OOC Discussion

[Nyu Nyu]

So a bear walks into a bar...





Okay, I don't know where I'm going with that. Ah, but I filled out the app and I figured I should letcha know I'll be slam dunking it into this chat soon enough. (I'm glad I got here in time to see there's a deadline... Nothing like the last minute, hah.) My only question is do I post it in a spoiler or something or do I just go for it?


Formatting terrifies me.

 

[philocaly]

So... Am I... Accepted?

 

[philocaly]

Part three! Wow. I did not realize how many character applications there were - and these are just the ones that are still under consideration! This is great! I think this is everyone so far who hasn't been accepted, right?
@Aldur Forgehammer Howdy do!

Spoiler

Ooo, a speedster! That's one of my favorite kinds of superhumans!


I'm really intrigued about the hints you've dropped in Lelantos's Biography tab about her line of work. It sounds decidedly criminal and violent. But I'll leave off on this for now since you haven't yet supplied her history.


As for her superspeed, I have a couple suggestions. Since you've given her a low stat for strength, I'd recommend removing the secondary power of increased strength when she's in superspeed mode or increasing her strength stat. As it is now, it sounds a bit contradictory - and convenient. Or maybe a better term for her secondary power is that she has an advanced level of shock absorption. It's not that she's strong, but when she hits something fast enough to obliterate the bones in any normal human's body, she can take the hit without dying - maybe only a minor sprain. Maybe this might fall more in line with her above average level of Toughness?


Have you considered, too, the effects of friction on her body? How are her joints holding up? Her muscles? Does she need protective gear to avoid wind friction on her skin and eyes? Just some thoughts about other weaknesses she might have.


@Chibii Super interesting thought. I mean, surfing a tornado sounds badass and all kinds of awesome, but it's interesting that that would be the only time Seiko could control them. It does make sense, though, since she'd have constant contact with the swirling vortex of doom whirlwind. And in order to "stay afloat" she'd probably need to continually push air into it to keep it from dying out on her. That'd be a nasty fall, wouldn't it?


@Rida It is an interesting power to consider! But don't be so sure that other characters will avoid yours because she can affect their emotions. Maybe the effects are so subtle other people don't realize she's the one affecting them? It just happens and we, the readers and players of this role-play, are aware of when her power works while our characters are not. But hey, no pressure! I'm sure you'll come up with something fantazzle!


Just as I thought! It was supposed to be a weakness of sorts, that she's potentially releasing something that'll kill her teammates.

 

[RemainingQuestions]

As for his education - my bad for assuming he's had an American education. I do recall you said he was Dutch. Please don't feel pressured to change a thing, but if you'd like for him to have had an American education, I can certainly help you on that subject. And don't feel self-conscious about his age. When I said I thought he was young, I didn't mean I thought he was under qualified, just that he was, you know, young. I can absolutely believe he'd be a teacher at that age, but whether he would realistically be one at Facility 108 in the world welian has created, I couldn't say. You'd have to wait for her ruling on the matter. It's possible he could be an intern, though I'm not sure if AEGIS hires interns. He could always be non-faculty staff, too. But don't settle! Keep gunning for that teacher spot! I don't think you need to change his role based on his age, so stick to what you want to do. K?

No, Denzil definitely had an American education, I just haven't (' ). As for the age thing, in my mind he was fresh out out of university (or whatever it's called, college?) where he did take several classes in education, making him certified to be a teacher, but not very experienced. I prefer to keep him on the not that experienced side of the scale.


The Dutch thing is more that his Dad was Dutch and emigrated to America, but he still has aunts and uncles over in this frog land that he talks to/visits pretty often, not much more. If he had a Dutch education I could even make him a bit younger, maybe, my sister is going to take a second masters in education (for the course specifically though) and when she's done with that she'll be 26. That said, maybe it is easier for me to simply make him a Dutch guy that emigrated, because then I know everything about the education he would have received (I'm taking my exams this year, and I know what I want to study in university, but by the gods, school won't stop hitting me over the head with more information I don't want/need or that I already knew.)


Well, I'm of to school, and after that, and some more thinking about things during that, I'll update his CS

 

[Aldur]

Ooo, a speedster! That's one of my favorite kinds of superhumans!
I'm really intrigued about the hints you've dropped in Lelantos's Biography tab about her line of work. It sounds decidedly criminal and violent. But I'll leave off on this for now since you haven't yet supplied her history.


