Nogoodname
Did nothing wrong
it's K I too am the america.
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Elephantom
Chicken Broth Paragon
You should'a probably posted it full-part.
We need maximum description, mate, since most don't do that here.
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Get off your high horse boy. Theres good description and theres too damn much description.
HE was setting a scene with a lot of description. Hence the length. But something half of that length to describe your character checking out a girl is redundant, unnecessary, and boring.
Everyone loves detail but no one likes a try hard.
The Faceless King
You keep doing you bruh. Write how you feel you should lol
Elephantom
Chicken Broth Paragon
Get off your high horse boy. Theres good description and theres too damn much description.
HE was setting a scene with a lot of description. Hence the length. But something half of that length to describe your character checking out a girl is redundant, unnecessary, and boring.
Everyone loves detail but no one likes a try hard.
You keep doing you bruh. Write how you feel you should lol
There ain't no high horse. You either go purple prose, or beige. You set off on the middle, and you're rightly good. That's the only difference. Add a bit of panache, a pinch of wit, and it only makes it enjoyable.
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Well, if I were to describe a situation, it must be full of slang and colorful expressions or idioms so it can sustain someone's interest. It should be filled with lots and lotsa layman's terms since not everybody's gonna be an architect or a scientist or something. Try to write it in a way that everyone can understand.
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Well, among the Triple Threats, you're the only American while the rest of us are Filipino.
Dreamtique
Here Be Dragons
Huh... neighbours.
Elephantom
Chicken Broth Paragon
You conspirator!
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
So, why do you believe in the contrary?
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Im Cuban. Dont know who the hell said the rest of us are lmao
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Ah, two things come in mind when I hear Cuba, Fidel Castro and the Bay of Pigs.
(Also, I personally don't know much about them. You could educate me if you'd like.)
Anyways, how are things in the story going for you so far, shadow?
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Pardon? Not sure what you mean
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Never mind. Just skip to the part where I asked you about the how the story was going for you so far.
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
I was bitch. The bay of pigs and fidel is pretty common subjects for people who dont much about it. Its like germany and the holocaust.
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Meh, I actually don't know about a lot of things, shadow. I hope when I read some of my books I'll get to be more familiar with the world around me. There's a lot of open secrets out there just waiting to be discovered by me.
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Good luck finding a good book about Cuba that isnt boring as fuck lmao.
Either way, whatchu mean about the story
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Just asking you what you felt. Nothing to it.
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
What like how I like what we are doin so far or somethin?
Man stop bein so careful! Christ. Acting like you might offend me or someshit
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Ah, I'm so used to this behavior that I haven't given much notice to it.
Yeah, how are we doing so far?
And should I try posting more often or are there tips you could give me to speed up my writing?
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Not gonna lie. Thought you were out
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
ALSO, I MUST ASK. How is my writing style so far? Is it too brief? Is it hard to read? Any good points or bad points that should be revealed?
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
So far, we had that hiccup in the road but if we can keep everything moving forward, then I think we will be good. I have a powerful antagonist or two. Should we need it. I just need rulers.
And yeah. I can give you sometjing that will help you entire writing style and posting speed.
Grow a pair.
What I mean by that is have some confidence and just post. You dont have to think so damn much or worry about whether or not people like it. About whether you character is developed enough to introduce or all that craziness. Its appreciated, dont get me wrong. But you are too insecure. So putting it bluntly, grow a pair. Putting it nicely, have some confidence. Your doing fine. Your the ony one that seems to think otherwise.
shadowz1995
Amoeba of Wisdom
Yeah you have. He is/was the dark kingdom advisor
Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
All right, well, it's time to get over myself and post.
Damn, well, I'm gonna have to take a look at his character sheet.
