OOC Discussion

[Aldur]

Additionally (sorry, I'm on my phone) powers come from the human body. Technological devices does not count as a superpower. All robots are, by that definition, E rank and are not capable of superhuman levels of destruction and blatant disregard for physics. If Eve's source of power is her arms, she is not a super. If it's genetically encoded, then she is.

Terraforming is genetically encoded, only the super strength and soundwave projection comes from her arms. Do I need to unlist those as "Super" powers?

 

[welian]

Terraforming is genetically encoded, only the super strength and soundwave projection comes from her arms. Do I need to unlist those as "Super" powers?

I would, but do take some time to write how they interact with her powers.

 

[D. Rex]

Additionally (sorry, I'm on my phone) powers come from the human body. Technological devices does not count as a superpower. All robots are, by that definition, E rank and are not capable of superhuman levels of destruction and blatant disregard for physics. If Eve's source of power is her arms, she is not a super. If it's genetically encoded, then she is.

What stat would the strength of Vicky's laser vision be under? If here isn't one that correlated too it, I could easily log her as a C with the sum of the points.

 

[Aldur]

I would, but do take some time to write how they interact with her powers.

They don't really interact, per se, they're separate. I assume super strength is pretty self-explanatory.

 

[Gus]

I like Eve. Cool picture, cool concept. The question of scale isn't even the most interesting thing to me. I would probably go with A, just because knocking down a whole city block seems plenty badass enough to me, and more 'in scale' with the bear arms. (I notice you dropped those from the powers list for the S level version, which makes sense because the ability to upend north america sort of makes the 'oh and I have metal arms too' seem a bit out of place. Like I can shoot lasers out of my eyes, but ALSO I can exert limited mind control over hamsters! The two things seem out of scale with each other.)


I like the sound waves thing very much, in part because that was what made me think of 'Jericho' from the story of the hebrew army's trumpets toppling the walls in the book of Joshua. Maybe those two things could be tied together better though? Like if the sound waves were how you transmitted the energy, and focusing it was how you controlled the reshaping of the matter you transmitted it to? I think it would be cool if the energy for that actually came from you personally and while you previously channeled it through your fleshy arms, now the cyber arms allow you to amp it up and focus it better. Also then the excess energy could power the arm servos so that you don't need batteries, and they can't be disabled by just breaking the speakers, because the sonic waves actually come from you.


I do think the terraforming power needs better definition. I think I have the basic idea of it, but I think that is mostly from our PM discussions. I kind of picture 'earth bending' like from Avatar, but more large scale destruction, with less stomping around and more Kamehameha! type of thing. Maybe it could be described something like:


Structural Rearrangement: Eve can use amplified sound waves to vibrate any solid material at its resonant frequency with enough power to completely restructure its molecular matrix. She can't change one kind of material into a different one, just reshape it. This can easily knock down bridges or buildings or, in at least one past instance, pull the steel out of a building to make a makeshift bridge (and a rubble pile). Positively enormous amounts of earth can be shifted without much effort. Rock can be restructured almost as easily, but into more durable structures. Under time pressure, building anything more complicated than a simple cave is almost impossible, but given time, who knows what she might be able to cobble together? Living matter is generally too squishy to directly reshape in this manner, but can be very violently shoved out of the way in the process of moving other matter around.


(So you can make living things squish shaped)


I'd also like to hear a little more about her personal stuff. From her picture, I sense an artistic soul. Not, y'know like a mandolin player or a painter or something; I picture her as a BADASS ARTIST who will challenge your sense of what art is. Maybe a welder? That would be cool if she welds in her spare time, and give her skillz to fix the arms. Welding art always seems a little "GRrrrr, it is TOO art you f'ing philistine! You want me to come over there, little boy? I will SHOW you the meaning of art!" to me. Heh. Maybe that says more about me than you. Or maybe a tattoo artist? I dunno.


I think it would be cool if she had a secret aspiration to do 'installation' sculpture pieces, like the kind you build a city center around. Something that sums up the spirit of a city. Like the Gateway arch type of thing, you know? Or Mt Rushmore.


Last thought: Relationships should have more than Aaron listed I think. What about her brother? Is he still alive? Her parents? Are they proud of their badass tomboy? I would be. This is a coooool character. I look forward to working with her.


Hope that is helpful. I really really like the rough draft, and I had fun thinking about how her powers might work. Hopefully I didn't go too far away from your vision, but if I did, feel free to go another way entirely.

