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[Kyero]

Hell's yeah I am! You guys are intimidating with your knowledge but I'll knock up a character sheet today/tomorrow

Hey there Zuka.


A few things for you about the profile, some of which will be quite liberating.


Liberating and Non-Critical Points


1) Because the RP has started already and has advanced a fair amount you are not bound by the 750 max power level limit. You are now only bound by the 2,000 Low Class Saiyan limit and can pick literally any number leading up to that point.


2) Her body type would be a mesomorph


3) Her voice type would be an Alto (Tenor is a male voice type)


4) Her combat style would be considered "mixed" for the RP's purposes


Criticisms





1) Her description of her personal techniques is a bit too similar to Era's, especially targeting the nervous system. Era's something of a unique individual as it is priding fluidity and precision over raw power which is the Saiyan Race's entire reason for existence. Also the description is a bit lacking in the nervous system department and has been worded more to sound like she knows how to target joints and structural weaknesses in the skeletons of her enemies once she understands their anatomy rather than the nervous system itself.


- This section, the "Personal Attacks," is also meant for a listing of signature moves. If you need a reference you can check Era's profile (or any of the others).


2) The "Personality" section needs to be 2 paragraphs long and both paragraphs need a total of 5 sentences before it's considered complete. If you need help, the first post in this OOC thread has a list of questions you can use to fill the section out.


3) In the Biography section, you mention that she had "enemies, friends, and foes." First of all enemies and foes are the same thing so there's no need to mention both of them. Second a Saiyan child has no enemies. Just rivals. The Saiyan Race is not exactly charming in their youth or adulthood in most cases, but they rarely if ever treat each other as enemies.


The final paragraph (or broken paragraph it seems) sound like they belong more in the "Personality" section and aren't really part of a biography. They don't say anything about how she grew up, who she grew up around, who she trained with, who she trained under, who her friends and peers were, etc.




All in all it's coming along, but you have some work to do. Let me know when you're finished and if you require any assistance let us know and we'll all pitch in to help you out.

 

[Zooks]

Hey there Zuka.
A few things for you about the profile, some of which will be quite liberating.


Liberating and Non-Critical Points


1) Because the RP has started already and has advanced a fair amount you are not bound by the 750 max power level limit. You are now only bound by the 2,000 Low Class Saiyan limit and can pick literally any number leading up to that point.


2) Her body type would be a mesomorph


3) Her voice type would be an Alto (Tenor is a male voice type)


4) Her combat style would be considered "mixed" for the RP's purposes


Criticisms





1) Her description of her personal techniques is a bit too similar to Era's, especially targeting the nervous system. Era's something of a unique individual as it is priding fluidity and precision over raw power which is the Saiyan Race's entire reason for existence. Also the description is a bit lacking in the nervous system department and has been worded more to sound like she knows how to target joints and structural weaknesses in the skeletons of her enemies once she understands their anatomy rather than the nervous system itself.


- This section, the "Personal Attacks," is also meant for a listing of signature moves. If you need a reference you can check Era's profile (or any of the others).


2) The "Personality" section needs to be 2 paragraphs long and both paragraphs need a total of 5 sentences before it's considered complete. If you need help, the first post in this OOC thread has a list of questions you can use to fill the section out.


3) In the Biography section, you mention that she had "enemies, friends, and foes." First of all enemies and foes are the same thing so there's no need to mention both of them. Second a Saiyan child has no enemies. Just rivals. The Saiyan Race is not exactly charming in their youth or adulthood in most cases, but they rarely if ever treat each other as enemies.


The final paragraph (or broken paragraph it seems) sound like they belong more in the "Personality" section and aren't really part of a biography. They don't say anything about how she grew up, who she grew up around, who she trained with, who she trained under, who her friends and peers were, etc.




All in all it's coming along, but you have some work to do. Let me know when you're finished and if you require any assistance let us know and we'll all pitch in to help you out.

