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"Another Bloody Mary!"


She screamed at the top of her lungs. A shot glass with a red liquid slid across the worn down bar and right to her hand. She took up the drink and chugged it down without a second thought. She then slammed it down on the table, placing it beside the six other shot glasses that were there. She took a good look around. The place was sleazy. She would never end up in a place like this...nor would she ever drink so much outside the comfort of her home. She was a successful business woman who held herself with class. She crushed anyone in her way. No matter who they were. If they stood in front of her iron fist, they were to be dealt with. Loved ones were no exception to this rule. This was the reason for her long list of husbands. The only constant in her life was her daughter, the little fairy. She looked at the bartender who was eyeing her. He had a look of guilt on his face.


She said sloppily "What! Nevah sheen a drunk woman befoaah."


He raised an eyebrow and said "I have...Just not one this drunk. I don't think you sh--"


She cut him off "Itsshhh my money! I want another one! Another bloody mary"


He said "But I-"


She gave him the glare of the devil. A look she perfected to win in the business world. "Another...Bloody...MARY!"


He nodded and began to quickly craft the drink. She took a good look at her clothing. Her flawless outfit was a mess. A pencil skirt and a fancy blazer. She then looked over to the shot glasses. Her lipstick had stained each one. She took out a mirror from her purse to make sure the look was still as potent as before. However, she saw something else. Her makeup was running. She touched her cheek. It was wet. Was she crying? Now she was noticing them, several tears ran down her face. Her thoughts were interrupted by the shot glass running down the table. She stopped it with her hand and reached for it. When she did, she saw a little fairy clip on her hand. A voice came in her head "Mommy...I bought this for you". That's right...Her little baby gave it to her. Forgetting about the drink, she brought it close to her face. She brushed against it. She took out her phone and looked through the various pictures. They all had a big smile in common. Her little curly haired girl in a fairy dress for Halloween, drawing pictures with her friends, and then the last one...She knew it was coming. Her little girl smiling in the hospital. Even the severity of her illness couldn't stop her big smile. That was the last picture. She couldn't stop herself from crying. She was away the week her daughter passed away. A meeting in another country to speak about trade. She missed her baby's last few days...She could never forgive herself. She felt as if she killed her little fairy. She then turned to the shot glass. She raised it up and in her head said "Bloody Mary to my little Fairy" and chugged it. She then fell off the stool unconscious.


(I can't do it ;__; 546 words. I got too into it.)
 
It was a really right match! All beautiful pieces as usual, well done to everyone.


In the end, I have to choose @SepiaInk 


Your characters felt so fleshed out despite not having that many words to work with. It was also really adorable and made me smile. 


I'm really sorry that I can't to a little analysis on everyone's posts. I don't have much time and didn't want to keep you all waiting. 
 
@KiKi Kitsune Wow, thank you for choosing me! I’m surprised, there were some really interesting pieces and a lot to chose from. The one from @Killigrew was delightfully creepy and, although it went over the word count, @Sullivanity’s piece was as gripping as it was heart-rending (really felt for the fairy in that one).


Loved the prompt. It seemed weird at first but then, after thinking about it, it made so much sense (fairy = childhood, naivety, innocence; Bloody Mary = adulthood, experience, corruption - or puberty in the case of the urban legend), and a lot of the pieces incorporated these themes in some way or another, which I found fascinating :-) 


Oh, boy, I was kind of hoping I would never be chosen so I wouldn’t have to come up with a prompt  :S . Let’s see… 


Prompt: I challenge you to write a dialogue between a protagonist and their antagonist 


Word Count: Max limit of 600 words 


Time Limit: 48 hours (to give time for everyone)




Good luck for everyone :-) Can’t wait to read your pieces. 
 
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"Damn you Max Caliber, you foiled my plans once again! And I was so careful too!"


"I don't know what you were expecting, Professor, you broke the law. It was only a matter of time before I brought you to Justice." 


"Bah! To hell with Justice! One day, I will marvel at my conquest, and stand victorious upon the rubble of your petty institutions."


"You know just as well as I do that as long as people who believe in the true values of America exist, that day will never come."


"But how? How could you know I was going to use my Dectructo Drill here of all places?"


"You forgot one thing, Professor. I've been fighting you for so long, it was only a simple matter of using seismograph to figure out your plot. Now come along, I'm sure the've got a nice cell waiting for you."


