Fantasy A King's Reign

[Valhite]

Your profile is enough, but your ability still needs a lot of work, since some of the cards are quite overpowered.
The card that changes his appearance is one of those. How does his appearance change? Does his face alter, does his eye color change, does he lose his hair, etc. Is this change permanent?


On the summoning card, who and what is this Devil? How long can this creature be summoned? Can it be killed? What does it do? Does it have any strengths? Weaknesses?


On the magic card, it's too broad, since there are many types of magic. Elemental, the use of the elements such as fire, water, air, earth etc. Light, which uses the light, and some sacred spiritual things. Darkness, which uses dark-related things. Please specify which magic he can do with the card.


On the tower card, does he control it? Can it be destroyed?


On the reverse tower card, it's pretty much invulnerability so that's denied.


Overall, you have too many abilities. If you cannot justify on why, and how he's able to do so, then I recommend you to use simpler ones such as super strength, heat vision, pyrokinesis, etc.

Alright if you said so


EDITED! How about my new abilities?

 

[Reinhardt]

How does he carry those disintegrated swords if they are disintegrated? You all ready have your twin swords so pretty much having them would be redundant. Also, there is no such thing as twin pistols. You might have meant, two pistols by that.

 

[Vengeance Spirit]

Dual pistols is the correct terminology.

 

[Valhite]

How does he carry those disintegrated swords if they are disintegrated? You all ready have your twin swords so pretty much having them would be redundant. Also, there is no such thing as twin pistols. You might have meant, two pistols by that.

His twin sword are merely defense if he ran out of energy to summon the sword. He can materialized every particle around him to create the sword (which is practically use a lot of energy) so basically my character wouldn't really fond of using it because it's almost consuming all of his energy. So normally he only used his telekinetic and twin sword


Yeah that's what I mean. Edited

 

[Reinhardt]

His twin sword are merely defense if he ran out of energy to summon the sword. He can materialized every particle around him to create the sword (which is practically use a lot of energy) so basically my character wouldn't really fond of using it because it's almost consuming all of his energy. So normally he only used his telekinetic and twin sword
Yeah that's what I mean. Edited

That did not answer my question at all.

 

[NeoLeaf]

@Valhite he means to ask, where do you carry those dematerialized swords? Do you keep it in a bag or pockets?

 

[Valhite]

That did not answer my question at all.

He's fighting mainly using his telekinesis ability or his equipment. The 10 swords are only used as a Last Resort. He do not need to bring it. Because he can just materialized particles around him to turn into his 10 swords and wield them telekinetically.

 

[NeoLeaf]

Where are the swords? ( ._.)

 

[Reinhardt]

He's fighting mainly using his telekinesis ability or his equipment. The 10 swords are only used as a Last Resort. He do not need to bring it. Because he can just materialized particles around him to turn into his 10 swords and wield them telekinetically.

Then that doesn't count as an equipment doesn't it? Also, materializing things out of nothin is very different from telekinesis.

 

[Valhite]

Everywhere. I mean (sorry for my bad english and bad description .. newbie guys) , the sword itself made from atom particles right. So firstly he just scrambled over the sword particle so it can "vanish into thin air". Then if he ever need it again, he just can put the atom particles around him to be exactly like the atom particles of the sword. His swords don't have any particular appearance, it's just a sword that he used via telekinesis. And yes it's telekinesis , he control the atom to create the sword.

 

[NeoLeaf]

Maybe if he made those swords come from a trans-dimensinal pocket then it would make sense how he can wield ten swords... Just a thought.


According to what he's saying, the ten swords are dematerialized into atom sized fractons and moved by via. telekinesis, which by the way is very energy consuming. To focus on moving the molecules of the ten dematerialized swords plus using your regular abilities seems like a nerve racking task - actually it is impossible.


Too much energy is being consumed and too much focus is required for the human being to do such a feat ... the swords are unnessasary and wasted effort.

