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Here's the story with my CS: The coding is fine.


It should be fine.


It should work.


Nobody can find anything wrong with the BBCode.


It didn't work.


I'd like all critique atm to deal with the character itself. Please tag me, because I'm not watching this thread, honestly. :P





LEE, REN


  • Full NameRen Lee
    CodenameTBD
    GenderFemale
    Age15
    RankD
    RoleStudent
    SubjectN/A
    RaceAsian
    Eyes Amber
    Hair Green
    Height4'9"
    BuildSmall and Thin
    LimiterN/A
    NotesConsistently wears at least one flower in her hair.
 
@Meredith


Oooo, the profile looks so pretty. * _ *


She seems great so far and her power sounds pretty nice.


The Image attachment however, doesn't seem to work?


Not for me anyway.
 
@Meredith. Very nice, I'm not sure what happened with the codes but maybe if you gave the information to @welian or @CRiTiCAL ERR0R they could help?


Beyond that the backstory, personality, and powers were very well done. I like the way you explained the powers and gave clear drawbacks. I think people can often get carried away with clairvoyance and forget that in order to see ( past/present/future) you will have to be incapacitated for a period of time.


I think her and Laurel will work together - as a limited teleporter Laurel will also hang back in combat so I can see her working as kind of her eyes on the field or something.


Anyway A++ and I can't wait to meet her.


PS : I think you might have to resubmit the attachment cuz when I click on it it just goes to a blank error screen,
 
The image attachment'll work when I put it up, I just need to reupload it. It's a copy/paste of the original.


And thank you I just


I don't know what happened to the freaking paragraphs


@M0N0
 
Also, @readingraebow , the thing with the code..


There's nothing that's broken.


Welian's looked through it, so have a couple other people.


It... it should work.


But yea, definitely~
 
Meredith said:
Also, @readingraebow , the thing with the code..
There's nothing that's broken.


Welian's looked through it, so have a couple other people.


It... it should work.


But yea, definitely~
Are you on a mobile? Sometimes I know those through off paragraph alignment because they like to be finicky and difficult.
 
Meredith said:
Here's the story with my CS: The coding is fine.
It should be fine.


It should work.


Nobody can find anything wrong with the BBCode.


It didn't work.


I'd like all critique atm to deal with the character itself. Please tag me, because I'm not watching this thread, honestly. :P





LEE, REN


  • Full NameRen Lee
    CodenameTBD
    GenderFemale
    Age15
    RankD
    RoleStudent
    SubjectN/A
    RaceAsian
    Eyes Amber
    Hair Green
    Height4'9"
    BuildSmall and Thin
    LimiterN/A
    NotesConsistently wears at least one flower in her hair.
I like her a lot! though i feel like she and Avira are going to be terrified of each other for no rational reason...
 
Nope.


Not on my end, either. I've had people repost it, I've torn it apart and put it back together. It's just... it's just a nope.
 
Probably a super stupid question, but like...where do we start?


Like at home receiving the letter and going to school or at school already and It's like an annoucement or something?



@welian
 
M0N0 said:
Probably a super stupid question, but like...where do we start?
Like at home receiving the letter and going to school or at school already and It's like an annoucement or something?



@welian
Not a stupid question! The unvandalized flyer was sent as an email to students the last day of break. The "revised" version is what's plastered all over the building when they walk in.
 
And in here too as requested, @welian

[QUOTE="Cheshire Smile]Lemme try my hand at this, too.
Jules, Maurice

  • Full NameMaurice "Moe" Jules
    CodenameN/A
    GenderFemale
    Age19
    RankC
    RoleStudent
    SubjectN/A
    RaceCaucasian
    Eyes Blue
    Hair Blonde
    Height5'11
    BuildSlender
    LimiterLevel One, Inactive
    Notes'Tribal' tattoos along stomach and chest; can not hear out of her right ear.


