Mitchs98
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I try to react to everything directly related to me. If it's background I either offhandedly mention it or don't depending on if my character would 1. actually care. 2. actually notice.
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I try to react to everything directly related to me. If it's background I either offhandedly mention it or don't depending on if my character would 1. actually care. 2. actually notice.
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
@SpookySableye
Julie's response to Eclipse was really well thought out. I'm glad you didn't have her easily escape the handcuffs because your line of thought seems correct; Eclipse would have the tech to keep a prisoner imprisoned. I think it's genius that she tried to escape, though, and was unable to. And that she's showing her fighting spirit by continuing to think of ways to fight back!
Medea is a really interesting character. She kind o goes from 'why should I care' to 'I'll see what I can to do to help.' I've known people like that before... they're fun to talk to. It's an interesting character type and I think she'll fit in well. If nothing else, Ouroboros will appreciate her willingness to help but I also think her cooler, more laid back nature will mesh well with the other girls. I'm excited to see how much she ends up adding to the Anti Bros!!
Julie's response to Eclipse was really well thought out. I'm glad you didn't have her easily escape the handcuffs because your line of thought seems correct; Eclipse would have the tech to keep a prisoner imprisoned. I think it's genius that she tried to escape, though, and was unable to. And that she's showing her fighting spirit by continuing to think of ways to fight back!
Medea is a really interesting character. She kind o goes from 'why should I care' to 'I'll see what I can to do to help.' I've known people like that before... they're fun to talk to. It's an interesting character type and I think she'll fit in well. If nothing else, Ouroboros will appreciate her willingness to help but I also think her cooler, more laid back nature will mesh well with the other girls. I'm excited to see how much she ends up adding to the Anti Bros!!
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
I'm not exactly certain but I'd guesstimate around a year or so. They seem to be getting things figured out on Earth but there's still a lot they don't know.
@SirBlazeALot How long were you envisioning them to have been on Earth?
By the sound of it Shua has done a few fights on Earth already and is getting the hang of it... and that may not take a full year either but when I think about it a year is what I think.
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
@Maki
Way to throw yet another wrench into the plans! (And I mean that sincerely, it's always fun to add in even more drama). Does Shua even realize she's being hunted? xD Anyway, this'll be fun. And robots have temporarily paused the threat but still... it'll be interesting to see the two face off. On top of Shua attempting to defeat the green alien and the other girls trying to save Jelly and S'Sur... um... Blue Cheese!
Mary was so adorable!! I love that you made her have a spunky response instead of a '*blush* thank you* moment because the cocky response fits so much better to Mary's personality! It was also really smart of her to notice that there were conflicting desires between Shua and the government. I'm just really glad you had Mary pop in and cover Raj! TEAM WORK! It was just... I liked Mary as a character up to that point and now I think she's absolutely fantastic
Way to throw yet another wrench into the plans! (And I mean that sincerely, it's always fun to add in even more drama). Does Shua even realize she's being hunted? xD Anyway, this'll be fun. And robots have temporarily paused the threat but still... it'll be interesting to see the two face off. On top of Shua attempting to defeat the green alien and the other girls trying to save Jelly and S'Sur... um... Blue Cheese!
Mary was so adorable!! I love that you made her have a spunky response instead of a '*blush* thank you* moment because the cocky response fits so much better to Mary's personality! It was also really smart of her to notice that there were conflicting desires between Shua and the government. I'm just really glad you had Mary pop in and cover Raj! TEAM WORK! It was just... I liked Mary as a character up to that point and now I think she's absolutely fantastic
SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
I said like less than 6 months in the pm not too long ago, but I'm fine with a year. I think that makes equally as much sense.
Tsutarji
The element of surprise.
Um hey guys
i just got finished with my Character and i think i did a good job
i just wanted to ask if someone could evaluate it
if i did a good job or not.
i just got finished with my Character and i think i did a good job
i just wanted to ask if someone could evaluate it
if i did a good job or not.
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
Sorry Blaze, totally spaced >.<
SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
No no, you weren't in this pm. I was just trying to let maki know a year is cool too, cause i said less than 6 months before i read her post..