 

[Reinhardt]

Everywhere. I mean (sorry for my bad english and bad description .. newbie guys) , the sword itself made from atom particles right. So firstly he just scrambled over the sword particle so it can "vanish into thin air". Then if he ever need it again, he just can put the atom particles around him to be exactly like the atom particles of the sword. His swords don't have any particular appearance, it's just a sword that he used via telekinesis. And yes it's telekinesis , he control the atom to create the sword.

Not only what NeoLeaf had said, but once you've dematerialized the sword into atoms, it will clearly collide into other atoms, and travel much faster than you think. By the time that he would try to rematerialize them, the atoms would have traveled a huge distance and possible bonded with others atoms, therefore making such an action a very difficult task, if not impossible.

 

[Valhite]

Not only what NeoLeaf had said, but once you've dematerialized the sword into atoms, it will clearly collide into other atoms, and travel much faster than you think. By the time that he would try to rematerialize them, the atoms would have traveled a huge distance and possible bonded with others atoms, therefore making such an action a very difficult task, if not impossible.

I see then. How about I changed it to pocket dimension like NeoLeaf said?

 

[Reinhardt]

That will be good, however, having a pocket dimension and telekinesis are two different things. You'll have to chose one over the other.

 

[Valhite]

That will be good, however, having a pocket dimension and telekinesis are two different things. You'll have to chose one over the other.

How about the special ability of the sword can duplicate itself ?

 

[Reinhardt]

How about the special ability of the sword can duplicate itself ?

That'd count as an ability as well. This is in a modern setting, not a fantasy one. Magical weaponry does not exist. Therefore, it is impossible for a sword to be able to duplicate itself, that is unless you have an ability that allows you form materials out of thin air, like my character's.

 

[Valhite]

That'd count as an ability as well. This is in a modern setting, not a fantasy one. Magical weaponry does not exist. Therefore, it is impossible for a sword to be able to duplicate itself, that is unless you have an ability that allows you form materials out of thin air, like my character's.

Alright i'm out of idea now. I will only let him wield 2 swords for telekinesis and maybe he could take sword from fallen soldier how about that?

 

[Reinhardt]

Sounds good to me.

 

[Valhite]

Edited

 

[Reinhardt]

Telekinesis and forcefield creation are two different things. Sure one can deflect attack using telekinses, but a forcefield functions more than just that. A forcefield can be an impassable barrier, or a semi-permeable wall.


And the detractable guard is very unclear. If it is almost unbreakable, as you say, then what kind of attacks would break it? Is there anything that can pass through it? Also, having that item is pretty much being invulnerable, and would be redundant since you all ready have telekinesis which can be used to deflect attacks.

 

[Valhite]

Telekinesis and forcefield creation are two different things. Sure one can deflect attack using telekinses, but a forcefield functions more than just that. A forcefield can be an impassable barrier, or a semi-permeable wall.
And the detractable guard is very unclear. If it is almost unbreakable, as you say, then what kind of attacks would break it? Is there anything that can pass through it? Also, having that item is pretty much being invulnerable, and would be redundant since you all ready have telekinesis which can be used to deflect attacks.

Oh yeah you right. I delete the force field one


You got it wrong my friend. "It can deflect most attacks" means it can deflect almost any kind of attack. But it's not unbreakable. I said if it's too much, it will break by itself. My telekinesis can't defend itself againts fast moving things like a bullet so this is used for that. And also when I ran out of energy, I would fight without my power so this is needed to block enemy attacks

 

[Reinhardt]

So, what kind of attacks does it block? What can't it block? Include those info for clarity.

 

[Valhite]

Oh yeah I'll input that

 

[LeRuse]

Out of curiosity. How much does the king know about the rebles? Is he aware of the rebel leader and the eight's identitys? Are they wanted criminals?

 

[Reinhardt]

Out of curiousity. How much does the king know about the rebles? Is he aware of the rebel leader and the eight's identitys? Are they wanted criminals?

Everyone in The Rebellion are branded as criminals, and that is why they use hideouts. The leader and the eight are on the top of the wanted list though. And since the king is ruling the world, police and other anti-crime organizations are working under the King's Knights, launching raids and searches against The Rebellion.