"Bah, I'll get you next time Max Caliber! Or my name isn't Professer-" 


Max put the tranquilizer into his neck. He looked at the large metal drill in front him, jutting out of the ground like a splinter in someone's skin. Slumping the criminal over his shoulder, he flew off toward HQ. As the clouds whipped past him, Max idly hoped Supreme Leader Justice would have the Professer publicly executed this time instead of tossing him into another work camp. After all, breaking into a federal gulag was a serious crime, even if you were trying to bust out your daughter. 
 
He walked through the dream. There were others, all shadows that he refused to acknowledge.



He held his chin high, moving the bulk of his body around side to side, hips swaying.



He was unafraid of plowing his way to where he needed to be.



               He just wasn't sure where that was.



One of the shadows flickered with a flash of red, the same color as his favorite lipstick.





Lupo sat up in his bed, eyes springing open. His gaze crawled to his open doorway.


Shaka was leaning against the frame. A fresh, shredded glow loitered around his silhouette. Lupo could see the two round stains on his forehead where his horns had faded.


Lupo squinted. “That wasn't you.” He hoped, thinking of the red shadow.


“I'm not sure... what you're talking about,” Shaka replied in a voice that fluctuated like a seizure.


“Why are you here? What were you, just-- did you just get back from being inside someone's head?” Lupo snarled at the tendril-limbed, harrowing creature.


“Whyyyy oh whyyy...” his voice always swirled around his mouth like sewage around a drain. “Whyyy do you ask me that?” His voice was thick, as if with laughter, and his features bulged, but his expression remained unreadable. “You don't want to know.”


Lupo hesitated. “What did you do?”


“That won't matter,” Shaka replied balefully.


“What are you doing here now?”


“I am not going to tell you.” Shaka answered. His eyes were almost entirely black. Tatters of white made his eyeballs look like tunnels to the night sky. He moved into the room. Lupo tensed, preparing himself for... something. “But I am going to keep coming back. And you will see me. Every night. Not in your dreams. This is reality.”


As the creature strode towards the bed, he leeched into the darkness, becoming more of an incomprehensible distortion.


Lupo threw off his blanket and slipped onto his feet. “You're right. This is reality.” he told Shaka. “And this is my home. I dare you to try something. Anything.” He antagonized him, wanting to shove him, taunt him desperately.


Shaka's step had hesitated. He made it steadily around the bed to Lupo.


His height barely eclipsed his; their eyes met; Lupo honed in as much as one could on that vast, pupil-less gaze. One stutter and he might plummet inside.


“I would slip into you like a warm parasite. My horns would hook into that power you have--and I would wring you dry. I'm a garBAGE man...” Shaka's lips twitched as he relished his nebulous self-deprecation. “I dig out the thoughts you thought were wrecked, you thought were incinerated. I'm a NUISANCE pest, I would buzzzz buzz buzzz--” he jabbed his finger almost into Lupo's ear--“I'm a spider's WEB you stumble through, and you'll never stop feeling me stroke against your skin.” His finger fell down Lupo's cheek without touching him.


Shaka seemed to enjoy belittling himself, he honed in on the metaphors for himself as if they were insults for someone he pitied.“But I am not. Going to do. Any of that.”


Lupo's eyes swelled, air trapped inside him.


Finally, he sputtered. “Good!”


He settled back into bed, gruffly, turning his back to Shaka in defiance. “Do what you want, just don't wake me up! I was having a good dream...”


Shaka didn't answer.


Lupo's thoughts settled back to his dream. He wanted to go back to it. To see what happened next. To see what the impetuous shadow had been.


He had hoped it was him.


Word Count: 597


This was a challenge! Thanks for the fun prompt =n_n=
 
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His mission was simple - to rescue a captured comrade.


He succeeded. His ally has escaped. But things got out of hand. He could not make it to the extraction point.


Outnumbered. Cornered. There he was, with his resolve stronger than ever.


"Executor GREY, this is not an optimal situation.", his P.E.T. assistant, I.M.A. said.


"I know. But we're already here, and there's only one way to get out.", he answered.


"Reinforcements' ETA is 20 minutes, Executor.", I.M.A. replied.


"Too bad you will be dead before they arrive.", Malkor interevened. "You see, that man you rescued has been broken. He is useless. To me, and to you."