We'll all take a look :3
Tsutarji
The element of surprise.
thanks
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
@theglassangel
Kathalina is an adorable character. I just... she's so much fun to read! I think it's fantastic that she has a sweet tooth and I'm glad you're writing her from a 'not suspicious' view. It makes the situation more fun... at least in my opinion! So thanks for writing like that. I'm really excited to write Ella's post now xD
Kathalina is an adorable character. I just... she's so much fun to read! I think it's fantastic that she has a sweet tooth and I'm glad you're writing her from a 'not suspicious' view. It makes the situation more fun... at least in my opinion! So thanks for writing like that. I'm really excited to write Ella's post now xD
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
@SirBlazeALot
The way you sometimes combine two characters into a post is such a smart idea; it's something I've picked up every now and then because it makes sense to do it that way. Especially when the two characters are more then likely going to interact. And... you're the one that kind of started the whole 'color coding speech' thing too right? I remember thinking 'I don't want to do that, it seems ridiculous' but found it really is useful in the long run. And it isn't terribly time consuming! Though the chance in our available RpN colors is a serious nuisance.
Having Courtney and Shua talking in the same paragraph really shows just how different they talk. And they have such a unique way of talking when compared to most characters, too. Most of your characters have a distinct way of talking to the point that I bet most of us could tell them apart without the color coding, even if you were to line up the dialogue without saying who was who. At least with most of the characters xD (That's be a fun assignment, huh? 'see if you can figure out the character'. It would really point out which characters have a voice of their own).
Being GM, the pressure kind of falls to you pretty often to push a scene forward but you never really make it seem forced. I am really confused upon when the ship left and where it is now but I am sure that's more from me missing something (been doing a lot of reading while tired ergo tends to lead to missing things) but otherwise that post was fantastic. Especially the 'cyclops' bit, but also Ciri's new nickname and the reasoning behind it.
It's also amazing how much thought you put behind things. Like how Groundbreaker's body should be cared for in Shua's opinion... that Shua's people tend to be incinerated to protect from Necromancer's is a wonderful little detail that gives so much insight to the world Shua comes from. The little tidbits like that are just phenomenal and I wish I could keep up with all the details you seem to remember like how Ambika is named after a Moon Goddess and so on. You're really amazing at catching those miniscule details and adding them into your posts and by doing so you draw some other people's attention to it.
So I have literally no sympathy for Eclipse because she's just not... a character I feel I should sympathize with. She is so much fun to read, though! It's kind of... odd... how it's the characters that, in real life, people tend to dislike... those characters are some of the most fun to read. She's behaving terribly and treating Julie just awful and yet she's hilarious. Also, I will always appreciate that you don't just 'she wasn't affected by it' or 'she dodged the attack.' It's so fantastic to read posts by people who give and take a little from posts. You allow your characters to get hit, and then you bring out their strengths and weaknesses more. Like Eclipse's inability to handle pain and her childish response. You're just... genius when it comes to character building.
So many things to say about Marionetta. So many things. To write a character that has multiple bodies and yet I'm never left wondering 'well which body is that'... and that she's so very robotic and yet adorable at the same time. Those quirks you throw in with her and her being a robot... I just. Marionetta is such a fantastic character! xD The need to be in Ouroboros' spotlight is also really adorable though I know I wouldn't want her to think of me as a threat. Oh goodness >.< She's kind of like a bunny with fangs. She seems so dang cute and cuddly but she will bite if provoked. Perhaps a bunny isn't quite the right animal... but you get the point, right? Mari seems like such a sweet hearmless character and I can just imagine her doing not so great things with that permanent smile in plce. I've never really been able to read robot characters; it doesn't tend to fall in my story genres and the rps that had robots were ones I usually didn't have interest in... but you make sure to point out the pros and cons of her being a robot without leaving her character.
Kudos to the phenomenal post, Blaze. Just... awesome awesome job
The way you sometimes combine two characters into a post is such a smart idea; it's something I've picked up every now and then because it makes sense to do it that way. Especially when the two characters are more then likely going to interact. And... you're the one that kind of started the whole 'color coding speech' thing too right? I remember thinking 'I don't want to do that, it seems ridiculous' but found it really is useful in the long run. And it isn't terribly time consuming! Though the chance in our available RpN colors is a serious nuisance.
