TheFlyingWriter
Procrastinating Perfectionist
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Um.. well...? I left some notes... ^^;
Victoria Tran
GENERAL INFORMATION
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Straight
Previous Occupation: Auto Technician
Family Members:
-Mother (Deceased, Car Accident)
-Father (Deceased, Throat Cancer)
-Older Brother (Missing after Outbreak began)
-Second Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Veronica Tran (Sister, Alive)
-Vivian Tran (Sister, Alive)
-Younger Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Husband (Separated during outbreak) (Up for Grabs if anyone wants to play him)
-Son (Unborn)
-Niece (Unborn)
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Straight
Previous Occupation: Auto Technician
Family Members:
-Mother (Deceased, Car Accident)
-Father (Deceased, Throat Cancer)
-Older Brother (Missing after Outbreak began)
-Second Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Veronica Tran (Sister, Alive)
-Vivian Tran (Sister, Alive)
-Younger Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Husband (Separated during outbreak) (Up for Grabs if anyone wants to play him)
-Son (Unborn)
-Niece (Unborn)
PERSONAL INFORMATION
[+] Positive Traits [+]
+Flexible
+Motivated
+Stealthy ((It's a little unrealistic for someone pregnant to be stealthy...))
+Charismatic
+Loyal
[-] Negative Traits [-]
-Eats whenever she is upset
-Trust Issues
-Over-Emotional
-Gets Jealous Easily
-Gets very Clingy
-Can Hold Grudges
((I think these negative traits don't really apply to 'flexible', which I'm assuming means being adaptable to change/different situations))
[+] Positive Traits [+]
+Flexible
+Motivated
+Stealthy ((It's a little unrealistic for someone pregnant to be stealthy...))
+Charismatic
+Loyal
[-] Negative Traits [-]
-Eats whenever she is upset
-Trust Issues
-Over-Emotional
-Gets Jealous Easily
-Gets very Clingy
-Can Hold Grudges
((I think these negative traits don't really apply to 'flexible', which I'm assuming means being adaptable to change/different situations))
Personality, Bio, & Other
Written Personality Description
Victoria is a Charismatic and Loyal young woman. Since Middle School, she has always been a Natural Leader ((While there's nothing wrong with being a natural leader, I just find it hard to believe considering she is one of the youngest members of the family... I'm the youngest in my family, and most younger siblings tend to be followers to their older siblings...)). Self-Motivated, she always put 100% Effort into everything she did; Dancing, Studying, everything. As a Leader, Victoria always looks out for the people around her, often putting others before herself ((But she has trust issues...??)). With a strong sense of Loyalty, Victoria, like her sister, has shown to be a Nice and Caring person ((I'm currently seeing her as more of a grudgy and jealous person than a 'nice and caring' one ^^
), a trait that is often taken for granted. She is also flexible, always making time for everyone around her before making time for herself.
However, with all her Pros, she still has her Cons. Even though she is Loyal, seeing Betrayal has often shaken her ability to trust others outside of her Family. The Roots of her anger is often Jealousy, so whenever she is in a relationship, she really hates it when her Boyfriend or Significant Other looks at other girls and will lash out at them for talking to him. Being the clingy type, she can stress out easily whenever her significant other is not around and often cannot stand not being around him. Like her sister, she can hold grudges for a very long time. In addition, she also is the emotional type ((I got the impression that she could stand her ground/get defensive, rather than cry...?)), so she cries easily.
Past Life
The Youngest Daughter of the Tran Family. Victoria was the Over-Achiever out of her sisters. At the age of ten, her parents noticed that she had a natural talent for cars, being able to fix them with ease ((I understand if perhaps she just took an interest in cars, or had a habit of taking things apart to see how they worked, but being able to fix a car easily at ten years old is a little OP)). Ever since she was little, Victoria was always into cars. Sadly, this would lead her to Car Tuning, and that led her to Street Racing. In her High School years, Victoria enjoyed speeding, racing and the sound of loud engines ((Not once was she apprehended by the police...? Or found out by her parents...??)). Her favorite was the sound of tires screeching. Early into High School, she did have a lot of trouble keeping a boyfriend over four different things: Being very Clingy, Jealousy Issues, getting Emotional over the littlest things and her Trust issues. Vivian often gets worried because she eats when she is upset. Luckily though, Victoria has a Fast Metabolism, so everything balances out. ((If she has such a fast metabolism naturally, why would she become worried about her stress eating...? Also, how does she retain such a metabolism while pregnant...??)) Two years after Vivian got married, Victoria went down the same path, at the same age as well. In pregnancy, both Vivian and Victoria are a month apart, with Victoria being one month behind Vivian in her pregnancy. ((I think two pregnant characters in a zombie rp is a bit... much... not to mention that they're related... not to sound rude, but it lacks a little originality after being used once =/ )) While Vivian is expecting a Baby Girl, Victoria is expecting a Boy.