As for her superspeed, I have a couple suggestions. Since you've given her a low stat for strength, I'd recommend removing the secondary power of increased strength when she's in superspeed mode or increasing her strength stat. As it is now, it sounds a bit contradictory - and convenient. Or maybe a better term for her secondary power is that she has an advanced level of shock absorption. It's not that she's strong, but when she hits something fast enough to obliterate the bones in any normal human's body, she can take the hit without dying - maybe only a minor sprain. Maybe this might fall more in line with her above average level of Toughness?


Have you considered, too, the effects of friction on her body? How are her joints holding up? Her muscles? Does she need protective gear to avoid wind friction on her skin and eyes? Just some thoughts about other weaknesses she might have.

It does fall more into Toughness than anything. She doesn't have increased strength when using her powers but increased resistance. I do think I need to replace "strong" with something else as she isn't really a body-builder.


And yes. It does affect her body even with the resistance. I stated that she can't maintain the speed for long without going blind and deaf temporarily. You did bring up some good points though. I'll make her abilities more specific and update her History soon.

 

[Pigeon]

@Chibii Ah, the cons of playing with weather. But the unpredictability is what makes it so fun!


@Aldur Forgehammer I noticed the blind and deaf drawbacks when I read your profile. I'm curious, are those drawbacks due to wind friction specifically (and whatever other effects apply when travelling close to the speed of sound) or are they due to shock from overworking her body? Both? Also, what ethnicity is she? This isn't necessary - I just don't know where her name comes from. And this is probably a really stupid question, but is Ioana her first or last name? There's a part where you refer to her as Ioana so I wasn't sure if you were calling her by her surname or if that, in fact, was her given name.


This snowball/capture the flag test I've been reading about sounds super duper fun! Aaand... That's all I have to say about that. XP

 

[lazee]

Made a few tweaks to Klaus, hats off to @Pigeon for the constructive criticism. Tell me if the block thingamajigs don't show. Or any problems with the code, mobile editing is a real tricky business.


vos Scheiffer, Klaus

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Klaus vos Scheiffer
  Codename	N/A
  Gender	Male
  Age	50
  Rank	A
  Role	Disciplinary Counselor
  Subject	N/A

  Race	Caucasian (German)
  Eyes	Light blue
  Hair	Short and loosely combed, bright blonde
  Height	1.80 m
  Build	Athletic and slim
  Limiter	Level 3, inactive
  Notes	Looks astoundingly young for an almost elder

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	?????????​	Courageous	6	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	?????????​	Altruistic	9	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	?????????​	Orderly	8	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	?????????​	Kind	3	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	?????????​	Proactive	1	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  +Responsible: The absolute last thing Klaus ever wants is for someone to fall into harm under his supervision. He feels that he is held responsible for the well-being of everyone in the Training Facility, even though that is hardly the case. And due to the...destructive potential of his abilities, he will shy away from using them, unless again, the situation demands it. Perhaps there was a past incident that made him so 'caring'...
  
  
  ~Down to Earth: You don't live 'till 50 without having strong moral values. A character of integrity, Klaus keeps his view on the world realistic, without drifting away into the idealistic or cynical extremes. Simple and clean is the way he does things. Everything, to be precise.
  
  
  ~Strict: A by-the-books man every day of the week, Klaus does not tolerate even the slightest of deviations from the predefined laws and he will respond to such behaviors with appropriate disciplinary action. This gives him a bad reputation among most students.
  
  
  -Reclusive: It is a widely accepted fact that Klaus never really gets around like normal, social creatures would. He is only present should the situation demand his presence and even then, he rarely speaks unless expected to. Due to his lack of prominence aside from his name, a great deal of urban legends tend to rise concerning this enigmatic counselor. The truth is he just wants to keep his circle of acquaintances small and reliable. His family, work and himself are all that matters and the rest is just distraction.
  
  
  History
  
  
  Born in quiet old Aachen on March 19th, 1990, Klaus vos Scheiffer grew up in a unified Germany and with parents of an "American" mindset. They were consumerists, obsessed with the vogue of the times and later moved to the United States, New York, to be precise. A place better suited for their lifestyle, surely. But not Klaus's, not one bit. The boy liked the tranquility of a small town like Aachen. Even Berlin seemed downright serene compared to the Big Apple. He felt like a fish out of water in the bustling metropolitan city and later grew to be sheltered, introverted. Antisocial, even.
  
  
  Klaus' ability went unnoticed for quite some time, only coming under his knowledge in his early university days. He was walking home late at night after an exceptionally stressful day of study when some drunk hooligans decided to fuck with the remainder of his day by beating his 'little bitch ass'. As they proceeded to beat him to a pulp, Klaus could only pray silently for them to leave him alone, go away and never come back.
  
  
  But he never expected for it to come true.
  