Having Courtney and Shua talking in the same paragraph really shows just how different they talk. And they have such a unique way of talking when compared to most characters, too. Most of your characters have a distinct way of talking to the point that I bet most of us could tell them apart without the color coding, even if you were to line up the dialogue without saying who was who. At least with most of the characters xD (That's be a fun assignment, huh? 'see if you can figure out the character'. It would really point out which characters have a voice of their own).
Being GM, the pressure kind of falls to you pretty often to push a scene forward but you never really make it seem forced. I am really confused upon when the ship left and where it is now but I am sure that's more from me missing something (been doing a lot of reading while tired ergo tends to lead to missing things) but otherwise that post was fantastic. Especially the 'cyclops' bit, but also Ciri's new nickname and the reasoning behind it.
It's also amazing how much thought you put behind things. Like how Groundbreaker's body should be cared for in Shua's opinion... that Shua's people tend to be incinerated to protect from Necromancer's is a wonderful little detail that gives so much insight to the world Shua comes from. The little tidbits like that are just phenomenal and I wish I could keep up with all the details you seem to remember like how Ambika is named after a Moon Goddess and so on. You're really amazing at catching those miniscule details and adding them into your posts and by doing so you draw some other people's attention to it.
So I have literally no sympathy for Eclipse because she's just not... a character I feel I should sympathize with. She is so much fun to read, though! It's kind of... odd... how it's the characters that, in real life, people tend to dislike... those characters are some of the most fun to read. She's behaving terribly and treating Julie just awful and yet she's hilarious. Also, I will always appreciate that you don't just 'she wasn't affected by it' or 'she dodged the attack.' It's so fantastic to read posts by people who give and take a little from posts. You allow your characters to get hit, and then you bring out their strengths and weaknesses more. Like Eclipse's inability to handle pain and her childish response. You're just... genius when it comes to character building.
So many things to say about Marionetta. So many things. To write a character that has multiple bodies and yet I'm never left wondering 'well which body is that'... and that she's so very robotic and yet adorable at the same time. Those quirks you throw in with her and her being a robot... I just. Marionetta is such a fantastic character! xD The need to be in Ouroboros' spotlight is also really adorable though I know I wouldn't want her to think of me as a threat. Oh goodness >.< She's kind of like a bunny with fangs. She seems so dang cute and cuddly but she will bite if provoked. Perhaps a bunny isn't quite the right animal... but you get the point, right? Mari seems like such a sweet hearmless character and I can just imagine her doing not so great things with that permanent smile in plce. I've never really been able to read robot characters; it doesn't tend to fall in my story genres and the rps that had robots were ones I usually didn't have interest in... but you make sure to point out the pros and cons of her being a robot without leaving her character.
Kudos to the phenomenal post, Blaze. Just... awesome awesome job
Maki
Ten Thousand Club
What do you guys suggest I do to improve the quality of my posts? I've been wondering this for awhile now, but I have troubles answering it myself. This roleplay I've been in for awhile now, and it's definetly the one with the most experienced people in it. I don't want you guys to hold back. I just want suggestions and ideas so that I can be better at this. Ty
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
Maki, you really do continue to get better with every post. You used to write characters and would force them into ships... like, that's what your focus was.
But now your characters have depth. Your dialogue has thought and is in character. I think you've gotten so much better!
Sometimes I think you might miss some of what's said in posts (I do too. A lot of people do). Honestly, I can't think of any recent posts where that's been an issue, though. With Mary's post you hit everything of importance that I could see, and you added in something that was important to think about. Plus you had that amusing 'I know I'm awesome' comment. Man I loved Golden Sun's last post. That was fantastic
I'm a little confused about why Ava is suddenly around, but I think it'll add a dramatic twist...
You really are becoming better, though, Maki
If there was a 'most improved' award to give honestly right now I think you've got it!SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
Maki, you really do continue to get better with every post. You used to write characters and would force them into ships... like, that's what your focus was.
But now your characters have depth. Your dialogue has thought and is in character. I think you've gotten so much better!