Thank you, I updated the first half of the CS, I'll focus on the second half later today. The first ooc post was super helpful.


I want to mention where she came from in slightly more detail, but from what I gathered in the RP right now, there is only one surviving home world left? It may work to my advantage to have her gather at the current homeworld because hers has been destroyed/evacuated.


Most times I fold into the RP and excell my characters background that way, it's different having to do it all upfront, especially being half way through the RP. Regardless I'll fix what I can.

 

[Kyero]

Thank you, I updated the first half of the CS, I'll focus on the second half later today. The first ooc post was super helpful.
I want to mention where she came from in slightly more detail, but from what I gathered in the RP right now, there is only one surviving home world left? It may work to my advantage to have her gather at the current homeworld because hers has been destroyed/evacuated.


Most times I fold into the RP and excell my characters background that way, it's different having to do it all upfront, especially being half way through the RP. Regardless I'll fix what I can.

Oh the RP has only just begun my friend. We have barely scratched the surface.


But in regards to your character all 17 Home Worlds are in the process of being destroyed.


At this time her best chance is to have reached the nameless planet where Commander Korvaiis has called his Saiyan brothers and sisters to and have her be one of the individuals asked to attend the meeting he called where he asked who would accompany him to attack Inecros' supply line.

 

[Genon]

@Kyero, will we have to worry about space combat in this RP? Karas' ship is equipped with shields and some weapons, but most other Saiyan ships aren't. Logically speaking, wouldn't we have to worry about being attacked while in stasis?


I was thinking of having Karas get around this by having the Bastion create new parts for everyone's ships based on pre-existing schematics, but if it's unnecessary or logistically impossible I won't have Karas do it.

 

[Kyero]

@Kyero, will we have to worry about space combat in this RP? Karas' ship is equipped with shields and some weapons, but most other Saiyan ships aren't. Logically speaking, wouldn't we have to worry about being attacked while in stasis?
I was thinking of having Karas get around this by having the Bastion create new parts for everyone's ships based on pre-existing schematics, but if it's unnecessary or logistically impossible I won't have Karas do it.

It would be a logical precaution.


Having the ships all programmed to immediately wake their occupants upon the discovery of new vessels and/or potential threats would be in order. This would prevent any undue complications in space and allow them to pick a planet, land, and stand their ground before anything super serious could arise.

 

[Genon]

It would be a logical precaution.
Having the ships all programmed to immediately wake their occupants upon the discovery of new vessels and/or potential threats would be in order. This would prevent any undue complications in space and allow them to pick a planet, land, and stand their ground before anything super serious could arise.

Well I was thinking actually having the Bastion modify everyone's ships to have better engines, easy shields and easy weapons. Most Saiyans aren't pilots as far as I know. The way I interpreted it, they know how to use ships, but dogfighting isn't part of their style of warfare. They're terrestrial raiders, which is why all of their ships are designed merely to get them from Point A to Point B rather than bust through heavy blockades or nuke enemy bases from orbit. This is why if I was going to have Karas give everyone shields and laser cannons, I would use extremely simplified controls that a four-year-old could operate. Think "click on something and it gets attacked" simple.


I figured that the ships already woke people up from stasis if they came under attack or discovered a vessel anyway. It seems like something that would be incorporated in Saiyan ships from the get-go.

 

[Kyero]

Well I was thinking actually having the Bastion modify everyone's ships to have better engines, easy shields and easy weapons. Most Saiyans aren't pilots as far as I know. The way I interpreted it, they know how to use ships, but dogfighting isn't part of their style of warfare. They're terrestrial raiders, which is why all of their ships are designed merely to get them from Point A to Point B rather than bust through heavy blockades or nuke enemy bases from orbit. This is why if I was going to have Karas give everyone shields and laser cannons, I would use extremely simplified controls that a four-year-old could operate. Think "click on something and it gets attacked" simple.
I figured that the ships already woke people up from stasis if they came under attack or discovered a vessel anyway. It seems like something that would be incorporated in Saiyan ships from the get-go.