 

[Lemon Boy]

Beauregard is going nicely, just need the traits & history and she should be good for reviewing.


Seeing that, from what I understand, Cybernetics and stuff don't contribute to points I successfully lowered her down to an A rank to stop the overflow of S's and stuff. Could change a bit, buuttt not too much. Would appreciate some critque and stuff on her Superpower's.

LA BÉDOYÈRE,B.

• Heroism
• Statistics

• Aspect	Scale
  COUR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	07
  ALTR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  ORDR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	01
  KIND	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  PRCT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	07
  DIPL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03

• Aspect	Scale
  HLTH	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  STRN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03
  DEFN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  AGLT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03
  INTL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  WILL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	04

• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Themesong

• Full Name
  
  Beauregard La Bédoyère
  
  Nicknames
  
  B.B / Death Bunny
  
  Codename
  
  Technopath
  
  Gender
  
  Female
  
  Age
  
  17
  
  Rank
  
  A
  
  Limiter
  
  Level 3; Active
  
  Role
  
  Student
  
  
• Race
  
  French
  
  Hair
  
  Pink {Dyed}
  
  Eyes
  
  Pink
  
  Height
  
  5'0Ft
  
  Figure
  
  Lean
  
  Notes
  
  She has an innumerable amount of cybernetics and robotics installed into and on her person; the most notable of these are her "Bunny Ears" And "Tri-Claw Arms." She is often accompanied by a small group of four, bunny head shaped droids she calls "Chibi's."
  
  
• Genius
  
  
  -
  
  
  Resourceful
  
  
  -
  
  
  Tranquil
  
  
  -
  
  
  Callous
  
  
  -
  
  
  History
  
  
  {INSERT EDGY, DARK, TECHY BACKSTORY HERE PLZ}
• Family
  
  -
  
  
  Aegis 108 Staff
  
  -
  
  
  Classmates
  
  -
• Technopathy
  
  
  In her own, elegant words, Beauregard can make "All Electronic's and Robotics her personal bitch." She can do simple things such as type on a computer without actually having to make use of a keyboard to extracting data into her own mind or wiping a disc so efficiently that the most technologically inclined would have trouble trying to recover the lost information. She can practically black out entire neighbourhoods, reroute the amount of electricity going into a device tenfold and make it explode in someone's face without being remotely close to the person or rain down an apocalypse of horrific virus's and trojans that will plague all that is mechanical for months.
  
  
  • Cyber Mind: Beauregard's mind rivals that of the modern day's best supercomputers. She can analyse information at such speeds that even the most advanced artificial intelligence would be left confused, remember the smallest detail on a person or in an event and even achieve true multitasking without having to divide her attention.
    
  • Technological Intuition: It's said that she could probably understand the most complicated, archaic and alien of designs within minutes. This is true. Advanced schematics that would take continuous looks or days of research to understand fluently would take the girl mere seconds or minutes and she can make the most complicated and impressive of machinery from a small amount of materials. Cybernetics and Robotics that would take weeks to reproduce by hand are often done by her in her free time with deft ease.
    
  
  
  Limitations
  
  
  • Electricity: She can be as easily zapped as a Moth being attracted to a bright electric bug catcher. Metal is pretty conductive and she's full of it, from her arms and ears to the internal. Being shocked is a lot more detrimental to her than it is to your average person.
    
  • Magnetism: If you've ever run out of puppets but want to do some puppetry, just go ahead and grab a guy with Magnetism manipulation. She turns into a ragdoll alongside her other, technological constructs.
    
  • EMP'S: Her use of cybernetics is so extensive, that the use of EMP'S can be insanely crippling and outright take her out physically for a fair amount of time.
    
  • Technologically Reliant:Do you know how useful It is, to be able to manipulate technology, in the countryside?...Not very. Outside of technological hubs such as cities or major towns, her main ability can quickly fade away to absolute uselessness.
    
  • Range:The exclusive range for her Technopathy is a thousand metre's. Can she make an entire building black out, yes. Can she make an entire city black out, no.
    
  • Micro-management: Controlling a single computer from a distance is an easy task, like walking to a shop around the corner. Taking controlling of multiple, various devices at the same time in the same area can quickly become confusing and outright disable more complicated tasks; forcing her to use more simple commands or abilities so she doesn't epically fuck up somehow.
    
  
  
  
• TBA
  
  
  

 

[Aldur]

KNOX, E.