Sometimes I think you might miss some of what's said in posts (I do too. A lot of people do). Honestly, I can't think of any recent posts where that's been an issue, though. With Mary's post you hit everything of importance that I could see, and you added in something that was important to think about. Plus you had that amusing 'I know I'm awesome' comment. Man I loved Golden Sun's last post. That was fantastic
I'm a little confused about why Ava is suddenly around, but I think it'll add a dramatic twist...
You really are becoming better, though, Maki
me and maki came up with a kewl idea for ava while we were thinking of someone to replace godless. i think it'll open a few doors for the anti bros.
SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
@SirBlazeALot
The way you sometimes combine two characters into a post is such a smart idea; it's something I've picked up every now and then because it makes sense to do it that way. Especially when the two characters are more then likely going to interact. And... you're the one that kind of started the whole 'color coding speech' thing too right? I remember thinking 'I don't want to do that, it seems ridiculous' but found it really is useful in the long run. And it isn't terribly time consuming! Though the chance in our available RpN colors is a serious nuisance.
Having Courtney and Shua talking in the same paragraph really shows just how different they talk. And they have such a unique way of talking when compared to most characters, too. Most of your characters have a distinct way of talking to the point that I bet most of us could tell them apart without the color coding, even if you were to line up the dialogue without saying who was who. At least with most of the characters xD (That's be a fun assignment, huh? 'see if you can figure out the character'. It would really point out which characters have a voice of their own).
Being GM, the pressure kind of falls to you pretty often to push a scene forward but you never really make it seem forced. I am really confused upon when the ship left and where it is now but I am sure that's more from me missing something (been doing a lot of reading while tired ergo tends to lead to missing things) but otherwise that post was fantastic. Especially the 'cyclops' bit, but also Ciri's new nickname and the reasoning behind it.
It's also amazing how much thought you put behind things. Like how Groundbreaker's body should be cared for in Shua's opinion... that Shua's people tend to be incinerated to protect from Necromancer's is a wonderful little detail that gives so much insight to the world Shua comes from. The little tidbits like that are just phenomenal and I wish I could keep up with all the details you seem to remember like how Ambika is named after a Moon Goddess and so on. You're really amazing at catching those miniscule details and adding them into your posts and by doing so you draw some other people's attention to it.
So I have literally no sympathy for Eclipse because she's just not... a character I feel I should sympathize with. She is so much fun to read, though! It's kind of... odd... how it's the characters that, in real life, people tend to dislike... those characters are some of the most fun to read. She's behaving terribly and treating Julie just awful and yet she's hilarious. Also, I will always appreciate that you don't just 'she wasn't affected by it' or 'she dodged the attack.' It's so fantastic to read posts by people who give and take a little from posts. You allow your characters to get hit, and then you bring out their strengths and weaknesses more. Like Eclipse's inability to handle pain and her childish response. You're just... genius when it comes to character building.
So many things to say about Marionetta. So many things. To write a character that has multiple bodies and yet I'm never left wondering 'well which body is that'... and that she's so very robotic and yet adorable at the same time. Those quirks you throw in with her and her being a robot... I just. Marionetta is such a fantastic character! xD The need to be in Ouroboros' spotlight is also really adorable though I know I wouldn't want her to think of me as a threat. Oh goodness >.< She's kind of like a bunny with fangs. She seems so dang cute and cuddly but she will bite if provoked. Perhaps a bunny isn't quite the right animal... but you get the point, right? Mari seems like such a sweet hearmless character and I can just imagine her doing not so great things with that permanent smile in plce. I've never really been able to read robot characters; it doesn't tend to fall in my story genres and the rps that had robots were ones I usually didn't have interest in... but you make sure to point out the pros and cons of her being a robot without leaving her character.
Kudos to the phenomenal post, Blaze. Just... awesome awesome job
To clear up what's going on with the ship, it hasn't left the park yet, it just moved ever so slightly to pick up Zriq'yhn and Julie. So it's still hovering over the park since Zriq'yhn hasn't gotten a chance to pilot it and get outta dodge because Julie's giving her trouble. I hecka wanna do longer responses to these and do talk about every post as well, but ya know. I'm doing stuff and things. I'll at least try to respond to this one though.
First of all I'm probably never ever gonna stop thanking your for analyzing each post. It's so cool to see someone picking out cool things and not so cool things in my writing and hearing your opinions on each character in the RP is super interesting.
