Fandom [OOC] Naruto - Trials of the Forgotten

[The Silent Z]

Zî's pretty much done. Edits made to show today's clear ups and additions.

 

[Uncultured]

Kiro is done. If there are any samurai champloo fans in here you'll appreciate the fighting style & the gif. Images

Taijutsu wise I got me a mini Mugen. Its gonna be fun to write, although difficult because of all the weird movements.

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

Should just be a question of scale.

Water bullets is a C rank that my character has, but it's a small scale technique designed for precision, not a wide scale move like Syrup Trap Field, which coats a large region in a sticky liquid.

Both are C rank water release techniques but one takes a lot of chakra to use while the other is slight on chakra use.

So basically chakra use should be scale depending on technique, not suggesting a whole system for chakra use, but if anyone gets too crazy with spam to a point where it annoys everyone, then we can just call it out.

While true, it is based on scale in many cases, rank also matters for an inexperienced Genin. A Genin trying to use a high-skill technique would expend far more Chakra for it than a Jonin with the same amount of Chakra as said Genin. Higher level techniques take a lot more Chakra control, and when someone lacks Chakra control necessary for a technique, they expend far more Chakra to use it.

 

[Uncultured]

While true, it is based on scale in many cases, rank also matters for an inexperienced Genin. A Genin trying to use a high-skill technique would expend far more Chakra for it than a Jonin with the same amount of Chakra as said Genin. Higher level techniques take a lot more Chakra control, and when someone lacks Chakra control necessary for a technique, they expend far more Chakra to use it.

I do agree with you for the most part. Just saying that there are exceptions. The rasengan is an A rank technique that takes way less chakra than many B rank techniques. So if someone learns rasengan, they should be able to spam it more than someone doing something like earth release mobile core which is a jumbo sized B rank. That being said I do agree with what you're saying for the most part, and at this point I just sound like a pedantic fanboy lol.

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

I do agree with you for the most part. Just saying that there are exceptions. The rasengan is an A rank technique that takes way less chakra than many B rank techniques. So if someone learns rasengan, they should be able to spam it more than someone doing something like earth release mobile core which is a jumbo sized B rank. That being said I do agree with what you're saying for the most part, and at this point I just sound like a pedantic fanboy lol.

True, though you have to remember that the Rasengan takes a huge amount of Chakra control compared to most B-Rank techniques, so if the ninja using Rasengan isn't skilled enough to properly control their Chakra, they'll spend amounts of Chakra equivalent to a ninja whom has real good Chakra control using Earth Release Mobile Core; plus, the Rasengan might even fail if they're severely lacking in the necessary Chakra control. Now, this isn't really going to have a major effect on the RP though, unless people really push their characters' limits or there's Chakra Absorption involved, as I'm fairly certain everyone'll be able to understand the idea that Genin, and realistically speaking, all Shinobi, regardless of rank, have limited Chakra supplies.

 

[The Silent Z]

Wasn't going to bother with a theme song, but stumbled upon a near perfect one for Zî.

 

[Human__Ramen]

Kiyoko Tomoe So when is the RP gonna start, and who have you already accepted?

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

Kiyoko Tomoe So when is the RP gonna start, and who have you already accepted?

So far, I haven't actually thrown out an accept for anyone, but assuming there's enough sheets to accept, I should be starting this within the next two or three days.

 

[Jade Emperor]

So far, I haven't actually thrown out an accept for anyone, but assuming there's enough sheets to accept, I should be starting this within the next two or three days.

Oh yes! I almost forgot, B Billicious and I were wondering if we could specifically request that Park and Hiro be on the same Squad if possible?

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

The Silent Z Zi is Accepted.
B Billicious Park is Accepted.
Uncultured Kiro is Accepted.
Jade Emperor Hiro is Accepted, although I would like to note it's Jan Ken Pon, not Jan Ken Ko. Also, I've already decided upon teams, and you'll have to wait a little longer to know what those teams are >:3

 

[Phayne]

Are there any changes I need to make for rengetsu?

 

[The Silent Z]

The Silent Z Zi is Accepted.
B Billicious Park is Accepted.
Uncultured Kiro is Accepted.
Jade Emperor Hiro is Accepted, although I would like to note it's Jan Ken Pon, not Jan Ken Ko. Also, I've already decided upon teams, and you'll have to wait a little longer to know what those teams are >:3

Oh, awesome! Can't wait to see the teams and jonin overseeing them

 

[Human__Ramen]

The Silent Z Zi is Accepted.
B Billicious Park is Accepted.
Uncultured Kiro is Accepted.
Jade Emperor Hiro is Accepted, although I would like to note it's Jan Ken Pon, not Jan Ken Ko. Also, I've already decided upon teams, and you'll have to wait a little longer to know what those teams are >:3

Oh

What do I need to change for Yume to be accepted?

 

[DeadLad]

Man, I still have no idea what I want for my character's history. Any suggestions?