GREY clutches his P.E.W., a burst-firing pistol, armed with piercing shells. His enemies closed in on him. Step by step, they approached him.


"You have nowhere to go. And you've ran out of ammo, Executor. You have failed miserably.", Malkor continued. "Struggling against us would do you no good."


"So does surrendering to you.", GREY said firmly. He was ready to shoot his way out, despite his low ammunition. He knew he only had a slim chance, but it was the only reasonable way out. In his perspective, that is.


"Come now, Exexcutor GREY.", Malkor replied. "Don't make us to hurt you. After all, you'll be having all the pain you want in the interviews we'll be having."


The enemies surrounded him. Their weapons aimed towards him. The chance to escape is getting slimmer every passing moment.


"18 minutes, Executor GREY.", I.M.A. said. "Try to-"


GREY took a deep breath. "I.M.A., initiate Emergency Protocol 12."


"Executor GREY, are you sure about this?", I.M.A. replied, as the P.E.T. began to beep and whir.


"Yes. Do it.", GREY answered.


"Initiating Emergency Protocol 12."


"You won't get what you want Malkor. You will never get it.", GREY taunted his enemy.


"I told you already to give it up, still you resist." Malkor finally gave the signal to shoot.


However, before his enemies could even fire, he had made the first shot. 


BANG! 


The sound of the gunshot echoed through the room, as blood splattered towards the floor and the walls. Executor GREY has found a different way out. One which, cost him everything.


"How disappointing.", Malkor said. "Clean this up, and prepare my chopper."


"I'll need to find a more suitable interviewee.", he continued.


The room had been emptied, and hired cleaners begin to enter it. There, on the floor, drenched in GREY's blood and flesh, was his P.E.T.


In a whispering volume, a message could be fainlty heard.


"......no choice left, but to kill myself. For whatever reason it may be, I have failed my objective. 


Sorry, CROSS, I won't make it to your qualification. Take care of BLUEBIRD for me. Farewell.


Executor GREY out."


Word count: 478


No coding, on mobile.


There's very little exchange between the antagonist and the protagonist, but whatever. There's no harm in submitting this. 
 
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"Tell me, Lillith, after looking around... What do you see all around us?"


The claw stopped just short of the human's throat with his words, cut short in the middle by weak coughing and accompanying blood.


"After these past years fighting you, what nonsense are you spouting now James? You aren't the type of man to delay your just death when your time has come." Lillith's red irises squinted at James, her slit pupils dilating as she was holding back her wrath to hear out the old viscount's final moments.


"My death? Yes, I suppose I earned this death... But, you still haven't answered my question."


The corner of Lillith's mouth twitched downward, already tired of the old man. "I see the ruins of the territory of a great man. I see the results of your decision to annihilate my village, a safe haven of demons and half demons."


James grinned, not minding the blood dripping down the side of his mouth. His face seemed to be ten years younger with just that expression, his wrinkles seeming to fade. "Hoh... A great man? I'm flattered. I have done nothing but defend my territory - there is no praise to be had in that."


'I know what you did. And it sickens me.'  "Was slaughtering my village defending your territory? We were your subjects too."


James shook his head, the grin still on his face. "Your village was too powerful compared to us humans who had treated you unfairly in the past, and they knew it. They intended to take vengeance. So long as you don't chase down my family, this was the minimal loss for me and my land."


I should just kill you now, before I realize any more. "And the few guards and office workers I slaughtered to get here?"


The viscount laughed in an almost empty manner. "Stubborn friends I'll soon be having a drink with. They wouldn't budge."


The fact that you are like this right now sickens me. Is this your last action of spite, telling me everything in a manner even a child could understand it?


"Make it prosper from now on. Surpass what you called gre-"


Lillith's claw tore the man's throat out, and on that stone floor blood mixed with saltwater.


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379 words, my first entry!
 
He jerked back but there was no where to go. The sword in his leg had him pinned to the floor but the reaction happened all the same. He couldn't move, couldn't get away when his body screamed at him to run. He watched the other straighten, their gaze hard. "Tell me," they panted, glaring at him. "Tell me!"





 





He bared his teeth. "I have told you, time and time aga-"





 





"Why did you kill my sister?"





