Fire Emblem: Legends of Auxereilla

I thought she was just exhausted.


Do you think the Olvi grass would help her recover?


(I don't want to kill her her. >.>)
 
Sei'rina's arm will still be wounded, but Olivi Grass would have restored a bit of energy to help her at least relax while she sleeps it off.
 
Holy Shit I think I've actually finished my character after switching my character idea. Going to do like five more reading checks then I'll post it in the sign up forum.


Oh heads up, I'm like the master of run-on sentences. I can't help it, I try to condense I really do but it doesn't work.
 
Killjoy707 said:
Holy Shit I think I've actually finished my character after switching my character idea. Going to do like five more reading checks then I'll post it in the sign up forum.
Oh heads up, I'm like the master of run-on sentences. I can't help it, I try to condense I really do but it doesn't work.
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Here's how you can get rid of the run on sentences, or at least make a dent in them: Speak what you're writing as you type it up. Whenever you pause to take a breath because what you have to say or whatever point you're trying to make is not yet complete, put a coma. When the idea or point is over and made clear, put a period.


For example, here are some run-on sentences which can be condensed very easily with minimal effort or change:


Run-On - He turned towards the door and locked it and he then turned around to turn off the light it was night time and he wanted to go to bed.


Proper Sentences - He turned towards the door and locked it. He then turned around to turn off the light. It was night time, and he wanted to go to bed.


Run-On - Together they decided that they would travel the world together they wanted to see everything they could before they died and they knew that they had their entire lives to do it.


Proper Sentences - Together they decided that they would travel the world together. They wanted to see everything they could before they died, and they knew they had their entire lives to do it.


Making sense?


Just take a moment to analyze what you write, and when the point is made that's when the sentence is closed with a period. The first example makes that clear. "He turned towards the door and locked it." That is a complete idea and the action is final. The sentence is over. "He then turned around to turn off the light." Point made, action complete. "It was night time," incomplete, but a natural pause when speaking is optional here so I added a coma before the closing statement of "he wanted to go to bed."
 
Are you an English teacher man? Or just well versed in English?
 
Orikanyo said:
Are you an English teacher man? Or just well versed in English?
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Just well versed in English. My father is a Technical Writer. His job is writing those giant manuals you find in software packages. He's always been strict about my having strong writing skills. So yeah.
 
Kyero said:
Here's how you can get rid of the run on sentences, or at least make a dent in them: Speak what you're writing as you type it up. Whenever you pause to take a breath because what you have to say or whatever point you're trying to make is not yet complete, put a coma. When the idea or point is over and made clear, put a period.
For example, here are some run-on sentences which can be condensed very easily with minimal effort or change:


Run-On - He turned towards the door and locked it and he then turned around to turn off the light it was night time and he wanted to go to bed.


Proper Sentences - He turned towards the door and locked it. He then turned around to turn off the light. It was night time, and he wanted to go to bed.


Run-On - Together they decided that they would travel the world together they wanted to see everything they could before they died and they knew that they had their entire lives to do it.


Proper Sentences - Together they decided that they would travel the world together. They wanted to see everything they could before they died, and they knew they had their entire lives to do it.


Making sense?


Just take a moment to analyze what you write, and when the point is made that's when the sentence is closed with a period. The first example makes that clear. "He turned towards the door and locked it." That is a complete idea and the action is final. The sentence is over. "He then turned around to turn off the light." Point made, action complete. "It was night time," incomplete, but a natural pause when speaking is optional here so I added a coma before the closing statement of "he wanted to go to bed."
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That's helpful thanks. Well I'm off to do the fifteenth proof reading check of my character.
 
Hey Kyero, can't quite remember, how does leveling work again?


6 91 69 98 92 10 69


That's what I rolled, I want the numbers LOWER then what I have right right?


HP: 18 (45%)


STR: 1 (5%)


MAG: 6 (55%)


SKL: 4 (40%)


SPD: 5 (45%)


DEF: 2 (10%)


RES: 7 (50%)


So HP and DEF level up?


 
Note: Tyrin's only level 3 from the fight, but he'll hit 4 when/if he heals Sei'Rina
 
TerraBooma said:
Hey Kyero, can't quite remember, how does leveling work again?
6 91 69 98 92 10 69


That's what I rolled, I want the numbers LOWER then what I have right right?


HP: 18 (45%)


STR: 1 (5%)


MAG: 6 (55%)


SKL: 4 (40%)


SPD: 5 (45%)


DEF: 2 (10%)


RES: 7 (50%)


So HP and DEF level up?
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The number must be equal to or lower than your growth percentage, so yes, only HP and DEF that time. It's funny that you got 69 twice though. The odds of that (for any number) are slim to none.
 
ahh okay, thanks for clarifying :D


A bit of a small level up, but there's always next time!


 
Righty, post up. I think I did everything right? Kind of frazzled right now
 
TerraBooma said:
ahh okay, thanks for clarifying :D
A bit of a small level up, but there's always next time!


 
Righty, post up. I think I did everything right? Kind of frazzled right now
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Yep. You're good.


 
Hey guys.


I'm going to do a fast forward once Cyrus responds to Tyrin's request to heal Sei'rina's physical wounds. And I think everyone will have some fun watching what happens when Kyo'da disembarks from the boat.


*Evil grin and rubbing of hands commences*
 
Oh my, Kyero has a devious plan, I dare say we are having a bad influence on him.


 
Also I shall try to get a post in tonight, atleast of Franny's flight, time is tight for the moment, school and all that jazz, and sadly it's not good jazz either.
 
Well, I pretty much gotta wait on Cyrus's response


also I'm curious as to what co-


Oh right


we're finding Rhe'Sia.


This'll be...fun
 
Indeed.


I have the post all worked out, and her appearance will come as more than a bit of shock a well as what she does with Kyo'da.


I'm hoping that some of you get a laugh out of his predicament.
 
Huehuehuehuehueh... I'm excited for the new addition to the group. The more the merrier!


Though it's mind-blowing, how you and Black Masquerade can RP multiple characters. It seems so impossibruuuuuu.....
 
I didn't go into detail on what she said during that flight... What i mentioned were only parts of her plan.. infact she wasn't done when she landed..
 
i beg to differ.. theres still a good while from shore.
 
...Okay. I shall differ your differ.


There's still a good amount of barrels Al hasn't yet used. *starts barricading his cabin door*
 
he msut sleep sometime.. and when he does.. she shall feel her wrath.
 
They seem to be the best of friends already


 
So I wonder what everyone thinks of Tyrin, He pretty much trusts everyone.
 
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