Fantasy Seiunita OOC

[Historical Storyteller]

Eleph, you here? Did you read my story already?

 

[Elephantom]

I just tried mine, he's definitely Chaotic Neutral.

Hey, Heis, how's your post going?

 

[Elephantom]

Eleph, you here? Did you read my story already?

Coincidence. Yes, I read it, and it was somewhat a bit of a satirical — though I would say it was rather blunt about its machinations — read that highlighted some of the hypocrisy of the Luminosity religion, casting aside the rigorous judgement sessions; it was interesting and rather comic, if I had to say anything more.

 

[Elephantom]

Eleph, you here? Did you read my story already?

Would you care to give my post a look and see if my writing's still as grade-A as ever?

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Hey, Heis, how's your post going?

ACK, I haven't even started posting. In fact, I plan to introduce Lord Walter the Bastard after the prologue. I'm dealing with a character that has enormous potential and can seriously shift the balance of power in this roleplay. Walter's the kind of guy that frequently changes the rules of the game and keeps everyone on their toes. If he's gonna do that, he's going to have to do it in a way that does justice to himself and respects the abilities of other roleplayers here.

So I need time. With enough time, Walter can go so many places...

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Would you care to give my post a look and see if my writing's still as grade-A as ever?

Coincidence. Yes, I read it, and it was somewhat a bit of a satirical — though I would say it was rather blunt about its machinations — read that highlighted some of the hypocrisy of the Luminosity religion, casting aside the rigorous judgement sessions; it was interesting and rather comic, if I had to say anything more.

All right, hit me with your best shot, Eleph.

 

[Elephantom]

ACK, I haven't even started posting. In fact, I plan to introduce Lord Walter the Bastard after the prologue. I'm dealing with a character that has enormous potential and can seriously shift the balance of power in this roleplay. Walter's the kind of guy that frequently changes the rules of the game and keeps everyone on their toes. If he's gonna do that, he's going to have to do it in a way that does justice to himself and respects the abilities of other roleplayers here.

So I need time. With enough time, Walter can go so many places...

You can still post snippets of any of his past incidents. Or, you could unfold his cards slowly, instead of a sudden ambush. Let it ride smoothly and so naturally, that our readers fail to notice the transition in power.

 

[Elephantom]

All right, hit me with your best shot, Eleph.

Checkee outee theee ICee sectionee. Second page, mine's the supremely long, coded one.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

You can still post snippets of any of his past incidents. Or, you could unfold his cards slowly, instead of a sudden ambush. Let it ride smoothly and so naturally, that our readers fail to notice the transition in power.

Before I "unfold his cards" slowly, I have to know what exactly his cards are. Few cards are a hidden ace, and Walter can use them to kick ass on the battlefield. Most cards are at the middling level, they don't kick ass, but they can be devastating if they're put in the right place and at the right time. And some cards are just "jokers" played for comedic effect but they're still surprisingly effective at battle.

 

[Elephantom]

Before I "unfold his cards" slowly, I have to know what exactly his cards are. Few cards are a hidden ace, and Walter can use them to kick ass on the battlefield. Most cards are at the middling level, they don't kick ass, but they can be devastating if they're put in the right place and at the right time. And some cards are just "jokers" played for comedic effect but they're still surprisingly effective at battle.

First, think what kind of hand you're going to focus on. It can't be many things, lest you become a Jack of all trades and a master of none. You slowly deconstruct the base concept into many smaller bits, and even smaller bits, until you have a proper house of cards.

Like, for example, Jean; him and his goons are terribly adept at doing behind-the-scenes stuff. Subterfuge, ruse,Amy other shit.

 

[wtfamidoinghere]

ive got other character in my workshop but idk if i should post him, i dont know if ill be able to juggle characters

 

[Historical Storyteller]

Checkee outee theee ICee sectionee. Second page, mine's the supremely long, coded one.

Yes, the sentences even rhyme! And it's so descriptive that I can feel like I'm in the heat of the action. The sentences are well-worded and appropriate. And it's entertaining enough for me to read it easily.

