animals.

They can talk with animals, yes, and bend the fabric of nature. They can achieve a glimpse at the hearts of all sapient and non-sapient creatures, they can differentiate between lies and truths, they can 'speak' with animals.

Oh, I also forgot to mention that I was thinking of a Southern Kingdom that was conquered even earlier than the Northern Kingdom. You see, the people from the Capital are the original Elysians who called on the Crusades to conquer land from the pagans. And I've been wondering even more about the history of the Summer Fae and the people of the Capital. This is why I've been interested in history because there's a lot of lore that's being left out. I feel like most of the people here don't really care much about this. And I think they DON'T really care about it.

I'm also interested in the root of this settlement, of how summer faes and humans came into contact, how they allied with each other, how the religion was created, and how they sought to control their surroundings. Sadly, I believe it'll take a lot of time and hard work to answer them.

Scorching light fire magic, they're good when you get up-close-and-personal. The ability to bend light magic is advantageous when you're facing multiple opponents at the same time because you can quickly change the light's directions.

Indeed, good for field and otherwise shady work.

Sure, they're straight-edged but they're also the most powerful. You have to remember that they were the original Elysians and they've been practicing this magic since the dawn of time. Also, they're near the Summer Fae people who probably were the first ones to teach the humans of Light magic.

Still, they may be powerful but they're slow to cast. But they're PRETTY DAMN USEFUL in sieges and in long-range artillery strikes because they can cast a light bolt from far away with devastating effects.

They can also heal people. It's pretty important.

 

[Elephantom]

Hmm, I was thinking whether I should sleep to alleviate my exhaustion or I should continue reading that teamwork book you gave me. I'm about halfway done there.

This is also seems like a fairly interesting book, though I haven't given it a try myself:

https://m.vk.com/doc16929061_443710048?hash=6a1e5c2dcdf94dd176&dl=e8ae25ffc5d22c0dfd

 

[Elephantom]

Also, I think this is a very uncannily realistic book on the subject of creativity:

https://m.vk.com/doc16929061_444225333?hash=58846ea893a46baa5f&dl=dde622cae866b41713

You should definitely read this, Historical Storyteller .

 

[Historical Storyteller]

They can talk with animals, yes, and bend the fabric of nature. They can achieve a glimpse at the hearts of all sapient and non-sapient creatures, they can differentiate between lies and truths, they can 'speak' with animals.

More for the Northerners. Since they're all nature like, they surely must have ways to increase the fertility of the soil, thus giving them an advantage in agriculture. And they have control over plants and animals, so they'll be able to control the produce of both their harvest better.

Somehow, I was contemplating that they should have some knowledge of poisonous plants, and they should be able to utilize biological and chemical warfare with it. By releasing noxious gases into the air, they can choke the life out of their enemies. By festering deadly viruses and bacteria into hostile armies, they can effectively end military campaigns before these bastards even reach their territory.

Of course, this all comes with a high price. These gases are as dangerous to everybody, including the one using it. And these viruses can cause a plague which can kill off everyone who catches the disease.

I'm also interested in the root of this settlement, of how summer faes and humans came into contact, how they allied with each other, how the religion was created, and how they sought to control their surroundings. Sadly, I believe it'll take a lot of time and hard work to answer them.

We should work with King and Ace as soon as possible. No more delays, we must do this when we bump into them. Let's both try to talk to them if we encounter them. Try to convince them to join our side and make the necessary preparations to start such an ambitious project.

Indeed, good for field and otherwise shady work.

Shady work? Interesting. That makes me think Southern light magic could be used for illusions. Perhaps they can temporarily alter the look of a person's face by reflecting the light off his face a little.

They can also heal people. It's pretty important.

Ah, they can also use light magic to cook food and start fires. This application is often overlooked. Ahem, this is why I am eager to discover new ways to utilize magic for scientific applications even for things that are somewhat mundane. There are just so many possibilities out there that are just wasted.

What if they used Light magic as a substitute for electricity? Has anyone thought of that?

Sweet Jesus, we're missing out on something good here, people.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Also, I think this is a very uncannily realistic book on the subject of creativity:

https://m.vk.com/doc16929061_444225333?hash=58846ea893a46baa5f&dl=dde622cae866b41713

You should definitely read this, Historical Storyteller .

This is also seems like a fairly interesting book, though I haven't given it a try myself:

https://m.vk.com/doc16929061_443710048?hash=6a1e5c2dcdf94dd176&dl=e8ae25ffc5d22c0dfd

Huh, I have a suggestion of my own. Have you read Neuromancer? I haven't, but it was recommended to me for the Cyberpunk genre.

 

[Elephantom]

More for the Northerners. Since they're all nature like, they surely must have ways to increase the fertility of the soil, thus giving them an advantage in agriculture. And they have control over plants and animals, so they'll be able to control the produce of both their harvest better.

Yes, I meant the North. Their skill with nature contrasts oddly against their tundra-like landscapes.

Somehow, I was contemplating that they should have some knowledge of poisonous plants, and they should be able to utilize biological and chemical warfare with it. By releasing noxious gases into the air, they can choke the life out of their enemies. By festering deadly viruses and bacteria into hostile armies, they can effectively end military campaigns before these bastards even reach their territory.

Of course, this all comes with a high price. These gases are as dangerous to everybody, including the one using it. And these viruses can cause a plague which can kill

That is a thing for another day, first we must iron out all the basic details. archur , The Faceless King , if you two are seeing this.

We should work with King and Ace as soon as possible. No more delays, we must do this when we bump into them. Let's both try to talk to them if we encounter them. Try to convince them to join our side and make the necessary preparations to start such an ambitious project

We'll prod them fully well.

Shady work? Interesting. That makes me think Southern light magic could be used for illusions. Perhaps they can temporarily alter the look of a person's face by reflecting the light off his face a little.

This, definitely this.

Ah, they can also use light magic to cook food and start fires. This application is often overlooked. Ahem, this is why I am eager to discover new ways to utilize magic for scientific applications even for things that are somewhat mundane. There are just so many possibilities out there that are just wasted.

What if they used Light magic as a substitute for electricity? Has anyone thought of that?

Sweet Jesus, we're missing out on something good here, people.

Yes... They could be used to power quasi-generators/transformers of sorts, and then relay them to mechanisms and/or lighting fixtures.