Idea
The Pun Tyrant
This seems great. Now, just a couple things:Null said:Name: Sonoda Natsumi
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
Species: Human
Background: Sonoda never knew her parents, due to a set of extraordinary coincidences that led to her arrival at an orphanage the same day as her birth, she grew up here, and led a fairly average life, with a good few incidents, and a small, close knit group of 4 friends. 3 years prior to arrival at blackwood academy, Sonoda awoke to gunfire, as a group of agents from a secret organization, dedicated to the suprsesion of the gifted had broken into the orphanage, ironically, this would be the catalyst for her gifts awakening, she and her friends ran to hide in the basement, and as they did, she watched them gunned down in cold blood, barely managing to escape herself by creating a large cloud of smoke through which she was able to escape outside, and live in various places over the years, until recieving an Invitation to blackwoods academy, figuring it better than living where she was now, Sonoda accepted with great haste
Likes/Dislikes: Likes: Red, Fine Foods, A Good Night's Sleep, Competition Dislikes: Being Outsmarted, Being Touched while in deep thought, Feeling ignored, which happens quite often even if untrue
Personality: Sonoda is a fun-loving introverted person, who will often spend large quantities of time interacting with others, before becoming completely exhausted and making excuses to get away from others in order to recharge mentally for future interaction, Sonoda is additionally constantly paranoid that those she cares for will suddenly die or leave her, although this does not stop her from making a great many friends, and in facts leads to her caring even more for her friends. Sonoda is terrified of Loud noises, as they remind her of Gunfire, although this fear is not enough to cause her to collapse, it is enough to impact her ability to function in a high-stress environment.
Gift: Alchemy, Sonoda is able to transmute anything within 7 meters into anything else, but only if the exchange is equivalent, and nothing created is created outside of the 7 meter range, she must have line-of-sight to the target, or be touching it, the further from her, the harder it is to manipulate, and the more precise or numerous the changes, the longer they take to complete, and the more mental strain sonoda undergoes.
Best subject: Science
Worst Subject: History
Grade: Class 1 (Grade 10)
Motivation: Sonoda wishes to avenge her dead friends, and aid to create a safe place for all those who are gifted and feel they have no where to go
Optional Pet: Nope
In regards for the background, please try re-writing it. In terms of content, it`s perfect, however, it`s just one step away from impossible to read. Punctuation and verbal tenses have to be corrected here.
As for the gift, you seem to have placed a lot of safety measures, well done. However, it`s still not enough. I`ll explain. Given your choice of words, I`ll assume it was taken from fullmetal alchemist. That said:
-please clarify the meaning of "transmute". Not everyone has seen fullmetal alchemist.
-I don`t know about you, but when I go out into the street I don`t usually bring a scale to measure the weight and mass of every rock I find. Therefore, there is no way that the "equivalent exchange" can work properly in rp, unless there is a supporting set of rules that can guide what can or can`t be transmuted with what
-Energy. It probably takes energy to transmute stuff AND to make it move. This wouldn`t be a problem, except I kinda see you trying to make giant blocks of stone rise from the ground. NO. Limit what one can transmute.
-On the same line, no transmuting living beings or any form of object with "magic" powers.
No problem.Azula Cross] [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/profile/17887-xidiamond/ said:
I see. I went and checked your profile, you did mention they were "explosive knifes", so I apologize for my misunderstanding. However, not being able to avoid your attack and then counter-attack means your characters is essentially unbeatable. A machine gun with infinite explosive ammo? How are you gonna lie through that? You can only do it, if you work SPECIFICALLY to beat that weapon. When you have such a situation, where the only way to stand a chance against your character is by coming with a specific counter to it, then your character is OP. So, in other words, it`s what I said before. Infinite knifes? Alright. Explosive? If it`s not too intense. But no firing them a machine-gun speeds and no making an army and hurling at your opponent at once.Aqua said:
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