• Heroism
• Statistics

• Aspect	Scale
  COUR	?????????	08
  ALTR	?????????	06
  ORDR	?????????	05
  KIND	?????????	05
  PRCT	?????????	08
  DIPL	?????????	03

• Aspect	Scale
  HLTH	?????????	03
  STRN	?????????	04
  DEFN	?????????	04
  AGLT	?????????	02
  INTL	?????????	04
  WILL	?????????	06

• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name
  
  Eve Kassidy Knox
  
  Nicknames
  
  Bicep Curls, BFG
  
  Codename
  
  Jericho
  
  Gender
  
  Female
  
  Age
  
  26
  
  Rank
  
  A
  
  Limiter
  
  Level 3, Inactive
  
  Role
  
  Teacher Assistant for the Collateral Damage And You Class
  
  
• Race
  
  Caucasian
  
  Hair
  
  Cyan (Originally Jet Black)
  
  Eyes
  
  Steel Blue
  
  Height
  
  6'1"
  
  Figure
  
  Hourglass, Muscular
  
  Notes
  
  Tattoos and Piercings on her face and body. Two bulky bionic arms.
  
  
• Focused
  
  
  Concentration is key. Eve thoroughly completes any objectives she sets for herself. It is what makes her great at teaching since it's what she wants to do. There aren't many things that can distract Eve from following a path she made out for herself.
  
  
  Intense
  
  
  She shows strong feelings depending on the situation. This trait also reinforces her "focused" state. Eve is an intense young woman, passionate about her beliefs and aspirations.
  
  
  Outspoken
  
  
  Eve is frank in voicing her concerns, especially if they reach shocking or controversial levels. She believes it's better to be direct and not sugar coat things. Time spent thinking of a way to sugar coat something is too precious to waste.
  
  
  Brusque
  
  
  The woman can become abrupt in her manners or speech, but only if provoked. She would normally not put someone's good mood at risk unless there was a good reason behind it. Her tongue is sharp and will likely strike anyone who acts like an "asshole".
  
  
  History
  
  
  Eve's life began in Boston and moved to New York when she was 5. She has an older brother named Cole who spent a good amount of time raising Eve himself. Her parents did not want a "princess", so then the little girl turned into more of a little boy rather quickly. A "little boy" who aspired to be like her brother. Independent and a role model. Eve had an interest in "building" things out of junk be it little statues or half-assed structures. When she got older, the little tomboy managed to convince her dad to teach her how to work with a welder. Suddenly, her works became a lot more sturdy and managed to stick together better. Every little bit of time she got, she spent it trying to come up with different things. She's got a whole metal plate armor in her apartment/workshop.
  
  
  Eve discovered her powers when a building collapsed downtown, trapping people inside. In a desperate attempt to be a hero like Cole, she tried to dig a tunnel through the rubble, which she managed to do until her "advantageous" abilities tipped off the wrong wall, tearing her arms apart in the process.
  
  
  She managed to save 6 people from their prison. In return for her selflessness, the Commonwealth funded a project to replace Eve's arms and in return, she would work for them. She learned how to better control her abilities and managed to become a Teacher Assistant in Training Facility 108.
• Aaron Iapetus Mallory
  
  
  Head Teacher for the Collateral Damage And You class. Friend
  
  
  Cole Jacob Knox
  
  
  Brother. Lives in Boston, currently, and works as a Fireman.
  
  
  Claudia Catherine Knox
  
  
  Mother. Lives in New York with her husband. Works at a bookstore in Manhattan.
  
  
  Jules Johnathan Knox
  
  
  Father. Lives in New York with his wife. Works as a coach for the local high school.
  
  
  
• 
  
  
  • Artistic Touch: Eve can use amplified sound waves to vibrate any solid material at its resonant frequency with enough power to completely restructure its molecular matrix. She can't change one kind of material into a different one, just reshape it. This can easily knock down bridges or buildings or, in at least one past instance, pull the steel out of a building to make a makeshift bridge (and a rubble pile). Positively enormous amounts of earth can be shifted without much effort. Rock can be restructured almost as easily, but into more durable structures.
    
  • Right to Bear Arms: Eve's arms are a lot stronger and durable than an average human's due to their cybernetic nature. The energy previously channeled through her flesh is now amped up and focused better by them. The excess energy produced by her powers the arms, so there is no need to recharge. Disabling the arms would definitely decrease the effectiveness of her powers, but not by much, since the energy does not come from the arms themselves. They're also a wicked pair of subwoofers/speakers.
    
