CerpinTaxt
A Man With No Face
Lol nice. I'm about it. Can't wait for you to post so we can get this show on the road.CerpinTaxt what do you think? Cool with that plotline?
Sounds good to me!
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Futuristic The Frontier: A Space Western Chat Club
- Thread starter capMARVELOUS
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Sounds good to me!
Camden
Easily Distracted
First character is up. Working on images and then my next character.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
I love him.
Kobe Nathan Wade
One Thousand Club
Hey does the new Eden colony have a sheriff yet? Like a player character I mean, I'm sure they have one.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
I think the closest thing we had to a player character sheriff was Locomotive's character, but he hasn't been around in a while. So no, no official sheriff just yet.
Kobe Nathan Wade
One Thousand Club
May I? Seems to be a lot of crooked characters that could be balanced out with a do-gooder.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
If you want. Have at it.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
Oi
Bill Nein
I have a few remarks about Dralok-Har before I can accept him. Just a few housekeeping things, is all.
First, his name gives no indication of clan or rank. I don't know if that was intentional or not- some clarification would be welcome- but unless he's cast aside his clan ties, his name should still indicate clan and rank.
Second, while I appreciate your adherence to the three Gun rule, Khodai on the whole aren't really ones to use guns, and when they do, it's usually smaller fare, not big'uns like The Big Heavy.
Third and last, a bit more personality on both him and Elder Holland would be nice; at the very least, what's the dynamic between them like?
All in all, nothing too major needs reworking, but it does need reworking before he can join our ranks.
Bill Nein
I have a few remarks about Dralok-Har before I can accept him. Just a few housekeeping things, is all. First, his name gives no indication of clan or rank. I don't know if that was intentional or not- some clarification would be welcome- but unless he's cast aside his clan ties, his name should still indicate clan and rank.
Second, while I appreciate your adherence to the three Gun rule, Khodai on the whole aren't really ones to use guns, and when they do, it's usually smaller fare, not big'uns like The Big Heavy.
Third and last, a bit more personality on both him and Elder Holland would be nice; at the very least, what's the dynamic between them like?
All in all, nothing too major needs reworking, but it does need reworking before he can join our ranks.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
Oi
First, his name gives no indication of clan or rank. I don't know if that was intentional or not- some clarification would be welcome- but unless he's cast aside his clan ties, his name should still indicate clan and rank.
Second, while I appreciate your adherence to the three Gun rule, Khodai on the whole aren't really ones to use guns, and when they do, it's usually smaller fare, not big'uns like The Big Heavy.
Third and last, a bit more personality on both him and Elder Holland would be nice; at the very least, what's the dynamic between them like?
All in all, nothing too major needs reworking, but it does need reworking before he can join our ranks.
Sweet. I been wanting to explain this. It's pretty much elder Holland found himself captured along with Dralok at an enemy clans location. Needless to say they teemed up(at the time it was very uneasy) and escaped. After that Dralok saw his potential and asked him to help his clan in a clan war. So in exchange for knowledge, resources, and allies, the brotherhood helped them win a clan war the brotherhood then annexed a part of their land to set up an F.O.B. In exchange for enhancing the clans weapons skills (the reason Dralok can use big heavy). Other tidy bits have been applied (I.e. Learning of the English language, trade skills, how to make their own armor &weapons better). My intention of this was kind of like the one tribe of fallen in the reef that are peacful (I think it was variks or something of the like) also I meant to change the name bet never remembered. Thanks for telling me that.
Edit: The clan isn't supposed to be big. Just small in numbers but power to person/khodai ratio is good. I'm still working on the clan name since I believe they should retain their own clan name but still be allied with the B.O.S.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
What's the F.O.B and B.O.S? This... isn't Fallout, you know.
Camden
Easily Distracted
I know F.O.B. can stand for Forward Operating Base, basically like a little station or outpost.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
yeah. I have no intention for the BOS to even appear other than a few mentions from holland or Dralok. Just backstory and exposition also nonsense. Maybe the F.O.B. If you permit but that's pretty much it.
Edit: but if it discomforts you I'll change things up. My og plan for Holland was a tony stark like persona.( weapons and armor manufacturer etc)
Edit: but if it discomforts you I'll change things up. My og plan for Holland was a tony stark like persona.( weapons and armor manufacturer etc)
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
It's not that it bothers me; it's just I'm still a little confused. What do the acronyms stand for? What sort of role were you imagining they played? Where are the other members of these organizations?
