OOC Discussion

[lazee]

Bruh, the Discord number ID thingamajig ain't showing up no matter how much I mention myself like a notif whore

 

[Necessity4Fun]

Update - RP Nation Official Chat (Discord App)[/URL]


after you did it, there will be a chat to ask for your ID, go on it and do the ID thing :3


Also use this to know what to do with the ID


https://www.rpnation.com/account/discord

 

[lazee]

Yes, I'm in the server thing and I'm punching in the keys into the get ID thing but the ID thing isn't coming out like it's supposed to. No numerals, nothin'.

 

[Necessity4Fun]

[QUOTE="Lazy Rocktime]Yes, I'm in the server thing and I'm punching in the keys into the get ID thing but the ID thing isn't coming out like it's supposed to. No numerals, nothin'.

[/QUOTE]
that is odd... I can only say try back later or into another program... (in case you're on a browser try to install it on the pc, or the cellphone... )

 

[Dano]

@Giyari[/URL] or @welian can invite you)

 

[welian]

[QUOTE="Lazy Rocktime]Yes, I'm in the server thing and I'm punching in the keys into the get ID thing but the ID thing isn't coming out like it's supposed to. No numerals, nothin'.

[/QUOTE]
If you are typiing "\@Lazy Rocktime" (or whatever username you chose for Discord) into the Get ID channel, and still are unable to get an ID, you will need to post a thread in Admin Contact and ask them to grab the ID for you. Admins are the only one with access to the ID channel after they've been confirmed. Giy and I are unable to see it and therefore we can't help you - otherwise we totally would.

 

[call me rae]

@ViAdvena A+++++ character, I don't see any problems so congrats on knocking it out of the park. I can see her and Laurel paired up a lot they both have somewhat travel / teleportation based powers.


She could probably help laurel a lot since she seems to have an innate gift for direction which is something Laurel needs to learn.


@TheDox I meant specifically as a small child (baby to like 6 ) how did he survive on his own. How did he get his name. Did he live in foster care for a bit and just leave? Does he have any long term health effects from poor nutrition, us he illiterate? Those kinds of things, like if he is meant to have been homeless all his life maybe do a bit of research on it? Cuz like on the news you always here about the drugs, the child traffixlcking, the child prostitution, etc. So how did he dodge that? And how did he hand being exposed to the weather -not just cold but like hest or rain ?


Speaking of temperature how is he effected by extreme heat? Does he have a higher instance of heat stroke or something? Since his body is so acclimated to the cold.


Also for his powers you might want to take a look at Robert Drake (Earth-616)


The way his powers manifest remind me of ivan. Not saying you have to have the same abilities or have them work the same way bit like this was why I asked about pulling moisture from the air earlier.

 

[Father Gigantor]

@welian Done, and done.

 

[sorrow made you]

I will make a post today. Sorry for the delay.

 

[TheDox]

@TheDox I meant specifically as a small child (baby to like 6 ) how did he survive on his own. How did he get his name. Did he live in foster care for a bit and just leave? Does he have any long term health effects from poor nutrition, us he illiterate? Those kinds of things, like if he is meant to have been homeless all his life maybe do a bit of research on it? Cuz like on the news you always here about the drugs, the child traffixlcking, the child prostitution, etc. So how did he dodge that? And how did he hand being exposed to the weather -not just cold but like hest or rain ?


Speaking of temperature how is he effected by extreme heat? Does he have a higher instance of heat stroke or something? Since his body is so acclimated to the cold.


Also for his powers you might want to take a look at Robert Drake (Earth-616)


The way his powers manifest remind me of ivan. Not saying you have to have the same abilities or have them work the same way bit like this was why I asked about pulling moisture from the air earlier.

He's affected by heat fairly normally, but his ice may melt at a much faster pace than usual.


That said, he could still decrease the temperature of himself and/or his surroundings if need be.


As for the back story - he got his name from a note (possibly laminated or something) that was left somewhere with him.


Aside from that, in all honesty I really don't see the need to pull some huge explanation out of my ass for something that's barely even relevant to the current storyline - don't get me wrong, I appreciate the feedback, but I feel as though that part of the backstory would be more effort to explain than is really necessary.