When the outbreak came, she lost contact with all her Siblings, Vivian included. Unknown to her, her Brother-in-law, Vivian's husband, became infected and was euthanized by her sister. A month or two into the Outbreak, Victoria became separated from her own Husband and Baby Daddy. For a while now, she has been traveling alone. She was eventually captured by a group of all-female bandits, who plan to extort her for her baby once it is born. ((Um... what? First of all, a group of all-female bandits is HIGHLY unrealistic... secondly, what do they want with her baby...? If anything, most survivors would not want an infant, as it only adds another mouth to feed with nothing to gain, risks crying during the night and attracting Infected, makes it hard to travel, etc.)) Living in Captivity is horrifying. Will anyone ever come to save her? She can only hope that her Family is out there...Searching for her.
Theme Song
Roller Coaster by Park Kahi
Items (All of them have been taken since she is being held by Bandits)
-Lock Picks
-Sling Shot
-Marbles (For Slingshot) ((How did she get these/why does she have them...?))
-Stiletto
-Box of Tissues
-Messenger Bag
-Spare Maternity Clothes (Dress, Undergarments, Cardigan, Socks)
-Boots
Preferred Group
3 ((So there is a group of all-female bandits managing to hide a pregnant woman (and future wailing baby) in a city swarming with Infected...? What?))
Written Personality Description
Victoria is a Charismatic and Loyal young woman. Since Middle School, she has always been a Natural Leader ((While there's nothing wrong with being a natural leader, I just find it hard to believe considering she is one of the youngest members of the family... I'm the youngest in my family, and most younger siblings tend to be followers to their older siblings...)). Self-Motivated, she always put 100% Effort into everything she did; Dancing, Studying, everything. As a Leader, Victoria always looks out for the people around her, often putting others before herself ((But she has trust issues...??)). With a strong sense of Loyalty, Victoria, like her sister, has shown to be a Nice and Caring person ((I'm currently seeing her as more of a grudgy and jealous person than a 'nice and caring' one ^^
), a trait that is often taken for granted. She is also flexible, always making time for everyone around her before making time for herself.However, with all her Pros, she still has her Cons. Even though she is Loyal, seeing Betrayal has often shaken her ability to trust others outside of her Family. The Roots of her anger is often Jealousy, so whenever she is in a relationship, she really hates it when her Boyfriend or Significant Other looks at other girls and will lash out at them for talking to him. Being the clingy type, she can stress out easily whenever her significant other is not around and often cannot stand not being around him. Like her sister, she can hold grudges for a very long time. In addition, she also is the emotional type ((I got the impression that she could stand her ground/get defensive, rather than cry...?)), so she cries easily.
Past Life
The Youngest Daughter of the Tran Family. Victoria was the Over-Achiever out of her sisters. At the age of ten, her parents noticed that she had a natural talent for cars, being able to fix them with ease ((I understand if perhaps she just took an interest in cars, or had a habit of taking things apart to see how they worked, but being able to fix a car easily at ten years old is a little OP)). Ever since she was little, Victoria was always into cars. Sadly, this would lead her to Car Tuning, and that led her to Street Racing. In her High School years, Victoria enjoyed speeding, racing and the sound of loud engines ((Not once was she apprehended by the police...? Or found out by her parents...??)). Her favorite was the sound of tires screeching. Early into High School, she did have a lot of trouble keeping a boyfriend over four different things: Being very Clingy, Jealousy Issues, getting Emotional over the littlest things and her Trust issues. Vivian often gets worried because she eats when she is upset. Luckily though, Victoria has a Fast Metabolism, so everything balances out. ((If she has such a fast metabolism naturally, why would she become worried about her stress eating...? Also, how does she retain such a metabolism while pregnant...??)) Two years after Vivian got married, Victoria went down the same path, at the same age as well. In pregnancy, both Vivian and Victoria are a month apart, with Victoria being one month behind Vivian in her pregnancy. ((I think two pregnant characters in a zombie rp is a bit... much... not to mention that they're related... not to sound rude, but it lacks a little originality after being used once =/ )) While Vivian is expecting a Baby Girl, Victoria is expecting a Boy.