I love color coding and I'm ridiculously anal about each characters' color. And when I say ridiculous I do mean ridiculous. Like, they all have to have different colors. Or if they do have the same color, they can never interact with each other LMFAO. Then I got pissed at myself when I realized that Shua and Sister Purge both have the same shade of brown as their color so now I'm like "FUCK" but I'm just gonna end up changing Purge's when I get around to posting her. Which might be sooner than I thought because if I'm not mistaken, a little demonic friend of hers cameo'd in Gallie's post
But back to the colors. So Idk about you guys, but I don't write posts in RPN anymore. Because RPN's textbox is lousy and glitchy and like you pointed out, there aren't enough colors. I write in google docs, and I just love it so much because you can make custom colors in it, resize images, and it saves automatically. I can see how at first it might seem like a waste of time to color code dialogue. I do it when I'm proof-reading through my post, and I've found that coloring the dialogue makes me pay special attention to it as far as typos go. And that really works for me because if I'm gonna have a typo, I don't want it to be in dialogue. It's a lot more jarring in dialogue.
I'm very excited to develop Shua's relationship with the Yuri Bros. It's funny because now that we've established that she's been on Earth for a year, but she and Tonyo have pretty much just been behaving as if they were still on Jovalorn, and now Shua's finally going to have Earthling friends. I see many many misunderstandings between her and Courtney, especially since Shua's not great with figurative language. The little happy clap that Raj did when Shua started being gentler with the robot parts was super adorable and made be giggle irl. And I'm really looking forward to exploring the dynamic between her and Mary, because Mary's such a sassy little bastard and her interactions are just amazing in general. I'm like pretty much 100% committed now to her joining the squad permanently at some point.
I do find myself moving the scene forward a lot and I hope I'm not too aggressive with stuff like that. That's why I try to use paragraphs to denote different instances in time (if that makes sense) so that we can still have those interactions but we aren't waiting 4 weeks before we move on. But if you guys ever feel like I'm moving too fast don't be afraid to call me out.
I'm having a ton of fun writing Eclipse xD I'm trying to make the most of it and go all out with her, because she probably won't be making an appearance in the main thread for a LOOOONG time after this. But perhaps once more crooks end up in Silverhold then she can end up in some Silverhold rapid fires. Which I would be so down for doing, because I feel like I've written a bunch of malicious characters and none of them have really gotten their just desserts yet. So having Zriq'yhn suffer the same fate of her victims and locking her up in a cage forever sounds like karma at its finest. If she gets bullied by other inmates there, even better. But even then, she has all these cool gadgets for combat that I want to try and get her to use at least once before she ends up in the pen. Or dies! Whichever happens.
Marionetta is one of the harder characters for me to write, because a lot of the time I feel like she might be too human, you know? So it's great to hear that you can recognize my efforts into balancing the fact that she has a personality, but she's still a robot. One of the most important things with Marionetta for me is to make sure that she's not a human hating robot, and that it's actually quite the opposite, so her seeking the approval of those around her is one way of expressing that. Another way is to throw in little Easter Eggs referring to her being created to be a babysitter. For instance, the idea that she would resort to tickling to incapacitate someone. Or the reason why she calls Ourobouros Mommy. Or rather, there's two reasons. There's the obvious reason of Ourobouros being an older woman who took care of her when she needed it the most. Like for a while, she had to face the idea of mortality for a while until Maia fixed her and gave her a second chance at life. A rebirth if you will. But the second reason is because Marionetta has kind of naturally taken on the role of being Ourobouros's babysitter. Maia is the Mommy, Mari is the babysitter, and Maia's whole operation is "the child".
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
I literally only just realized that the elf outside of the Anti Bro's base was Ava. When I heard that robots were attacking Ava I assumed it was Eclipse's robots. I don't know why I didn't even think to question a few things but I didn't and I feel really stupid now. I've caught on now though! I apologize for being slow sometimes >.<
RubyRose
Ace Character - Final 4
@Mitchs98
It's really cute how instead of taking offense to some of the stuff Courtney does, Ciri actually appreciated the attention. I've already mentioned how I think Ciri is a great fit into the bros because of her boundless happy energy. They all have different personalities that kind of just fit together for a team. Ciri brings a lot of childish innocence to the team that I think is exceptionally useful in helping build a team that glues together well. Not every personality needs to mesh to have a functioning team but you kind of need... something. Kind of like Sid in Ice Age; he kind of does keep the team together. I think Ciri could be the same for Yuri bros if things continue.
