i'll reply later almost out of juice
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my bad i got that a little wrong it does say about drinking her blood
a lot better but still three lines she could also be thinking something along the lines of what was that feeling i felt when he last drank from me do i secretly enjoy it, does he love me more than he let's on etc
it's a little better but it needs more inner thoughts and check the sentences etc
you need five lines and he's in the school cooking lab
your accepted because you got char development tags
not bad but to make the post more fun you could say something about the idea of being the kid etc
it's not a bad idea for a post but look at the post it's kinda confusing
I can have my new char be lost in the forest and you can meet him after mitch and others reply
we ffed so we had food and now watching the fight lol
you can ff it to they've had food and go from their not sure what to do after that
much better
not bad to make it even better you could her warm his back and his shoulders are boney and check your spellings hun
it's not bad but you haven't paid attention what he said about liking alisa and such
for the sake of things can you post as their in the car and you can smell the ocean and such plz
hey, you gonna join clash?
Neko Karen Kujo, Desu?
nuggies you look at your post hun
she's blind so she wouldn't just grab his hand lol she could stumble and the he catches her in the next post and don't forget about feelings and thoughts yes i know i'm a nag you can shoot me later lol
wanna join a RP?
not bad but what about thoughts like i'm drinking from the same cup etc
much better the more emotions and such as the scent of the person etc the more you can do with your posts. don't get me wrong we can't do great posts all the time but i like that post because it's a way of showing them bonding.
A little better just ideas you could have something along the lines of i wonder who he feels about a girl like me, will he treat me as a potential gf or a little sister etc also we should wait till others catch
I meta gamed when i shouldn't have, i'm not saying you can't have the power but you should be careful with it so like i sometimes pee people off from doing it
last post was a little better remember you can always ask me for ideas and such -
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