It sound like a feasible addition to their vessels so go for it. But yes, simplicity is the order of the day here. Nothing major that could help them take down an armada. Just enough to help push them through potential ambushes until they hit the nearest planet to land where they are in their element would suffice.

 

[Zooks]

@Kyero


I finished my Character Sheet, I hope this one is better

 

[Kyero]

@Kyero
I finished my Character Sheet, I hope this one is better

Definitely better. I have only one gripe but other than that you're good to go.


Your third technique, the heat seeking part, unfortunately doesn't work.


Ki (plasma) has no mind of its own and does not actively seek or attract itself to another source. In fact, it repels most foreign Ki which is why they don't combine when they clash against one another and only combine when the come from an identical source (the multiple kamehameha in Broly: Second Coming being the best example since it's the same exact attack). But even when combining, they are not seeking each other out. They simply are in close proximity and are consciously pushed together by the users to accomplish the task.


So that part will need to be adjusted. Either she control it, or you could instead give it a "supersonic" quality in that the more she charges it the faster it is launched to the point that the attack is almost unseen because of how fast it is.


After all the more the Ki (plasma) is charged, the faster the molecules encompassing it are moving and thus the faster and more damaging it becomes.


So that's one idea. It's by no means the only one, but the heat seeking part has to go.

 

[Zooks]

Definitely better. I have only one gripe but other than that you're good to go.
Your third technique, the heat seeking part, unfortunately doesn't work.


Ki (plasma) has no mind of its own and does not actively seek or attract itself to another source. In fact, it repels most foreign Ki which is why they don't combine when they clash against one another and only combine when the come from an identical source (the multiple kamehameha in Broly: Second Coming being the best example since it's the same exact attack). But even when combining, they are not seeking each other out. They simply are in close proximity and are consciously pushed together by the users to accomplish the task.


So that part will need to be adjusted. Either she control it, or you could instead give it a "supersonic" quality in that the more she charges it the faster it is launched to the point that the attack is almost unseen because of how fast it is.


After all the more the Ki (plasma) is charged, the faster the molecules encompassing it are moving and thus the faster and more damaging it becomes.


So that's one idea. It's by no means the only one, but the heat seeking part has to go.

Alright I changed the idea, to the Supersonic one. Hope you don't mind me borrowing it, it was a good idea.


I'm not much versed in Chemistry, medical studies, or Military life unfortunately so just correct me if I say something strange

 

[Kyero]

Alright I changed the idea, to the Supersonic one. Hope you don't mind me borrowing it, it was a good idea.
I'm not much versed in Chemistry, medical studies, or Military life unfortunately so just correct me if I say something strange

You're good to go Zuka.


You can post whenever you're ready.

 

[Genon]

@Kyero


I know it wasn't clear in my post, but Rakton stepped forward as well.

 

[Kyero]

@Kyero
I know it wasn't clear in my post, but Rakton stepped forward as well.

Oops. Sorry about that.


Me gots some editing to do!

 

[Genon]

Oops. Sorry about that.
Me gots some editing to do!

It's OK. Anyway, I was debating sending some of Rakton's underlings along, but doing so would be biting off more than I can chew. What do you think?

 

[Kyero]

It's OK. Anyway, I was debating sending some of Rakton's underlings along, but doing so would be biting off more than I can chew. What do you think?

Treating the underlings as nameless NPC's would take a lot of the load off. So it's up to you. But I'd rather not add any more named characters that are considered "significant" to the plot or character development than already present. Yet.

 

[Zooks]

@Kyero @Genon


I can post but I wanted to let the others post first. If you want to progress let me know, and I can post to help. Because I use mobile mostly, I will at most be able to respond once every day or two, is that ok? I get on my computer only after my daughter goes to sleep, and doing long posts need a good keyboard.