  
  Klaus heard a sound resembling steam coming out of a compressor and then screams. Horrible, resounding screams of agony. He opened his eyes and found that the troublemakers' bodies themselves were slowly deteriorating, as if they were coated in acid. It looked painful. Soon after, he was indeed left alone, his harassers gone and never to come back. Not relieved, but fearing what horrors he had seen, had done, Klaus ran away from the scene and sheltered himself from the world, afraid of the destruction he could potentially cause.
  
  
  Then people representing "Commonwealth" approached him and informed just what exactly was happening to him. They told him of the 'super gene' within him which had stayed dormant for an abnormally long time and were there to assess the extent of his powers and help him control it. Klaus instantly jumped at the chance. He was determined to not be the cause of further manslaughter.
  
  
  Over the course of his assessment, Klaus had been deemed an "A-rank". Much was learned about how his powers could be utilized. He decided that he liked his ability to control poison. The folks at Commonwealth recognized out his promising grasp over his abilities and encouraged him to apply for a Blue Card and become a vigilante, but Klaus opted to refuse. He simply could not risk letting his powers loose in the proximity of innocents.
  
  
  The day the Rapture Incident happened, Klaus was attending the funeral of both of his parents in Germany. Both dying in a car crash, he deeply regretted not being able to accompany them in their final moments. After said incident, Klaus retreated from Commonwealth to get over his grief. As if there was a Commonwealth to return to, but beside the point. It was in this time frame that he met his first, one and only love, Karina Larasati.
  
  
  Karina was an INTERPOL agent from Indonesia, on leave and enjoying a much-needed vacation in Berlin. The two met in a coffee shop and immediately connected on the grounds of both originating from organizations that don't really care about them. They continued to keep in touch until everything culminated in Klaus proposing to her on the spring of 2020, the reception held soon after.
  
  
  Klaus vos Scheiffer was thirty-six and living peacefully with his wife and six-year old son in suburban Boston when A.E.G.I.S was founded. He was actually one of the first to be approached for helping young supers maintain emotional control, since adolescent hormones and volatile powers never mixed well. He remained a teacher of Emotional Discipline in the first facility for some eight years before being transferred to one Facility 108. There, he requested to be a Disciplinary Counselor and occasional substitute teacher instead of an active teacher due to his tight schedule. And so he remains to this day, keeping the facility safe and disciplined.
  
  
  
• 
  
  
  Johan and Erina vos Scheiffer, both deceased: His loving parents, they were by his side whenever he needed it most. Right up until they died, of course. Klaus regretted not being able to bond with them more than he should have.
  
  
  Karina vos Scheiffer, 41: Lover, best friend, soul mate, wife. All words to describe Karina to him. Hard-headed, witty and confident, Klaus wouldn't have her any other way.
  
  
  Arya vos Scheiffer, 20: The son Klaus never knew he needed, he is a perfect mix of both of his parents' qualities; polite and caring like his father and just as daring as his mother. Klaus sees to it that his son is safe and well-treated at all times.
  
  
  

• Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health:	?????????​	3	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	?????????​	3	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	?????????​	1	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	?????????​	3	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	?????????​	6	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	?????????​	5	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  Poison Control: Klaus is able to produce and control to a certain degree various types of poison, from a noxious haze emitted orally to lethal, flesh-eating poison from his skin. Exposure to the haze for more than two minutes is fatal to most humans. The aqueous poison from his skin kills much faster and can even disintegrate organic matter and tissue.
  
  
  Secondary powers
  
  
  Enhanced metabolism: Klaus has developed a unique mutation to his somatic cells. His bodily fluids (blood, urine, saliva, semen, sweat, etc.) act as powerful antidotes and antitoxins with antiseptic properties. Researchers theorize that it is this that causes him to look far younger than he does, but no one is certain about it.
  
  
  Poison immunity: Maybe it goes without saying, but Klaus is indeed immune to both natural venom and artificial poisons. Even his own, to a fault.
  
  
  Weaknesses
  
  
  Lack of reliability: Klaus cannot exactly control where his poison gas goes or flows, so he can do little to stop it from, say, hurting someone he doesn't want to hurt.
  
  
  Physically frail: While one could say from a medical standpoint that he is healthy and fit, Klaus lacks any sort of physical endurance and fortitude. His stamina leaves little beyond intensive jogging and making hot steamy love. A few good hits where it counts can easily neutralize him.
  
  
  Ineffective against inorganic substances: Poison can't melt steel beams. His abilities only really affect living organisms and their bodies. It is pathetically useless against robots, people with metal-related powers and walls. Fire can also neutralize its flow.
  