 





Aw, that question. He relaxed a bit, trying not to agitate the wound in his leg. If he was as intelligent as he boasted, his artery had been nicked and it was only a matter of time before he bled out. He had probably 4 minutes, as long as the blade didn't move. If it was removed, he was gone in a matter of seconds. "I didn't kill your sister-"





 





"You attacked my home!" they screamed at him, grabbing him by the front of his drenched shirt and shaking him. He winced, the wound in his leg getting worse. He was out of time.





 





"A casualty of war," he ground out, glaring at his assailant. "If I could have helped it, I would not have touched your home." The surprise and disbelief was a nice change of pace. He fought to keep himself centered. He was already losing too much blood too quickly. "Your home, your town was a very prosperous location, fertile land, grand artisans. I was unable to meet that battle head on before it reached the town borders."





 





"You.....tried to stop it?"





 





He chuckled, closing his eyes. He found it hard to open them again. "I tried to keep this damn war from even starting."





 





"I don't..."





 





He smiled softly, placing his hand over the one still fisted in his shirt. "Remember that there are always two sides of the same story. I am not who I've been made out to be."





 





He missed the shock that crossed the other's face as he passed out and the sudden concern that came after it.
 
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[SIZE= 14px]He felt disgust. “Just tell me why you did this,” He reached his free hand into his pocket and pulled out a digital recorder, holding it up to Aiden’s mouth. “So we can get this over with.” He clicked the ‘record’ button. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]Aiden only chuckled, eyeing the recorder with mild interest. “I wonder which one your superiors would like better. My ‘plans for world domination’, or that ‘I wanted to watch the word burn’?” [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]The knife in his hand started to shake as his rage grew. “You think this is funny?!” He shouted, stabbing a finger at the wall to wall windows next to them. Outside, the entire city was shrouded in a red haze, fires jumping from one roof to another, reducing everything to charred rubble. Aiden had splashed oil in the lobbies of the tallest buildings in the city, and one by one, set them all on fire. Within minutes the fires had become and uncontrollable inferno. He could hear the echoes of screams, of workers trapped on higher floors begging and pleading for someone, [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]anyone [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]to save them. Then there was the deafening noise of them falling silent. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]He saw red, and would have killed Aiden right then and there if he hadn’t spoken. “You know what [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]I [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]find funny?” He asked, the grin never leaving his face, even as his voice became serious. He never looked at the window. “[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]You. You’re [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]the [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]hero [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]of the story[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px], [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]the ‘can-do-no-wrong’ type, the one who makes sure the criminals get just what they deserve.” His tone was mocking. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]He didn’t realize how close he’d come to ending Aiden’s life until he saw the amount of blood covering the knife. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]“At least [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]I [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]know what I am.” His grin widened. “[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]I’m [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]the scapegoat. Your superiors told you who did this, and you[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]blindly [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]believed it. They gave you an address and you went to it without question like a good little soldier.” He covered his eyes with a hand, shaking with laughter. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]“What? What the hell are you talking about-?” [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]“It’s so [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]damn obvious. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]Do I have to spell it out for you?! The security company [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]you work for[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] set the fires!” [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]He paused at that, frowning. Then he shook his head, denying the accusation. That didn’t make any sense. Why would they- [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]“What do you think happens after this? You think that after an attack like this that things will go back to the way they were? To their normal, everyday lives? No, no, people will be afraid. They’ll be afraid of this happening again, and do anything they can to protect themselves against the [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]big bad criminals[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px].” Aiden laughed loudly. “And [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]what, coincidentally, [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]happens to be the most successful security company in the country?” [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]His frown deepened. “That doesn’t mean that they [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]set[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]-“[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]“Do you [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]really [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]think that, with the city being at peace for so long and that scandal about the government using their cameras to spy on people, they’re not hemorrhaging money?” Aiden looked at the recorder and started laughing again. “Why, if I’m the arsonist, do you need a recorded confession? Why are [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]you [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]here, and not the police? How did a [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]security company [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]find out who the arsonist is when not even the news has?”[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]


[SIZE= 14px]Aiden suddenly moved his hands away from his eyes, and they [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]burned. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]“Guess what? You’re not[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]the hero of this story. [/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]You’re the villain.[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px]”[/SIZE][SIZE= 14px] [/SIZE]
 
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Shaidoc smiled as he gazed at the burning hellscape, a glint of satisfaction in his silver eyes. He then hears the clanking of armor behind him. As he turns to face the would be challenger his smile grows wider, “So, Gilla can produce an opponent worthy enough to suffer not only my wrath, but my blade as well.” The knight straightened himself and ready his sword and shield. He looked at Shaidoc with a deep held hatred.