[/QUOTE]
 
*laughs out loud* omg. lllamas. i can't. i can not. i'm definately going to work hard so laurel can get in on this action.
 
welian said:
OH FUCK I REMEMBER YOUR PROFILE I TOTALLY RESPONDED TO IT
I bet it got lost in the notifications, shit.


I went back - I definitely approved Maurice, I must have forgotten to tag you because I went strictly off of who was posted in the Sign-Up thread.
Poor welian. Swamped in notifications.
 
HunterJJ said:
@welian
Please let me know if there is anything I need to change on my main, I'd really like to get in on this early before there is a lot of catching up to do.
I'd like you to repost it in the OOC. Cheshire is right, I'm honestly swapped in notifs, and I'd rather people just repost profiles instead of "I edited it, it's five pages back".
 
[QUOTE="Cheshire Smile]Poor welian. Swamped in notifications.

[/QUOTE]
Right?


I am excited to get started, just waiting for approval myself.
 
Reposted


Masters, Greg

  • Full Name: Gregory Masters
    Codename: Hammer
    Gender: Male
    Age: 33
    Rank: A
    Role: Teacher
    Subject: Community Service
    Race: Caucasian (Australian)
    Eyes: Green
    Hair: Brown
    Height: 6'3"
    Build:Muscular
    Limiter:Level 3, inactive
    Notes: Blue Card Holder
 
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Morgan, Page

  • Full NamePage Morgan
    CodenamePending Blue Card Approval
    GenderFemale
    Age29
    RankC
    RoleNon-Teaching Faculty Part-time Assistant Clerk
    SubjectN/A
    RaceIrish (American)
    Eyes Hazel
    Hair Red
    Height5' 6"
    BuildFit and full figured but still border lining plus size.
    LimiterLevel 1, Inactive unless sleeping.
    NotesTattoo along her left side starting for the mid of rib cage and continuing down to top of hip bone. The tattoo is an image of a phoenix with the words "In order to rise from its own ashes, a Phoenix first must burn."
 
Akachi, Ime

  • Full NameIme Akachi
    CodenameSupernova
    GenderMale
    Age21
    RankS
    RoleStudent
    SubjectN/A
    RaceWest African
    EyesLight Brown
    HairBlack/Short
    Height6'0"
    BuildAthletic
    LimiterLevel 4
    NotesN/A
 
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@welian


Bruno Clare Liew

  • Full NameBruno Clare Liew
    Codename---
    GenderMale
    Age19
    RankB
    RoleStudent
    Subject---
    RaceCaucasian-Chinese
    Eyes Brown
    Hair Fawn-brown
    Height 169 cm
    Build Lanky
    Limiter---
    Notes---


 

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@simj22 I love the power! Is it like a psionic power of some sort? Meaning the butterflies are some kind of mental construct or something like a lantern construct where their created via subconcious imagination or whatever.


How many butterflied can he make at the same time? Do they become hard to control the more there are or do they have a hive mind? Meaning what one is told to do the others automatically repeat ( given close proximity to their "queen" so to speak )
 
readingraebow said:
Do they become hard to control the more there are
Technically, yes. They don't exactly have a hive mind, other when given the Kill order, which makes them all the more harder to control, and a prime cause of collateral damage. Imagine, if you will, you make ten butterflies, and you so happen to forget one was sent to keep watch on someone's baby sister. And then you issue the kill order. They're also very simple-minded. Clare can't tap into ALL the butterflies' visions at once as well, and has to switch 'cameras' if he wants to pilot more than one of them.


And I ain't boasting, since Clare really is a dumbass when it comes to keeping track of the butterflies. He HAS forgotten, and WILL forget, and there will be no end of complaints.

readingraebow said:
Is it like a psionic power of some sort?
I tried to avoid semantics because I'm bad at science stuff, but yeah, they are a sort of mental construct, more or less.


As for maximum number of butterflies, I would say ten? Ten's a nice number. I'll go with ten.
 

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