  
  
  Limitations
  
  
  • Time Attack!:Under time pressure, building anything more complicated than a simple cave is almost impossible, but given time, who knows what she might be able to cobble together?
    
  • Affinity: Eve cannot bend liquids, gasses or plasma. Living matter is also generally too squishy to directly reshape in this manner, but can be very violently shoved out of the way in the process of moving other matter around.
    
  
  
  
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I think I am officially done now @welian @Gus

 

[Crimrose]

Might go from hive to Flood Spores... That'd put me up there.

 

[TerraBooma]

Since people were talking about stats, for Kennith I just went joe average with a slightly above average willpower.


After all, his power is literally all mental strength xD Takes a lot of willpower to separate mind from body

 

[Giyari]

Sup, nerds?

 

[D. Rex]

Since people were talking about stats, for Kennith I just went joe average with a slightly above average willpower.
After all, his power is literally all mental strength xD Takes a lot of willpower to separate mind from body

I may or may not have taken a little inspiration from you, Terra. xD Besides the blasty part, I want for her to have had a normal life.


My confusion with the stats is mostly just that one thing though.

 

[Gus]

[QUOTE="St Indigo]Beauregard is going nicely, just need the traits & history and she should be good for reviewing.
Seeing that, from what I understand, Cybernetics and stuff don't contribute to points I successfully lowered her down to an A rank to stop the overflow of S's and stuff. Could change a bit, buuttt not too much. Would appreciate some critque and stuff on her Superpower's.

LA BÉDOYÈRE,B.

• Heroism
• Statistics

• Aspect	Scale
  COUR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	07
  ALTR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  ORDR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	01
  KIND	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  PRCT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	07
  DIPL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03

• Aspect	Scale
  HLTH	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  STRN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03
  DEFN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	02
  AGLT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	03
  INTL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	09
  WILL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	04

• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Themesong

• Full Name
  
  Beauregard La Bédoyère
  
  Nicknames
  
  B.B / Death Bunny
  
  Codename
  
  Technopath
  
  Gender
  
  Female
  
  Age
  
  17
  
  Rank
  
  A
  
  Limiter
  
  Level 3; Active
  
  Role
  
  Student
  
  
• Race
  
  French
  
  Hair
  
  Pink {Dyed}
  
  Eyes
  
  Pink
  
  Height
  
  5'0Ft
  
  Figure
  
  Lean
  
  Notes
  
  She has an innumerable amount of cybernetics and robotics installed into and on her person; the most notable of these are her "Bunny Ears" And "Tri-Claw Arms." She is often accompanied by a small group of four, bunny head shaped droids she calls "Chibi's."
  
  
• Genius
  
  
  -
  
  
  Resourceful
  
  
  -
  
  
  Tranquil
  
  
  -
  
  
  Callous
  
  
  -
  
  
  History
  
  
  {INSERT EDGY, DARK, TECHY BACKSTORY HERE PLZ}
• Family
  
  -
  
  
  Aegis 108 Staff
  
  -
  
  
  Classmates
  
  -
• Technopathy
  
  
  In her own, elegant words, Beauregard can make "All Electronic's and Robotics her personal bitch." She can do simple things such as type on a computer without actually having to make use of a keyboard to extracting data into her own mind or wiping a disc so efficiently that the most technologically inclined would have trouble trying to recover the lost information. She can practically black out entire neighbourhoods, reroute the amount of electricity going into a device tenfold and make it explode in someone's face without being remotely close to the person or rain down an apocalypse of horrific virus's and trojans that will plague all that is mechanical for months.
  
  
  • Cyber Mind: Beauregard's mind rivals that of the modern day's best supercomputers. She can analyse information at such speeds that even the most advanced artificial intelligence would be left confused, remember the smallest detail on a person or in an event and even achieve true multitasking without having to divide her attention.
    
  • Technological Intuition: It's said that she could probably understand the most complicated, archaic and alien of designs within minutes. This is true. Advanced schematics that would take continuous looks or days of research to understand fluently would take the girl mere seconds or minutes and she can make the most complicated and impressive of machinery from a small amount of materials. Cybernetics and Robotics that would take weeks to reproduce by hand are often done by her in her free time with deft ease.
    
  
  
  Limitations
  
  
  • Electricity: She can be as easily zapped as a Moth being attracted to a bright electric bug catcher. Metal is pretty conductive and she's full of it, from her arms and ears to the internal. Being shocked is a lot more detrimental to her than it is to your average person.
    
