Character Critique Thread

[VirtualUnity]

No matter how little Umbra is in control, no school hires highly mentally unstable people with a chance to become straight up evil. Even 108 has standards.

If he really did get 3000+ kills then I'd expect him to be more affected. The man who got those kills you mentioned hates thinking of the stats like that because it reduces war to a sickening game.

The revolver is completely frivolous. At a guess, since it's hard to tell the limits of his powers, I'd imagine he has no need for it.

Upon further consideration, the DID thing is somewhat troubling. He does not have DID since that's a psychiatric disorder and this is purely brought on by his powers. I do worry that you might write this incorrectly if you keep calling it DID anyway - have you done much research into the disorder to avoid getting anything wrong? I can't help but worry you just have it to be a gimmick to make the character more interesting artificially rather than just making a good character.

Any time mate.

Hmm... I see the problems now... Though I am in the middle of editing Elias, i planned that Umbra was either chaotic and selfish, or cruel and sadistic. Both of which don't exactly mean he's evil, more so, just very disturbed. And as for the DID brought out from his powers? I have done research on the illness, but that was around a few months ago. I might freshen up a bit. And as for the revolver? I guess he doesn't really need it. Also, the 3000+ kills? I guess I should change that seeing as I can't seem to think of it as much anymore.

Thanks again for telling me what to edit.

 

[The J]

Hmm... I see the problems now... Though I am in the middle of editing Elias, i planned that Umbra was either chaotic and selfish, or cruel and sadistic. Both of which don't exactly mean he's evil, more so, just very disturbed. And as for the DID brought out from his powers? I have done research on the illness, but that was around a few months ago. I might freshen up a bit. And as for the revolver? I guess he doesn't really need it. Also, the 3000+ kills? I guess I should change that seeing as I can't seem to think of it as much anymore.

Thanks again for telling me what to edit.

I don't think you understand what I'm saying about Umbra being problematic. First of all, chaotic and selfish or cruel and sadistic already describe some manifestations of evil quite well. Second of all, that doesn't even matter. Aegis will not hire this man! He has times when he is going to be very likely to harm people through direct action, indirect action or negligence!

 

[VirtualUnity]

I don't think you understand what I'm saying about Umbra being problematic. First of all, chaotic and selfish or cruel and sadistic already describe some manifestations of evil quite well. Second of all, that doesn't even matter. Aegis will not hire this man! He has times when he is going to be very likely to harm people through direct action, indirect action or negligence!

Ah.... I see.... So Umbra's problem is that he is, by some part, a manifestation of evil. I can understand, and him not being hired is also more likely. Though if I do remove the split personalities, I'm going to edit not only a bit, but also one of the points I created him for. I really wanted to have two differing entities inside Elias' head because of his ability, that and someone can be cruel and sadistic, but that doesn't essentially mean they'll be bad. It just means they'll be very rude and impertinent.... I think I found out a way to implement Umbra, without having him seem evil.

And again, thanks for the critiquing.

 

[The J]

Ah.... I see.... So Umbra's problem is that he is, by some part, a manifestation of evil. I can understand, and him not being hired is also more likely. Though if I do remove the split personalities, I'm going to edit not only a bit, but also one of the points I created him for. I really wanted to have two differing entities inside Elias' head because of his ability, that and someone can be cruel and sadistic, but that doesn't essentially mean they'll be bad. It just means they'll be very rude and impertinent.... I think I found out a way to implement Umbra, without having him seem evil.

And again, thanks for the critiquing.

If someone's cruel and sadistic, that does actually mean they will be bad. According to google, cruel means "wilfully causing pain or suffering to others, or feeling no concern about it" and sadistic means deriving pleasure from the pain or suffering of others.

 

[VirtualUnity]

If someone's cruel and sadistic, that does actually mean they will be bad. According to google, cruel means "wilfully causing pain or suffering to others, or feeling no concern about it" and sadistic means deriving pleasure from the pain or suffering of others.

Yeah... Kinda figured a little, so I decided to water Umbra down a little, making him rude and impertinent instead. I hope this appeases you.

Thank you, once again, for critiquing my OC so I can better him.

 

[Gus]

Cross, E.

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• Full Name
  Elias Nicholas S.[Stein] Cross
  
  Nicknames
  Eli; Nick; Steiner; Prophet; Liam; Ilias; Two-Eyes; Umbra; Photon;
  
  Codename
  Eclipse
  
  Gender
  Male
  
  Age
  35[11th November]
  
  Rank
  S
  
  Limiter
  Level 4[Active]
  
  Role
  Teacher:
  -Emotional Composure(Substitute)
  -Mental Discipline(Substitute)
  -Physical Discipline(Substitute)
  -How Not to Kill(Substitute)
  Faculty:
  -Security Officer
  
• Race
  Fair, Euro-Canadian[Irish/German Descent]
  
  Hair
  Long, Dark-Auburn; Tied in a messy Half-Ponytail, and a kept full-beard of the same colour.
  
  Eyes
  Left: Gold; Right: Silver
  
  Height
  6'4"
  
  Figure
  Athletic; Slightly Muscular, 210 lbs.
  
  Notes
  -An S.A.S. tattoo on his upper-right back
  -A couple of scars around his arms, back, and chest
  -Wears a Military jacket majority of the time
  
• Understanding -
  Elias, due to his condition, has a greater understanding towards others with similar problems and conditions. With his understanding, Elias can help patiently others with more unstable A6G23 genes, coming from his own unstable abilities to control both light and darkness.
  
  Cynical -
  Developing a Cynical trait over his time in the Special Air Service Regiment, Elias will, for the majority of the time, judge a person based on their first time talking/meeting one another
  
  Curious -
  Growing up with a peculiar curiosity of the mysterious, Elias had always gotten into dicey situations for either nosing around, disobeying an order for the sake of his curiosity, or just simply pressing a button that says not to press it.
  
  Sarcastic -
  Inheriting the same sharp-tongue his Father had, Elias tends to speak his mind freely even though he was told to keep his mouth shut. Preferring to sass and talk-back towards people he finds irritating, Elias will not hold his tongue for anyone, not even his friends if he feels wronged or faulted.
  
  History
  Elias is almost an enigma, majority of his files: Classified. His records: Redacted. And his Missions: Shredded and Burnt to ashes. What didn't remain classified was the bare minimum, his name, age, sex, sexual orientation, nationality, date of birth, place of birth, parentage, and previous occupation. Born in Toronto Canada. Son of Elijah and Nichole, both of which are ex-special forces from their respective countries before retiring to Canada to raise Elias. Elias grew up to join the S.A.S., much like his Father, and became a well-known operative of the organisation until a couple years back. He had only worked alongside Aegis within the recent few years in a facility located in Toronto, only to be moved to Facility 108 in Baltimore a year later.
  
  
• Elijah and Nichole Cross[Parents]
  Elias' relationship with his parents is like any other, aside from the constant reminders from his Mother that he hasn't had a girlfriend or even brought a girl to their house in Toronto, and that he needs to find a reliable woman to marry(though this is for Nichole's selfish reasons of wanting to see her grandchildren while she still breathes), and his Father feeling sorry for him having to put up with Nichole. His relationship with his Father on the other hand is like brothers, Elias being treated as if he was Elijah's little brother.
  
  
• 
  Eclipse[Photo-Umbrakinesis]-
  Elias' A6G23 genes, though dormant in his parents, were rather active within him. A little too active for Aegis' liking. When his genes were awakened, he gained the rare ability to have control over Light and Darkness, one that was rather unstable due to the mental instability it cause him. having developed a peculiar case of D.I.D.(Dissociative Identity Disorder), splitting his more radical personalities into two embodiments: Umbra and Photon. Due to this, and the magnitude of his powers, he was decreed with an S Level and Permanent Level-4 Limiter. Though not really needing a source to use either his abilities, having one greatly increases his control, and decreases the influence of either Umbra or Photon in his actions.
  
  
  • Shadow-Born: While covered in the shadows, or encompassed by the night's darkness, his body repairs itself in a varying, though much faster than normally, pace. Depending on the injury, and the source of the darkness, his body may repair sustained injuries from a couple of seconds, to a couple of hours.
  
  
  • Supercharged: Depending on the amount, and source, Elias can absorb vast amounts of photons to supercharge himself and his attacks to a varying degree. On lower levels of charges Elias can create hard-light constructs to either protect himself or attack other, while on higher levels of charges, he may even produce super-heated beams of light that can act like a more powerful version of a plasma cutter.
  Limitations
  
  
  • Dissociative identity Disorder: Due to his unstable A6G23 genes, he developed a serious case of D.I.D., where his personality, so to say, were split into two radical parts: Umbra and Photon. Umbra being a deeply chaotic and selfish, and Photon being rather delusional about their conviction, and stupidly loyal. When Elias uses either of his abilities without a source, his split-personalities have a chance to take over his body and control his actions, though locked into using only Darkness or Light.
  • Overexertion = Injuries: In the case of overexerting himself and prolonging the use of his abilities, without a source, will start to wear out his internal organs, then his skeleton, then finally, sending him into a comatose state to stop him from accidently killing himself. In the case of damaging his internal organs and skeleton, he will start vomiting or leaking blood from the eyes, nose, or ears. Until his body shuts down and enters an unresponsive state until healed.
  • Zero Emotional Control: Another defect from his unstable A6G23 genes, Elias' emotions tend to have a greater control over his powers, ranging from light sources exploding and spikes made from darkness shoot out from any shadow, to a blackout and people accidentally being taken into a dark-realm and appearing in a random location on the globe. Doesn't matter where, as long there's a shadow there, you can be transported there by accident.
• The Mechanic: During his time in the S.A.S., Elias has been tasked with both leading his team, and maintaining both their gear and vehicles. Learning from his experience on and off the field, he knows his way around mechanical and technological problems.
  