 

[Jade Emperor]

The Silent Z Zi is Accepted.
B Billicious Park is Accepted.
Uncultured Kiro is Accepted.
Jade Emperor Hiro is Accepted, although I would like to note it's Jan Ken Pon, not Jan Ken Ko. Also, I've already decided upon teams, and you'll have to wait a little longer to know what those teams are >:3

VICTORY SCREEEEEEECH

(also still praying they get to work together, I love the dynamic we set for them)

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

Are there any changes I need to make for rengetsu?

For your character, I decided to wait until after you put down your fourth Taijutsu technique, as you are missing one, as well as stated that you were. Everything else looked fine though, so realistically speaking, your character is ready for acceptance.

Oh

What do I need to change for Yume to be accepted?

To begin with, the first issue I see is with the backstory. Your backstory places Yume as having been born after the war; the war ended a year and a half prior to this point. Hopefully it's just a minor fix for that one. Second, your character has four Ninjutsu, even though their Ninjutsu score is 3 (+1), which is a total 3 techniques. I'm assuming that this is meant to be a 4 (+1), seeing as you're missing one point into Technique Scores.

I also have a few questions. First off, what is the 100 Slashes Jutsu? Second, do you have any plans for adding in Genjutsu and Taijutsu techniques? While I'm not going to say it's necessary you have any techniques for them, you do have room, and I wouldn't like to see your character have nothing up their sleeve for when their Ninjutsu does them little good. (Or who knows, I might intentionally place your character up against someone practically immune to Ninjutsu :x)

Last question, and really not regarding anything important. How much does Yume like Zi? :x

 

[Human__Ramen]

To begin with, the first issue I see is with the backstory. Your backstory places Yume as having been born after the war; the war ended a year and a half prior to this point. Hopefully it's just a minor fix for that one.

Well, I went and re-read her bio, and I never specified when she was born. I just mentioned it was after the war.

Second, your character has four Ninjutsu, even though their Ninjutsu score is 3 (+1), which is a total 3 techniques. I'm assuming that this is meant to be a 4 (+1), seeing as you're missing one point into Technique Scores.

Ah, my bad. I changed her score to 4 (+1) in Ninjutsu in my Evernote. Forgot to change it here.

I also have a few questions. First off, what is the 100 Slashes Jutsu?

It's a cooperation technique where Yume and Takahiro focuses their chakras to enhance their speed in order to attack the enemy for a total of 100 slashes. Yume uses the Inner Decapitation Skill beforehand to expose her opponent, and only then does she use this jutsu.

Second, do you have any plans for adding in Genjutsu and Taijutsu techniques? While I'm not going to say it's necessary you have any techniques for them, you do have room, and I wouldn't like to see your character have nothing up their sleeve for when their Ninjutsu does them little good. (Or who knows, I might intentionally place your character up against someone practically immune to Ninjutsu :x)

I don't have any plans for Taijutsu, mainly because I don't know what would work with her. Maybe Jeet Kune Do? I don't know. As for Genjutsu, she isn't going to have any.

Last question, and really not regarding anything important. How much does Yume like Zi? :x

Currently, she sees Zî as a friend more than anything. They come from very similar backgrounds and they have the same strained relationship with their parents, so Yume relates to Zî and I believe vice-versa. They also balance each other out personality and combat wise. Yume has a focus on Ninjutsu, Zî has a focus in Taijutsu.

Kiyoko Tomoe

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

Human__Ramen
"During the war, the Kinawa clan was instrumental in keeping Amegakure intact. It earned a reputation many clans could only dream of achieving, and this only fed Kokoro Kinawa's ego. The matriarch of the clan now had new expectations assigned to her, expectations she was proud of meeting. And when Yume was born, those same expectations were pushed onto her."

This part of the Bio goes from the war, to the expectations placed on Kokoro Kinawa as a result of that war, to those expectations passing on to Yume when she was born. That structure, to me, shows that Yume was born after the war, as those expectations placed on Kokoro were pushed on Yume when Yume was born.

With regards to everything else though, ready to be accepted. I would like to request you put description of the 100 Slashes Jutsu in the character sheet though, just so there's a reference.

 

[Human__Ramen]

Human__Ramen
"During the war, the Kinawa clan was instrumental in keeping Amegakure intact. It earned a reputation many clans could only dream of achieving, and this only fed Kokoro Kinawa's ego. The matriarch of the clan now had new expectations assigned to her, expectations she was proud of meeting. And when Yume was born, those same expectations were pushed onto her."

This part of the Bio goes from the war, to the expectations placed on Kokoro Kinawa as a result of that war, to those expectations passing on to Yume when she was born. That structure, to me, shows that Yume was born after the war, as those expectations placed on Kokoro were pushed on Yume when Yume was born.

With regards to everything else though, ready to be accepted. I would like to request you put description of the 100 Slashes Jutsu in the character sheet though, just so there's a reference.