  
  Unsustainable: Emitting a stream of purple haze or excreting poison for more than three consecutive is extremely taxing on his already pitiful stamina. Researchers theorize that overexerting his powers so can prove fatal to himself as, sooner or later, his body can no longer be able to support his poison, his poison eventually starting to eat him alive on a cellular level, diminishing his poison immunity and dying with a taste of his own bad medicine. There won't even be anything left to bury. This is all theoretical and unproven, obviously.
  
  
  Effective range of approx. 15 meters: Beyond this range, the poison gas will have been saturated in the air so much that it is damn near harmless to the human body.
  
  
  
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[Aldur]

@Pigeon


I'd say it's from overworking her body. Her father's Romanian and her mother's American. Ioana (pronounced ee-wah-nah) is her first name and Claudia is her middle name. I also added more to History. Still not completely done tho.

 

[Aldur]

I'm done with History. Now I need to fix some stuff and pretty up the Gallery Tab

 

[Giyari]

6 pages in one day fucking hell people calm your shit!


I'm not even going to bother reading back through these, literally too much effort.

 

[philocaly]

I'm just gonna sit here and wait for acceptance... Or rejection... Which ever it is...

 

[TheDaftStudent]

I'm just gonna sit here and wait for acceptance... Or rejection... Which ever it is...

@welian

 

[Aldur]

You guys have no chill. She's most likely in class.

 

[philocaly]

[QUOTE="Aldur Forgehammer]You guys have no chill. She's most likely in class.

[/QUOTE]
Whenever I'm in class, she's out of class .___.


Timezones hate me.

 

[yoikes]

@too much idea Your updated 5th and 6th weaknesses look good! I do have another question for you now: what is the purpose of having to see someone use their powerfor Mitch to absorb it? Actually, now that I write it, I'm wondering if it's something of a power restriction. Just curious how it would work with people who don't physically look any different when they're using their power. Anyway, this is nothing I thinkneeds to be added ot altered in your profile. I was just curious.

yes, it's a power restriction.

1. I think that it will be too easy if Mitch could just borrow someone's power and learn how to use it, and when an emergency comes she could just borrow it again and mastered it already.
   
2. You could say that her copying power 'learn' with her. Mitch learned how to use it while her power 'learned' how to generate the same power.
   
3. It is indeed will be a little bit of tricky with 'unseen power' like telepathic ability, nullification, and maybe chronokinesis/time stopping. Mitch have to 'get it' first before she could copy and use that power, so she does not exactly 100% able to borrow any kind of power (For example, a pyrokinesis ability. It's an ability that enables you to control fire, both ones around the user and the user could also produce flame out of nothing. You could use it this way and that way etc)
   

 

[Aldur]

[QUOTE="Aldur Forgehammer]Ioana, Călătoru

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Călătoru Ioana Claudia
  Codename	Lelantos
  Gender	Female
  Age	22
  Rank	B
  Role	Student
  Subject	N/A

  Race	Caucasian
  Eyes	Hazel
  Hair	Platinum(Originally Brown)
  Height	5’7
  Build	Toned, curvacious
  Limiter	Level 3, Active
  Notes	A fistfull of piercings and a sleeve tattoo on her left hand. Also lip scar.

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Courageous	02	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Altruistic	03	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Orderly	01	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Kind	03	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Proactive	02	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  +Persuasive: As plan C, Ioana will turn to her communication skills. Persuasion is a powerful tool she can call to when all else fails and can be fairly convincing to most folks. She can fake a number of moods and is great at parties though all parties she went to in the past ended poorly.
  
  
  =Quiet: Ioana is often pretty quiet as she tries to minimize the amount of sound coming from her general direction. Her voice will not get raised too frequently unless it's needed.
  
  
  =Desensitized: It became known after a while, that if you hired Ioana to break into and steal from a place, that a few guards, innocent or not, might disappear. Gang members, security officers, they're all just bags of ketchup when it comes to completing a job.
  
  
  -Paranoid: In her line of work, not many people can be trusted and Ioana did not want to take any chances. She still believes that until she knows for sure what motives a person has, they're out to get her.
  
  
  History
  
  
  Once upon a time, a man came to America. He got married and had a daughter: Ioana. What this man also had, was a shady background. Shady enough to catch up with him and his newly acquired family. Ioana's mother died in a traffic collision when she was 7. The police said it was an accident.
  
  
  Father was devastated. But for the sake of his daughter, he didn't turn to alcohol, but instead tried to fill up his time with Ioana. He tried to make up for her missing mother. And it worked out. For a long time, they were happy. Ioana's father even taught her how to always win at hide-and-seek. And when she was a teenager, dad taught her how to properly use a weapon in case the bad people inserted themselves into their lives again.
  