  The Executioner: The Alias he had earned during his service in the S.A.S., he was the most deadly in Soldier in record. Having a record of 3,000+ confirmed kills of radicals, terrorists, and threats to innocent lives during his deployment in war torn nations across the globe. This only happened due to the rigorous training he endured from a Private to a Lieutenant.
  
  The Instructor: A couple of years before his time working in AEGIS, Elias had became an instructor for the new recruits that were accepted each year, teaching them about his experience in his service; in his squadron. Having to teach some rowdy, some cynical, some stubborn recruits has hardened and taught him how to teach others.
  
  German and Irish Cooking: During his off times, he had always spent it with his parents, learning how to cook cuisines and foods from their cultures. Though showing a certain appreciation towards his Mother's culture.
  
  Guitar Lessons: Aside from Elias' parents cooking lessons, his Father has taught him how to play the guitar during his childhood, becoming rather versed in playing the guitar.
  
  
• 
  
  Model .500 Revolver:
  Though considered a relic by today's standards, the S&W .500 Revolver is still a reliable side-arm capable of dishing out large amounts of damage within a quick succession. Carrying 50 cal. rounds in a five-chambered revolver, even with today's advancements it can rip a large hole through dense metals.
  
  Guitar:
  An old fashioned guitar, nothing really special aside from the sentimental value it holds.
  
  
• Tattoo:
  
  Military Jacket:
  
  Favourite Music:
  
  
  

OK.... I finally finished making Elias.... If there are things needing change, please tell me.

Hey there! Welcome to AEGIS 108. Looks like you already have notes about history and personality profile and stuff, so I won't delve into that apart from to echo what J said: DID is a risky thing to write about casually. My character Kate started with something like that but softened into the personality trait of 'mercurial' and a unique (and comic bookish) trait of independent personalities hosted in her extended nervous system. That doesn't correspond to any real world mental illness and gives more freedom to explore.

I also agree that the history should be fleshed out, even if in character it is redacted. As an alternative to softening problematic personality traits, you could just add some history that explains why he is good at covering that side of himself up. Nobody is going to hire a man with sadistic tendencies to work around children on purpose but if he seems normal enough in interviews and there is nothing in his file about that...

What I do need to call your attention to is the stats. S rank can only have a total of 27 points. Even adding your lowest totals across the board you exceed that. Kate has a something of a special dispensation for the way her stats work because that is her actual power set: she has two different power sets depending on the time of day. She has three forms because she also has an unpowered phase for an hour or so during transition at twilight. None of her forms have a total that exceeds 24 however, which is the maximum for A rank.

It seems like Elias only needs two forms, one for photon and one for umbra. In any case, I would ask that you clarify which form has which stats, and make sure that no one form has more than 27 points total (current minimum appears to be more like 39) I would also suggest making most of the stats the same (as for health and energy) and just have one or two areas where he switches his weak spot (maybe defense vs agility?)

Additionally the powers themselves need clarification. You mention the possibility of teleporting other people not as a power but as a weakness. That should be a power, even if it is involuntary. The involuntary part would be the weakness in the power, but it still needs to be listed under powers.

It is also important to remember that the rule for powers is one primary power and at most two supporting powers. Kate could be misinterpreted as having more than the classic three powers the way she is written up, but basically she has two supporting powers to her primary. Primary is power switching supporting powers are flight (daytime only) and weaponry (type is day night dependent.)

My suggestion for Elias would be something like: primary power: dark-light manipulation--able to expand existing shadows to full darkness or existing light to blinding brightness with accompanying temperature changes to dangerous or even damaging degrees. supporting power: shadow travel--in deep shadows, Elias can access a pocket dimension which is cold, dark and unhealthy
for others to visit, but he can bring passengers. When he emerges it can be anywhere on earth where it is dark. It is difficult to target a specific area beyond line of sight and the time required to travel increases geometrically with distance from a split second within line of sight up to 90 minutes for 8000 miles (the diameter of earth). Supporting power: weaponized light/shadow--after 5 seconds to 5 minutes basking in concentrated light or shadow Elias can project a telekinetic blast of the opposite type. The strength of the blast is proportional to the time spent charging, varying from as little as a high powered rifle up to and including a low yield nuclear bomb.

To be clear, this is just a suggestion, I am not trying to rewrite the character or the powerset, just trying to paint a clearer picture of how better defined powerset might look. Overall, I should say, I like the concept. Contrasts and dynamic tension is cool and interesting. The trick is to define the boundaries, both for yourself and for the rest of the cast.

The last thing I will add is: be patient with the revisions process. Some of my characters took several months to approve. That's not typical necessarily, but the more complicated the concept the more working over it tends to take to smooth out the bumps. Elias is cool, but still bumpy.

Once again, welcome to the AEGIS family!

 

[Natealie]

VirtualUnity Wazzap and welcome to Aegis. I'm Nat, the cosmic horror lurking in Welian's basement and behind J at all times. I run Nix here, the one with the power of understanding. But enough about me, let's talk about your character.

From how I'm seeing it, Elias uses light to create constructs and for offensive abilities, while he uses shadows to heal himself. Is this correct? If so, would it be fair to say that his main ability is the light then? Also, how much force can these light constructs take before they break?

Those are all the questions I have for now honestly. Not many people make an S rank as their first, so more power to you. Balancing them can be a pain, but as long as you're willing to compromise you should be fine. I look forward to roleplaying with you.

 

[The J]

VirtualUnity Wazzap and welcome to Aegis. I'm Nat, the cosmic horror lurking in Welian's basement and behind J at all times.

I'm watching you.

 

[welian]

Gus Perhaps if you didn't try to break my stat system with stat-shifting characters in an RP that wasn't originally designed for it, I wouldn't have to keep rewriting rules to make myself look good.

 

[Natealie]

I'm watching you.

I'm always watching back. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

 

[The J]

Gus Perhaps if you didn't try to break my stat system with stat-shifting characters in an RP that wasn't originally designed for it, I wouldn't have to keep rewriting rules to make myself look good.

What I'm hearing is "waaaaaa I have to actually do something in this RP."

 

[Gus]

Stat shifting, done with care fits perfectly within your deightfully vague system boss.

 

[VirtualUnity]

Hey there! Welcome to AEGIS 108. Looks like you already have notes about history and personality profile and stuff, so I won't delve into that apart from to echo what J said: DID is a risky thing to write about casually. My character Kate started with something like that but softened into the personality trait of 'mercurial' and a unique (and comic bookish) trait of independent personalities hosted in her extended nervous system. That doesn't correspond to any real world mental illness and gives more freedom to explore.

I also agree that the history should be fleshed out, even if in character it is redacted. As an alternative to softening problematic personality traits, you could just add some history that explains why he is good at covering that side of himself up. Nobody is going to hire a man with sadistic tendencies to work around children on purpose but if he seems normal enough in interviews and there is nothing in his file about that...

What I do need to call your attention to is the stats. S rank can only have a total of 27 points. Even adding your lowest totals across the board you exceed that. Kate has a something of a special dispensation for the way her stats work because that is her actual power set: she has two different power sets depending on the time of day. She has three forms because she also has an unpowered phase for an hour or so during transition at twilight. None of her forms have a total that exceeds 24 however, which is the maximum for A rank.

It seems like Elias only needs two forms, one for photon and one for umbra. In any case, I would ask that you clarify which form has which stats, and make sure that no one form has more than 27 points total (current minimum appears to be more like 39) I would also suggest making most of the stats the same (as for health and energy) and just have one or two areas where he switches his weak spot (maybe defense vs agility?)

Additionally the powers themselves need clarification. You mention the possibility of teleporting other people not as a power but as a weakness. That should be a power, even if it is involuntary. The involuntary part would be the weakness in the power, but it still needs to be listed under powers.

It is also important to remember that the rule for powers is one primary power and at most two supporting powers. Kate could be misinterpreted as having more than the classic three powers the way she is written up, but basically she has two supporting powers to her primary. Primary is power switching supporting powers are flight (daytime only) and weaponry (type is day night dependent.)

My suggestion for Elias would be something like: primary power: dark-light manipulation--able to expand existing shadows to full darkness or existing light to blinding brightness with accompanying temperature changes to dangerous or even damaging degrees. supporting power: shadow travel--in deep shadows, Elias can access a pocket dimension which is cold, dark and unhealthy
for others to visit, but he can bring passengers. When he emerges it can be anywhere on earth where it is dark. It is difficult to target a specific area beyond line of sight and the time required to travel increases geometrically with distance from a split second within line of sight up to 90 minutes for 8000 miles (the diameter of earth). Supporting power: weaponized light/shadow--after 5 seconds to 5 minutes basking in concentrated light or shadow Elias can project a telekinetic blast of the opposite type. The strength of the blast is proportional to the time spent charging, varying from as little as a high powered rifle up to and including a low yield nuclear bomb.

To be clear, this is just a suggestion, I am not trying to rewrite the character or the powerset, just trying to paint a clearer picture of how better defined powerset might look. Overall, I should say, I like the concept. Contrasts and dynamic tension is cool and interesting. The trick is to define the boundaries, both for yourself and for the rest of the cast.

