Fantasy ;☆

[The One Eyed Bandit]

Though if you have any other ideas for it, I'd like to hear em, I'd like to make it something more interesting myself, but I can't think of anything .-.

 

[ShadyAce]

Owh, we have two yellow magical girls .3.


And, @TheHappyPikachu , I put your character as Asana's partner c:

 

[The One Eyed Bandit]

Oh? Shoot. I'll change Kyou's color rll quick. I thought Asana was black, for some reason.

 

[Idea]

[QUOTE="The One Eyed Bandit]It's only simple for so long. It's that kind of thing that if she ever gets past a certain point, she won't WANT to reverse it. What the change means is that there has to be something large and significant for her to enter bad guy territory, or for there to be a lot of things that happen over a short period of time, not just like, a loss every now and again stacking up over the long run.

[/QUOTE]
I'll roll with it.

 

[ShadyAce]

[QUOTE="The One Eyed Bandit]Oh? Shoot. I'll change Kyou's color rll quick. I thought Asana was black, for some reason.

[/QUOTE]
Haha, no worries. It makes sense, since majority of the CS is black.

 

[cojemo]

@Idea with all of this talk about wishes and catches, maybe you should have a look at Shizu's. My idea was that the catch was more of a mental one than a magical one, but you seem to want magical catches, so if you want me to change it then that's fine.

 

[Idea]

@Idea with all of this talk about wishes and catches, maybe you should have a look at Shizu's. My idea was that the catch was more of a mental one than a magical one, but you seem to want magical catches, so if you want me to change it then that's fine.

I think there is a misunderstanding here. The idea of the twist/catch is that it escalates depending on battles lost, as it is a mechanism to keep magical girls doing their job properly.

 

[ShadyAce]

I think there is a misunderstanding here. The idea of the twist/catch is that it escalates depending on battles lost, as it is a mechanism to keep magical girls doing their job properly.

Oh, if that's the case should I edit my character's wish so that the more battles won, the more helpful the visions + the more frequent?

 

[cojemo]

Oh I understood what the purpose of the catch was, and thus why I tried something different with it, as it still keeps her doing it but in a very different way then 'well if she looses then x happens'. It's just you never explained it well. Of course, since that's not what you're after then I can easily adjust it. It can be that the more she looses the stronger a subconcious pull towards her duty as a magical girl becomes, or even better simply the more battles she's in. How's that sound?

 

[Idea]

Oh, if that's the case should I edit my character's wish so that the more battles won, the more helpful the visions + the more frequent?

If the visions are the catch, then they increase with the losses

 

[Idea]

Oh I understood what the purpose of the catch was, and thus why I tried something different with it, as it still keeps her doing it but in a very different way then 'well if she looses then x happens'. It's just you never explained it well. Of course, since that's not what you're after then I can easily adjust it. It can be that the more she looses the stronger a subconcious pull towards her duty as a magical girl becomes, or even better simply the more battles she's in. How's that sound?

I didn't actually get what the catch was, reading over the wish section on your character...

 

[ShadyAce]

If the visions are the catch, then they increase with the losses

Spoiler

"Asana wishes that her past was different. Or at least that hers could seem better if she knew someone had a worse history or backstory than she did. Her wish was half granted, in the fact she can learn about other's past. Sometimes, when she touches something that belongs to someone in particular or looks at them, she gets of a vision memory they've had in jagged parts. This memory could be completely random, such as eating dinner, or something of use to her. She cannot control when she has these visions, or what they are of."

This is her current wish + catch. If the catch is meant to change according to won or lost battles, I believe that the more they win, the more use Asana has in her visions, whether it is for personal sake or magical girl sake. The more she looses, the more useless, or even harmful to her self-esteem they become. Would you like me to add that in?

 

[Idea]

"Asana wishes that her past was different. Or at least that hers could seem better if she knew someone had a worse history or backstory than she did. Her wish was half granted, in the fact she can learn about other's past. Sometimes, when she touches something that belongs to someone in particular or looks at them, she gets of a vision memory they've had in jagged parts. This memory could be completely random, such as eating dinner, or something of use to her. She cannot control when she has these visions, or what they are of."

This is her current wish + catch. If the catch is meant to change according to won or lost battles, I believe that the more they win, the more use Asana has in her visions, whether it is for personal sake or magical girl sake. The more she looses, the more useless, or even harmful to her self-esteem they become. Would you like me to add that in?

The positive or negative impact and nature of the visions could've at stake, perhaps? Just an idea...

 

[ShadyAce]

The positive or negative impact and nature of the visions could've at stake, perhaps? Just an idea...

Yeah, that's the basic gist of what I was thinking of adding in, so it actually motivates her as a magical girl.

 

[Idea]

Yeah, that's the basic gist of what I was thinking of adding in, so it actually motivates her as a magical girl.

Go for it!