  
  Sure enough, they did, during a game of hide-and-seek. They broke into the house, beat daddy up real bad and shot him up. "That's what you get for running away and having a family. Oamenii ca noi sunt blestemați, Ionel.(People like us are cursed, Ionel.) We can't have normal lives." And that was it. Ioana couldn't bring herself to get out of her hiding spot for the whole day. She promised herself that she'll bring the people who did this the anguish she felt tenfold.
  
  
  Fast forward to late adolescence. She survived by stealing, breaking in places and doing small-time jobs for drug traffickers. It wasn't until she received a criptic message and a mask. It was a babysitting message. It gave Ioana an address, instructions on taking care of the little brats and had been told to 'be discrete'. When she arrived at the location Ioana was met by about a dozen of dangerous individuals armed with blunt weapons and firearms.
  
  
  Ioana realized she was sent there to clean out the house. And somehow, she did. Fast. Way too fast. She felt incredible, offing two goons one after another in two seconds and in different rooms. It only escalated from there. Jobs got bigger. She broke into warehouses, guarded places until one day she got tipped off the location of the guy who made an orphan out of her. Ioana killed him and everyone else who was in his safehouse, ironically she told him "Eu sunt blestemul."(I am the curse.)
  
  
  After a while, she was arrested and forced into joining Training Facility 108.
  
  
  
• Parents:
  
  
  -Călătoru Ionel Andrei: Father. Deader than a morgue. Got gangs to thank for that. Ioana loved him greatly.
  
  
  -Călătoru Sarah Julia: Mother. Six feet under. She died when Ioana was 6. Rough times but her dad made up for it as long as he could.
  
  
  Friends:
  
  
  -Who needs friends?
  
  
  

• Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health:	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	02	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	01	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	04	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	07	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	04	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	02	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  Lelantos can move up to the speed of sound. Notice the omnipresent voice describing this character chose to say "move" not "run". It's because she can move any individual part of her body and all of them at once. There is a big difference between running fast and punching someone in the face while your arm is moving at a thousand feet per second.
  
  
  Secondary powers
  
  
  While moving at high speeds, Lelantos' body becomes more resilient. Resistant enough for her to absorb the reaction to her action of hitting someone or something at the speed of sound without the harshest consequences.
  
  
  Her senses are also heightened passively. Call it a glorified spidey sense or a superhuman sense of environment awareness. Simply put, she can dodge any incoming objects while traveling at high speeds and sitting still.
  
  
  Weaknesses
  
  
  If her body can be kept completely still, she's just a sitting duck. Bullets, debris, etc. affect her how it would affect a normal human.
  
  
  Depending on the caliber of the bullet it can penetrate Lelantos' skin even while moving. If she won't be aware of the bullet coming, she won't dodge it.
  
  
  Lelantos cannot maintain speed for longer than a few seconds. Going over her limit will render Lelantos temporarily blind and deaf.
  
  
  Lelantos is not strong and all of her powers are relying on her ability to move or stay hidden.
  
  
  Punching a person might not hurt Lelantos much, but even with her resistance, punching something solid like a wall, repeatedly, would hurt her in the long run.
  
  
  
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[/QUOTE]
I think... it's done. If anyone wants to throw some more feedback, I'd appreciate it.

 

[RemainingQuestions]

De Klerk, Denzil

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Denzil De Klerk
  Codename	N/A
  Gender	Male
  Age	28
  Rank	C
  Role	Teacher
  Subject	Political Powers

  Race	American (Dutch)
  Eyes	Brown
  Hair	Brown, in dreads
  Height	6'1"
  Build	Muscular
  Limiter	Level 1, inactive
  Notes	Always has a flower in his hair.

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	?????????​	Courageous	06	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	?????????​	Altruistic	07	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	?????????​	Orderly	01	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	?????????​	Kind	08	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	?????????​	Proactive	03	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  Kind-Hearted. Denzil has a large heart, and he genuinly cares about most people, some would even say that he would give a supervillain a second chance.
  
  
  Forgetful. Denzil tends to forget things, not out of malice, but because he simply didn't remember. It seems like he is perpetually late, or if he is on time, he forgot something.
  
  
  Trust-worthy. If you tell Denzil a secret, he will keep it to the grave, no matter what. That doesn't mean he doesn't do anything with it though, he is likely to try to find some sort of solution without telling the people he's asking why he's asking, or he will try to solve it with whomever told him the secret.
  
  
  Down to earth. Denzil is very realistic in his view of the world. While he wants to give everyone second and third and even seventh chances, he knows that some people never change. His dreams aren't as big as world peace, but more along the lines of 'get everyone in my class to pass.'
  