He was vaguely looked after by various people for varying amounts of time, but still remained on the streets and for the most part alone, somehow literate and with no lasting health issues (yet a fair few temporary things, I must say).

 

[call me rae]

@TheDox fair enough I tend to think a bit indepth into things personally and I'm not saying you have to write a whole biography or anything. Like you didn't have to re-write his whole history to be like- it was a cold winter day and a baby was born on a icy slab of concrete and abandoned. for days he remained alone with only the rats to look after him.


Your not writing a novel I understand that. But like maybe just have it in the back of your mind - him being a homeless person would be a very huge part of his character. It would effect how he would interact with people as he would have spent his whole life on the sidelines of humanity - overlooked or abused by most of the people surrounding him.


And you know he probably should have lasting health issues if he was on his own. Just because realistically your not going to get three square meals a day or the proper nutrition if your scrounging for food in dumpsters or eating rats. Like think about it in order to avoid like scurvy or stunted growth you need proper food. Hell in order to avoid brittle bones you need to drink milk fairly regularly and I'm not sure how he would get that on the streets.


Again I'm not saying you have to write out his struggles with poverty or starvation. But maybe just look up the lasting effects of malnutrition at a young age? Just to see where he would be in terms of over-all health now.

 

[TheDox]

@TheDox fair enough I tend to think a bit indepth into things personally and I'm not saying you have to write a whole biography or anything. Like you didn't have to re-write his whole history to be like- it was a cold winter day and a baby was born on a icy slab of concrete and abandoned. for days he remained alone with only the rats to look after him.
Your not writing a novel I understand that. But like maybe just have it in the back of your mind - him being a homeless person would be a very huge part of his character. It would effect how he would interact with people as he would have spent his whole life on the sidelines of humanity - overlooked or abused by most of the people surrounding him.


And you know he probably should have lasting health issues if he was on his own. Just because realistically your not going to get three square meals a day or the proper nutrition if your scrounging for food in dumpsters or eating rats. Like think about it in order to avoid like scurvy or stunted growth you need proper food. Hell in order to avoid brittle bones you need to drink milk fairly regularly and I'm not sure how he would get that on the streets.


Again I'm not saying you have to write out his struggles with poverty or starvation. But maybe just look up the lasting effects of malnutrition at a young age? Just to see where he would be in terms of over-all health now.

I'll definitely look into health effects, but I'm not sure if they'll fit very well. I guess we'll see.


But yeah, as I said, I really do appreciate the feedback, I just don't feel the depth of it all is necessary.


And yeah, it's a big part of his personality - the determination, the ability to think rationally and objectively, even the sadism. All developed (or at the least emphasised) by his time on the streets.

 

[welian]

I just don't feel the depth of it all is necessary.

//sharpens knives

 

[TheDox]

//sharpens knives

B-but


Such detail is like..


thinks of a comparison


If I asked you, Marvel, or DC, to explain why their character's powers work, with scientific accuracy


Some things are best left assumed for things to work. It's not that I don't want to put effort in.

 

[call me rae]

B-but
Such detail is like..


thinks of a comparison


If I asked you, Marvel, or DC, to explain why their character's powers work, with scientific accuracy


Some things are best left assumed for things to work. It's not that I don't want to put effort in.

lol. well marvel actually does do a pretty good job of explaining things with at least an attempt at science. when they don't just go - because DemiGod or Magic.


dc, is a little more comic-booky. and honestly if he makes it magically snow because of idk his amazing mind powers idc. i was just curious honestly because if he did pull moisture out of the air that could be a secondary effect of his power. he would make it very dry and i think like difficult for other people to breathe or something. that was where i had intended to go with that.


and the effect of heat is because i've gone to both florida and texas during the summer months and that kind of heat is no joke. just normal every day people can get dehydrated or heat stroke if their not careful. for someone who is used to keeping his body at i'm assuming a pretty cool temperature it would be even more difficult. i'm not saying he has to pass out every time it gets above 70 degrees, i'm just saying maybe have him be uncomfortable or go comedically bare. like just walk around in his boxers because he's soooooo hot and everyone else is just a little warm.


that kind of thing. it was just something i thought might be interesting to explore but as you said it's not like a major character point or anything - or even anything you had to do.

