A lot better still a few minor errors and such but it makes sense for the most part, i'm thinking at some point vix will almost kiss as a pure accident you then kio will see and get the wrong idea and such. what do you think?
hang in there and nope still is the same, last thing and sorry for being a bit of a grammar nazi and such you could put something along the lines because you bored you can work the angle of i need make new friends but gah i suck at talking to people and i need to run way from most people etc
Not a bad post but you put was instead of is also to make it more interesting your heart can still race when you think about him even though your angry etc
I'm thinking they can start in the dress/tuxs shop, her dress gets stuck and she asks you to help and then after your done she playfully ambushes and kisses your forehead and pulls you and teases you a little about having a crush on her what do you think?