Realistic or Modern somethingSTRANGE. [OOC]

[sorrow made you]

@Felix you can if you want.


@Mordecai !!! Mordeeee~

 

[Mordecai]

I love this. I'll have a character sheet in the works this weekend.

 

[sorrow made you]

No rush. I still need to make an interest check anyways.


And screw this flu. I feel like I'm dying. On top of that now my bf is sick so I am taking care of him now too ;;A;;

 

[Mordecai]

[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]
No rush. I still need to make an interest check anyways.
And screw this flu. I feel like I'm dying. On top of that now my bf is sick so I am taking care of him now too ;;A;;

[/QUOTE]
Ou vey! Feel better! I am, unfortunately, also in the midst of caring for my very ill S.O.

 

[sorrow made you]

Be careful! Don't get caught by the sick bug. It likes to sneak up on you suddenly. Dx

 

[MISTER UN. 0W3N]

-super dead- ... x - x ... but, I am filled with DETERMINATION to get this profile up before the clock strikes midnight for the New Year.

 

[CTF]

 

[sorrow made you]

@CTF


Joooin uuuuuuus 33333

 

[MISTER UN. 0W3N]

@CRiTiCAL ERR0R

 

[Mordecai]

@CRiTiCAL ERR0R - I finished. I think. I'm pretty sure. I hope.

 

[sorrow made you]

@Mordecai, I've read through the profile and I've actually got a few things to address because they don't quite make sense to the location and to the story.


1. Horses in the mountains - Pasecoda is in a forest-covered area along the side of a mountain. Though Oregon does have a popular beach horse-riding, they're just far enough to be out of reach of the beach. In this area, it would be (I would imagine) incredibly difficult to tend to horses properly because of the terrain and lack of open area. Though loggers had settled in the area, trees have grown back over the years and so its pretty dense in terms of foliage. So to be able to have a stable for his kind of horse riding seems a little off.


2. What happens in Pasecoda stays in Pasecoda - In the overview, there was a section of the story that said: "but isn't it kind of strange that whoever comes in with the fog never really seems to leave?" This is a big hint (I suppose it was too subtle and that's a fault on my behalf) that it is incredibly difficult to travel outside of Pasecoda. Even moreso if you've been a resident all your life. So him traveling all around Oregon is difficult if he was born and raised in Pasecoda. Even more difficult is that his parents are moving to Venezuela.


3. Fear the desires of travel - I actually like where you were headed with this, and I think it could be incorporated with my concern in the previous point. I think it would give Osiel more potential if he'd never traveled, yet really wants to travel. That fear of leaving what he knows could come into play, but his desire to go somewhere he's never gone before could drive him into many different possible situations, and he could easily be incorporated in discovering things that others may not have ever thought of.


Other than these things, he's not a bad character. I feel like I could work with him. I'm just concerned with the horses since its so deeply ingrained in his character. Unfortunately, I really can't incorporate the horses. And his traveling would conflict in terms of story purposes.

 

[Mordecai]

@Mordecai[/URL], I've read through the profile and I've actually got a few things to address because they don't quite make sense to the location and to the story.
1. Horses in the mountains - Pasecoda is in a forest-covered area along the side of a mountain. Though Oregon does have a popular beach horse-riding, they're just far enough to be out of reach of the beach. In this area, it would be (I would imagine) incredibly difficult to tend to horses properly because of the terrain and lack of open area. Though loggers had settled in the area, trees have grown back over the years and so its pretty dense in terms of foliage. So to be able to have a stable for his kind of horse riding seems a little off.


2. What happens in Pasecoda stays in Pasecoda - In the overview, there was a section of the story that said: "but isn't it kind of strange that whoever comes in with the fog never really seems to leave?" This is a big hint (I suppose it was too subtle and that's a fault on my behalf) that it is incredibly difficult to travel outside of Pasecoda. Even moreso if you've been a resident all your life. So him traveling all around Oregon is difficult if he was born and raised in Pasecoda. Even more difficult is that his parents are moving to Venezuela.


3. Fear the desires of travel - I actually like where you were headed with this, and I think it could be incorporated with my concern in the previous point. I think it would give Osiel more potential if he'd never traveled, yet really wants to travel. That fear of leaving what he knows could come into play, but his desire to go somewhere he's never gone before could drive him into many different possible situations, and he could easily be incorporated in discovering things that others may not have ever thought of.


Other than these things, he's not a bad character. I feel like I could work with him. I'm just concerned with the horses since its so deeply ingrained in his character. Unfortunately, I really can't incorporate the horses. And his traveling would conflict in terms of story purposes.

All fair points! I fear I must have misunderstood some of the content in your overview, unfortunately. I'll see if I can make appropriate edits, but in the meantime, I will remove my CS. (:


Cheers!

 

[sorrow made you]

This is actually a good test to see if people can catch on. xD


This means I'll have to make some points for people to follow.


And mkay! No troubles.

 

[Mordecai]

[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]
This is actually a good test to see if people can catch on. xD
This means I'll have to make some points for people to follow.


And mkay! No troubles.

[/QUOTE]
English isn't my first language, so I probably would not be well suited to this roleplay, honestly. A lot of the nuances of the languages are lost on me. Sun has a much better mastery of the language's little bits and bobs than I do. Ergo, I think I'm kindly going to step out. (: Thanks for the feedback nonetheless!

 

[sorrow made you]

I honestly don't think its the English language barrier. I have a tendency to subtly word things. So I wouldn't be too discouraged on that.


But if you still feel like stepping out, then that's okay too. D;


I appreciate you attempting anyways. =w= b

 

[Sunbather]

English isn't my first language, so I probably would not be well suited to this roleplay, honestly. A lot of the nuances of the languages are lost on me. Sun has a much better mastery of the language's little bits and bobs than I do. Ergo, I think I'm kindly going to step out. (: Thanks for the feedback nonetheless!

You're too kind, but you are delightful and smart, you should still join. c: *snugs*

 

[Sunbather]

@Semblance hey hun

 

[MISTER UN. 0W3N]

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[sorrow made you]

I will be making an interest check later. I have to catch up with some posts after I take a nap. My head is killing me

 

[Semblance]

@Semblance hey hun

HIII omg are we bringing this back from the dead??

 

[sorrow made you]

HIII omg are we bringing this back from the dead??

Indeed we are and its going to be much better than the last~

 

[Semblance]

[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]Indeed we are and its going to be much better than the last~

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Yessss!! I'm so excited for the (even better) reboot

 

[sorrow made you]

@Semblance, Yeee~


Feel free to fill out the application and post it up.

 

[MISTER UN. 0W3N]

Proof that Crow can break dance.​

 

[Semblance]

@Semblance[/URL], Yeee~
Feel free to fill out the application and post it up.

I'll get right to it