The character Jean himself is most disturbed about the dead bodies than he lets on. Shows that he's affected by all this. ...

Hmm, let me continue reading.

First, think what kind of hand you're going to focus on. It can't be many things, lest you become a Jack of all trades and a master of none. You slowly deconstruct the base concept into many smaller bits, and even smaller bits, until you have a proper house of cards.

Like, for example, Jean; him and his goons are terribly adept at doing behind-the-scenes stuff. Subterfuge, ruse,Amy other shit.

Hmm, I'd actually like for Walter to be a jack of all trades.

Walter's the opposite, he just attracts too much damn attention in a spy mission so he's bad at espionage. He's good at being the "bait" though and he is pretty damned effective when doing explosive stuff. In battle, expect lots of crazy things to happen that Walter didn't even plan. I wouldn't advise going to Walter's headquarters which is nicknamed the "Madhouse" because some of his subordinates constantly hatch up plans to dispose of him, but it's played for laughs. Most of the time, they actually kill the spies whose intention is to get rid of Walter.

 

[The Faceless King]

It is in D&D at least.
"woo hoo I'm gonna go kill essential NPC's and then fuck over the party because I'm craaaaaazy, wahey!"
Fuck you brandon.

Yeah, but that's thing about Chaotic Evil characters. They're just crazy. There is no reason for their actions outside of "I like how it feels when I watch the life drain from another's eyes, I revel in the sensation of euphoria I get when my victims trachea collapses under my palm, that warm sensation of blood coating my fingers is what I live for." They're not assholes, they're just crazy.

Neutral Evils on the other hand have goals and plans that they never fully reveal. Often times a Neutral Evil character will let uncover small parts of their plan, but never enough to give you the upper hand. Just enough to make you think you understand them, and when they have you on the hook they reel you in and gut you. Neutral Evil characters will even go as far as to ally with the "good guys" as long as it benefits their final plans. They're the true snakes of the world, unpredictable and full of lies. You never know what they're going to do next. I trust a Neutral Evil less than a Chaotic Evil.

 

[Elephantom]

Hmm, I'd actually like for Walter to be a jack of all trades.

Walter's the opposite, he just attracts too much damn attention in a spy mission so he's bad at espionage. He's good at being the "bait" though and he is pretty damned effective when doing explosive stuff. In battle, expect lots of crazy things to happen that Walter didn't even plan. I wouldn't advise going to Walter's headquarters which is nicknamed the "Madhouse" because some of his subordinates constantly hatch up plans to dispose of him, but it's played for laughs. Most of the time, they actually kill the spies whose intention is to get rid of Walter.

Interesto, interesto.

Y'know, it would be pretty easier for Jean to handle Gutz with Walter as a mediator — and before you know it, they're trying to claw each other's face off.

 

[Wandering Grim Hollow]

Yeah, but that's thing about Chaotic Evil characters. They're just crazy. There is no reason for their actions outside of "I like how it feels when I watch the life drain from another's eyes, I revel in the sensation of euphoria I get when my victims trachea collapses under my palm, that warm sensation of blood coating my fingers is what I live for." They're not assholes, they're just crazy.

Neutral Evils on the other hand have goals and plans that they never fully reveal. Often times a Neutral Evil character will let uncover small parts of their plan, but never enough to give you the upper hand. Just enough to make you think you understand them, and when they have you on the hook they reel you in and gut you. Neutral Evil characters will even go as far as to ally with the "good guys" as long as it benefits their final plans. They're the true snakes of the world, unpredictable and full of lies. You never know what they're going to do next. I trust a Neutral Evil less than a Chaotic Evil.

But I'm making him a Nice guy.

 

[Nogoodname]

Yeah, but that's thing about Chaotic Evil characters. They're just crazy. There is no reason for their actions outside of "I like how it feels when I watch the life drain from another's eyes, I revel in the sensation of euphoria I get when my victims trachea collapses under my palm, that warm sensation of blood coating my fingers is what I live for." They're not assholes, they're just crazy.

