Fantasy The Configuration - Modern Fantasy/Vampire/Detailed - [CLOSED INDEFINITELY]

[mothspit]

I'm also accepting one more application to bring the total number of players up to 8.

Posting at LEAST 2-3 times a week is preferred. If something comes up preventing you from posting, please tell me.

 

[That Poppy]

I'm in ^^

 

[mothspit]

I'm in ^^

You're welcome to apply! I'll let you know if you're accepted or not.

 

[Drakenbane]

Went ahead and posted my profile app

 

[mothspit]

bump

I'm still accepting at least one more application.

 

[mothspit]

Went ahead and posted my profile app

Thanks for your character sheet! Everything looks good, however Ravens are not birds of prey. They're more considered songbirds. Once you change that you're welcome to join our discord. Welcome to the game!

 

[mothspit]

That Poppy

Thanks for your character sheet. Few things I'd like to address.

Having a child at the time of your characters death is huge no-go. It creates an unsolved plothole, and leaves the rest of The Configuration with a choice: turning the child as well, or killing it. Neither options are a good choice. The only 'child' in the Configuration is Winona, but she's about 18 in human years, and arose as a vampire naturally. It wouldn't work for what I have planned with this story.

Second, selling drugs at the age of 10 is not realistic. I have to ask you to change that.

I'd also ask you to change your lineage, considering the majority of characters are also Dygarians. Considering we have 0 members of the Oriasus lineage and at least 1 for the others, maybe that one could work for you.

One of the rules mentioned in the interest check is gratuitous grammar mistakes. We all mess up from time to time, but having several run-on sentences and mistakes every other sentence will be an issue. I found your sheet difficult to read at certain points because of this.

Additionally, your characters ability is a bit too OP. Vampires already have the ability to influence humans, being able to also control other vampires is too much.

Finally, the requirement is 3 bio paragraphs, and yours is just barely 2 1/2.

Please adjust your sheet accordingly and I'll check it out once it's done.

 

[Misuteeku]

I guess I will join this

Edit: oh wait it’s full nvm

 

[mothspit]

I guess I will join this

Edit: oh wait it’s full nvm

You're welcome to apply. It's not a guarantee you'll be accepted, though.

 

[Misuteeku]

Eh I guess why not.