  • Magnetism: If you've ever run out of puppets but want to do some puppetry, just go ahead and grab a guy with Magnetism manipulation. She turns into a ragdoll alongside her other, technological constructs.
    
  • EMP'S: Her use of cybernetics is so extensive, that the use of EMP'S can be insanely crippling and outright take her out physically for a fair amount of time.
    
  • Technologically Reliant:Do you know how useful It is, to be able to manipulate technology, in the countryside?...Not very. Outside of technological hubs such as cities or major towns, her main ability can quickly fade away to absolute uselessness.
    
  • Range:The exclusive range for her Technopathy is a thousand metre's. Can she make an entire building black out, yes. Can she make an entire city black out, no.
    
  • Micro-management: Controlling a single computer from a distance is an easy task, like walking to a shop around the corner. Taking controlling of multiple, various devices at the same time in the same area can quickly become confusing and outright disable more complicated tasks; forcing her to use more simple commands or abilities so she doesn't epically fuck up somehow.
    
  
  
  
• TBA
  
  
  

[/QUOTE]
Powers and weaknesses look cool and interesting. While it is obviously a little premature to offer feedback on the bio, I did wonder about the 'callous' thing. That often goes with the techy mind-type, but so much so that seems a little too pat, you know? And it looks like you are going, at least a bit, for playing against type, with the whole ironic 'death-bunny' thing. Counter to type and irony are my two very most favorite things, and I heartily approve. But then, why 'callous'? Or, if callous, why bunnies? Why not go 'death-goth' with just an ironic pink color scheme? Don't get me wrong. The bunny thing, I love. But maybe 'kitschy' would be sufficiently negative, and fit better?


Alternatively, you could go for callous, and play up the socially oblivious thing: Maybe she thinks bunnies are the best choice to genuinely terrify her enemies, and she chose that theme like a more typical goth technocrat would choose say, a vampire theme?


I like the first thing better though. Be cute. Embrace it. Let them be lulled into dismissing you as 'just' cute. It could buy you a few more seconds to finish your hack. Also: because CUTE!


EDIT: Also death bunny should be the codename.


Never use a codename that says what you do. -Tsun Tzu

 

[welian]

A new faction and a new NPC have been added.

 

[Gus]

Oh, religiously inspired bigots. Best kind.

 

[Suzuki Mine]

Ufufufufu~ With how adamant Gus is on reviewing characters, it makes me wonder as to why Sarka didn't get the full treatment~

 

[welian]

Raguel probably has a Donald Trump shrine in their bedroom.

 

[Suzuki Mine]

Raguel probably has a Donald Trump shrine in their bedroom.

[/prepares for the cleansing with flamethrower in hand]

 

[welian]

There's two things Raguel hates more than anything in the world:

1. Demons
   
2. The Man
   

 

[Gus]

[QUOTE="Suzuki Mine]
Ufufufufu~ With how adamant Gus is on reviewing characters, it makes me wonder as to why Sarka didn't get the full treatment~

[/QUOTE]
BECAUSE I AM TRYING TO GET A POST WRITTEN!!! SO FAR I HAVE "AARON WAS…"


also, apparently, I missed it completely somehow... Tune in soonish. I do enjoy seeing works in progress, and I dearly love to hear myself type.

[QUOTE="Suzuki Mine][/prepares for the cleansing with flamethrower in hand]

[/QUOTE]
That won't be necessary. I'll be gentle, I promise.

 

[welian]

That won't be necessary. I'll be gentle, I promise.

Put down the wine, sir.

 

[Gus]

Really neat power. I am a little confused by what it means that when she eats the lie she 'leaves the truth behind' exactly. I get the idea, I just am unclear what that looks like… does the speaker re say the sentence with exact literal truth? Do all the hearers just 'know' the truth while the sounds are unchanged? Do the words morph 'in mid air'? Might be a little too detailed, but I get curious about such things.

Hang about, I definitely weighed in on this character.


I had to search back TEN PAGES to find that!

 

[Gus]

Put down the wine, sir.

I am actually at work. No wine for me. (Though I do have a bottle with me, coincidentally.) Shhhhhhhh!

 

[Lemon Boy]

I bet the person funding them is Donald Trump's grandson or something.

 

[Gus]

[QUOTE="Suzuki Mine]
[/drags self into thread]
So... I have someone that I'm working with... and they're slowly taking form into someone I'm becoming rather pleased with...