The last thing I will add is: be patient with the revisions process. Some of my characters took several months to approve. That's not typical necessarily, but the more complicated the concept the more working over it tends to take to smooth out the bumps. Elias is cool, but still bumpy.

Once again, welcome to the AEGIS family!

THANK YOU! You actually got a few points right about my future edit. I did plan for Elias to be able to teleport using the darkness, while also being able to make super heated beams of light. As for the D.I.D.? I'm re-writing it for it to be specifically a trait from his powers. And Welian told me about your character and mine's similarities. I'll work hard to smooth out the bumps, thanks for the critiquing.

 

[Lemon Boy]

Here is my Christmas gift to all you peasants. Please, bask in the brilliance of my pretty profile which I spent a solid twenty minutes painstakingly coding so it could have the prettiest purple possible.
Kinda want opinions on the Portal size because I can't visualise it or do math for shit. Too big? Too small?
Opinions on other stuff would of course be welcome as well.

Edit one: Energy stat boosted to 8
Portal Slide side-power removed.

Juárez, M.

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  Intelligence	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
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• Full Name
  Manuel Juárez
  
  Nicknames
  Manny, Mj
  
  Codename
  N/A
  
  Gender
  Male
  
  Age
  18
  
  Rank
  A
  
  Limiter
  Level 3; Active
  
  Role
  Student; Probationary
• Race
  Latin American
  
  Hair
  Blond
  [Dyed]
  
  Eyes
  Brown
  
  Height
  5'7Ft
  
  Figure
  Lean
  
  Notes
  Hands glows white when using his power or preparing to use it.
• Persistent
  A strong desire to do anything and everything without letting a soul stop him is one of the few admirable traits he has. No matter how tough an activity is, he'll put every fibre of his being into completing it just so he can get that satisfaction of being the winner and not the loser. The levels of patience and tenacity he possesses are often more than enough for him to complete any task he wants, no matter whatever or whoever is in the way. This persistent also extends to the rare few he actually befriends, as he'll often try to keep them at his side or be at their side at the most difficult of times. Manuel can be called many things, but he certainly can't be called a quitter.
  
  Sybaritic
  Manuel is very much a hedonist through and through. He's materialistic to a fault, often placing little value on the more spiritual, intellectual or culturally pleasures of life and instead focusing solely on the material value of whatever he can get his hands on. This hedonistic nature of his also makes him an extreme thrill seeker, having no caution or hesitance when it comes to doing something dangerous or new. Whilst this makes him quite willing to do and try out anything you can think of, this also has the disadvantage of him not really dedicating himself to anything at all but instead hopping from one new experience and pleasure to the next.
  
  Percipient
  Whilst he places little to no value when it comes to actual knowledge or learning from the book, Manuel's experience in doing just about anything allows him to have a basic understanding of just about any activity one can think of. He's practically guaranteed to have at least one shared interest with someone no matter how different they are to him and this makes him a good listener as it's a rare day indeed that someone has done something he has not. In addition, he does put a bit of thought into whatever he's jumping into and whilst it may not seem like it, he typically has a plan for whatever it is he is doing.
  
  Satirical
  Manuel is not the nicest of people and seems to be fond of verbal jabbing, whether the recipient appreciates it or not. This is made worse by the fact that he seems to have a particular inclination towards targeting the weaknesses, insecurities and failures of others, especially if they get on his nerves in any way. He's the type of person to take things a bit too far when someone pushes his boundaries too much and instead of a warning they'll get the verbal equivalent of a sucker punch straight to the face. Unless someone is especially socially keen or capable of putting up with his attitude, he's quick to alienate himself from everyone else.
  
  History
  Born and raised in Highlandtown by a single father, life was never going to be as fulfilling or as enjoyable as Manuel needed it to be so his adventurous and unrestrained spirit needed it to be to be satisfied. With a father who struggled to earn enough to stay above the poverty line even with two jobs, there was never enough money for him to buy things of luxury and nor was there time for him to indulge in the few things he could afford to do, often being made to spend his time trying to get good grades in school so he could get a good job in the future and have a proper life rather than the life he was living. When he did have free time outside of studying, it was spent in loneliness, mental exhaustion or more often than not, both.
  
  In need of money to spend on things that he'd actually enjoy and wanting to help out just a tad with the monetary situation at home, he started to get to know the more dubious kids at school and the shady figures in the neighbourhood. This led to him getting to know some even more dodgy people and before long, he found himself in a gang that offered a lot of cash so long as you kept quiet and did what you were told. The extra money that he could use to buy or do the things he wanted and that could be used to help out with paying the bills was enough to make him and his father happy, although, he was naturally quite suspicious of where all of this money was coming from all of a sudden. Despite that lingering suspicion, he didn't ask questions: so long as they could afford to keep the house and buy the occasional luxury instead of just the bare necessities, he didn't care too much. Beggars can't be choosers afterall.
  
  This involvement with the gang, however, was what led to his latent powers coming to light. He was put in a difficult situation with two choices and neither of them were good. It was bad enough that the stress was enough to make his powers manifest and with them, he got out. Not the greatest thing to do, given the circumstances, but he did it anyway and disassociated with the gang he used to be a part of. However, the lack of cash at his disposal now that he lacked an income was noticeable. Life went from being just bearable to a struggle once again.
  
  In the false belief that the experience he got in the gang was more than enough for him to operate solo, he tried doing his own things to earn money, petty crimes and the like, but news of a criminal with powers in a neighbourhood known for its violence and general instability was more than enough to cause concern for the law enforcement and blue cards. He was eventually caught in the act of one of his crimes by a police officer and a supporting hero, who managed to just barely apprehend him. The attitude he showed to the two of them and his overall resistance to his capture certainly did him no favours, but he managed to get off with only a light punishment: a warning, a curfew that he needed to abide to lest he wished incur further charges against himself which would involve in a criminal record, community service, registration as a super into the Commonwealth databases and enrolment in one of the many facilities dedicated to training supers. Not exactly the best thing to happen to him in a while, but far from the worst.
  
• Other Character's Name
  Description of relationship with said character
• Portal Shotgun
  Manuel is capable of firing off dozens of portals in a 'shotgun' style, sending them chaotically through the air. He is able to choose between making the portals 'stick' to an object upon making contact with it or make it intersect, allowing him to practically slice just about anything in half that is in his way no matter how durable it is; so long as it doesn't disturb his portals through space shenanigans, he can slice it. Of course, being portals, they can also be used in a more traditional manner by allowing travel through them: this isn't a good thing for people who aren't Manuel.
  
  
  • Destination Designation:He is capable of choosing which portals leads to which other portal. If he doesn't do this, the portal transports whoever goes through it to another portal of randomly, often the most inconvenient one possible for them.
  
  Limitations
  
  
  • Scattering: The manner in which he fires off his portal is fixed, with Manuel only capable of 'shotgunning' them. This means that precision isn't exactly something that exists with his power, often having to rely on luck or managing to get close to do what he really wants; be it slicing something in half or putting some portals where he needs to.
  • Range: The 'shotgun' nature of his portal blasts means that he's better suited to using it in an offensive manner in close quarters or up close. If you ain't within 50 meters of him you're practically safe from being sliced or having a portal open up beneath your feet. The total range of his portal blasts is 150 meters, with portals that go beyond this range simply stopping in their tracks immediately.
  • Telegraphed Manuel is the exact opposite of subtle not only in personality, but power too. Given the glow of his hands when preparing to fire off some portals, opponents often get a seconds warning before they're about to get barraged by portals. Catching people by surprise is something that Manuel doesn't excel at.
  • Size: The size and length of the portals is fixed and Manuel cannot change this no matter what. They are approximately 1.5 meters in length and width. Not long enough for someone of average height to fall through if laying on the fall, but watch out if you're walking.
  • Binary: Manuel gets the handy option of whether the portal blasts are either kid friendly, I.e 'sticking to objects that they make contact with' or the adult version, 'Intersect anything and everything in their way'. However, he cannot for instance, make half of his portals sticky and the other half intersecting. It's one or the other. Additionally, once fired, he cannot change this.
  • Concentration: In order to link two portals together and to actually chose which one he wants to pop out of after jumping in one, he needs a small level of concentration to do so. Failure to focus his mind often results in him just being randomly transported, occasionally harmless, occasionally dire.
  • Speed: The blasts aren't slow, but they aren't exactly quick either. Think someone with a good throwing arm tossing a tennis ball with all their might. Dodge-able, but not so dodge-able if you're incapable of being aware of your surroundings or just ill prepared.
• Jack of Trades: Given his life trying to do just about anything to cure the constant boredom, he's learned how to do a lot of things with a intermediate level of skill; not too little to be called inexperienced but certainly not enough skill in anything to be called a master. From picking locks, carving, drawing, photography, playing an instrument, any sport you can name and potentially making slightly illegal substances, he knows it all, but he's no expert. You can always rely on him to do a firmly 'ok' job at anything if you give him something to do. Don't expect it to be quick, but do expect it to be done.
  
  Dealing with It: Manuel isn't exactly one to complain or start to give up when something is hard, just the exact opposite, he might try harder because it's a bit more fun to push back against whatever is holding you down. This applies to just about every aspect of him. Whilst people aren't very skilled at tolerating him, he's more than able to tolerate those like him with a fair amount of ease and not lose his patience. This ability of his to still keep going is doubled if he likes whatever he is doing with attempts just making it worse for whoever is trying to do so. The more he's pushed the harder he pushes back.
  