 

[TheDox]

lol. well marvel actually does do a pretty good job of explaining things with at least an attempt at science. when they don't just go - because DemiGod or Magic.
dc, is a little more comic-booky. and honestly if he makes it magically snow because of idk his amazing mind powers idc. i was just curious honestly because if he did pull moisture out of the air that could be a secondary effect of his power. he would make it very dry and i think like difficult for other people to breathe or something. that was where i had intended to go with that.


and the effect of heat is because i've gone to both florida and texas during the summer months and that kind of heat is no joke. just normal every day people can get dehydrated or heat stroke if their not careful. for someone who is used to keeping his body at i'm assuming a pretty cool temperature it would be even more difficult. i'm not saying he has to pass out every time it gets above 70 degrees, i'm just saying maybe have him be uncomfortable or go comedically bare. like just walk around in his boxers because he's soooooo hot and everyone else is just a little warm.


that kind of thing. it was just something i thought might be interesting to explore but as you said it's not like a major character point or anything - or even anything you had to do.

Noted. I can see him doing some interesting stuff, when it gets hot.

 

[RemainingQuestions]

Just double checking, but I'm accepted with the new images, right?

 

[welian]

Just double checking, but I'm accepted with the new images, right?

Absolutely!

 

[RemainingQuestions]

Absolutely!

Then I'm going to write my first post now!

 

[Rida]

THE DEED IS DONE!


Please excuse my lack of pretty fonts and, well, a gallery. Those are soon to come should this be given the thumbs up.


EDIT: Gallery and relationships are updated.


@welian


Clemence, Gwyneth

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Gwyneth "Gwen" Clemence
  Codename	N/A
  Gender	Female
  Age	27
  Rank	A
  Role	Faculty
  Subject	Emotional Composure

  Race	Caucasian
  Eyes	Brown
  Hair	Chestnut; wavy; neck length
  Height	5'7"
  Build	Ecto/mesomorphic: svelte, thin, and fit
  Limiter	Level 3; Active
  Notes	None

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	?????????​	Courageous	03	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	?????????​	Altruistic	06	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	?????????​	Orderly	05	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	?????????​	Kind	07	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	?????????​	Proactive	05	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  Composed: Gwen has learned to keep her emotions in check when things get hectic, channeling an aura of peace should she need to stay calm.
  
  
  Disorganized: It is not apathy or laziness that keeps her from picking up the pile of clothes on the bed or organizing the clutter of her desk; she simply cannot find the time to worry about such little nuisances.
  
  
  Aromantic: Gwyneth has generally hated the idea of marriage, despite her parents' happy life--she sees marriage as a weight, just itching to hold her down, and she doesn't need another limiter on her.
  
  
  Overly-Analytical: Gwen is partial to worrying about the consequences of small choices--the "bigger picture". She first takes into account the feelings of others before consulting her own when making a decision, leaving her confused and terribly indecisive. This does not help her case when she is forced to make paramount, split-second decisions, which is yet another reason she would never apply for a Blue Card.
  
  
  History
  
  
  
  s y n o p s i s

  In short, Gwen's mother adopted several children before she birthed Gwen, as she had believed she was infertile, and they all turned out to possess transhuman abilities; this is understood as the reason they were at first rejected by the orphanage they were left at. In 2018, two of these children left to join the terrorist group known as the "Rapture Incident", and both have not been heard from since. Two years later, the Commonwealth knocked on the Clemence's door and hauled Gwyneth away, who was brought home a day later with a level 3 limiter and a lifetime of nightmares. Fast forward to 2014: Gwyneth has been forced into a faculty position at the lovely Training Facility 108, and absolutely hates her position; she feels as though she is breeding children to be tossed into the battlefield. The Commonwealth is a rotting apple in her mind -- pristine on the outside, but decaying from within.
  Gwyneth was the last of five children. She called them her brothers and sisters, though her mother had informed her the moment she was old enough to understand that none of them were--she had adopted them, had taken them in when no orphanage would. Darcy Clemence had been under the impression that she was infertile after two miscarriages, and, still yearning to be a mother, had chosen to adopt a child. One child turned into two, and before she knew it, she had taken in four castaways, determined to save them from a life on the streets, unaware of just how powerful these children were.
  