NOTE!: This is still a work in progress. Aspects are apt to change both with input and from further consideration on my part.

JANIK, S.

• Heroism
• Statistics

• Aspect	Scale
  COUR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  ALTR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  ORDR	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  KIND	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  PRCT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  DIPL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00

• Aspect	Scale
  HLTH	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  STRN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  DEFN	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  AGLT	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  INTL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00
  WILL	▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮▮	00

• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpowers
• Gallery

• Full Name
  
  Sarka Arlie Janik
  
  Nicknames
  
  N/A
  
  Codename
  
  N/A
  
  Gender
  
  Female
  
  Age
  
  Eighteen
  
  Rank
  
  D Rank
  
  Limiter
  
  Level 1; Inactive
  
  Role
  
  Student
  
  
• Race
  
  Caucasian/American
  
  Hair
  
  Brown/Dark brown
  
  Eyes
  
  Dark blue
  
  Height
  
  5'6"
  
  Figure
  
  Lean and curvy
  
  Notes
  
  A pink heart underneath her left eye.
  
  
• Amicable
  
  
  When not finding a way to dig her claws in and drag out what she wants from a person, Sarka is overall a rather friendly gal who can get along with folks. She's a bit laid back, easygoing and is up for anything that sounds like a good time. Normally it doesn't take long for her to gather a little circle of friends wherever she goes - if she's not with one already.
  
  
  Flirty
  
  
  Be it playfully or for real, it's hard to tell with just how often Sarka makes some kind of suggestive comment - regardless of gender or authority. Most of the times, if someone is able to get a bead on her intent, they're a little too deep and she's already begun spinning her web.
  
  
  Mischievous
  
  
  Sarka likes causing a little bit of trouble. Much of the time it's harmless pranks played between her and her social group. Her favorite kinds are more power intensive, which can sometimes result in some rather nasty (but quite amusing in her eyes) situations.
  
  
  Sly
  
  
  Sarka plays a graceful game of chess wherever she goes. In her mind control is the ultimate power, and if you can move a few pieces to the right position, that control will be absolute. For this, the end justify the means. She's not one who cares to sit right at the top though. Sarka's rather content at being a shadow queen and watching everyone else squirm in the spotlight. When she's lost interest in them, she tosses her pieces in the flashiest of ways and moves on to the next match.
  
  
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• Lie Eater
  
  
  Sarka has the ability to draw out and nullify lies and secrets. If she's able to kiss an individual on the lips, she can pull a secret from the person's memory. The longer the kiss the longer she gets to search, and once she pulls it out the person loses possession of the secret. Also, if someone attempts to speak a lie within the same room as her, she can "eat" the lie and leave the truth behind. She can activate either of these abilities at will.
  
  
  
  
  
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    Preemptive Lie Detection: Sarka can detect when someone is going to lie, allowing her to act in time to "eat" it as it's being said.
    
  
  
  
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    Verbatum: Sarka can only "eat" lies when they're being spoken. If someone tries to write out a lie she cannot nullify it.
    
  
  
  
  
  
  • Lying Eyes: The lies that Sarka can nullify from individuals are restricted to those within her sight. If she cannot see the person she cannot strip away the lie.
    
  
  
  
  
  
  • Truth Drunk: Taking in a secret or "eating" lies affects Sarka in a similar way as one is by alcohol. She can handle a dozen or more throughout the day, but Lord forbid if she were to try and get a compulsive liar to tell the truth.
    
  
  
  
  
  
  • Deep Diving: If Sarka pushes too hard in trying to find a secret within someone's memory, she can actually lose her sense of self and potentially slip into a coma. So far the longest she's dared to "go under" has been half an hour.
    
  
  
  
  
  
  • Good Will: Individuals with stronger than average wills, as well as those with psychic barriers can fight back against or completely resist the influence of her kiss.
    
  
  
  
  
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I stand by what I said, I think it is a cool power, and my questions were answered. If you posted one with a more complete history and relationships, I missed it somehow. I would just add those. That is my feedback so far. Personality traits seem a good fit. Art looks… pretty amazing really. I missed that part before.

 

[Suzuki Mine]

Hang about, I definitely weighed in on this character.
I had to search back TEN PAGES to find that!

Mm, indeed, though she didn't get nearly the slough of inquiries. I thought... perhaps...


[/places hand on her face and dramatically turns away]


Perhaps she wasn't interesting enough to look into further...!