  Social Ignorance: He's terrible when it comes to interacting with people. Actions may speak louder than words, but it's hard to not hate the guy who mocks you at every mistake or rubs salt in the wound with verbal venom. It certainly doesn't help that he clearly puts no effort in to try being hospitable or have manners. The type of person who 'says what he wants when he wants'. To make matters worse, he never really stops, even when told or asked. He might stop for a while, but that's a short while and he's quick to go back to his old social habits the second he can, quickly forgetting any lesson in manners or pleasantry. He just doesn't understand why people care so much and why he should stop.
  
  Master of None: Manuel has done many things to appease his need to be entertained, but he often finds himself quickly stopping whatever activity he can do the second it grows boring; everything grows boring. He can never find the dedication to really get good at anything and this lack of dedication seems to extend to just about everything else aside from the few friends he has. Whilst another person won't do well in an attempt at stopping him from doing something, the lack of novelty is often more than enough to stop him eventually. He'll do everything in his power to get a taste of something but once he gets that taste, he no longer wants it.
  

 

[Gus]

Lemon Boy Looks pretty solid!

Stats look good. Bio is believable and interesting. Might change some of the personality keywords? Satirical, while it can mean what you describe is very rarely used as description of a person, but rather for a piece of writing. That all of our characters are by definition pieces of writing is a little too meta; I would go with sarcastic, acerbic, or (my favorite: hurtful)

Sybaritic: kudos for making me google a new word. The downside of that being that the point of the one word description, as I understand it, is to communicate character traits at a glance. Maybe Hedonistic, Debauched, or Libertine?

Percipient I also had to google, but I don't think it fits what you describe. Not sure what word you want for that though. Experienced? Seasoned? Worldly beyond his years? Dunno. Percipient means perceptive though which is not what you describe.

Relationships: need some, even if just the dad. I have a criminal file I thought I previously posted but can't find in old threads. Will add that if you'd like 'car thief' in your list of former associates.

Skills and flaws looks great! I love the symmetry of their contrasts.

Powers I like very much, though I have a few points I am unclear about, as I mentioned in discord, and I have a few more concerns that popped up as I have been mulling it over this afternoon.

First, I don't quite understand how they can be both fixed at 1.5 meters in diameter and also scatter like a shotgun.
Do they overlap, or do they spread out over a massive area?
Do they start small and then expand to 1.5 meters, or do they combine to a single 1.5 meter disc?


Where do they teleport material to if he fires off just one blast?
How many can he have open at one time?
Can they cut through force fields and the like, or only solid matter?
What happens when they encounter something they can't cut through?

Given that they can cut through virtually anything, they seem like a highly lethal attack, maybe make them slower to avoid Insta-kill scenarios? If they are slow enough that basically anyone can dodge, then they become more useful as indirect attacks, collapsing walls ceilings and floors to discourage pursuit, as well as making escape through them directly. Being able to just cheese grate anybody within a football field's radius into chunky salsa, even with brief forewarning and limited accuracy seems... dangerous?

I would suggest maybe something like:

Portal bubble blast: shoots a swarm of tiny 'bubble portals' which will randomly teleport any material that passes through a bubble to another bubble in the swarm, effectively carving out a small chunk of any physical obstacle and dropping it anywhere from a few inches to several feet away. As the swarm moves in the general direction it was pointed, the bubbles expand and merge together with sharp popping noises accompanied by bright flashes of white light mixed with a light dose of x-rays. The larger bubbles carve out bigger chunks of anything they pass through, again randomly distributing the matter that passed through to other bubbles. Within 30 to 40 feet they combine to form a single portal about 4 feet in diameter. This will connect randomly to any previously formed portal, usually the most inconvenient one, unless Manuel concentrates to choose the destination. He can hold up to five fully formed portals open at one time before he must close one to initiate another blast.

I would suggest downgrading the speed of them to a brisk walk? That combined with curtailed range reduces the possibility of bringing down whole buildings without meaning to do so, as well as avoiding forcing people to choose between realistic results of being attacked by portals (dying horribly) and writing outrageous coincidences to explain why they didn't choose the first option.

If I have utterly misinterpreted what you were trying to do here, please feel free to disregard the above two paragraphs. That is the best I could come up with after reading the portal cut entry on TV tropes pretty thoroughly and taking the afternoon to think about it.

Looking forward to having one of your characters back in the RP!

Welcome back.

 

[Gus]

Prior, M

• Stats
• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Skills and Flaws
• Gallery

• Heroism Meter
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Courage	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱	07
  Altruism	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Order	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Kindness	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Proaction	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Diplomacy	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	03
  Composure	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08

  
  

  Ability Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Health	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Strength	▰▰▱▱	02
  Defense	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Agility	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Intelligence	▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	04
  Willpower	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Energy	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02

  
  
• Full Name
  Miles Adam Prior
  
  Nicknames
  N/A
  
  Codename
  Joyride
  
  Gender
  Male
  
  Age
  17
  
  Rank
  C Rank
  
  Limiter
  None
  
  Role
  Criminal
  
  
• 
  Heritage
  American (Dutch descent)
  
  Hair
  Black
  
  Eyes
  Brown
  
  Height
  5' 9”
  
  Figure
  Average build
  
  Notes
  
  
• 
  Fun-loving
 Miles favorite thing is cruising down the road blasting music in something with a high horsepower to weight ratio. His second favorite thing is buzzing the road blasting music in a small plane. He hasn't tried it yet with a large plane.
  
  Compulsive When not at the controls of his latest ride, Miles needs things to be just so. He can't go out if its raining. He has to walk on the left side of the street. On a sidewalk. If he steps on a crack he has to go back and start again. If he listens to music, he can step on cracks, but only if the rhythm of the dance step requires it. He can't listen to music and not dance. Only when he is in a vehicle, can he relax and go with the flow.
  
  Taciturn People aren't generally worth talking to. Only Alexa can get more than two words out of him at a time.
  
  Improvisational Morality
 Having spent the last nine years—more than half his life—working with criminal gangs, Miles has morals that are beyond merely flexible. They are more or less entirely negotiable. It is not that he has no moral compass so much as that the compass points wherever he wants to go. It usually points to survival, freedom, and fun, in that order. He has no respect for property in general, and vehicles in particular he sees as being enslaved and free to go with him if they choose. He is not above hurting people, but doesn't enjoy it and won't go out of his way for it unless they give him reason to seek vengeance.
  
  History
  Miles powers manifested early, at the age of eight. What started out as a happy upgrade from playing with matchbox cars quickly turned serious when he lead state police on a long distance multiple vehicle chase which resulted in several deaths when an officer lost control of his vehicle trying to match Miles' incredible maneuvers on the highway. After that, afraid to go home to his family, he fell in with a bad crowd, boosting cars for parts, and driving getaway for bank robberies. When he was 16, he met Alexa, fell in love, drove away with zer and never looked back. That he drove away in the middle of a job is a point of contention with his former employers.
  
  
• 
  
  Alexa DelRay
  Alexa and Miles are taking a break right now, and not by his choice. Ze wants a blue card for reasons he cannot understand. He dropped zer off at facility 109 and has been keeping his distance for almost 6 months now while ze trains. He hopes against hope that they can pick up where they left off after the finals are over.
  
  Bradley Padmore Alexa has been staying at his house since joining 109. Miles is crazy jealous but does a good job of hiding it.
  
  Stephen Nemo A fence for stolen cars. Miles likes dealing him because he finds good homes for them.
  
  
• 
  Vehicular Tele-empathic connection
  Any non-sentient vehicle within ten feet of Miles responds to him as if it were sentient and desired to please him like a smart, well trained dog. They will start if they are able, and unlock for him if locked. Sentient vehicles can communicate with him telepathically, even if they do not normally interface in that way. They are not subject to his control, though they are usually well disposed towards him.
  
  • Vehicular Proprioception: Merely by touching the controls of any vehicle, Miles' brain can receive and interpret the totality of the physical inputs and outputs of the machine as if it were an extension of his own body. This allows him to move the vehicle with almost supernatural grace and fluidity limited only by the laws of physics.
    
    
  • Intuitive vehicular physics: By 'feeling' what his chosen ride feels, Miles can push engines to their limits, and make the best possible use of any physical interaction with the environment, avoiding obstacles or making maneuvers that would be all but impossible for the most highly trained drivers or pilots.
  Limitations
  
  • Empathy means feeling the pain too: When a vehicle Miles is connected to is hurt, he feels it. If the shocks take a bad hit, he gets a charlie horse. If it gets riddled with bullets, he is racked with pain, and can bruise or even bleed. He takes good care of vehicles he drives, not only as a matter of personal morals, but out of self preservation
    
    
  • Serial Monogamy: Miles can bond with anything that moves when commanded to do so, but only one at a time.
    
    
  • Misanthropy: Miles has spent a lot of time bonding with cars that were not well taken care of. Feeling all their aches and pains and tiny little grievances, he has come to a point where he has trouble not feeling utter disdain for 'masters' in general, and those who take their rides for granted in particular
    
    
  • Out of gas: Another aspect of Miles' empathy is a need to eat and rest after a long session. Even if the fuel is topped up, staying connected takes it out of him. He can't keep it up for more than eight hours at a stretch and need about twice that long a nap to recover, plus several heavy meals.
    