  
  History
  
  
  Denzil grew up in a loving family, with only a significantly older brother. When he was a kid, he loved to help his mother garden, and they still have the strong bond that they built up in those moments. When he was older, he would talk about politics with his father, much to the annoyance of his mother, who was a lot less politically active than the De Klerk men. The manifestation of his powers didn't come in a traumatic event, and his parents already saw the signs early on. His brother, who had began officer training for the army, and had moved out at that point, was more surprised. Frankly, he was scared of his baby brother suddenly having more power than he ever would. Shortly thereafter, he moved away for the army, and Denzil fell completely out of contact with him.
  
  
  Denzil followed his passion and went on to study History, and because he was often asked about political events to do with superpowered people, he took a few classes in that, to fill in his open credits. After he got his Bachelor in History, it was a logical move to also get a Bachelor in Politics, since he already finished some of the required classes previously, he completed that with a minor in superpowered politics. Still not satisfied, he took a Master in Education.
  
  
  After his Master, he quickly got hired to teach at a High School, but after one year he realized that it wasn't the challenge he wanted. With some help of family, he found Aegis and started the process to emigrate to the United States of America. After that, he still had to prove that he could also teach in English, not just Dutch, which took another year. After those long years taking tests and following lectures, Denzil was finally ready to switch places.
  
  
  
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  Family
  
  
  Jennifer De Klerk-Triggs
  
  
  Denzil has a great relationship with his mother, and he keeps in frequent contact with her.
  
  
  Rutger De Klerk
  
  
  Denzil has a good relationship with his father, and when they talk it's often in Dutch, his dad says so Denzil doesn't get out of practice, but Denzil thinks that he misses his homeland sometimes.
  
  
  Ashton De Klerk
  
  
  Denzil had a strained relationship with his much older brother, and it only worsened when it became known that Denzil had powers. After Ashton joined the army they had no more contact, but Denzil still hopes that one day he can reconcile with his brother.
  
  
  Colleagues

• Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health:	?????????​	03	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	?????????​	02	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	?????????​	03	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	?????????​	03	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	?????????​	02	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	?????????​	02	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  Denzil can manipulate, control and animate plants of all kinds. He can make them grow in certain patterns, he can make them move and, depending on the size of the plant and the how long it was dead, he can even bring them back to life. For this, he always needs contact.
  
  
  Weaknesses
  
  
  Denzil can only manipulate or animate plants that he can see, and if he has no physical contact with the plant it's also harder to manipulate or animate it. The larger a plant is, the slower the manipulation or animation is, and the more energy it takes from Denzil. Generally speaking he can't manipulate or animate something larger than a bush without direct contact. If a small plant is far away it also becomes more difficult or even impossible to manipulate or animate. Denzil also becomes tired more easily if he goes very long without contact with plants, which can be an issue in a city, and which is why he tends to always have a flower on him. He has a weakness for harsh weather, be it too hot, too cold, too wet or too dry, just like plants tend to do. He also needs to drink more than the average person, and if he gets dehydrated his powers become weaker, the longer he goes without hydrating, the weaker his powers become until they eventually disappear completely.
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  Just add a flower.

Here is Denzil2.0, with a completely re-vamped history, and with some changes to his powers too.


Edit: @welian

 

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[QUOTE="Aldur Forgehammer]I think... it's done. If anyone wants to throw some more feedback, I'd appreciate it.

[/QUOTE]
This is a tiny thing, but the name used in general and history doesn't match with the name used in powers. That said, it looks really good, I especially like the history. Also, the weakness where her senses stop functioning if she keeps her power up for too long really well thought out.

 

[Sunbather]

@Sunbather You. You're cool.

Spoiler

Arcadia sound a-mazing! I'm particularly loving your use of creative writing to illustrate her redundant, repetitive, and overall inarticulate nature of speech. It's so wonderfully characterized, and it drives the point home: Arcadia rambles. It's her process. Get over it.

xD
I also love that you've chosen a chaotic neutral alignment for her - she's a regular Jack Sparrow, huh? But, you know, for the technological age of superhumans.


One question I have for you - can Arcadia only use her power when she has zapped herself into a computer/machine? Or is she like Micah from Heroes who can "talk to technology" by simply touching the device?


And I'm just putting this last thing out there: how long can Arcadia survive inside a computer? If she were trapped and she refuses to emerge in her physical body, could she live in a computer indefinitely? Or does she need to come out for food and water (and air?) eventually? I'm also wondering if she can only be truly trapped in computers that are air-gapped, ones that have never had connection to the internet. If a device has some internet connection, could she theoretically travel along those lines into another device?


I know next to nothing about technology, so sincere apologies if what I've just said is laughable nonsense.