When the outbreak came, she lost contact with all her Siblings, Vivian included. Unknown to her, her Brother-in-law, Vivian's husband, became infected and was euthanized by her sister. A month or two into the Outbreak, Victoria became separated from her own Husband and Baby Daddy. For a while now, she has been traveling alone. She was eventually captured by a group of all-female bandits, who plan to extort her for her baby once it is born. ((Um... what? First of all, a group of all-female bandits is HIGHLY unrealistic... secondly, what do they want with her baby...? If anything, most survivors would not want an infant, as it only adds another mouth to feed with nothing to gain, risks crying during the night and attracting Infected, makes it hard to travel, etc.)) Living in Captivity is horrifying. Will anyone ever come to save her? She can only hope that her Family is out there...Searching for her.
Theme Song
Roller Coaster by Park Kahi
Items (All of them have been taken since she is being held by Bandits)
-Lock Picks
-Sling Shot
-Marbles (For Slingshot) ((How did she get these/why does she have them...?))
-Stiletto
-Box of Tissues
-Messenger Bag
-Spare Maternity Clothes (Dress, Undergarments, Cardigan, Socks)
-Boots
Preferred Group
3 ((So there is a group of all-female bandits managing to hide a pregnant woman (and future wailing baby) in a city swarming with Infected...? What?))
Veronica Tran
GENERAL INFORMATION
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Pansexual
Previous Occupation: Police Officer
Family Members:
-Mother (Deceased, Car Accident)
-Father (Deceased, Throat Cancer)
-Older Brother (Missing after Outbreak began)
-Second Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Victoria Tran (Younger Sister, Alive)
-Vivian Tran (Younger Sister, Alive)
-Younger Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Boyfriend (Separated during outbreak)
-Nephew (Unborn)
-Niece (Unborn)
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Pansexual
Previous Occupation: Police Officer
Family Members:
-Mother (Deceased, Car Accident)
-Father (Deceased, Throat Cancer)
-Older Brother (Missing after Outbreak began)
-Second Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Victoria Tran (Younger Sister, Alive)
-Vivian Tran (Younger Sister, Alive)
-Younger Brother (Alive, Whereabouts Unknown)
-Boyfriend (Separated during outbreak)
-Nephew (Unborn)
-Niece (Unborn)
PERSONAL INFORMATION
[+] Positive Traits [+]
+Strong Desire to Protect and Serve
+Cares for the Well-Being of Others
+Family Oriented
+Good Shot
+Polite
+Honest
[-] Negative Traits [-]
-Will not lie
-Easily Motivated by Revenge
-Hard for some things to sink in
-Will kill over betrayal without a second thought
-Brutal when it comes to interrogation (Will not hesitate to beat information out of people)
-When her mind is set, it is impossible to change it
((These all kind of clash here...))
[+] Positive Traits [+]
+Strong Desire to Protect and Serve
+Cares for the Well-Being of Others
+Family Oriented
+Good Shot
+Polite
+Honest
[-] Negative Traits [-]
-Will not lie
-Easily Motivated by Revenge
-Hard for some things to sink in
-Will kill over betrayal without a second thought
-Brutal when it comes to interrogation (Will not hesitate to beat information out of people)
-When her mind is set, it is impossible to change it
((These all kind of clash here...))
Personality, Bio, & Other
Written Personality Description
Ever since she was little, Veronica has burned with a strong desire to protect and serve. She is able to keep her composure in most circumstances, but not necessarily all of them. As a Police Officer, Veronica is known to be very Objective, showing little Compassion ((this and the above highlighted portion I just... they don't seem to really belong together...)). Often she will go out of her way to help others, even if she doesn't have to, but does so because in her heart she knows it is for the better. Her Friendly and Caring Nature makes her likeable by others ((Judging by her violent history, this seems to be more of a facade...??)). She has grown emotionally attached to selective people ((see second below)), to the point of being deeply saddened by their deaths or greatly angered if she is betrayed.
At first, she will come off as cold and focused, ((but yet her 'friendly and caring nature' makes her 'likable by others'...?)) but becomes passionate as one gets to know her. When she saves others, she will take all necessary measures to protect them despite not knowing them personally. ((Two notes up you said she was only attatched to 'selective people'...)) However, the outbreak has made her colder and Veronica will not hesitate to fight for her survival, but that won't mean she will kill other survivors...Unless they try to kill her first.