    
  • Oh the poor thing!: As with druids who have animal companions, sometimes you direct them, sometimes they direct you. While almost any vehicle will perform almost any miraculous stunt for him, Miles, for his part will not stand by while his friends are abused. When they cry out for aid, he will drop what he is doing, and help them.
  
  
• 
  
  Skills
  
  • Car-fu Fightin: Miles' mastery over vehicular motion allowed him to develop an entirely unique martial art
    
    
  • Mechanic: While his power doesn't directly help with fixing cars, it did motivate him to get really really good at it.
  
  
  Flaws
  
  • Cold Fish: Miles leaves a lot of people with the impression that he could care less if they live or die as long as they don't bother him. They're not wrong
    
    
  • Acquisitive: Some cars just need to be driven. Like, right now. Eventually the fever will break and he'll be back on task, but sometimes “I'll be back in a while” just doesn't cut it. Like in the middle of a bank job for instance.
  
  
• Theme song:

 

[Lemon Boy]

Gus Firstly thank you for fixing the giant gap between stuff, would've made it painful to read otherwise. Now, onto the actual character review!
That ain't no Blondie in the fc. Mucho suspicious about that hair being blond.
Pretty interesting personality and history, I don't see many issues. Intriguing without being a giant snowflake of a character.
Cool powers that aren't op or overdone either without being totally useless or weird. Nice.
Fair standard skills that mesh make sense with who he is as a person. Also doesn't have 9000 skills and only two negatives, two skills and flaws, which is a good point in my book.

Cool character, doesn't seem too out of whack, interesting without being token weird or op. Skills that mesh well, personality that makes them capable of being interacted with but not a generic Steve #01.
Acceptable to me.

Outside of review of your character, appreciate the feedback on my character.
Truth be told I just used the fancy words because they were all roughly the same length and matched so it made the personality section look neater. See about finding replacements at a later date.
Relationships shall be added soon, got kinda lazy at that point truth be told. Also wouldn't mind having your Car Whisperer and Manuel be associates of some kind.

I like the Bubble portal idea, easier to visualise and well, it'll look prettier. I'll see about implementing some of your suggestions on those.
I'll see about downgrading the speed given the destructive capabilities and lethality of the power.
Not so sure, solid matter maybe? Haven't really thought about it given force-fields aren't exactly an everyday thing.
No exact limit on how many portals he can have open at a time.

 

[The Mechanist]

Cortez, R

• Stats
• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpower
• Skills and Flaws
• Tools & Weapons

• Heroism Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Courage	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08
  Altruism	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱	07
  Order	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Kindness	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Proaction	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰	09
  Diplomacy	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Composure	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08

  Ability Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Health	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Strength	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Defense	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Agility	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Intelligence	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Willpower	▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱	04
  Energy	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05

• Full Name
  Renellius Cortez
  
  Nicknames
  Nate
  
  Codename
  N/A
  
  Gender
  Male
  
  Age
  19
  
  Rank
  B Rank
  
  Limiter
  Active, Level 2
  
  Role
  Student
• Race
  Hispanic
  
  Hair
  Black
  
  Eyes
  Dark Blue
  
  Height
  5' 9''
  
  Figure
  Skinny, 143.9 lbs
  
  Notes
  Always wears cargo pants, doesn't matter if it's a solid color or camouflage, and has a red bandanna either on his arm or neck.
• Thoughtful
  Renellius is empathetic, generous, and kind, doing his best to offers those who need a hand to hold, a shoulder to cry on and is extremely mindful of others' feelings and needs. If a person is clearly in need of whatever they requested, Renellius wouldn't take too long to grant it and wouldn't care about the amount of money/effort spent to accomplish the task, as long as it is within his power to do so.
  
  Responsive
  As a general problem solver and quick thinker, Renellius has the tendency to be the first to respond. He's quick on the draw and capable of coming up with solutions for things in an impressive short time. Just give him a call and there he goes! At the same time, he's a really good listener, will take others' suggestions nicely and change his trail of thought accordingly when he needs to.
  
  Rash
  To those who have earned his ire, Renellius can be really aggressive and go as far as pushing his moral code aside to teach the person a good lesson. If he has been seriously hurt or offended, he might deem the perpetrators unworthy of his mercy and get carried away when responding to the aggression. This is mostly verbal, but could also range to violence depending on the offense taken.
  
  'Pathological' Altruism
  His struggles at life have given Renellius a burning desire to shield others from the suffering he has been through and provide them whatever they need to be happy. This dedication to such a 'cause' sometimes goes over his head, making him forget or overshadow his own needs and desires in the process. He gets so worked up about helping everyone else that he ends up with little to no time to himself. When in a fight, this trait manifests itself via a tendency to throw himself in the front and serve as a human shield to others.
  
  
  History
  Sent from Mexico to South Texas by his poor family, Renellius Cortez went to live with his uncle, Manuel, when he was 10 years old so that he could have better conditions and a proper education. There, he went to school normally, but also learned all about his uncle's profession, mechanic, eventually helping around the shop and fixing things himself.
  Manuel Cortez noticed that his nephew had an unusual aptitude for the job: he would understand instructions really well, constantly accomplish new tasks successfully on the first try and even guess which tools to use where just by looking at them for a while. It was truly exceptional for such a young age, a talent that should not go to waste. He proceed to encourage the young man to indulge in the area.
  
  At age 14, Renellius got accepted into a Technology Institute in Baltimore, the many of multiple schools he had applied for and the most promising looking one from the few he had indeed passed. Having been offered quite the generous cut from the monthly fee and a place to stay in campus, he took it as the door to a possible life change and moved on.
  There he had two blocks of classes, one that had electrical engineering as their focus, specific classes, and another that was mandatory to all students composed of Math, Reading, Science and Social Studies, called 'core' classes. Life was great and despite a few gaps here an there due to his simple upbringing Renellius managed to adapt his own rhythm to the school's, that is, until something very unexpected happened.
  
  It was a really important practical assignment and though he was sure that he had read the books required at least twenty times, he was drawing a blank about what exactly the words had been. The silence of the white classroom was mortifying, the tic-tac of the clock on the wall only served to make him even more nervous! The young man went over the instructions again in his mind, one, two, ten times, he was sure there was one bit he was remembering wrong, but what was it?
  A student yelled in the background, breaking his concentration and then, he realized a huge mess of components over his desk... He could swear half of these weren't there before! How had components from all over the class ended up on top of his table??
  
  Some of his colleagues had an idea of what was going on, the teacher certainly did, calling the authorities right away. A really confused Renellius was then took to the commonwealth building, shown a recording of pieces of circuits 'floating' to his table, even assembling themselves together, and had a long, long explanation about supers given to him. Once he was less confused, he proceeded to get tested, ranked and assigned to AEGIS. And that was it, one single day, it had been all it took to throw his life into disarray...
  Now, a year later, Renellius has warmed up to idea of being a superhero someday. Inspired by the many classes at 108 and his own progress with his power, he's striving for a blue card and making a living as a vigilante. Renellius' ultimate goal is to drag his family out of poverty and perhaps, he'd accomplish to do so easier as a vigilante than as an electrical engineer. Only time will say.
• Manuel Cortez
  Renellius' Uncle who is a mechanic and has a shop. Noticed
• Technopathy
  A sub-type of Telekinesis. It is the ability to manipulate and/or tamper with technology with merely one's mind. Renellius Cortez is capable of assembling, disassembling and even doing more precise tasks (exchanging parts) to machines and devices simply by concentrating on a task he wishes to accomplish and willing them to happen. The components and parts nearby will then proceed to stick together in the desired positions, resulting in the creation a device or machine. These can also be released from each other just as easily.
  For objects to be affected this way, they need to be a piece of technology, meaning they must be associated with appliances, devices, machines and mechanical inventions, without a criteria on how complex they can be. For an example, his ability can still work perfectly with nails and screws because despite not being a lot by themselves, they're able to be used as a part of a bigger whole, as long as that end result does indeed fit the definition of technology.
  
  
  • Faint Electromagnetism Manipulation: The connection between the components of his own created machines are done by magnetic adherence. When he wills certain parts together, they're polarized in a way that the sides that are supposed to stick to each other receive opposite charges, thus making them 'glue' to each other. This process repeated to every connection of a creation and are strong enough that the structure can maintain itself without being joined by any screws and cables if he so desire them to be. It allows room for some very unique and rather unusual designs to be brought to life.
    His control over electromagnetism however doesn't end in the macro scale, but also pertains the micro world. Renellius is capable of manipulating even the charges of atomic particles of all metals, polarizing and magnetizing them as described above even if the object does not classify as technology. It is however, weak by itself, meaning that he could use it to 'glue', for example, two coins to each other making them magnetic and they would remain like so until their charges are neutralized again, but not much more beyond that.
  • Mechanical Constructs: Renellius power allows him to create all sorts of constructs, as long as the materials are present, but when the desire is to make a robot, things change a little bit. Every robot must be given a purpose upon it's creation. These can range for very specific orders such as a chain of commands, something as vague as 'protect me' or even something simple and silly such as 'sit there and look cute'. Upon complexion of the first task the construct remains inert until it is given a new purpose. A task can be change before it's complexion, but there's a slight delay before it moves again, due to the removal of the older order and the input of a new one.
    Renellius and all of his robot creations are connected by a mental link, allowing order to be relayed by thought as long as the constructs are in range. Out of range, a robot will instantly stop moving, having fulfilled its purpose or not. Potentially, Renellius can also grant his constructs an A.I., making them fully autonomous, able to make their own decisions even if still subordinated to him. This last ability is, however, not something he can do at will at the moment.
  