Those are actually great questions! Okay, so she cannot just talk to technology, no. But she can basically let her body just sit there and look like she'd dose off while "being" inside the machine. So she definitely has to make contact, basically. She has no trouble breathing whatsoever when inside. As for food and water, that genuinely never crossed my mind. I'm thinking she doesn't need it to remain existent, but her body would show decay if deprived of nutrients for too long.


She can travel through the internet, but not if it's not connected at all. Previous connections don't influence that.

 

[Aldur]

This is a tiny thing, but the name used in general and history doesn't match with the name used in powers. That said, it looks really good, I especially like the history. Also, the weakness where her senses stop functioning if she keeps her power up for too long really well thought out.

The one I used in her powers is the codename. To be fair, I decided on her codename before her actual name, but I left that there cause I thought it'd be cool. And it's nice to hear you like the history. I think it's pretty cheesy, but thanks.

 

[call me rae]

[QUOTE="Nyu Nyu]
So a bear walks into a bar...



Okay, I don't know where I'm going with that. Ah, but I filled out the app and I figured I should letcha know I'll be slam dunking it into this chat soon enough. (I'm glad I got here in time to see there's a deadline... Nothing like the last minute, hah.) My only question is do I post it in a spoiler or something or do I just go for it?


Formatting terrifies me.

[/QUOTE]
You just post it in the chat. Maybe tag welian just so she knows to look for it.

 

[call me rae]

@Aldur Forgehammer - could you repost your profile so we can see the finished version?


But yeah the changes you made seem awesome, eager to se her finished profile.

 

[Swoob]

right so


@welian


TRAMMEL, EDEN

• General
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name	Eden Trammel
  Codename	N/A
  Gender	Male
  Age	Nineteen
  Rank	A
  Role	Student
  Subject	N/A

  Race	Caucasian
  Eyes	Green
  Hair	Hot pink
  Height	6' 1"
  Build	Slightly thin but still healthy and lean (rather average)
  Limiter	Level Three; Active
  Notes	A few (negligible) scars from those "high-strain incidents"

• Heroism Meter
  
  
  

  Less Heroic	Points	More Heroic	Total	Description
  Flighty	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Courageous	08	Do they have a pair of steel, or do they prefer to exit before chaos strikes?
  Selfish	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Altruistic	07	Are they motivated to help others, or do they help themselves first?
  Chaotic	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Orderly	01	Are laws and regulations "suggestions", or written in stone?
  Cruel	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Kind	04	Are they genuinely nice to people, or do they enjoy causing distress?
  Reactionary	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	Proactive	08	Are they content to watch events unfold, or do they jump in and guide things?

  
  
  Personality
  
  
  
  Caring
  
  
  
  
  Though it certainly can't be guessed from the way he normally acts, Eden genuinely cares about others in the end. Despite his mischievous and somewhat rude behavior, he doesn't enjoy causing harm to others deep down (though he wouldn't normally admit it). He is, by no means, a bad kid inside. He just likes to mess around a bit.
  
  
  
  Laidback
  
  
  
  
  Eden isn't one to stress out about things. At all. In fact, his seeming lack of urgency, fear, and academic motivation sometimes feels borderline inhuman. However, that doesn't mean he is devoid of emotion – he's far from it. He enjoys playing around and making light of situations.
  
  
  
  Rowdy
  
  
  
  
  Loud and disorderly, it is often easy to get tangled up in Eden's atmosphere. He is impulsive, fast and places fun and happiness above most other things – which has both positive and negative results.
  
  
  
  Troublemaker
  
  
  
  
  Though he may be a good kid on the inside, the rambunctious young adult certainly isn't on the outside. Eden is extremely mischievous and enjoys the thrill in taking risks. Most of the time, this results in him and others receiving harsh punishment. His uncouth, chaotic aura and terrible reputation often dissuades calmer and tamer people from associating themselves with him.
  
  
  
  NOTE: Delusional
  
  
  
  
  This is a warning for Eden's peers and teachers: Eden is not completely mentally healthy. Due to traumatizing events he has experienced in his early childhood, he experiences hallucinations and delusions from time to time. Occasionally, you may find him interacting with or referencing somebody who is not there – this is his deceased mother; he has created an image of her in his mind and does not know that she is actually dead. This is completely harmless, and it is strongly suggested that, for the sake of his mental stability, those who encounter these instances simply "play along." Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.
  
  
  History
  
  
  
  The marriage of Eliana and Michael Trammel was one of bliss and normalcy. From their honeymoon to the birth and growth of their child, Eden, everything went along without a hitch. They were a bit lower-class and struggled with money at times, but they made things work. So nobody could've expected that the young boy they raised would turn out to be a super – or that, in one day, everything the family had built would be ruined.
  
