BMan
I'm Batman
And to add to all of that, Bruce has a pretty manly mustache in the beginning of the Dark Knight Returns story.
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I didn't think there was much of a problem with tense when I reread it. I'll take another look, though.BMan said:To Diamond, can you edit your post a little? It jumps from present to past tense a lot and the dialogue is hard to read when it is in the middle of paragraphs.
Possum, you should be fine.
Also, I think I fixed it mostly. I kept dialogue in ones that are easier for me to read, and separated the ones I thought were problems.BMan said:Wonderboy, you seem to have question marks where commas should be. Probably just a glitch or something. I usually go three pages on word for a post.
Diamond, that's okay. Just separate the dialogue from the paragraphs please.
The questions marks are supposed to be there. It's my style of writing. The italics are her thoughts and the question marks are to show how much of this world she's questioning because she doesn't understand it.BMan said:Wonderboy, you seem to have question marks where commas should be. Probably just a glitch or something. I usually go three pages on word for a post.
Diamond, that's okay. Just separate the dialogue from the paragraphs please.
To be completely honest, I'm having trouble putting two and two together. Are you on the Guild as well?Awesome Possum] [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/members/greengrenade.33695/ said:GreenGrenade[/URL], I recognized it. But I didn't put two and two together until just now *facepalm*