Also, the observation on Shua's clothing was really really amusing xD
@Maki
Since Ava and Ouroboros are in the same place, I think you could have had them converse a little more in a 'back and forth' sort of way but the way you did it also works perfectly fine (I mean there are posts where Chester and Lanna are constantly back and forth, and posts where they don't really interact so I understand it works either way.( I really like how you portray Ouroboros; she still seems to be on the more lighthearted, yet strict villain. Something that appears pretty but can snap and become dangerous depending on which side is needed. Her tone and the words you have her use continue to build upon this concept and I think it's well done.
Ava is... someone I'm still getting a read off of. She's interesting, and she's loud, and she's going to create an interesting dynamic... but I don't know her well enough to know what to say. I think your choice of words fit the character you've made her out to be in a strong fashion so far.
Golden Sun's idea was genius and I dont know if you left that area open for Courtney to correct or not, having that one flaw in the plan was entirely genius. The plan itself was well done, and that little pat on the back Mary gave to herself at the end was absolutely priceless. Really good post, Maki
@SirBlazeALot
Courtney's ability to see flaws in plans highlights her background hisotry because it's not something most people would be able to do as well as she does. She's definitely a very strong reason why the Yuri Bros haven't crumbled; her intelligence is an incorporal part to them not falling apart. Also her lack of thinking before speaking is awesome because it causes a lot of funny instances with Shua like with the 'baby girl.' Not meaning that Courtney never thinks about what she's saying; just that sometimes it feels like she's the type of character to speak her mind and toss in nicknames without thoroughly thinking them through. Why would she need to, afterall? I think it's great you throw those instances in, though; and I also think it's fantastic how strongly Shua and Courtney contract. Having them interact really displays a lot about each character.
Marionetta... seriously, what is there to say? Her continued childish behavior paired with her high intelligence makes for a lovable character despite her being an Anti Bro. She's just so dang cute it's ridiculous. And she's also a force to be reckoned with and she knows it; it's a good thing Ouroboros saved her and that Mari's loyalty is to the woman. The Anti Bros are very lucky to have her.
The Grin... is someone else, like Ava, I'm still trying to get a read on. I'm sure she'll be a useful character and yet I don't know her all that well yet. Your posts make her seem like a very standoffish and quiet sort; which isn't a bad thing. Just a thing... It's odd because when you think Jester you tend to think a personality more like Mari's. But it's not a bad thing that she's not either.
Great post, Blaze. The scene was continued to be moved along and the characters were as engaging as always
@theglassangel
Kathalina... I am so glad that we discussed having her and Ella/The Ringmaster meetup because it's been great getting to know Ella. Granted we've seen a 'kinder' side of her because of Kathalina but I think that's just going to help get across how unkind she actually is later. (Granted she's kind to everyone that works for her obediently; just not to those who would betray her or have issues with the way her cirucs is run). Her fascination with Cotton candy, though... how does she not get sick? I would get really sick with that much cotton candy. I'm glad that you made it positive, though. Because that made things a little bit better for Ella; not feeling like she was overwhelming Alexandrea with gifts.
It's really cute how instead of taking offense to some of the stuff Courtney does, Ciri actually appreciated the attention. I've already mentioned how I think Ciri is a great fit into the bros because of her boundless happy energy. They all have different personalities that kind of just fit together for a team. Ciri brings a lot of childish innocence to the team that I think is exceptionally useful in helping build a team that glues together well. Not every personality needs to mesh to have a functioning team but you kind of need... something. Kind of like Sid in Ice Age; he kind of does keep the team together. I think Ciri could be the same for Yuri bros if things continue.