  
  And then she had Gwen.
  
  
  Her mother had resolved never to attempt a child again with her husband, as they always led to heartbreak, but a night of fun quickly escalated, and Darcy soon learned that she was pregnant once more. The news both excited and broke her, and as the months went on without hitch, her fear only grew. Month 4 began a strict meal plan for "optimal childbirth results". Month 5 brought almost weekly trips to the doctor's, each safe ultrasound like a breath a fresh air. The paranoia started in month six, when the first kick came--Darcy turned into the likes of a germophobic hermit, staying indoors as often as possible. By month 7, she was desperate; this was the home stretch.
  
  
  Gwen was delivered four weeks premature. Her mother did not care, however, for the fact was that her child had survived.
  
  
  The years that followed were nothing short of blissful. A young Gwyneth was adored by her older sisters, who never ran out of outfits to dress her in, and aptly ignored by her brothers. She was surrounded by magic her whole life, her siblings just beginning to exhibit signs of powers when she arrived, so it came to her as no surprise when her own abilities began to show. Her mother, on the other hand, was utterly shocked--neither Mrs. nor Mr. Clemence held supernaturally enabled lineage, so to have a child with the super gene was more than surprising. Gwen felt every bit of this surprise, saw every emotion hidden behind each smile.
  
  
  Darcy embraced the newest addition to the family all the same, just as she had the others, and helped her children learn to control their powers any way she could. No amount of lessons could prepare her for the "Rapture" incident, however.
  
  
  Despite her protest--despite locking them in their rooms and promising punishment if they disobeyed--her eldest son and daughter left home one night to join the resistance against the Commonwealth.
  
  
  She hasn't heard from them since.
  
  
  Until then, Darcy had been convinced that she could keep her children from the Commonwealth's grasp, but with the passing of SILPA, all attempts would be futile. In 2020, at a mere age 7, Gwyneth Clemence was hauled away to the Commonwealth Headquarters, where her frail mind was pushed far beyond its limits in a series of excruciating tests. At the end of the day, Commonwealth agents returned Mrs. Clemence's daughter home, a level 3 limiter strapped to her waist.
  
  
  20 years later, Gwyneth still vividly remembers the torture she was subjected to by the Commonwealth, all in the name of protection. The tears her mother sheds when the memories of her two lost children resurface have broken Gwen's heart too many times--she may not remember her siblings all too well, but she has literally felt her mother's pain, and it is something she wouldn't upon even the worst of people.
  
  
  That is, apart from the Commonwealth.
  
  
  As a teacher of -- you guessed it -- Emotional Composure at Training Facility 108, a job she was forced to accept by AEGIS's founders, Gwyneth hates what she must do every day. The supers that are forced into the AEGIS program each day are simply pawns in the Commonwealth's game--malleable minds they can force to do their dirty work, mere teenagers they happily throw into the line of fire. Gwen can feel the anger bubbling inside each of them; their futures are slowly, subtly being stolen from them, and no one will stand for it.
• Darcy Clemence
  
  
  Gwen's mother; Many assume that taking care of five children would be cause for unimaginable stress levels, but in Mrs. Clemence's case, each child only brought her joy. Even without a designated super gene, her assiduous nature and insurmountable love made her a hero in Gwen's eyes.
  
  
  Adrien Clemence
  
  
  Gwen's father; because his job reached out of town, Gwyneth never saw much of her father, though the few special occasions in which she did felt as though she were getting to know a charming stranger.
  
  
  Boyce Clemence
  
  
  The eldest of the Clemence children by a full minute, Boyce and his twin Margo were the second and third children to be adopted by Darcy, and after joining a terrorist group aimed to attack the Commonwealth, have disappeared completely. He and his twin had, not surprisingly, developed the same superpower: speed.
  
  
  Margo Clemence
  
  
  The second eldest of the Clemence children; she disappeared alongside her fraternal twin, Boyce.
  
  
  Constance Clemence
  
  
  Only a few years older than Gwyneth, Constance Clemence was the first child to be adopted by Mrs. Clemence, and now owns a successful bakery in Dundalk, a few towns over. Constance had not been required to wear a limiter, as her power--the ability to turn her hands into lights at will--was deemed a harmless rank D. Gwen still keeps in close touch with her.
  