  Limitations
  
  • You May Only Be this Tall: As long as they're in range and there is enough material in the ambient, there may as many constructs, and they may be as tiny, as possible. There is, however, one extra limitation size limitation: no single construct can be taller than 11' 8''.
  • Remain Close: Renellius' robot creations can be separated in three categories due to their size: Small, Medium, and Large. Small and Medium constructs can move in a radial distance of a max of 50ft away from him, at least if they're a size lower than 8 ft. Go beyond that and the range will become shorter and shorter as the size grows, until you reach mounting-only territory at 11 ft. Constructs that size may only move for as long as Renellius is riding on top of it, like a war mount.
  • Getting packed: The "as long as there is material to work with and it's in range" rule doesn't apply to a situation where a large robot construct is active. It takes a big toll on Renellius' mental network to the point that he is unable to keep all of the mental links 'up and running' while riding it. Thus, he may only keep 4 small robots or a medium one plus 2 small ones or 2 medium sized ones active, along with the large one. Any other robots in the area will go inactive even if they're still in range. Using the large construct makes Renellius incredibly fatigued afterwards. As a consequence, as soon as the large construct is disassembled he needs to rest and is unable to use his power again until he does so.
  • Interference: Since his ability depends on mental links, the mental attacks of a telepathic super can create severe interference and hinder Renellius power useless for as long as the interference is in effect. Other electromagnetic supers and anything else that can possibly tamper with the magnetic connections is also a bother.
    On a similar way, the presence of barriers between him and his robot constructs makes the exchange of orders take a lot more of effort, wearing him tired a lot faster. It is better to just remain in the same room as the constructs through all times.
  • Shut down: If Renellius' mental network is completely blocked, he stops focusing into it at all, is knocked out or he gets so tired that he ends up passing out, the whole 'system' goes into 'shut down'. His power quits working, prompting all constructs that were being held together by the electromagnetic connections to instantly crumble and collapse back into merely its individual parts, robots and not-robots alike.
• Skills
  
  
  • Cooking: When you're the member of a poor family, cooking becomes a very important skill to guarantee survival. As such, Renellius has been taught and harboring this skill from a very young age, to the point that, if he so desired, he could work as a chef and probably be successful in the field.
  • Patience: Due to his struggles in life, Renellius has learned that panicking when results take time to come doesn't help. In fact, by panicking, one could easy make a terrible decision and throw the good thing that was yet to arrive out of the window. As such, he has learned to wait for people to act at their own pace and things to get better. It's extremely hard to get in the nerves of this guy, as he's able to put up with even the most annoying of types.
    Patience is also a big key of his power since the constructs take a while to get ready, even if they're technically building themselves. If he couldn't keep his attention on them during the time needed, he'd never get anything built.
  • Focus: Renellius knows the importance of concentrating fully in the task at hand. When given something to do he's capable of perfectly sticking with it until it's done, despite of the amount of distracting elements there could be in the background.
    To best use his power, Renellius has trained this skill so that he's able to tune out the outside world when using it, but also return his attention to the environment in a heartbeat just in case he needs to be aware of something. It's almost as if he has a 'focus switch' designed to quickly change tasks.
  • Creativity: Renellius has always been one to think out of the box. When there's a problem to be solved and everyone else seems to be stuck with that one tiny detail that's missing, he's usually the one to point it out or either come up with a completely different thing all together, which might just be what they needed.
    This tendency to a different point of view when allied to the knowledge of engineering and tools he has acquired from both watching his uncle work, and the course on technology he has attended to, would have already made Renellius reliable, pair that with his power then and you get a force to be reckoned with. He's capable of vividly picturing piece by piece of anything he'd like to build, as well as imagine how devices he has never seen before are built, just by hearing about what they do and what components they have.
  
  
  Flaws
  
  
  • Overthinking: There's always a change that when Renellius needs to make a very important decision, he'll start going over all of the options, again and again, accounting for a number of extra things that wouldn't actually influence the decision at all... In the end he might make something extremely simple into a castle of pros and cons needlessly.
    This flaw also comes up when Renellius is dealing with someone he considers authority in a given situation. Afraid to give the impression of being a fool to said person, he might trip over his trail of thought and assign interpretations to the other' words that weren't there in the beginning, possibly causing all sorts of misunderstandings in the process.
  • Penny-pincher: Coming from a struggling and needy family, Renellius has grown into the kind of person that saves money whenever it is possible. Meanwhile his altruistic tendencies will make him give urgency to other's people's needs before his own, desiring they don't go through need the same way he has in life, he will still categorize the things asked into 'wants' or 'needs' in case he's approached for money, meaning it is not always given that he will comply with the request. Renellius will not put his health at risk by buying only from the cheapest brands in existence, but at the same time will always go for a middle ground between quality and price when affording the things he needs.
  • Terrible Liar: When telling a lie, Renellius will get nervous, lose his trail of thought and stammer a lot while trying to say whatever he was supposed to. It would take a huge amount of effort, practice and rehearsal before he's able to deceive anyone.
  • Distrust: Renellius is very distrusting of strangers. Not used to having people approach him first, specially if they're notably on a different economical standing than himself, he'll grow suspicious, wondering what their reasons to approach are and if they're just interacting because there's some self-gain in play (maybe they want something). It takes him a while to warm up to new people.
• Renellius always brings with him a grey, rectangular tool box, which contains an array of different tools in case he wants to tinker with something in the old-fashion way or his powers just aren't enough for the task. Anything with a handle has it in a red shade, for some consistency:
  
  Hammer: [Tool] Just a normal, 8 inches long, claw hammer. Both head and handle are made of steel and its end is covered by an anti-slip rubber to make one's grip of it even more stable. It's good for when you need to, well, hammer things into place and also remove nails.
  
  Screwdriver: [Tool] A 10 inches long screwdriver with interchangeable bits, that are stored inside its handle. The handle slides out presenting all of the neatly organized different bits inside, held in place by little plastic 'clamps', then slides back in for use, merely give it a twist to lock everything into place. Untwist it to open and change bits again.
  
  Pack of Wrenches: [Tools] Actually has its own, similarly colored box and thus is stored away from all the other tools. Its filled with every type of combination and socket wrenches one could ever need. Extremely useful.
  
  Pliers: [Tool] Is 9 inches long and as every other pliers has a insulated grip to avoid the user getting electrocuted while using it. Has a lifetime warranty and is rust resistant. Really strong and multi-use tool.
  
  Wire Cutters: [Tool] Also called diagonal pliers or cutting pliers. Is 8 inches long and has the same properties as the pliers. In fact, they were bought together and might even be of the very same brand. Obviously has less uses than its not diagonal cousin.

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[The Mechanist]

thank you Necessity4Fun for her wonderful assistance with this

 

[Necessity4Fun]

thank you Necessity4Fun for her wonderful assistance with this

You're welcome OWO7
Yep folks, if you read the CS above and think about me it's because I wrote it. It ended up being a kind of a collab where I made a thousand questions to The Mechanist, then wrote something with what he told me, sent it back to him for his approval and vice versa!
It's been a long week ^^'

A little Note: We did the stats before anything else and did not revisit those after the power had been written down, so it might need some tweaks. I didn't want to be the one to push them tho because it felt like I was already pitching too much on a character that was not mine >w<

Also, I'm guessing he uses Dark Theme which is why the text that was in the default color went grey, which is weird (I think we found a bug!)
So sorry about that Light Theme people like myself... maybe welian can fix it (I don't have mod powers in here!)

 

[Lemon Boy]

Necessity4Fun The Mechanist
Character seems pretty good to me imo. Superpower section could use some slicing here and there to make it more concise but other than that seems fairly solid in terms of character profiles and all that.

If you want to make it Light theme friendly, you can enter the bbcode bit and you should see the #hexcolor thing. If you remove that, the text should revert to the standard text.

 

[Necessity4Fun]

Necessity4Fun The Mechanist
Character seems pretty good to me imo. Superpower section could use some slicing here and there to make it more concise but other than that seems fairly solid in terms of character profiles and all that.

If you want to make it Light theme friendly, you can enter the bbcode bit and you should see the #hexcolor thing. If you remove that, the text should revert to the standard text.

I admit concise is not my thing, I could use some help with that ^^'

He doesn't mess with code, at all. And it's probably a pain from his phone anyway. I would edit it myself if I could...
It was a really weird thing to happen since the code had no color settings other than the red on the stats, so IDK what happened. This used to be a thing with IPS (it would copy even background colors for no reason) I had no idea it could happen again : /

 

[The Fuzzy Pixel]

The Mechanist
I gotchu. Unaltered font color that's compatible with both the light and dark themes. Should be able to just cut out the profile code from a quote of this post.