     “Come now, say something, I don’t want the words of the last,” Shaidoc takes a mocking tone, “Great Gillian Knight to be a broody silence.” The knight began to walk forward and in a voice that started out low and gradually built in volume the closer he got to Shaidoc stated, “You killed my family, killed my comrades, and slaughtered my King. I have nothing to say to you other than ‘I shall enjoy watching your rotting corpse be devoured by wild dogs tonight!’” With that Shaidoc let’s out a hardy laugh and quickly draws his blade; it is a perverse hybrid of a long sword and a katana that seems to draw the very light out of the air. Lunging forward he uses the motion of his draw to knock the knight's shield to the right; fully opening his chest for a downward slash.


     As Shaidoc brings his sword downward the knight parries with his broadsword, using the weight of Shaidoc's attack to regain his balance, “Need more than that to finish me monster,” the knight growled through his steel helmet visor that shown like sterling silver. Shaidoc was just about to retort when the knight quickly brought his shield back down across the side of Shaidoc’s face. “Never asked for a rebuttal. All I want to hear from you is a death rattle.” Shaidoc fell face first into the ground. He then smiled and merged with the shadows cast by the burning kingdom behind him.


     “I don’t care what you think or how you feel,” his voiced sounded near, but far at the same time, “I just want to have a quick conversation with you before I end your pitiful existence.” The knight looked to the ground where Shaidoc disappeared and quickly ran toward a light source. “Light can’t save you knight. Light produces shadow and shadows give me strength.” As the knight approaches the light source he begins to take note of the shadows on the ground around him. He suddenly notices one grow darker and stabs his sword square into it. Shaidoc gives a out a howl of pain as he returns to his corporeal form. “Ha! Have you now.” The knight gloated as he pulled out a dagger and quickly embedded it into Shaidoc’s chest, quickly piercing Shaidoc’s cloak.


     As the dagger entered his opponent the knight felt a sudden sharp pain in his back and chest. He also felt a warm sensation trickle down his chest. Shaidoc laid his chin on the, now dying, knight’s pauldrons as Shaidoc's shadow double faded back into shadows, leaving only the sword. “You really thought a mere knight could defeat me with a sword, shield, and vengeance fueled anger? You Gillians are more stupid than I thought.” Shaidoc then withdrew the sword from the knight’s back. As he fell forward, the knight saw his wife, daughter, and son beckoning him into the light. “You’re the fool.” The knight scoffed at Shaidoc. “I’m now free to join my fam-ily. For that I tha…” The knight’s words were cut short as his spirit departed his body to meet his family.


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Word count: 597


First post on this siteand I can't wait to do more. Love the prompt btw.
 
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I’m sorry everyone. Was writing my reply this morning but then suddenly the website wouldn’t load. Had to shut down my pc and erase stuff to be able to access it again. But here it is. Again, sorry for the delay. 




@Sullivanity If there is one thing I found genius about your brief and deceptively simple piece, was how you played with the reader’s (or at very least my) expectations. You dispensed with any sort of dialogue markers or description throughout all of the dialogue, but those weren’t at all necessary because the dialogue itself leaned heavily into the stereotypical superhero/super-villain dynamic that we associate with old comic books/movies, which made getting the gist of what was going on (seemingly) very easy. But then with just one paragraph (coupled with a few subtle hints in the dialogue) you managed to subvert all of that, hinting at something greater and far more sinister. In the end, you made me question who was the real villain in that story, which is always commendable. Unfortunately, it ended up sacrificing a more interesting dialogue and meaningful relationship between the characters.  


@floptheclown This was a tricky one… What I most enjoyed about it was the vivid language used to describe certain things, specially in regards to the demon. While, and I have to be honest here, the characters and their exchange failed to pull me in by the end, there were certain aspects to their behaviour that made them just a bit more intriguing than you average human and demon characters. Let me make this clear, I loved the way it was written, probably more so than most of the other pieces, but it failed to engage me as a compelling dialogue or scene between two characters of opposing sides. I think it all might come down to preference on this one. 


@Reinhardt You've already pointed out what the biggest problem of this piece is. While you did a good job of writing a tense action scene, keeping the language simple and dynamic, using shorter sentences and all that good stuff, it was hurt by the focus on characters outside the protagonist and antagonist, with not that much meaningful interaction between the last two (which was the goal of the prompt). I enjoyed your piece though and I’m grateful that you posted it :-) I would never be able to write an action scene myself. 