 

[Genon]

@Kyero @Genon
I can post but I wanted to let the others post first. If you want to progress let me know, and I can post to help. Because I use mobile mostly, I will at most be able to respond once every day or two, is that ok? I get on my computer only after my daughter goes to sleep, and doing long posts need a good keyboard.

Well, we're waiting on both @Denezen and @Anime King Kaleb right now, so we might not be progressing for a while anyway.

 

[Kyero]

Hey @Genon. I took the liberty of filling in a bit of information in my post about Korvaiis acquiring a starship from Xol as well as a few of his allies who knew how to pilot it. I describe the reasons for this decision in the post, but wanted to be sure you were cool with everything. Xol is your character after all and though I didn't write directly for him I still think it is only fair that you have a say in this before it becomes final.


If you think anything needs to change regarding how I moved us forward regarding Karas or Xol, let me know.

 

[Genon]

Hey @Genon. I took the liberty of filling in a bit of information in my post about Korvaiis acquiring a starship from Xol as well as a few of his allies who knew how to pilot it. I describe the reasons for this decision in the post, but wanted to be sure you were cool with everything. Xol is your character after all and though I didn't write directly for him I still think it is only fair that you have a say in this before it becomes final.
If you think anything needs to change regarding how I moved us forward regarding Karas or Xol, let me know.

Well, Karas originally wanted to use the Bastion to upgrade the ships, and he wanted to acclimate to his full power (he only has about 3,500 available right now, he needs his full 16,000 fast), but I'm assuming that the rejuvenation chamber does so automatically if I'm not mistaken. And I wanted to bring Tragedy and Comedy along too.

 

[Kyero]

Well, Karas originally wanted to use the Bastion to upgrade the ships, and he wanted to acclimate to his full power (he only has about 3,500 available right now, he needs his full 16,000 fast), but I'm assuming that the rejuvenation chamber does so automatically if I'm not mistaken. And I wanted to bring Tragedy and Comedy along too.

You can still bring them along and the Bastion will have provided as much materials as the starship could hold without sacrificing its speed and functionality so you should have enough to work with. And Tragedy and Comedy can still come too.


Yes, the Rejuvenation Chamber, when and if Karas manages to build it, will allow for acclimation after a nice long (8+ hour soak when not injured) to his new power. So his incentive to build it is quite high.

 

[Zooks]

@Kyero


Now that Eve's potential has been unlocked, what power level will she be at right now? The same till she starts heavily training? What do you think a resonable increase would be over the course of the ship ride to the destination?

 

[Kyero]

@Kyero
Now that Eve's potential has been unlocked, what power level will she be at right now? The same till she starts heavily training? What do you think a resonable increase would be over the course of the ship ride to the destination?

Her potential being unlocked won't increase her power right away and sadly the starship isn't designed for training.


However she'll be engaging very powerful foes in our upcoming battle at this first supply route planet so she'll have her tail kicked all over the place. About a day in the rejuvenation chamber after she is evacuated from the battle and she'll be right as rain and have full access to her new power without the need to acclimate over time like the others have had to do up until this point.


Once this planet falls Korvaiis will realize that the group is in need of training and he will make everyone spend an entire day on the planet training in groups to maximize their efforts and training benefits so you'll have time to get more power increases soon. I have a plan to partner up Eve and Era and let them go at it for a while. Era will accidentally take things too far causing Eve some semi-serious injuries and that will result in another stint in the rejuvenation chamber for Eve to give her another, though smaller, boost like she got from the initial battle. I would estimate if you play it right that Eve's power will jump to around the 13K-18K range by the time that training debacle comes to an end.


So sit tight and let the beatdowns commence when we arrive and go through training. She can get a few good digs in as any true Saiyan would before going down, but the beatdowns are inevitable at this point.