Cortez, R

• Stats
• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpower
• Skills and Flaws
• Tools & Weapons

• Heroism Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Courage	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08
  Altruism	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱	07
  Order	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Kindness	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Proaction	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰	09
  Diplomacy	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Composure	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08

  Ability Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Health	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Strength	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Defense	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Agility	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Intelligence	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Willpower	▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱	04
  Energy	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05

• Full Name
  Renellius Cortez
  
  Nicknames
  Nate
  
  Codename
  N/A
  
  Gender
  Male
  
  Age
  19
  
  Rank
  B Rank
  
  Limiter
  Active, Level 2
  
  Role
  Student
• Race
  Hispanic
  
  Hair
  Black
  
  Eyes
  Dark Blue
  
  Height
  5' 9''
  
  Figure
  Skinny, 143.9 lbs
  
  Notes
  Always wears cargo pants, doesn't matter if it's a solid color or camouflage, and has a red bandanna either on his arm or neck.
• Thoughtful
  Renellius is empathetic, generous, and kind, doing his best to offers those who need a hand to hold, a shoulder to cry on and is extremely mindful of others' feelings and needs. If a person is clearly in need of whatever they requested, Renellius wouldn't take too long to grant it and wouldn't care about the amount of money/effort spent to accomplish the task, as long as it is within his power to do so.
  
  Responsive
  As a general problem solver and quick thinker, Renellius has the tendency to be the first to respond. He's quick on the draw and capable of coming up with solutions for things in an impressive short time. Just give him a call and there he goes! At the same time, he's a really good listener, will take others' suggestions nicely and change his trail of thought accordingly when he needs to.
  
  Rash
  To those who have earned his ire, Renellius can be really aggressive and go as far as pushing his moral code aside to teach the person a good lesson. If he has been seriously hurt or offended, he might deem the perpetrators unworthy of his mercy and get carried away when responding to the aggression. This is mostly verbal, but could also range to violence depending on the offense taken.
  
  'Pathological' Altruism
  His struggles at life have given Renellius a burning desire to shield others from the suffering he has been through and provide them whatever they need to be happy. This dedication to such a 'cause' sometimes goes over his head, making him forget or overshadow his own needs and desires in the process. He gets so worked up about helping everyone else that he ends up with little to no time to himself. When in a fight, this trait manifests itself via a tendency to throw himself in the front and serve as a human shield to others.
  
  
  History
  Sent from Mexico to South Texas by his poor family, Renellius Cortez went to live with his uncle, Manuel, when he was 10 years old so that he could have better conditions and a proper education. There, he went to school normally, but also learned all about his uncle's profession, mechanic, eventually helping around the shop and fixing things himself.
  Manuel Cortez noticed that his nephew had an unusual aptitude for the job: he would understand instructions really well, constantly accomplish new tasks successfully on the first try and even guess which tools to use where just by looking at them for a while. It was truly exceptional for such a young age, a talent that should not go to waste. He proceed to encourage the young man to indulge in the area.
  
  At age 14, Renellius got accepted into a Technology Institute in Baltimore, the many of multiple schools he had applied for and the most promising looking one from the few he had indeed passed. Having been offered quite the generous cut from the monthly fee and a place to stay in campus, he took it as the door to a possible life change and moved on.
  There he had two blocks of classes, one that had electrical engineering as their focus, specific classes, and another that was mandatory to all students composed of Math, Reading, Science and Social Studies, called 'core' classes. Life was great and despite a few gaps here an there due to his simple upbringing Renellius managed to adapt his own rhythm to the school's, that is, until something very unexpected happened.
  
  It was a really important practical assignment and though he was sure that he had read the books required at least twenty times, he was drawing a blank about what exactly the words had been. The silence of the white classroom was mortifying, the tic-tac of the clock on the wall only served to make him even more nervous! The young man went over the instructions again in his mind, one, two, ten times, he was sure there was one bit he was remembering wrong, but what was it?
  A student yelled in the background, breaking his concentration and then, he realized a huge mess of components over his desk... He could swear half of these weren't there before! How had components from all over the class ended up on top of his table??
  
  Some of his colleagues had an idea of what was going on, the teacher certainly did, calling the authorities right away. A really confused Renellius was then took to the commonwealth building, shown a recording of pieces of circuits 'floating' to his table, even assembling themselves together, and had a long, long explanation about supers given to him. Once he was less confused, he proceeded to get tested, ranked and assigned to AEGIS. And that was it, one single day, it had been all it took to throw his life into disarray...
  Now, a year later, Renellius has warmed up to idea of being a superhero someday. Inspired by the many classes at 108 and his own progress with his power, he's striving for a blue card and making a living as a vigilante. Renellius' ultimate goal is to drag his family out of poverty and perhaps, he'd accomplish to do so easier as a vigilante than as an electrical engineer. Only time will say.
• Manuel Cortez
  Renellius' Uncle who is a mechanic and has a shop. Noticed
• Technopathy
  A sub-type of Telekinesis. It is the ability to manipulate and/or tamper with technology with merely one's mind. Renellius Cortez is capable of assembling, disassembling and even doing more precise tasks (exchanging parts) to machines and devices simply by concentrating on a task he wishes to accomplish and willing them to happen. The components and parts nearby will then proceed to stick together in the desired positions, resulting in the creation a device or machine. These can also be released from each other just as easily.
  For objects to be affected this way, they need to be a piece of technology, meaning they must be associated with appliances, devices, machines and mechanical inventions, without a criteria on how complex they can be. For an example, his ability can still work perfectly with nails and screws because despite not being a lot by themselves, they're able to be used as a part of a bigger whole, as long as that end result does indeed fit the definition of technology.
  
  
  • Faint Electromagnetism Manipulation: The connection between the components of his own created machines are done by magnetic adherence. When he wills certain parts together, they're polarized in a way that the sides that are supposed to stick to each other receive opposite charges, thus making them 'glue' to each other. This process repeated to every connection of a creation and are strong enough that the structure can maintain itself without being joined by any screws and cables if he so desire them to be. It allows room for some very unique and rather unusual designs to be brought to life.
    His control over electromagnetism however doesn't end in the macro scale, but also pertains the micro world. Renellius is capable of manipulating even the charges of atomic particles of all metals, polarizing and magnetizing them as described above even if the object does not classify as technology. It is however, weak by itself, meaning that he could use it to 'glue', for example, two coins to each other making them magnetic and they would remain like so until their charges are neutralized again, but not much more beyond that.
  • Mechanical Constructs: Renellius power allows him to create all sorts of constructs, as long as the materials are present, but when the desire is to make a robot, things change a little bit. Every robot must be given a purpose upon it's creation. These can range for very specific orders such as a chain of commands, something as vague as 'protect me' or even something simple and silly such as 'sit there and look cute'. Upon complexion of the first task the construct remains inert until it is given a new purpose. A task can be change before it's complexion, but there's a slight delay before it moves again, due to the removal of the older order and the input of a new one.
    Renellius and all of his robot creations are connected by a mental link, allowing order to be relayed by thought as long as the constructs are in range. Out of range, a robot will instantly stop moving, having fulfilled its purpose or not. Potentially, Renellius can also grant his constructs an A.I., making them fully autonomous, able to make their own decisions even if still subordinated to him. This last ability is, however, not something he can do at will at the moment.
  
  Limitations
  
  • You May Only Be this Tall: As long as they're in range and there is enough material in the ambient, there may as many constructs, and they may be as tiny, as possible. There is, however, one extra limitation size limitation: no single construct can be taller than 11' 8''.
  • Remain Close: Renellius' robot creations can be separated in three categories due to their size: Small, Medium, and Large. Small and Medium constructs can move in a radial distance of a max of 50ft away from him, at least if they're a size lower than 8 ft. Go beyond that and the range will become shorter and shorter as the size grows, until you reach mounting-only territory at 11 ft. Constructs that size may only move for as long as Renellius is riding on top of it, like a war mount.
  • Getting packed: The "as long as there is material to work with and it's in range" rule doesn't apply to a situation where a large robot construct is active. It takes a big toll on Renellius' mental network to the point that he is unable to keep all of the mental links 'up and running' while riding it. Thus, he may only keep 4 small robots or a medium one plus 2 small ones or 2 medium sized ones active, along with the large one. Any other robots in the area will go inactive even if they're still in range. Using the large construct makes Renellius incredibly fatigued afterwards. As a consequence, as soon as the large construct is disassembled he needs to rest and is unable to use his power again until he does so.
  • Interference: Since his ability depends on mental links, the mental attacks of a telepathic super can create severe interference and hinder Renellius power useless for as long as the interference is in effect. Other electromagnetic supers and anything else that can possibly tamper with the magnetic connections is also a bother.
    On a similar way, the presence of barriers between him and his robot constructs makes the exchange of orders take a lot more of effort, wearing him tired a lot faster. It is better to just remain in the same room as the constructs through all times.
  • Shut down: If Renellius' mental network is completely blocked, he stops focusing into it at all, is knocked out or he gets so tired that he ends up passing out, the whole 'system' goes into 'shut down'. His power quits working, prompting all constructs that were being held together by the electromagnetic connections to instantly crumble and collapse back into merely its individual parts, robots and not-robots alike.
• Skills
  
  
  • Cooking: When you're the member of a poor family, cooking becomes a very important skill to guarantee survival. As such, Renellius has been taught and harboring this skill from a very young age, to the point that, if he so desired, he could work as a chef and probably be successful in the field.
  • Patience: Due to his struggles in life, Renellius has learned that panicking when results take time to come doesn't help. In fact, by panicking, one could easy make a terrible decision and throw the good thing that was yet to arrive out of the window. As such, he has learned to wait for people to act at their own pace and things to get better. It's extremely hard to get in the nerves of this guy, as he's able to put up with even the most annoying of types.
    Patience is also a big key of his power since the constructs take a while to get ready, even if they're technically building themselves. If he couldn't keep his attention on them during the time needed, he'd never get anything built.
  • Focus: Renellius knows the importance of concentrating fully in the task at hand. When given something to do he's capable of perfectly sticking with it until it's done, despite of the amount of distracting elements there could be in the background.
    To best use his power, Renellius has trained this skill so that he's able to tune out the outside world when using it, but also return his attention to the environment in a heartbeat just in case he needs to be aware of something. It's almost as if he has a 'focus switch' designed to quickly change tasks.
  • Creativity: Renellius has always been one to think out of the box. When there's a problem to be solved and everyone else seems to be stuck with that one tiny detail that's missing, he's usually the one to point it out or either come up with a completely different thing all together, which might just be what they needed.
    This tendency to a different point of view when allied to the knowledge of engineering and tools he has acquired from both watching his uncle work, and the course on technology he has attended to, would have already made Renellius reliable, pair that with his power then and you get a force to be reckoned with. He's capable of vividly picturing piece by piece of anything he'd like to build, as well as imagine how devices he has never seen before are built, just by hearing about what they do and what components they have.
  
