Mitchs98
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Good to know. d:ianbabyyy said:I go by female pronouns
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Good to know. d:ianbabyyy said:I go by female pronouns
Both- I like how you went through the extra trouble to add their size and their weight and how you choose not to use what was written before to insert in the strengths and weaknesses. I feel that both characters are a bit vague and incomplete.Mitchs98 said:Opinions on Miziki and Sarah? :3
Sorry. In my country when designating a gender which can be either (as far as you know), one uses the male.ianbabyyy said:I go by female pronouns
You got the names wrong; But cool d:Idea said:Both- I like how you went through the extra trouble to add their size and their weight and how you choose not to use what was written before to insert in the strengths and weaknesses. I feel that both characters are a bit vague and incomplete.
Sarah- I love fox girls. I just do. Her powers are vague and easily overpowered, but since they were taken from somewhere else and they fit the general idea for the character that's quite forgivable. Her personality, on the other hand is a lot harder to handle, simply because you did add a personal touch, which is her shyness comes from finding others intimidating, but you made it so that the boundary between trusting and not trusting is too vaguely to know whether or not we've crossed it at any given point, plus her attitude isn't well specified either and beyond that the personality focuses more on how others are supposed to feel which has little to do with what you're supposed to be describing. It is also contradictory to say you have a shy character and then say I is "overly trusting" without explaining how that's possible. Overall, good character but needs to be more concrete.
Miziki- this character pisses me off. For starters, I don't like angel or demon characters, though to be fair, at least it's not a demon which are never handled well. That is more of a personal preference, though. However, what isn't is my problem with her personality: no flaws, Mary Sue. Having a flawless personality makes your character 2-dimensional to say the least and considering you seemed willing to put effort into this, it's quite a waste. I would consider playing off on her wondering the planes and her connection to the dead for character conflict and flaws. A form of depression, overzealously, overbearing fear of death, are just a few examples of what could be done. Her powers are a bit of a shock too. She has a few good powers, but she also has some rather overly vague ones and her wind abilities are a bit, you know, over the top. Namely the wind one. The ability to just cut things with wind like that constitutes auto kill. I would recommend changing it to soemthing more limiting, with a similar effect, like creating a wind blade or soemthing. For vagueness, teleportation. As of now, she can teleport at any speed, any number of times, within a frankly quite wide range. Overall, I think this character needs a lot of work, but has great potential.
I hope what I said makes sense to you, as the are my thoughts on your characters.
Both- Both characters have a definite Game of Thrones inspiration and parallel. While this would normally not be a good thing to say, you have skillfully adapted and captured the feel, key points and in a way, depth of the ideas you took from the books, meaning that more than a re-use your characters are building upon an already amazing legacy. Do remember, though, that when you base yourself off something so clearly, you will bring expectations with you and everyone else. Be careful, cause those are easy to disappoint .SirFlabberghaspy said:@Idea
I'm open to you critiquing my characters, by the way. Before we get too deep into the RP.
-like with others good job adding an extra for the appearance.Decay said:@Idea
sorry to bother you but I have seen the criticism that you have towards other characters and I would like to know your opinion on mine; If you have the Time.
~Decay
You can easily make her an odd person and still be concrete. Add the "excentric" trait is one way. The other would be to give her several quirks. For example, you can say she likes chewing on her foot nails or that she chases her tail if someone steps on it, etc... These would give the impression of an odd person without making the character arbitrary.Mitchs98 said:Miziki:
Miziki was meant to be a more awkward character in how she acts. I didn't list anything entirely concrete in personality simply because she's meant to be an odd person. Perhaps I should clarify that more the next time I go to edit her, very appreciated ^-^
this feels.... Presumptuous, to say the least. Above, how?Mitchs98 said:to describe them being above every single other being in their particular realm.
I have quite the opposite problem. The idea of a "good demon" is nonsensical, since demons are by definition, beings that oppose God, that is, good itself.Mitchs98 said:Fear not, I dislike generic angels and demons myself
The death thing was just an example. As long as you properly flaw her it is fine.Mitchs98 said:As for the personality issues, I'd intended to edit it but never got around to it. I probably will before I use her IC. As for the rest, Limbo is not your typical 'State of Limbo/Death' place. Not at all. It's an entirely different thing created and named after the Stone God Limbo, the creator of the Plane Walkers that pre-exsisted human beings(Big in-depth lore thing, once again made by a friend). So the whole death aspect wouldn't work, at all, since it's not related. I definetely will edit her personality a tad though.
for starters, there is no "fixed mana system" here. So, saying "it drains magic powers" is more or less "whenever I feel like it, she may or not be able to continue using them". That´s not really a price or limitation, now is it?Mitchs98 said:As for her wind powers, they can't auto kill at all. That's not how her powers work. You could very much think a more higher scale and better version of Air Bending. The air for the blade thingies is visible, and larger scale and continous attacks drain her magic fast. As does continous use of teleporting, it's not infinite d:
again, you´re welcome. I agree, the character made quite an improvement. I am still a little weary about the personality, but it will really depend on execution more than anything else.Decay said:@Idea
I have updated Cecil and TBH i think it is aloh better, Take a look if you want. I just want to thank you for your Criticism.
it´s ok. I´m actually a night owl too, but at two in the morning is kind of a line that has to be drawn when you´re in exam period.ianbabyyy said:I'm sorry I wish Allan wasn't otherwise occupied. And that I wasn't a complete night owl.