Also, the observation on Shua's clothing was really really amusing xD
@Maki
Since Ava and Ouroboros are in the same place, I think you could have had them converse a little more in a 'back and forth' sort of way but the way you did it also works perfectly fine (I mean there are posts where Chester and Lanna are constantly back and forth, and posts where they don't really interact so I understand it works either way.( I really like how you portray Ouroboros; she still seems to be on the more lighthearted, yet strict villain. Something that appears pretty but can snap and become dangerous depending on which side is needed. Her tone and the words you have her use continue to build upon this concept and I think it's well done.
Ava is... someone I'm still getting a read off of. She's interesting, and she's loud, and she's going to create an interesting dynamic... but I don't know her well enough to know what to say. I think your choice of words fit the character you've made her out to be in a strong fashion so far.
Golden Sun's idea was genius and I dont know if you left that area open for Courtney to correct or not, having that one flaw in the plan was entirely genius. The plan itself was well done, and that little pat on the back Mary gave to herself at the end was absolutely priceless. Really good post, Maki
@SirBlazeALot
Courtney's ability to see flaws in plans highlights her background hisotry because it's not something most people would be able to do as well as she does. She's definitely a very strong reason why the Yuri Bros haven't crumbled; her intelligence is an incorporal part to them not falling apart. Also her lack of thinking before speaking is awesome because it causes a lot of funny instances with Shua like with the 'baby girl.' Not meaning that Courtney never thinks about what she's saying; just that sometimes it feels like she's the type of character to speak her mind and toss in nicknames without thoroughly thinking them through. Why would she need to, afterall? I think it's great you throw those instances in, though; and I also think it's fantastic how strongly Shua and Courtney contract. Having them interact really displays a lot about each character.
Marionetta... seriously, what is there to say? Her continued childish behavior paired with her high intelligence makes for a lovable character despite her being an Anti Bro. She's just so dang cute it's ridiculous. And she's also a force to be reckoned with and she knows it; it's a good thing Ouroboros saved her and that Mari's loyalty is to the woman. The Anti Bros are very lucky to have her.
The Grin... is someone else, like Ava, I'm still trying to get a read on. I'm sure she'll be a useful character and yet I don't know her all that well yet. Your posts make her seem like a very standoffish and quiet sort; which isn't a bad thing. Just a thing... It's odd because when you think Jester you tend to think a personality more like Mari's. But it's not a bad thing that she's not either.
Great post, Blaze. The scene was continued to be moved along and the characters were as engaging as always
@theglassangel
Kathalina... I am so glad that we discussed having her and Ella/The Ringmaster meetup because it's been great getting to know Ella. Granted we've seen a 'kinder' side of her because of Kathalina but I think that's just going to help get across how unkind she actually is later. (Granted she's kind to everyone that works for her obediently; just not to those who would betray her or have issues with the way her cirucs is run). Her fascination with Cotton candy, though... how does she not get sick? I would get really sick with that much cotton candy. I'm glad that you made it positive, though. Because that made things a little bit better for Ella; not feeling like she was overwhelming Alexandrea with gifts.
SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
Maki
Ten Thousand Club
I plan on it
SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
Mitchs98
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Doubtful. I'm about to finish up responding to things I neglected then get off and do some things for my birthday.
Will probably be Monday when I post, or Tuesday ^-^
I try not to half ass my posts for this d:
SirBlazeALot
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@RubyRose @Maki @theglassangel @SpookySableye @Mitchs98 @Leaf Fi
Hey guys, what do you think about starting a space based team? All this business with Eclipse makes me wish I defined galactic law and how all that shit works in the Yuri Bros universe a little bit more, so I'm planning on doing some world building. I've also been super hungry for a sci-fi based RP (I feel like it's the only genre I'm missing from my RP life) but I feel like I'm GMing enough RPs already.
Today's your birthday or is it just sort of close to today?
Hey guys, what do you think about starting a space based team? All this business with Eclipse makes me wish I defined galactic law and how all that shit works in the Yuri Bros universe a little bit more, so I'm planning on doing some world building. I've also been super hungry for a sci-fi based RP (I feel like it's the only genre I'm missing from my RP life) but I feel like I'm GMing enough RPs already.
Today's your birthday or is it just sort of close to today?
Mitchs98
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SirBlazeALot
Seven Thousand Club
Space would be cool c:
Tomorrow is my birthday actually
Nice I shall keep that in mind. Also, you me and Ruby are all Sagittariuseseseses awww yeee.