  
  Mordecai Clemence
  
  
  Mordy was the last child to be adopted by Mrs. Clemence, a year before the birth of Gwen. He is the only Clemence child without transhuman abilities--the only human--but Gwen has always considered his ability to nag someone to death quite extraordinary. He had been and will always be the typical, aggravating brother.
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  Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health	?????????​	02	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	?????????​	01	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	?????????​	03	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	?????????​	04	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	?????????​	06	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	?????????​	05	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  The ability Gwyneth uses predominantly is emotional aura manipulation, or pathokinesis: the ability to sense the emotions of those around her--or rather their aura, whether they be man or animal--and influence these emotions with the use of her own powerful aura. Only when she is physically touching a person can she transmit an emotion; once this emotion is conveyed, it rushes directly to her opponent's mind, feeding on emotions of its kind until that singular feeling overwhelms all other senses and greatly weakens their mental stability.
  
  
  For example, an aura of fear would thrive in the mind of an opponent who had been bullied as a child, just as an aura of happiness would blossom with memories of joyful trips to Disney land, or hopeful ambitions to travel the world.
  
  
  Secondary powers
  
  
  Psychic Navigation -- The ability to sense the presence of others by detecting their emotional pulse. Without looking towards the door, Gwyneth would be able to tell if a student had come to ask about a grade--not by the sound of their shoes, but by their aura of anxiety.
  
  
  Lie Detection -- A minor yet respectable perk to being an Empath, Gwen can pick out fact from fiction due to an irregularity in one's emotional pulse that dishonesty causes. This power is useless, however, against pathological liars, who have convinced themselves that what they say is true, generating no feelings of guilt or tension in their minds for Gwyneth to pick up on.
  
  
  Weaknesses
  
  
  Gwyneth's powers are not to be confused with that of a Telepath's; she is limited to sensing and manipulating only emotions, and is unaware of the thoughts that accompany them or that emotion's origin. This disconnect often leads to misperceptions and confusion on her part, as Gwen is often one to overanalyze an emotion if she is not given a clear-cut explanation of its reasoning.
  
  
  As with any proper supernatural ability, Gwen must pay a price when using her aura to manipulate the emotions of others--emotional backlash, per se. Immediately after transmitting an aura, she will experience a sharp, fleeting pain in her temporal lobe, something AEGIS had explained to her as a sudden inflammation of the amygdala (the main processer of emotion in the brain). She has learned to expect these surges of pain and handle them accordingly, though they still throw her off guard.
  
  
  A minor headache is not the only toll Gwyneth's power takes on her--the side-effect she truly dreads comes at night, in the form of blood-curdling nightmares. If she focuses a negative emotion on someone in the day, she is forced to endure a manifestation of that emotion in her dreams. Using an aura of helplessness, for instance, had once vivdly awoken her greatest fear of being buried alive, and she watched in horror as her loved ones maliciously tossed dirt upon her coffin, each heap lowering her further into a raging fire below.
  
  
  Needless to say, class didn't go very well the next morning.
  
  
  The occurrence of these vivid dreams varies, depending on the type of emotion--positive emotions elicit a positive dream, as compared to negative emotions--and the strength of the aura that was used. Gwen is comfortable sending a small aura of comfort through a pat on the shoulder, as all that will follow is the explosion of pain detailed above.
  
  
  Physically, Gwen's only real advantage when it comes to combat is her knowledge in the field of kyusho-jitsu--a form of martial arts focused on self-defense, specifically with the use of pressure points--that she accumulated from years of lessons in her younger years. Unfortunately, she is still lacking in the area of strength, as there was never any pressure for her to build muscle when her focus was finding and triggering pressure points.
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  "We might be the master of our own thought, but we are still slaves to our emotion."
  