@That Guy Over There Alright, now this is what I meant by meaningful dialogue. This conversation feels just a tad bit more personal and gives us insight into the characters themselves and their relationship, even if just the tiniest bit. Subtle things like them being on first name basis, showing some inkling of respect towards one another even in a situation where they might’ve lost all of it, clue us in as to what sort of relationship they had, and this subtlety is important when writing interactions. However, the dialogue itself still feels distant and detached, and so do the characters, even unnatural at some points, where they will say things seemingly just for the benefit of the reader (which is a big no no in dialogue). All of this creates a sort of disconnect that hurst the piece overall. I enjoyed it, but I felt like it could be even better. 


@asharasahara Another well written and interesting piece from you. The relationship isn’t a personal one, but the grievance certainly is, which gives more weight to the interaction. The dialogue feels natural and the characters feel real and alive. More so than the other pieces, it is easy to empathise with either one of them because their motivations are straightforward and very human. There is absolutely no black or white here, no grander scheme, no distractions, just humans being humans. That said, it was a very brief piece, and this specific type of conflict is something I’ve seen many times before, even though it’s handled very well in my opinion. 


@S n o w Another well written piece that feels ripped out of the pages of an intriguing book. A shocking twist, role reversal, natural and fluid dialogue, very expressive as well. Nicely done. That said, I am, unfortunately, not a fan of the genre and that is perhaps why the scene and the characters (and their relationship) felt a bit cliche, which made the twist not as impactful as it could’ve been. Still, it was an enjoyable read, it flows so well that it actually feels like a lighter read than some shorter entries.  


@ViralBadger I'm glad you liked the prompt :-) and I definitely enjoyed your piece, thank you for posting it. But I have to honest, I didn’t care much for the dialogue or interaction between these characters. Please don’t take it the wrong way, it’s just my silly opinion, but I feel like action should speak for itself. Dialogue in a fight scene rarely feels engaging, because I almost always find it unnecessary and uninteresting. So even if the action was well written, the dialogue (the focus of the prompt) I felt was not strong enough.


 


This was hard to do, not gonna lie. I enjoyed something about all of your pieces and I’m glad that so many accepted the challenge and that I got to read all of these different approaches to dialogue. It was pretty close between @asharasahara and @S n o w, but, in the end, I have to chose the piece with the character interaction that I found most authentic and compelling:


The winner is @asharasahara ! 


Looking forward to your prompt :-) 
 
0-0 Well ok then. xD  Was not expecting that. Thank you for the compliment.


 



Prompt


Storm


Time Limit: 48 hours from this post


Word Limit: 17 lines (this includes empty lines so use these sparingly)


 


Good Luck

 
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Bummer. Well, perhaps if I had cut out ' , a safe haven of demons and half demons ' it would have been better, since that was the only forced line. But that's probably only because I know the characters, and know very well that they have a habit of talking like that XD.


Hmm, storm huh? I'll have fun~
 
Well it's seventeen lines.. seventeen pretty... trite lines. this was fun though.




"Did you get everything?" The question comes from the attic, muffled by the ceiling and muddied by the sound of scraping boxes and light, pattering footsteps.


I heft up the plastic shopping bag and set it on the kitchen table to sift through the spoils of my hunt, checking them off against the crumpled, curly-lettered list in my other hand. " I thinks so, batteries... tinned food... first aid supplies... Listen it's a rainstorm not a tornado are we really going to need all this stuff?"


"Maybe!" Her face drops down from the attic to beam at me like a shiny, pale moon, strands of dark hair dangling like vines. "Weather forecasts are always wrong right?" She's already digging through boxes again judging by the sound. "This time tomorrow we could be in Oz!"


I roll my eyes. "I don't think they're ever that wrong,"


"They could be though!" This reassurance is followed by a colossal thump that makes me wince a little. 


"How you doing up there Dorothy?" I ask cautiously and am rewarded by a slender arm dropping down from the hatch to give me a thumbs up then an entire girlfriend sliding down the ladder to stand in front of me. "No ruby slippers?"


"Couldn't find 'em," she shrugs, punching my arm then sliding past me to check out the shopping. "Besides the slippers are a mug's game. Who wants to go back to Kansas when you're in Oz?"