Neutral Evils on the other hand have goals and plans that they never fully reveal. Often times a Neutral Evil character will let uncover small parts of their plan, but never enough to give you the upper hand. Just enough to make you think you understand them, and when they have you on the hook they reel you in and gut you. Neutral Evil characters will even go as far as to ally with the "good guys" as long as it benefits their final plans. They're the true snakes of the world, unpredictable and full of lies. You never know what they're going to do next. I trust a Neutral Evil less than a Chaotic Evil.

Oh! To be honest I was speaking more for the player of a chaotic evil character than the actual character. Chaotic evil attracts some serious dickheads.

 

[The Faceless King]

Oh! To be honest I was speaking more for the player of a chaotic evil character than the actual character. Chaotic evil attracts some serious dickheads.

Truth.

 

[Wandering Grim Hollow]

Oh! To be honest I was speaking more for the player of a chaotic evil character than the actual character. Chaotic evil attracts some serious dickheads.

Truth.

PSA: Chaotic evil does not give you the right to go nuts.

 

[Nogoodname]

PSA: Chaotic evil does not give you the right to go nuts.

Unless the rest of your party is evil, then you end up killing 72 unarmed civilians in a HEAVILY botched bank robbery.

 

[Elephantom]

Yes, the sentences even rhyme! And it's so descriptive that I can feel like I'm in the heat of the action. The sentences are well-worded and appropriate. And it's entertaining enough for me to read it easily.

It was a slight improvement, the simplicity of my words. While I retained my usual laconic style, I also managed to keep it short and more too point — many people complain that my posts are 'long-winded'.

The character Jean himself is most disturbed about the dead bodies than he lets on. Shows that he's affected by all this. ...

He is affected; he just doesn't like show. I wanted to put forward the fact that he's still a human, above all else, and prone to expressing disgust at needless violence — still, he redeems a bit of personality towards the end, but fortunately, it was just a mercy kill.

 

[Wandering Grim Hollow]

Unless the rest of your party is evil, then you end up killing 72 unarmed civilians in a HEAVILY botched bank robbery.

Oh now that is different. Even the Neutral Evil ones know that no witnesses is the best way to go.

 

[BubbleButt]

Wandering Grim Hollow just to let you know, it's your turn to post. Not rushing you but, just saying

 

[Nogoodname]

Oh now that is different. Even the Neutral Evil ones know that no witnesses is the best way to go.

Listen, my D&D party's sessions are just a huge series of unfortunate events, we killed a baby wyvern with napalm, we set out to find some poor old mans son only to find him and accidentally lose him during a botched bank robbery (not the same robbery, mind you).

 

[Elephantom]

Wandering Grim Hollow just to let you know, it's your turn to post. Not rushing you but, just saying

POST, POST, POST.

 

[Historical Storyteller]

You also described Jean's attire and the blackhands' attire too. For me as a writer, this is my weakness, it's especially difficult to describe someone's physical characteristics.

Anyways, I do have to go to school now...

It was a slight improvement, the simplicity of my words. While I retained my usual laconic style, I also managed to keep it short and more too point — many people complain that my posts are 'long-winded'.

He is affected; he just doesn't like show. I wanted to put forward the fact that he's still a human, above all else, and prone to expressing disgust at needless violence — still, he redeems a bit of personality towards the end, but fortunately, it was just a mercy kill.

A little improvement goes a long way into your development, Eleph, remember that. The difficulty threshold in reading your sentences used to be something like 4 but you winded it down to 3. So yes, keep refining your craft, Eleph!

Also, Walter is different. He has been hardened to violence because of too much exposure to it. He can commit savage acts of violence and not bat an eye because he's seen it countless times. It's like he's died so much inside already...

In fact, he's the perfect hero comedic sociopath because he treats violence as part of a slapstick comedy. Which is why he views war as nothing but slapstick with just a dash of blood and gore here and there...