  
  As most freak accidents go, everything started perfectly normal. Splurging on their money, the family went to an amusement park for a special treat. The young Eden Trammel was captivated by the world of kiddy rides. Eliana and Michael took him around the park, watching him go on all the rides he was eligible to go on. At the same time, walking through the colorful gates was a dangerous super who just "couldn't take it anymore." The despair, the carnage, the loss, it all happened merely by chance. Wrong place, wrong time.
  
  
  When Eden was blasted from his mechanical car and began slipping out of consciousness on the red-stained pavement, it was clear he wasn't going to make it. Like any mother would do, the incomparably distraught Eliana ran to her dying child in tears and scooped him up into her arms. Whether it was done by uncontrollable survival instinct or purely accidental, it was at that moment that the eight-year old's powers first manifested. Regaining his vision, he looked on in terror as his blood-covered mother reeled backwards and fell on her back, unmoving.
  
  
  Eden's father was a good man. Even after witnessing the event and being plagued with its aftermath, he tried his best not to abandon his son. He even lied about what he saw to protect him from getting a limiter on him and being shipped away. But with that kind of situation, it was inevitable. As they sunk further and further into poverty, the bonds between the two deteriorated. Eventually, Eden left his broken father at twelve with a lifetime of emotions that he couldn't understand and took to the streets.
  
  
  For four years, he lived the life of a criminal. His days often consisted of stealing, running, graffiti, and talking to his mother. It happened gradually, but the shock from the event caused his brain to trick itself in defense, creating a lie of a mother so he wouldn't be forced to accept the reality of the situation. Even Eden himself doesn't remember much of his dark period, and what he does remember, he vehemently refuses to discuss (especially why he chose to dye his hair pink or why he still maintains the color).
  
  
  Finally, he began to calm down, and sought out Commonwealth to help him understand himself. After demonstrating his powers, he was assigned rank A, got a level three limiter slapped on him, and was sent on his way to Aegis Training Facility 108.
• Eliana Trammel
  Mother [deceased] – "Lives with" and talks to his imaginary version of Eliana
  
  
  
  
  Michael Trammel
  Father – No longer communicates with him, whereabouts unknown
  
  
  
  

• Ability	Points	Total	Description
  Health	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	05	The ability to resist illness and recover quickly from injuries, overall health.
  Strength	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	01	Physical strength, the ability to strike hard, lift heavy objects, and so on.
  Toughness	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	04	Endurance and stamina, the ability to take a hit and still keep going.
  Agility	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	03	Speed, dexterity, nimbleness - agility is the ability to move quickly.
  Intelligence	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	02	Not book smarts, but the ability to perceive and retain lots of information.
  Willpower	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮​	08	Strength of mind, the ability to stay focused and determined.

  
  
  Primary Power
  
  
  
  Eden's power is simple, but dangerous — wound transferral. Through physical contact, he possesses the ability to either transfer any injury to another or relieve them of an injury and take it on himself.
  
  
  Secondary Powers
  
  
  
  As a supplementary (and possibly resulting) power, his body possesses a heightened ability to repair itself. It isn't anything so grand as to call it regeneration, but he can recover just a bit faster.
  
  
  Weaknesses
  
  
  Just like the power's strengths, its weaknesses are also straightforward.
  
  
  
  To activate his power, he must be in physical contact with his target. It may not seem like a huge weakness at first, but when he isn't touching his target, he is essentially on the battlefield with only his natural talents to protect him.
  
  
  
  
  Transferring others' injuries to himself is, quite obviously, very dangerous — just because he can heal a bit faster doesn't mean it has any less effect.
  
  
  
  
  Normally, a limiter wouldn't do much actual harm to its wearer, but when those "high-strain incidents" are applied to Eden's power, the results can be frighteningly detrimental. When the limiter has to keep his powers in check, his ability to pass off wounds is blocked, and he sustains them.
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[M0N0]

@Lazy Rocktime


You might want to change the Vos in his name. It's Dutch and Isn't like Von or Zu, which are put between the first and last name. So It doesn't really make sense.


Vos Itself is a surname. So you wouldn't be able to use It with Scheiffer.


It would,however, make sense If you changed his name to Klaus de Vos.

 

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[QUOTE="Aldur Forgehammer]The one I used in her powers is the codename. To be fair, I decided on her codename before her actual name, but I left that there cause I thought it'd be cool. And it's nice to hear you like the history. I think it's pretty cheesy, but thanks.

[/QUOTE]
I... did not connect those two, oops. The premise has the tendency to go cliche but the way you wrote it makes it not cliche. Or at least, that's what I think.