  
  
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if you'll excuse me, i'm off to cry in a corner as i await rejection

 

[Swoob]

k yea, i cant wait so im just gonna put up my cs with the old pic and get started on a post later tonight prob, ill notify u guys when it changes

 

[AngstyAlb]

Oh my gosh this took way too long for me to get done because of technological and general life hiccups thrown my way. @welian


BRANDT, NIKOLAUS

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Nikolaus Claude Brandt
  Codename	Adonis
  Gender	Male
  Age	Twenty-Two
  Rank	A
  Role	Student
  Subject	N/A

  Race	Half German Half American
  Eyes	Blue
  Hair	Platinum Blond
  Height	6'4''
  Build	Lean & Muscular
  Limiter	Level 3; Active
  Notes	Smokes Frequently

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Courageous	03	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Altruistic	04	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Orderly	02	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Kind	05	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Proactive	03	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  Charismatic
  
  My greatest power lies with my ability to charm others. No limited can tame this innate ability of mine to cause others to go weak at the knees. Having the trust of others is a powerful tool, more so than you'd even think.
  
  Witty
  
  Before I feel the need to strike out in violence, I will use the power of my words to cut down those who would make an effort to slander my name or to try and hurt me.
  
  Self-Centered
  
  There is not individual left in this world that matters to me as much as myself, at least not anymore. The days of being a considerate son are gone, now I'm just a selfish brother.
  
  Bitter
  
  Before I was old enough to understand adult emotions such as rage and hatred, I felt them deep within the pit of stomach. When my family left my life at fifteen, I finally understood those feelings in every way they could potentially be defined. Eventually these emotions simmered, and your left with the man you see before you today.
  
  History
  
  For the past several years I've been living in America with my half brother Justin and his wife Alex. He took me in after my father's widow, his mother, kicked me out. She was tired of caring for her deceased husband's son from an affair. I get along with them decently, despite his trying to keep me on a tight leash given my powers and his reputation as a police officer.
  
  
  Eventually I was considered a risk to their well being for not being registered, given my powers appeared late in life, and a few months ago I began my time at Aegis and acquired my limiter. The feeling of sluggishness the limiter causes me to feel makes me feel almost sick, and as the days in the facility tick by I feel myself growing insane. At least they let me use the code name I suggested in jest.
• Character Name
  
  
  Description of relationship

• Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health:	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	02	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	03	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	02	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	09	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	04	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	01	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  Holographic Projection
  
  I can make objects and creatures appear out of nothing simply by distorting the already existing photons in the air. Of course, these apparitions aren’t
  
  tangible
  
  by any means, but it’s good for messing with people psychologically or those who aren’t aware of my abilities.
  
  Invisibility
  
  This is along the same lines as the projections, I can bend the photons around myself to mask my appearance. However, this doesn’t mean I can’t be bumped into, or heard, or sniffed out, but for the most part you won’t even know I’m there.
  
  Secondary powers
  
  
  Photokinetic Combat
  
  A man’s gotta defend himself in this world, doesn’t he? My power over light has given me the ability to be fast, very fast. My punches are faster than anything in this world, and if you’re not defensively capable you’re gonna get knocked before you know what’s hit you.
  
  Weaknesses
  
  I’m what you would call a bit of a nyctophobic. For those of you who are unaware what that means, I have an intense dislike and fear of darkness or being in darkness. It probably has to do with my light powers, knowing that while shrouded in darkness I am completely weak and vulnerable. Sometimes I have panic attacks if I can’t remove myself from the situation fast enough.
  
  
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Clemence, Gwyneth

Hm, the first thing I read, because that's where the most commentary is often needed/given, is powers. With your character I think the power already came up, and I don't really remember what or where. The subject was basically whether or not having emotional manipulation is god modding or not. Now, again, I can't remember where in the OOC thread this conversation was, but it was quite far back. Maybe it's a good idea to find those posts and read them, since that tiny thread basically said most of what there was to say without having a specific character with those powers.


Secondly, your personality and the points in the "Heroism Meter" don't really match up. You describe her as 'dis-organised' but on the scale of chaos to orderly you give her five points of nine, which, to me, indicates a mostly to somewhat organised character. 'Dis-organised' and 'overly analytical' also seem somewhat contradictory to me, but that's probably just me.


Lastly, because I work back to front, in your general tab you listed the limiter as being recently activated, to me this seems contradictory to the backstory, where she got a limiter at a young age, and limiters can't be turned off until you're 18. Did you mean recently re-activated, and if so, why would it be activated after a period where it wasn't active?