Past Life
Veronica is the third oldest child in the Tran Family, having two older Brothers, and three younger siblings. Having two Older Brothers, Veronica ended up being very tomboyish, being into Shooting, Martial Arts and even Videogames and Comic Books. Even than, that didn't stop her from showing her Feminine side ((But yet you go into no detail to explain this...?)) After graduating from High School, Veronica decided to study Psychology. After graduating from College, she went straight to Police Academy and would graduate top of her class ((What..?)). After her first five years, Veronica became a Plain Clothes Police Officer, being able to blend in with the crowd and getting Criminals who least suspect it. However, she was suspended for six months for using excessive brutality and property damage in retaliation for assault, where her little sister Victoria was a victim. She was reinstated after three months on good behavior, but the department still kept an eye on her, because her temper was most unpredictable. ((I do not see how she is at all 'family oriented', 'friendly', or 'caring'...? Also, there is very little chance they would rewelcome her back into the police force after such an incident.))
With the Outbreak, Veronica has a lot of sleepless nights. Her entire Family is spread out and she doesn't know where they are. She worries about Victoria and Vivian the most, because both of her little sisters are pregnant. Currently, she searches tirelessly for them, because in their condition, they shouldn't be roaming around.
Theme Song
Magia by Kalafina
Items
Winchester Model 9422 (30 Rounds left)
S&W Model 686 (12 Rounds left)
Colt M1911 x2 (28 Rounds Left)
Drop Leg Holsters
Back Holster (For Revolver)
Combat Knife
Satchel
Magazine Pouches
*All Guns are personalized, low on rounds to make it more realistic
((This inventory is way too OP))
Preferred Group
1
Written Personality Description
Ever since she was little, Veronica has burned with a strong desire to protect and serve. She is able to keep her composure in most circumstances, but not necessarily all of them. As a Police Officer, Veronica is known to be very Objective, showing little Compassion ((this and the above highlighted portion I just... they don't seem to really belong together...)). Often she will go out of her way to help others, even if she doesn't have to, but does so because in her heart she knows it is for the better. Her Friendly and Caring Nature makes her likeable by others ((Judging by her violent history, this seems to be more of a facade...??)). She has grown emotionally attached to selective people ((see second below)), to the point of being deeply saddened by their deaths or greatly angered if she is betrayed.
At first, she will come off as cold and focused, ((but yet her 'friendly and caring nature' makes her 'likable by others'...?)) but becomes passionate as one gets to know her. When she saves others, she will take all necessary measures to protect them despite not knowing them personally. ((Two notes up you said she was only attatched to 'selective people'...)) However, the outbreak has made her colder and Veronica will not hesitate to fight for her survival, but that won't mean she will kill other survivors...Unless they try to kill her first.
Past Life
Veronica is the third oldest child in the Tran Family, having two older Brothers, and three younger siblings. Having two Older Brothers, Veronica ended up being very tomboyish, being into Shooting, Martial Arts and even Videogames and Comic Books. Even than, that didn't stop her from showing her Feminine side ((But yet you go into no detail to explain this...?)) After graduating from High School, Veronica decided to study Psychology. After graduating from College, she went straight to Police Academy and would graduate top of her class ((What..?)). After her first five years, Veronica became a Plain Clothes Police Officer, being able to blend in with the crowd and getting Criminals who least suspect it. However, she was suspended for six months for using excessive brutality and property damage in retaliation for assault, where her little sister Victoria was a victim. She was reinstated after three months on good behavior, but the department still kept an eye on her, because her temper was most unpredictable. ((I do not see how she is at all 'family oriented', 'friendly', or 'caring'...? Also, there is very little chance they would rewelcome her back into the police force after such an incident.))
With the Outbreak, Veronica has a lot of sleepless nights. Her entire Family is spread out and she doesn't know where they are. She worries about Victoria and Vivian the most, because both of her little sisters are pregnant. Currently, she searches tirelessly for them, because in their condition, they shouldn't be roaming around.
Theme Song
Magia by Kalafina
Items
Winchester Model 9422 (30 Rounds left)
S&W Model 686 (12 Rounds left)
Colt M1911 x2 (28 Rounds Left)
Drop Leg Holsters
Back Holster (For Revolver)
Combat Knife
Satchel
Magazine Pouches
*All Guns are personalized, low on rounds to make it more realistic
((This inventory is way too OP))
Preferred Group
1
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Um.. well...? I left some notes... ^^;