 

[ShadyAce]

Alright, I've made her wish more fleshed out now. Other than that, I'm ready to go when everyone else is c:

 

[Cosmos]

WOOOO!~ Lets plz start this soon!~ >W< xD :3 X3 xD

 

[Cosmos]

Owh, we have two yellow magical girls .3.
And, @TheHappyPikachu , I put your character as Asana's partner c:

Yus. :3 xD X3 xD

 

[Nano]

@TheHappyPikachu


(Would use quote, but phone is spazzing atm)


I'll add Yuki to Chitose's list of friends (if two people can be called a list =w=;; once I'm on a more appropriate device.


Edit: "list of friends" reminds me of The Book of Friends from Natsume Yuujinchou...which is getting a new season soon!


I'm sorry for the random comment .___.

 

[Cosmos]

@TheHappyPikachu
(Would use quote, but phone is spazzing atm)


I'll add Yuki to Chitose's list of friends (if two people can be called a list =w=;; once I'm on a more appropriate device.


Edit: "list of friends" reminds me of The Book of Friends from Natsume Yuujinchou...which is getting a new season soon!


I'm sorry for the random comment .___.

xD Lol~ also I found a gif I feel describes Chitose, Asana and Yuki well to a certain extent. X3

 

[A Murder Of Corviknight]

The character is good, except for a given detail: She is a Mary Sue at the moment. You did state "she isn't perfect" and such several times, but you forgot to actually make that true. She is talented AND works hard, she's kind, and any bursts of negativity are put aside right away...there barely seems to be any room for flaws to even exist. And you didn't mention a single one that applies to her. So, in short, add three or four flaws.

Okie dokie. Looks like I need to clear up something because I cut away too much fat from my personality and backstory section. =v=;;; Sorry I was trying to shorten things because people often say that I make those sections too long in my CS's. 8D;;;


Maybe it's because I didn't make it too clear...but Shui Mei should be considered to be suffering from depression. Depression is one of those psychological issues that aren't always straight up all over your face so I don't like flat out saying "she has depression". Depression is also comes in various ranges of severity and the most common form in a lot of teenagers isn't something that you can see in public easily. Like Shui Mei, even though they have depression (they might not even know that they might be considered to have depression), they often cover it up. A lot of times they'll have moments where they think that they're just not enough or (like Shui Mei) just a few things makes their worth.


Shui Mei is one of those people, when faced with a problem, they'll go straight to denial about their own issues. Yes, she does think that she's not worth much past her music but she also avoids her own problems like the plague. She won't tell you that you made her angry, sad or just flat out disappointed. I've had friends who, much to my immense frustration, don't tell me what I said or did wrong. To me, sometimes hanging out with them felt like walking around blind because you wouldn't know just when and what you would stomp on and crush. You would be able to tell that they were upset about something by the way that they just steamrolled over something that you said. They just let those feelings of negativity fester. You can cover up negativity all you want, but it's like shoving a mess under you bed. You might not see it but it's still there. Probably growing some extra fungus too tbh. She might be good for other people but she's definitely not good for herself.


In the backstory and in the personality, I implied that she relies on music too much. Relying on just one thing to keep you going in life is not healthy. Especially when you think your self-worth is suddenly gone just because you don't have it. (Like aiyoo, what the heck are you doing girl? Your parents loved you even before you knew you had singing talent. And please freaking say something that they don't know. Like you're hella lonely and they crush you every time they miss something. They ain't psychics. They honestly don't know they're hurting you that much.)


[Now that I explained all of this...how am I supposed to fit it in the personality section...? =A=;;; Clarification is hard when you're trying to be subtle. Hold up gotta tinker now.]

 

[Cosmos]

@Vague Congrats on getting enough members!~ I'm hyped for this rp!!!!~ X3 (I hope it continues for a while~)

 

[Nano]

xD Lol~ also I found a gif I feel describes Chitose, Asana and Yuki well to a certain extent. X3

LOL


Chitose's name is starting to become a mouthful to say. OxO;


I really need a nickname for her..."Sen" or something? (The first kanji in Chitose's given name can be read as "Chi" or "Sen" among many other readings)

 

[Cosmos]

LOL
Chitose's name is starting to become a mouthful to say. OxO;


I really need a nickname for her..."Sen" or something? (The first kanji in Chitose's given name can be read as "Chi" or "Sen" among many other readings)

I really like Chi-Chan~ my character's gonna call her that~…. xD It's cute and seems to fit her~ :3 yeah, Yuki's full name is a mouthful~

 

[Nano]

I really like Chi-Chan~ my character's gonna call her that~…. xD It's cute and seems to fit her~ :3 yeah, Yuki's full name is a mouthful~

I just really like pretty names~


Chitose sounds pretty (if you pronounce it properly) and I like its meaning.


I'll add Chi-chan to the nickname section soon!