BRANDT, NIKOLAUS

Again, I work back to front, I don't know why. So let's start with your power. It's awesome. I was kind of waiting for someone to turn up that could basically make holographs. That said, I do have some questions and comments. Firstly, I'd move invisibility to the sub-powers header, since it's described as applied holographic projection. The second sub-power is basically that his fists can go the speed of light, am I right? How do his hands hold up to the pretty extreme friction and the like? Do the projected photons offer some sort of protection? Also, with two speedster characters already accepted, I'd shy away from saying faster than anything in this world. With the weaknesses it's implied that he has no power to actually create light, but does this mean he can create darkness by, uhm, 'pulling' photons from say, one side of the room to the other? Also, what is his range, both with how big he can make his projections as well as how far away from himself he can make them? Can he only manipulate photons he can see? How long can he hold a projection up? Definitely a nice touch that someone who would be so dependent on light is afraid of going without.


Again, I'm confused by the points you put in your 'Heroism Meter' versus how you described the character. You put 4 points in the 'Selfish' to 'Altruistic' scale, but describe him as 'Self-Centred'. The rest of the biography tab seems good to me.


Just one note on the General tab, and this is not at all something you need to change, but I think your character is the third or fourth (part) German in this RP.


Those are my two cents on both character sheets, and I didn't expect that to become so long. Two very interesting characters!

 

[Rida]

Hm, the first thing I read, because that's where the most commentary is often needed/given, is powers. With your character I think the power already came up, and I don't really remember what or where. The subject was basically whether or not having emotional manipulation is god modding or not. Now, again, I can't remember where in the OOC thread this conversation was, but it was quite far back. Maybe it's a good idea to find those posts and read them, since that tiny thread basically said most of what there was to say without having a specific character with those powers.
Secondly, your personality and the points in the "Heroism Meter" don't really match up. You describe her as 'dis-organised' but on the scale of chaos to orderly you give her five points of nine, which, to me, indicates a mostly to somewhat organised character. 'Dis-organised' and 'overly analytical' also seem somewhat contradictory to me, but that's probably just me.


Lastly, because I work back to front, in your general tab you listed the limiter as being recently activated, to me this seems contradictory to the backstory, where she got a limiter at a young age, and limiters can't be turned off until you're 18. Did you mean recently re-activated, and if so, why would it be activated after a period where it wasn't active?

Hi! Firstly, thank you for the lovely input!


Yes, we had a conversation about emotion manipulation when I first brought the topic up, and I tweaked the power according to each of their suggestions. We do have a Telepath in this roleplay already I believe, so an Empath would be the counterpart to that. I'm open to suggestions, however, so please let me know if you feel the power is still a little OP!


A five for order? Crap, I must have messed up the points. Thank you so much for pointing that out--I'll be sure to fix that. As for being disorganized and an over-thinker, I don't exactly understand how that would be contradictory, so I'd love it if you could explain your reasoning, sweets. I actually based those two off of myself


As for your last point, I figured this would cause confusion. Her limiter has been inactive for the past several years, but a recent "high-strain incident" had it reactivated. I'll probably change the wording for that.


Once again, thank you so much for looking my character over--it means a lot.

 

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Hi! Firstly, thank you for the lovely input!
Yes, we had a conversation about emotion manipulation when I first brought the topic up, and I tweaked the power according to each of their suggestions. We do have a Telepath in this roleplay already I believe, so an Empath would be the counterpart to that. I'm open to suggestions, however, so please let me know if you feel the power is still a little OP!


A five for order? Crap, I must have messed up the points. Thank you so much for pointing that out--I'll be sure to fix that. As for being disorganized and an over-thinker, I don't exactly understand how that would be contradictory, so I'd love it if you could explain your reasoning, sweets. I actually based those two off of myself


As for your last point, I figured this would cause confusion. Her limiter has been inactive for the past several years, but a recent "high-strain incident" had it reactivated. I'll probably change the wording for that.


Once again, thank you so much for looking my character over--it means a lot.

I'm not going to give an in depth reply, just a correction. The reply is coming tomorrow. The correction is that I misunderstood the chaos/Orderly scale it's how much they follow the rules, so those two don't really contradict! Sorry!