I added the description of her jutsu and specified that she was born 18 months later. This should make me good

 

[Uncultured]

(Or who knows, I might intentionally place your character up against someone practically immune to Ninjutsu :x)

Please do get creative with match ups to make for interesting, sometimes unwinnable situations. I'd love to write Kiro when he's getting his ass kicked by some stonewall defender that can only be defeated with power moves, or maybe a fighter that's extremely sound fundamentally that leaves no openings for a fast improv fighter like Kiro.

Also want to say something for the benefit of the entire RP regarding Body Flickering, seeing that just about everyone has it as a known D rank technique. Body flickering is like doing a layup, or throwing a football. Everyone from a rec league player to Michael Jordan can do a layup, but theyre about as far from each other as the Earth and the Sun, and although a peewee quarterback can throw the ball in a straight line, he is no Tom Brady. The difference is ability in use.

The in canon example that comes to mind is the Raikage, built up as the fastest man alive (until Naruto speed blitzes him). He doesn't actually sprint from place to place, rather he body flickers constantly to move at an extremely high speed. Shisui, Itachi's old buddy, was known as a god of speed because he mastered body flickering. On the other hand, many Genin can body flicker but it doesn't do nearly as much for them because it takes longer to execute and cannot be done in the same constant way as someone like the Raikage. All this to say that when using body flicker, we need to use it responsibly and in a way that would make sense for capable Genin, meaning usable in battle from time to time but not a crutch to dodge literally every attack that comes our way.

I know many of you know this, but many people don't, so I figured I'd chime in because the naruto canon does a pretty bang up job of explaining techniques like body flicker.

 

[The Silent Z]

Please do get creative with match ups to make for interesting, sometimes unwinnable situations. I'd love to write Kiro when he's getting his ass kicked by some stonewall defender that can only be defeated with power moves, or maybe a fighter that's extremely sound fundamentally that leaves no openings for a fast improv fighter like Kiro.

Also want to say something for the benefit of the entire RP regarding Body Flickering, seeing that just about everyone has it as a known D rank technique. Body flickering is like doing a layup, or throwing a football. Everyone from a rec league player to Michael Jordan can do a layup, but theyre about as far from each other as the Earth and the Sun, and although a peewee quarterback can throw the ball in a straight line, he is no Tom Brady. The difference is ability in use.

The in canon example that comes to mind is the Raikage, built up as the fastest man alive (until Naruto speed blitzes him). He doesn't actually sprint from place to place, rather he body flickers constantly to move at an extremely high speed. Shisui, Itachi's old buddy, was known as a god of speed because he mastered body flickering. On the other hand, many Genin can body flicker but it doesn't do nearly as much for them because it takes longer to execute and cannot be done in the same constant way as someone like the Raikage. All this to say that when using body flicker, we need to use it responsibly and in a way that would make sense for capable Genin, meaning usable in battle from time to time but not a crutch to dodge literally every attack that comes our way.

I know many of you know this, but many people don't, so I figured I'd chime in because the naruto canon does a pretty bang up job of explaining techniques like body flicker.

Yep, I know. In terms of crutchs to be used in battle, same could be said for body Replacement Technique. Often that move and body Flicker are banned in naruto Rps for the very reason earlier stated.

Personally Flicker is more of a combo move for Zî rather then only using it for countering. Though occasional countering too. But agreed and I'm aware.

 

[Kiyoko Tomoe]

I added the description of her jutsu and specified that she was born 18 months later. This should make me good

I believe you've misinterpreted what I've said. The war ended a year and a half before current time in the RP, meaning the issue was your character being born after the war ended. Your character would have been 10 or 11 years old when the war ended.

Also, another bit of Japanese for me to correct. Kakugo, not Kagugo, is the romanized spelling of the word :x

 

[Human__Ramen]

I believe you've misinterpreted what I've said. The war ended a year and a half before current time in the RP, meaning the issue was your character being born after the war ended. Your character would have been 10 or 11 years old when the war ended.

Also, another bit of Japanese for me to correct. Kakugo, not Kagugo, is the romanized spelling of the word :x

Wait, so is the issue here her being age being incorrect when comparing the time line? So does that mean Yume should be like, 11 or something?

Also, someone else told me it was kagugo, not kakugo

wHo Do I bElIeVe-

 

[Billicious]

Wait, so is the issue here her being age being incorrect when comparing the time line? So does that mean Yume should be like, 11 or something?

Also, someone else told me it was kagugo, not kakugo

wHo Do I bElIeVe-

I belive the Gm is saying that from the current point in the rp (as our characters are between 9-13) it has only been a year and a half since the war ended so if your character was born 18 months before the war they would only be 3 years old.

 

[Human__Ramen]

I belive the Gm is saying that from the current point in the rp (as our characters are between 9-13) it has only been a year and a half since the war ended so if your character was born 18 months before the war they would only be 3 years old.

OHHHHHH THAT MAKES SO MUCH MORE SENSE

Shit, okay, gonna have to rewrite her entire bio then