Somewhere far off the clouds let out a brassy rumble as I slip my arms around her shoulders, leaning in to catch the flowery scent of her hair. "Let's just try not to land on any witches okay?"
 
Phillian looked up at the holo image of Xal and him on Darwin-6. The way the light hit his tentacles was simply adorable. It reminded him of why he had this crummy job; Yubian weddings were way more expensive than human ones, but it would be worth it.  Ahead of him, he saw a shimmering blur that was directly in the way if his destination hovered. Going through the reality storm would be dangorus, but it would save time. Looking at his clock, Philian realized he only had a few more minutes to complete his mission. And so, the intrepid lover dove his ship into the churning reality storm.


Suddenly Phillian felt blue (the color not the emotion), which gave way to a feeling of yellow, and finally ultraviolet.


Then he was whipped into the mind of a horse running around a track made of small diamonds. He was in 3rd place.


Phillian returned to his body, but now he was infinitely large (save for his left pinky, which was only half as infinite).


When he returned to his normal size, he was inside out, but so was everything else, so it didn't really matter.


Phillian was again flung about, this time into the mind of some kid writing a story, who hoped it would be strange enough to confuse the readers into thinking it was good.


His thoughts ceased for an instant when he became a cardboard box filled with books about breeds of dogs.


Then he was a GOD, THE ALPHA AND OMEGA, THE DESTORYER AND CREA... oh. He had arrived at the address. Phillian was Phillian once again. He knocked on the entry hatch, and was promptly greeted by a rather average looking man who was apparently holding a party with clones of himself. He handed the man his pizza (with extra algae), and gladly accepted the payment. Back in his ship, Phillian was glad he was able to get all his orders in on time today.


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I tried to make it 17 lines, I don't know if it will change once I post it. I had a lot of fun writing it.
 
I hope this is still open to joining!


This prompt seems really interesting, so I've decided to give it a try. {Feedback is greatly appreciated! xD}


His breath is soft on my eyelids, a slight breeze that softens my features into a smile. His hands, one ever so lightly holding on to mine while the other makes patterns up and down the skin of my bare arm. 


Lighting shoots from his fingers.


And sudden thunder from his mouth. 


The lull of peace that washed over me, the lull of belonging, of tranquility, fades away like the sun on a stormy day. He grasps my wrist - not the comforting kind of hold, but one of impulsive need, of want. My eyes fly open to meet his, which are no longer the pale blue that accompanies an early dawn, but instead a much more cloudy shade.


They’re grey, mist swirling in the insides.  “Who are you?” I gasp, struggling to sit up, trying to hold on to the wall behind me as if it were an anchor keeping me, the ship, from drifting.


He is no longer the boy I know. The boy I love. He is a monster, his mouth full of pointed teeth, his hands crooked talons.


I struggle awake, shedding the last of the dream. A bead of sweat trickles down my back and I lay my chin on my knees, my thin PJ's providing no protection against raw emotions.


Outside the window, the storm rages on.


| 223 words | 17 lines | about 10-15 minutes to write - editing and polishing included |
 
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Well, hell, guys. xD Make it near impossible for me to flippen choose!! Three separate stories from three separate genres and I have to pick. What has my life come to?! ^_^




 





@AtlannianSpy Fun, bright, and a different pull of an old tale the majority know well. It is well written for being in first person and present tense. It is a fun little story.





 





@Sullivanity Interesting take on the idea. I like it. I found the twist to be anti climatic (personal opinion). It was cool to see a unique view on the prompt.





 





@Eexyin Dark and heart wrenching yet well written. It is a bit wordy through the fourth line of text. You can communicate the same thing with fewer words. Not a lot but a few. It would also have had a bit of a stronger impact if the dream itself had not been italicized. 





 





*rubs back of neck* I know they're short and not overly helpful but I thought I'd at least try with so few.





 








Winner:


@AtlannianSpy










Overall, your story was the most original and complete. I look forward to more writing from you.
 
Oh wow, thanks!  Lemme see I come up with a prompt now right? After combing through the previous pages to makes sure I wasn't doubling up I'm gonna be all pretentious and hook you guys up with a favourite quote.


The sea has never been friendly to man. At most it has been the accomplice of human restlessness.


-Joseph Conrad


350 words or less, 48 hours. Good luck!
 

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