But comparatively speaking the rest of our characters (or at least mine for sure) will receive few to no serious injuries save when and/or if they battle that one enemy Korvaiis is concerned about who has a power of 70,000. But even then I don't plan on any of the characters under my control (Kendra, Nei, Urod, Korvaiis, Era, or Sil) gaining any serious power ups like they've gotten up until this point. At most maybe they'll get a 0.6x increase to their current powers.


I want everyone else's characters to have some time in the power growth spotlight.

 

[Zooks]

Her potential being unlocked won't increase her power right away and sadly the starship isn't designed for training.
However she'll be engaging very powerful foes in our upcoming battle at this first supply route planet so she'll have her tail kicked all over the place. About a day in the rejuvenation chamber after she is evacuated from the battle and she'll be right as rain and have full access to her new power without the need to acclimate over time like the others have had to do up until this point.


Once this planet falls Korvaiis will realize that the group is in need of training and he will make everyone spend an entire day on the planet training in groups to maximize their efforts and training benefits so you'll have time to get more power increases soon. I have a plan to partner up Eve and Era and let them go at it for a while. Era will accidentally take things too far causing Eve some semi-serious injuries and that will result in another stint in the rejuvenation chamber for Eve to give her another, though smaller, boost like she got from the initial battle. I would estimate if you play it right that Eve's power will jump to around the 13K-18K range by the time that training debacle comes to an end.


So sit tight and let the beatdowns commence when we arrive and go through training. She can get a few good digs in as any true Saiyan would before going down, but the beatdowns are inevitable at this point.


But comparatively speaking the rest of our characters (or at least mine for sure) will receive few to no serious injuries save when and/or if they battle that one enemy Korvaiis is concerned about who has a power of 70,000. But even then I don't plan on any of the characters under my control (Kendra, Nei, Urod, Korvaiis, Era, or Sil) gaining any serious power ups like they've gotten up until this point. At most maybe they'll get a 0.6x increase to their current powers.


I want everyone else's characters to have some time in the power growth spotlight.

Thanks. I don't mind taking a few, meaning a lot of bad hits to catch up. It will be interesting character development for her as she would always win, and was always the strongest as a kid, I forsee her trying to come to the realisation she is not strong, and not every battle can be won. It is more about surving for another round. She might even loose her cool and rage out, that would be cool.

 

[Genon]

@Kyero


You know, Karas hasn't consistently spoken to any of your characters yet aside from Korvaiis. He hasn't talked to Nei since recruitment, and he hasn't spoken to Era, Sil, Urod, or Kendra at all. Want to fix that?


Also, I have a scene planned for Kendra and Nei if they start breathing down his neck about his increasing power level. But in order for it to work, I have to ask you this question: Does everyone aside from Urod and Korvaiis have the same "ranking" in the Raid Group, or are Nei and Kendra directly over Karas and Co?

 

[Kyero]

@Kyero
You know, Karas hasn't consistently spoken to any of your characters yet aside from Korvaiis. He hasn't talked to Nei since recruitment, and he hasn't spoken to Era, Sil, Urod, or Kendra at all. Want to fix that?


Also, I have a scene planned for Kendra and Nei if they start breathing down his neck about his increasing power level. But in order for it to work, I have to ask you this question: Does everyone aside from Urod and Korvaiis have the same "ranking" in the Raid Group, or are Nei and Kendra directly over Karas and Co?

The hierarchy of the Raid Group's original lineup was Korvaiis, Urod, Kendra, Nei, and then everyone else, in that order.


Everyone other than those four are lumped together as the "lowest ranking" members and just Combatants with no "official" hierarchy between them save for their power levels. By normal Saiyan Society standards, they're all expendable. Those four I just named are not.


That's one of the main reasons why Kendra and Nei have been on Era and Sil about their power increases. They feel that the two of them especially, having surpassed Kendra and Nei in raw power at this point, will start thinking that they're the indispensable ones and that they could sacrifice Kendra and Nei if they had to in order to defeat an enemy or take their positions someday.


And yes, we should probably fix the lack of communication that's been plaguing our dear scientist.