  
  Flaws
  
  
  • Overthinking: There's always a change that when Renellius needs to make a very important decision, he'll start going over all of the options, again and again, accounting for a number of extra things that wouldn't actually influence the decision at all... In the end he might make something extremely simple into a castle of pros and cons needlessly.
    This flaw also comes up when Renellius is dealing with someone he considers authority in a given situation. Afraid to give the impression of being a fool to said person, he might trip over his trail of thought and assign interpretations to the other' words that weren't there in the beginning, possibly causing all sorts of misunderstandings in the process.
  • Penny-pincher: Coming from a struggling and needy family, Renellius has grown into the kind of person that saves money whenever it is possible. Meanwhile his altruistic tendencies will make him give urgency to other's people's needs before his own, desiring they don't go through need the same way he has in life, he will still categorize the things asked into 'wants' or 'needs' in case he's approached for money, meaning it is not always given that he will comply with the request. Renellius will not put his health at risk by buying only from the cheapest brands in existence, but at the same time will always go for a middle ground between quality and price when affording the things he needs.
  • Terrible Liar: When telling a lie, Renellius will get nervous, lose his trail of thought and stammer a lot while trying to say whatever he was supposed to. It would take a huge amount of effort, practice and rehearsal before he's able to deceive anyone.
  • Distrust: Renellius is very distrusting of strangers. Not used to having people approach him first, specially if they're notably on a different economical standing than himself, he'll grow suspicious, wondering what their reasons to approach are and if they're just interacting because there's some self-gain in play (maybe they want something). It takes him a while to warm up to new people.
• Renellius always brings with him a grey, rectangular tool box, which contains an array of different tools in case he wants to tinker with something in the old-fashion way or his powers just aren't enough for the task. Anything with a handle has it in a red shade, for some consistency:
  
  Hammer: [Tool] Just a normal, 8 inches long, claw hammer. Both head and handle are made of steel and its end is covered by an anti-slip rubber to make one's grip of it even more stable. It's good for when you need to, well, hammer things into place and also remove nails.
  
  Screwdriver: [Tool] A 10 inches long screwdriver with interchangeable bits, that are stored inside its handle. The handle slides out presenting all of the neatly organized different bits inside, held in place by little plastic 'clamps', then slides back in for use, merely give it a twist to lock everything into place. Untwist it to open and change bits again.
  
  Pack of Wrenches: [Tools] Actually has its own, similarly colored box and thus is stored away from all the other tools. Its filled with every type of combination and socket wrenches one could ever need. Extremely useful.
  
  Pliers: [Tool] Is 9 inches long and as every other pliers has a insulated grip to avoid the user getting electrocuted while using it. Has a lifetime warranty and is rust resistant. Really strong and multi-use tool.
  
  Wire Cutters: [Tool] Also called diagonal pliers or cutting pliers. Is 8 inches long and has the same properties as the pliers. In fact, they were bought together and might even be of the very same brand. Obviously has less uses than its not diagonal cousin.

​

 

[welian]

Ugghhhh the tabs look weird on the new site theme but I don't care enough to do anything about it.

 

[Gus]

Godot,O

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• Heroism
• Statistics

• Aspect	Scale
  COUR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  ALTR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  ORDR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	01
  KIND	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	07
  PRCT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  DIPL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09

• Aspect	Scale
  HLTH	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  STRN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  DEFN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  AGLT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  INTL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  WILL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09

• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers

• FullName
  
  OoatuGodot​
  Nicknames
  
  Harvey, AllMother, Eru, Aslan, Aflac​
  Codename
  
  PinkieTwinkletoes​
  Gender
  
  indeterminate and irrelevant​
  Age
  
  14billion years -ish​
  Rank
  
  ΩRank (also α, but let's not brag.)​
  Limiter
  
  Heh.Hee hee. Hahahahahahahahaha!!! *wipes tears away*
  Oh my, that's funny!​
  Role
  
  Observer​
• Race
  
  Furry. Usually pink, if you could see it.​
  Hair
  
  Pink, weren't you listening? Sometimes it changes.​
  Eyes
  
  Deep pools of wisdom you could just drown in.​
  Height
  
  6'3.5" always. It's odd, but Ooatu's height seems to be a law ofnature.​
  Figure
  
  Varies. Favors 'mythical' ungulates, but has been known to do the odd lagomorph nowand then.​
  NotesOoatu can take any form which is a topological isomporphism of a torus. You know, like a person shaped thing. Not that you'd notice. Stupid biological entities.
  
  ​
• Mischievous:
  Ooatu would like you to know that everything is funny. Everything. Comedy is tragedy plus time...
  Wait for it...!
  Tardy:
  Once or twice, Ooatu has been known to break appointments. Well, bend. Showing up still counts for something right? What's five billion years or so, give or take, really, in the grand scheme of things? Biological beings are sooooo impatient!
  Nosy:
  Watches everything. Everything. That too. Yes. Yes. You know it is true. Get used to it. It's part of the plan.
  Vengeful:
  Sometimes, some of the events Ooatu perceives make Ooatu SO ANGRY! Ooatu will take terrible vengeance on those who offend. Somehow. At some point in the future. Ooatu will get around to it, just you wait! Ooatu forgets nothing, and Ooatu has time. Saying Ooatu is powerless to do harm due to not existing is one of the things that makes Ooatu the angriest of all! DO NOT MAKE THOSE SOUND SYMBOLS WITH YOUR MOUTH HOLE FEEBLE BIOLOGICAL ENTITY! Just don't.
  History
  Feeble human philosophers and scientists have debated for millennia how the universe began and how it may eventually end. Silly humans. Ooatu has been there. It begins “Good evening ladies and germs!” and ends “Ba-dump, tiss!” Now perhaps you can shush? Ooatu is trying to watch. Stop distracting from the floor show.
  
• Every living being in the history of the universe
  Ooatuis present at all times and carries you when you get tired of walking along the beach and stuff. Well, Ooatu would do, if not for the intangible thing. Ooatu is there for you. All of you. Always. Except for Vladimir and Estragon. Those guys can wait by the tree. They know what they did.
  
  
  
• Immortal, Invisible and Intangible, plus shapeshifting with color changes.
  Ooatu has always been and always will be. Whatever has ever happened or will happen has been observed. Every event at every level of magnification for all of recorded time. Ooatu is watching you right now. That you are creeped out by this says more about you than you can possibly understand. There is giggling involved, in case you were wondering. Ooatu gets bored sometimes and changes into other shapes, but not for you to see. Ooatu's favorite color to be is pink, and Ooatu's favorite biological form to mimic is unicorns. Sometimes Ooatu does lions or ducks but mostly finds them annoying and preachy. Especially ducks. For a couple of decades while hanging out with Jimmy Stewart, Ooatu tookthe shape of a rabbit. Just for variety. Jimmy was a funny guy. He couldn't see Ooatu either, but he liked to pretend he had an invisible rabbit friend and told people about it. Ooatu often hangs out with nutty people like that to mess with philosopher's concepts of truth.
  
  • Inolfactible:It'snot that Ooatu doesn't smell. Ooatu smells fabulous, but you can't be allowed access to such sensory data. It would travel up your olfactory nerve to your brain like a lightning bolt and you would die instantly. But happy. Inolfactible is like invisible and intangible, but for sense of smell. Someoneonce pointed out that without smell, Ooatu would also be tasteless, but that person is persona non grata and shall not bementioned.
  • InaudibleandObscurant:No sound Ooatu makes, however loud, rude or amusing can ever be detectedby any other being. No thought Ooatu has, however deep or profound, will ever tickle the brains of even the most sensitive telepath or clairvoyant. Sad, really. There are so many worthy things to share, if there were only any ears worthy to hear or minds worthy to touch.
  
  
  Limitations
  Ha! Ooatu has no limits! Ooatu is boundless and forever!
  
  • Inexistential:Many philosophers have pointed out that anything that cannot be perceived by any means are indistinguishable from things that don't exist at all. Those philosophers are stupid.
  • Lonely:This may sound like a lame weakness, but when you are as great as Ooatu, you have to list what you can find.
  • Can't help observing things: Ooatu's eye is on the sparrow, but also on what you did with that super spicy Indian take out. The whole sordid process. Humans are disgusting. And stupid and short sighted. Why eat something that will make you weep like that later? Why eat at all?!
    
    Gross.