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Nation Building Ogigia in Flames

Shadowborn Omen]I didn't say you should care! Just voicing my concerns. [/QUOTE] ........ [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/profile/39744-mockingbird/ said:
@Mockingbird[/URL] Brothers acting like a mom again!
 
Been working on that sheet here and there throughout the day, and about 45 minutes ago my browser closed and the saved draft was from way earlier in the day, so... I hope that still laid out nicely, I had issues the first time around.
 
Shadowborn Omen] [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/profile/10518-avidelmv2/ said:
@AvidElmV2[/URL]
"Calmidium's military has an elite archer unit. The unit has been trained to move quietly and strike from the shadows and is often used to ambush an enemy unaware of their presence. The unit carries a crossbow, naturally, and a short sword, for close ranged combat."
Sounds very Waylander to me
 
Atom said:
That's my problem, how?
I also have a mind limit here.


And when that mind limit is reached he's gonna go Donnie Darko on your ass and travel back in time to make an airplane engine fall on your house.
 
Just got the skeleton up there.. I know there's barely anything on it, but only a short while ago I think my phone glitched up and I lost the entire first draft ;A; I'd rather not lose it again..
 
Dictatorships are in many ways better then monarchies. Do you want a leader who got where he is through cunning, connections and no small skill with a dagger or do you want one who got there by being born.


aintiright, @Macbeth?
 
Aah, I'm getting there, I'm getting there :D


I haven't completely filled it out yet, but the current leader is of royal birth. However, he didn't get the throne by the normal way, something I'm going to expand on in the actual form..


I think I might just put Autocracy down as the governmental structure for now while I work out the complications. And yes, I completely agree with what you said :3
 
Macbeth said:
Aah, I'm getting there, I'm getting there :D
I haven't completely filled it out yet, but the current leader is of royal birth. However, he didn't get the throne by the normal way, something I'm going to expand on in the actual form..


I think I might just put Autocracy down as the governmental structure for now while I work out the complications. And yes, I completely agree with what you said :3
I might change mine to Autocracy as well, it fits better for my nation.
 
AvidElmV2 said:
Waylander?
Protagonist of some fantasy books by David Gemmel. He's an assassin using a double-barred crossbow. One of the most badass characters I have ever seen.


enfin, your archery description reminded me of him, just like @Shadowborn Omen 's military reminds me of ranger's apprentice series.
 
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LeviathanL said:
Protagonist of some fantasy books by David Gemmel. He's an assassin using a double-barred crossbow. One of the most badass characters I have ever seen.
enfin, your archery description reminded me of him, just like @Shadowborn Omen 's military reminds me of ranger's apprentice series.
It's heavily inspired by that series. One of my favorite series ever.
 
*cracks knuckles*


Time to review these bitches.


I’ll start with my hidden guidelines!


Population: Must be below 20 million


Military: Cannot be beyond 15 percent of your population


Now on to the actual reviews!


@The Suspicious Eye


Refer to the guidelines


Synthesia does not work in the way that you had it, nor shall it. For one it is a mental disorder, not a blood trait. It works so that if you see the word plane you might see it as mint green. Or if you hear a violin you’d feel a tickle on your knee. The nature of this RP does not allow any special abilities like that anyways.


For further reading on Synthesia: https://faculty.washington.edu/chudler/syne.html


@Sh3w0lfSp1r1t


Refer to the guidelines


@Branden2396


Refer to the guidelines


Remove the special ability regarding animal taming.


@AvidElmV2


Refer to the guidelines


I absolutely despise the use of absolutes. As in this line, “The Calmidium Empire has the most advanced technology in all of Ogigia.” You do not have the most advanced tech, you have crossbows, and it is highly likely that any of the other nations have crossbows. I said crossbows were the current maximum, not something new and unheard of. AKA you’re not the only guy with crossbows remove that.


@LeviathanL


Refer to guidelines. Only active population, navy, and reserve. And only official military. Not hired pirates and guerrilla forces.


And you left Taccola in your leadership slide.


@Shadowborn Omen


First of all, for the love of my eyesight, fix the contrast between your background and your text! I can’t read it unless I turn it to eye straining full brightness and hold it close!


Military is good! But I will be demanding that you change the name of Ranger to something more unique as ‘Ranger’ is far too a common phrase for a unique unit only your kingdom holds, y’know?


@Macbeth


I’d actually recommend bumping that population up! I shall look more in-depth when you’re ready.


@pbtenchi


I am sorry to inform you that I do not believe this RP is for you. I am thoroughly against the idea of an entirely militaristic nation and your form lacks the traits that I feel are needed for this RP. I apologize for wasted time here and wish you luck in finding an RP in the future. Good day.


@NeoLeaf


Guidelines.


One too many specializations.


Otherwise it seems alright.


@All reviewed.


Alright, you all have impressed me so far, and that’s all 8 slots filled. Due to success of this I’ve decided to add 4 more slots, one of which is taken by myself actually, so really only three. Of course these slots will not be open after Tuesday as I do not wish to wait. After you all are finished with the edits I’ve demanded and I’ve finished my own nation we will move on to stage two.


Location and history planning. This will happen as late as Tuesday and as early as tomorrow. I will be PMing all of you separately in order to work out your location relevant to our map located in settings/locations tab. History planning will come after locations and borders are decided and will be a collaborative effort.


@Archie @Ire I believe the lower portion of this post might be relevant to you two. Tuesday gents.
 
I'll be doing that :3


I'm currently up in London at the moments so I'm not going to be able to do much for a while, but otherwise I'm nearly done~
 
ok


 
I have a question regarding races, do they get their own tab?


Also @Branden2396, can I make a fenieri character, if yes, are there some guidelines I should adhere to?
 
Atom said:
@Shadowborn Omen
First of all, for the love of my eyesight, fix the contrast between your background and your text! I can’t read it unless I turn it to eye straining full brightness and hold it close!
Oh.. Haha...


Yeah, I had it changed the first time, forgot to do so the second.

Atom said:
@Shadowborn Omen
Military is good! But I will be demanding that you change the name of Ranger to something more unique as ‘Ranger’ is far too a common phrase for a unique unit only your kingdom holds, y’know?
Got it.
 
LeviathanL said:
ok
 
I have a question regarding races, do they get their own tab?


Also @Branden2396, can I make a fenieri character, if yes, are there some guidelines I should adhere to?
You control only your nation


No characters in other nations
 
I can see mandatory military training for everyone, but a nation still needs essential people, like butchers and blacksmiths, they can't all be soldiers.


@Atom Yes but can I make a fenieri race (bird-winged) character living in Corvago? Long live immigration and all that. Or do all fenieri live in Devlin?
 
LeviathanL said:
I can see mandatory military training for everyone, but a nation still needs essential people, like butchers and blacksmiths, they can't all be soldiers.
@Atom Yes but can I make a fenieri race (bird-winged) character living in Corvago? Long live immigration and all that. Or do all fenieri live in Devlin?
Oh yea that's good.
 
Atom said:
Oh yea that's good.
Then I will also make characters from other races (provided I have permission from the other players).


 
I would be happy to try to make a race accordeon, should you feel that is neccesary.
 
@LeviathanL. By all means you can use the race i have no problem with that, the race however originates from Devlin. The only real guidelines would be that they aren't shifters, just more or less humans with advanced sight and agility as well as being able to fly.
 

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