Lotusy
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@FenyxEmber Alright, nice CS! There's just a few things that may need tweaking.
Firstly, the magic powers seems a bit powerful, what with imagination being the limit and all that. I know it's light and dark, but would you care to be a bit more specific? Sorry to pick on that, but specifics are key for later, when those powers may be needed.
Secondly, the extras part. You'll need the code word from the Rules., that's missing. Also, these two boys... will they appear later in the story? I wouldn't be able to accept them if they turn up later, what with the one-char rule and all.
After this, though, you're accepted!
Firstly, the magic powers seems a bit powerful, what with imagination being the limit and all that. I know it's light and dark, but would you care to be a bit more specific? Sorry to pick on that, but specifics are key for later, when those powers may be needed.
Secondly, the extras part. You'll need the code word from the Rules., that's missing. Also, these two boys... will they appear later in the story? I wouldn't be able to accept them if they turn up later, what with the one-char rule and all.
After this, though, you're accepted!