Freikugel
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She'll get a bad qualification from lady fizzy
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Futuristic Agent of Maniacles OOC and Characters
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Darkling0096
Me need nap
Wait, there's a lady fizzy?
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
That's okay.
Some stuff comes more naturally than others. Maybe I can help. It's nothing practice, learning, and asking questions can't fix. Why do you think you struggle with writing emotions so much?
Darkling0096
Me need nap
Bro, I'm ND, I can barely understand emotions when explained, but I personally cannot express them, beyond anger or boredom. I don't feel. Emotions are something I don't experience, and can't imitate without a migraine
Freikugel
The lix
Sorry guys, having the worst day at job ever.
Anyway send instructions to ex If I'm not here
Anyway send instructions to ex If I'm not here
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
I've never heard the term 'ND' at least in the way used to describe lack of emotion. Is it like Alexithyma?
Anyway I've seen you refer how hard it is for you to write emotions on here several times. So that says to me you wish you could or want to in some form. Emotions and complexities of the psyche or a person come pretty easy to me. But I used to be really emotional when younger and it can still slip through even as I've grown thicker skin. That's not a knock to you at all by the way, but maybe can I offer some tools or tips to help to you express the emotions you don't get in terms of characters.
I think you're a really good writer for your age and all that reading you already puts you ahead of a lot of people who like the craft. This isn't a critique. Just some tips and exercises if you're interested.
So, sadness...right?
You're a smart guy. I'm sure you can logically put together things that would make someone sad. Death, heartbreak, rejection of some some form. You've probably seen people in your life sad and you've def read about people being sad.
Pay attention to sad scenes in books too. It will give you an understanding of some key phrases or focal points writers use.
Thing is ...sadness and just about any emotion can be expressed in a number of ways and you can use a number of tools to help you through those scenes easier.
1: Associate the emotion with a physical pain. Maybe emotions don't come easy to some people, but I know if I took a hammer to their kneecap they'd probably scream or cry. Depending on the person. Probably both. But yeah. So Sam, or any character of yours, sees someone she cares about laid up in the hospital from an illness or whatever.
So you, the writer, are having trouble feeling how they would. You want to do sadness, though. You can use a metaphor like a punch to the gut, the numbing of the brain or migrane or headache so intense at the bad news of this person's health. Stuff like that.
2: Associate them with colors: This one is one I've employed a lot. A lot of people associate colors with feeling. Everyone pretty much as their own way of seeing it, but ya know the standards? Blue and black are sadness, red is rage, green is envy or some form of disgust etc.
Maybe you don't completely understand how
3: Character action: Now you don't want to eliminate internal conflict and introspection obviously, but the physical action of a character can tell you a lot about how their feeling. So if a character who is usually talkative becomes more somber that's clear indication something is up, if they spend hours in bed, if they breakdown in tears. Those are all basics, but gives something to workout.
Some critical stuff that, usually, happens when someone feels a sadness or something is somewhat like anger, but dialed the opposite way. And it is different for everyone. Emotions in general. So what's right for one character, may not be right for another.
Anyway you kinda become aware of the heart in your chest, how it beats, a heaviness falls in your throat, your stomach cramps like you have to shit, but you don't have to do.
4: Less can sometimes be more. Now this one is a bit more complex. It needs to be timed right. But don't think that going into super detail about emotion to be able to write an emotionally effective scene. I think a lot of people make that error.
A lot of times it only takes a couple or a few words to really hit home.
'He was sad' can be just as effective as the most poetic sentences or poems about sadness. It just depends how you construct what comes before and what you want to do.
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So yeah.
No big deal and all I said might be completely useless to you, but hell man at the end of the day I feel like you could get the hang of it well enough even you don't feel them.
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
Need some of that good shit!
KotaKotsu
Two Thousand Club
Bro that was a book. I skimmed that shit.
You said you've read a fuck ton, just put words to it. Don't gotta mean it. Expressions and language. You think I give a shit about Kotsu's feelings? I love him, he's my baby, but like, I definitely wish I made him way more violent.
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
Bro that was a book. I skimmed that shit.
You said you've read a fuck ton, just put words to it. Don't gotta mean it. Expressions and language. You think I give a shit about Kotsu's feelings? I love him, he's my baby, but like, I definitely wish I made him way more violent.
MORE VIOLENT?
KotaKotsu
Two Thousand Club
Not more violent WAY more violent.
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
KotaKotsu
Two Thousand Club
Is it bad I can get worse? LOL
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
No not at all.
KotaKotsu
Two Thousand Club
I'm talking some torture level shit. Like crushing glass, putting it in someone's mouth and punching them repeatedly in the face while electrocuting them, and ripping out their fingernails. Now this level of sadistic shoulda been Kotsu. But I'll settle for him being a partial good noodle.
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
Oh would have toned down his kindness?
Freikugel
The lix
Goddamnit, finally finished what awful day
KotaKotsu
Two Thousand Club
Yeah
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
Hmmmm. I'm sure you could have pulled it off and I'd obviously have to see it in action, but if he was just more violent and less kind I don't think he would have taken off as well as he did. Big contrast within a character makes them interesting. Not to say that's the only thing, but works as a way of fast interest and can be easily built on from here.
The fact he's kind and naive but has a high bloodlust, temper, and a violent streak is more captivating imo
Kinggunlucky
One Thousand Club
Fizzy put his grasses on and everything went wrong
Darkling0096
Me need nap
I'm not sure if I'm waiting for Bunny to speak up or what
Freikugel
The lix
Just waiting for ex to add something so I can close this part
Freikugel
The lix
All right, a little rest, will post the next act shortly
You can move freely ,eat, even talk with the fizzies but given they're just one sided personifications you may get not much from them
You can move freely ,eat, even talk with the fizzies but given they're just one sided personifications you may get not much from them
Darkling0096
Me need nap
I hope Fizzy's junk has a firewall
Freikugel
The lix
Lol