Holland's weapons and armor manufacturer angle can stay; I suspect his products will become important very soon. So can the friendly-to-humans Khodai clan.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
F.O.B. = forward operation base (an outpost or temporary base)
B.o.S = Brotherhood of Steel (a private military organization focused on the protection of technology and humans...though new trade accords have allied khodai on the list.)
Other members of the B.O.S aren't important except for a few proctors I'm going to add if the F.O.B. Becomes a thing. The role is pretty much a second force of law an order to mars. That and secure, archive, and destroy technology that is too powerful in the wrong hands (weapons of mass destruction.)
And since I am a Latin nerdy the clans name is ferros. Ferro is steel in Latin and an s for fun
B.o.S = Brotherhood of Steel (a private military organization focused on the protection of technology and humans...though new trade accords have allied khodai on the list.)
Other members of the B.O.S aren't important except for a few proctors I'm going to add if the F.O.B. Becomes a thing. The role is pretty much a second force of law an order to mars. That and secure, archive, and destroy technology that is too powerful in the wrong hands (weapons of mass destruction.)
And since I am a Latin nerdy the clans name is ferros. Ferro is steel in Latin and an s for fun
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
Mmkay. That clears some things up.
I like the idea of a military outpost/"rest stop" jointly operated by both humans and Khodai. That can stay. And what you have for the Brotherhood is a good start. If I may build upon your idea, what if the Brotherhood is/was a military exploration unit tasked with finding, protecting, and, if needed, capturing new resources for the Gov, to aid in establishing new colonies? Then they aided Clan Ferros in pushing back the enemy clan and lost some members in the fray, so now there're only a few members left.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
Yes. I was thinking of the B.O.S as like the Israeli army (small in size but EXTREMELY powerful)
I like you idea but could they be more of a private force outside of the government, better yet their own government. Like a lawful neutral mercenary group with good armor and good weapons (I mean, Holland created them so of course he would fund and create their armor.) but whatever's best for the rp. Though they have khodai in their ranks and have given them titles. Like paladin Dralok for an example.
I like you idea but could they be more of a private force outside of the government, better yet their own government. Like a lawful neutral mercenary group with good armor and good weapons (I mean, Holland created them so of course he would fund and create their armor.) but whatever's best for the rp. Though they have khodai in their ranks and have given them titles. Like paladin Dralok for an example.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
That seems alright. Would the armor and weapons they produce be accessible for non-Brotherhood entities?
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
Some stuff. But not the power armor( mostly since you need training. For that stuff.) but the good stuff are exclusively brotherhood items. But older models of the AER series or Aep series are used. Though if they kill a brotherhood member, it's not like it's forbidden to use their stuff... also his plasma stuff(will be used later if he needs to swap weapons) is exclusive,y for him since he's only manufactured a few plasma rifles/pistols.
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
OK, so with all this in mind, here's the idea I've got for all this.
The Brotherhood is a mostly lawful band of mercenaries with strong ties to the Khodai of Clan Ferros. They have established outposts here and there, securing resources and strategic locations to defend their allies. They're led by the de facto leader Elder Holland, who, in addition to captaining them, co-owns and operates an arms manufacturing enterprise (his partner runs it while he, Holland, is away). This enterprise provides weapons and armor to both the lawkeepers of the Gov and the Brotherhood, though the latter gets a bit better stuff.
How's that?
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
Yup. Though his best friend (for fun plot reason) could plan in removing Holland and taking him over. But I don't want to play as him. But just a fun thing
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
OK, good. Now that that's cleared up, you can slap this on your dudes' profiles, I'll type up a Lore post, and we'll both be good to go.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
Kk. I fixed the clan name stuff for Durlok-har. Now all I need is an opening for him and Holland to join....
Camden
Easily Distracted
What if they weren't ripped directly from fallout, this is western themed after all, not cold war.
Gunslinger instead of Paladin, stuff like that.
Gunslinger instead of Paladin, stuff like that.
Bill Nein
The Digital Bill of Rights
*has cardiac arrest* yeah, but then I'd have to rename all the stuffs. And litteraly all I ported was the titles(and added a few) the armor/weapon aesthetics and the name. My B.O.S. isn't the dickery from fallout
capMARVELOUS
Yeah
Still, though, I did get on to another player for basically porting video game stuff over here.
I can go through the dickery of changing the names, if you don't want to.
I can go through the dickery of changing the names, if you don't want to.
