Fantasy Natural Selection (Fantasy/Open)

[AnimusLight]

@Sheaon13


It's better than the last one. Still could be improved. I heard others are willing to help you improve your writing and I wouldn't mind joining in.


So your characters don't become a stand still or just pop out of nowhere think of this:

• What is their current goal and how is what they are doing just a stepping stone to achieve it?
  
• Feelings ranges from joy, anger, sadness, to relief, nervousness, and curiosity. You got the curiosity part down but be careful from overusing it.
  
• Describe you character's actions - what noise would be made if they were hiding through bushes? what smell bothers them (*cough Morgrim cough*) that heightens their curiosity?
  
• Memories of what you character has done in the past are great but it's got to include some of the stuff I said above. A bad guy can't be a bad guy just for the heck of loving a character. What has Ryu done in the past to make Lilif go nuts for him? What past memories make him the person he is today?
  
• Careful with repetition in posts. Repetition in writing to could be used to prove an emotional point: for example - "They are dead to me. Every last one of them. They are dead to me." You could repeat in different posts because I do something similar but if you say "How was I going to get back home? I don't know what to do anymore. I'm so lost. How am I going to get home?" That could be remade as "How was I going to get back home? I try to think back on which turns I made through the forest; it was no use. I'm completely lost. I felt as if my stomach dropped, realizing the hopelessness that lay on me."
  
• Careful with overusing questions. It is hard to respond to that. I might even write, "Jass stares at the confused person, seeing that questions have overtaken their mind."
  

There's probably more shit I can give advice too and maybe some of this, people would like to add on. Everyone here is willing to help you out so don't be afraid to ask or want help to elaborate on your writing.


I wish for this RP to continue on its interesting course so having RPers that would aid making Morgrim's world bigger is a must. Details are great for character development and having the full sense of you character is needed. As an RPer it is hard to respond to irrational events like random people suddenly coming out of the middle of no where for no reason. Curiosity shouldn't be the only thing driving Rai. A few lines of writing is fine but it's hard to think of something to respond to that and build up from there. I don't fucking care if I'm rude but I'M LOOKING AT YOU @Felix

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

thank you for the advice I'll be sure to remember it.

 

[Anaxileah]

(*cough Morgrim cough*)

*snicker snicker*

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I'm thinking of making Ryu have saved Lillif from drowning and that's why he's so obsessed with him

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

Ryu


that's what Ryu would look like only with a black tail and ears and with the eye color I said

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

bored

 

[AnimusLight]

Have you checked out other RP's you might be interested in? That gets me really busy on this site because of the multiple one's I'm in.

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I am in multiple ones it's just that no one is responding, I also wanna introduce Lillif

 

[AnimusLight]

Before you go posting Lillif, make sure it actually makes senses for the demon to be there.

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I want to make him an heir to the throne but I don't think that'll work out unless @Morgrim wouldn't mind that...

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I just want him to be in a high position of power is all that's about it but I don't know how to do that

 

[AnimusLight]

AHHHH I SHOULD BE DOING WORK AHHH


I'm so screwed but I've procrastinated already.


so heir to the throne for what?

 

[Morgrim]

Heya I'm back! And I saw that Jassur! At least Morgrim doesn't smell like booze and sex on his downtime. (Lol not actually offended.) I'll be sure to check your new post @Sheaon13


Also everybody I have decided to make it so Ana will be helping me run this rp. She is a great rper as many of you are, but is on quite frequently, has a great ability to make scenery and has always kept things in the bounds of realism and lore-friendliness. Also we need some light for all that darkness that many of our characters project. As Shadowz says there can be no light without the darkness. And vice versa. So yep, treat posts made by Ana just as you would mine.

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

For the kingdom that is invading maybe? If @Morgrim allows it

 

[Federoff]

to be honest, if you want a position like that, then you should talk to the gm before even making your character

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I don't care if he isn't an heir I just want him to be in a high ranking position is all. Even if it's just a high ranking knight

 

[AnimusLight]

LOL booze and sex, the smell of a hopeless man.


And yeee we need some lighthearted shit like all of us at the inn doing stupid stuff


@Sheaon13 I agree with Federoff. That was what the Character Sheet is supposed to be for. Telling every information about your character that is a heads up for all of us. For example, @RedZombieWolf got accepted for his Lord because he mentions Wilhelm's lordilord rank. And for Rai/Ryu being high ranking might conflict with their current background.


Rai has been living with wolves.


and Ryu is a guildmaster of thieves and assassins.


(Edit:

special post now marked)

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

No I meant Lillif being a high ranking official not anyone else, I know those would conflict

 

[Anaxileah]

Heya I'm back! And I saw that Jassur! At least Morgrim doesn't smell like booze and sex on his downtime. (Lol not actually offended.) I'll be sure to check your new post @Sheaon13
Also everybody I have decided to make it so Ana will be helping me run this rp. She is a great rper as many of you are, but is on quite frequently, has a great ability to make scenery and has always kept things in the bounds of realism and lore-friendliness. Also we need some light for all that darkness that many of our characters project. As Shadowz says there can be no light without the darkness. And vice versa. So yep, treat posts made by Ana just as you would mine.

:3

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I haven't even introuced Lillif yet, I mean other than him having a connection to Ryu's past

 

[AnimusLight]

You should try putting more detail on what you want Lilif's background to be for the character sheet. That's why Morgrim was a bit iffy about the acceptance. Ask him again for approval.

 

[AnimusLight]

AH I MISSED 420 POST FOR ME D;

 

[NoLongerExistsHere]

I don't know I honestly think that Lillif is the kind of person to order people around or be one of those Knights that could be a high rank if he didn't go around killing people, but everyone's too scared to deal with him. Though he won't kill his fellow knights unless they get in his way

 

[AnimusLight]

and that what you just said could be put into the Personality section of the CS

 

[Morgrim]

Please do make the character Sheaon, but do know that the only places demons are ever high ranking is in the Night Walkers faction, though very few get that position, if they own a guild, like the one I had made, or as champions in the core. Generally in all of Landfall demons have a very bad rep, and are lucky if they are caught and executed. They are completely banished from Skyshard ever since they tried to get to the Celestial throne belonging to the aspects and usurping it. Demons are very rarely high ranking characters. Though that is rank, strength and skill is something else entirely.