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[QUOTE="Teh Frixz]Yours is a bit better but there are issues.
Issue 1) Magic - I can't find a setting where Elves have anything close to what you've described. I highly suggest not having any magic at all, as KOI stated earlier, very few people have magic. If you were say, an Elf wizard, then that would make more sense but a young woman working as a waitress is most definitely not going to be a wizard.
2) Age - While not an issue per se, go crazy with it. Remember, elves don't 'age' like humans. You can be super old. A 20 something elf is basically an infant in elf terms.
3) weaponry - why do you need it and why would you have received training? It's the modern times, do people commonly learn how to weild a chain whip? If anything, it'd be a bow and dagger, learned for purely ceremonial reasons because now nine times out of ten, you can buy a gun and just shoot people spinning around with swords.
4) Don't try to stand out. You are already special enough being a PC in a world of NPCs. Be something fun and believable. A young elf making her way in the world and barely passing by as a coffee shop waitress is infinitely more interesting than 'random magic girl #10404829' who has shadow magic and a Gatling gun axe for a weapon that shoots katanas. That's dumb and isn't modern fantasy.
Overall I'd focus on making your Elf more of a real character than another cardboard cut out of an anime character. You don't need magic, you are a magical race in the modern world. That's almost enough. Just be sure to give yourself a good hook too, maybe your Elf family is racist and planning on leaving the human city giving you a tough choice to make. Maybe you start aching to make more money and get a job with a shifty model agency that turns out to be trafficking magical beings.
the setting has so much potential to work with and people should think a little bit harder about what that means. You are on the right track, just do some refining
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Thank you for your time~ Improving is key and I really needed that!
Issue 1) Magic - I can't find a setting where Elves have anything close to what you've described. I highly suggest not having any magic at all, as KOI stated earlier, very few people have magic. If you were say, an Elf wizard, then that would make more sense but a young woman working as a waitress is most definitely not going to be a wizard.
2) Age - While not an issue per se, go crazy with it. Remember, elves don't 'age' like humans. You can be super old. A 20 something elf is basically an infant in elf terms.
3) weaponry - why do you need it and why would you have received training? It's the modern times, do people commonly learn how to weild a chain whip? If anything, it'd be a bow and dagger, learned for purely ceremonial reasons because now nine times out of ten, you can buy a gun and just shoot people spinning around with swords.
4) Don't try to stand out. You are already special enough being a PC in a world of NPCs. Be something fun and believable. A young elf making her way in the world and barely passing by as a coffee shop waitress is infinitely more interesting than 'random magic girl #10404829' who has shadow magic and a Gatling gun axe for a weapon that shoots katanas. That's dumb and isn't modern fantasy.
Overall I'd focus on making your Elf more of a real character than another cardboard cut out of an anime character. You don't need magic, you are a magical race in the modern world. That's almost enough. Just be sure to give yourself a good hook too, maybe your Elf family is racist and planning on leaving the human city giving you a tough choice to make. Maybe you start aching to make more money and get a job with a shifty model agency that turns out to be trafficking magical beings.
the setting has so much potential to work with and people should think a little bit harder about what that means. You are on the right track, just do some refining
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Thank you for your time~ Improving is key and I really needed that!
