The Battle for FableWood - OOC

crucialstar said:
Oh no! It's okay ! :)
Keep it


Ariella will be there! :)


yeah... I get confused sometimes too.


so basically she was going to wander into the woods, find some berries and see if they were edible. once she decided they were, she wanders a little more and finds leandra.


Ariella: "Leandra, is it? I think that's what I heard the prince calling you. Are you alright? I found these berries do you want some? I already tried if they're edible and I haven't died yet so I believe they are!" *goes to plop down a few feet from Leandra to give some sort of space* "I'm Ariella by the way! I think that's the most I said my name today! Anyways, it's so amazing here, are you from here or from another world? The trees and plants here are just like the ones back home and aren't as different as I thought. But, still, I never would have imagined to stumble here. You?" *extends her hand , giving Leandra some berries*
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Awwww. :') That would've been absolutely adorable!


I'm sure she'll get another chance to do something similar, though. :3
 
I hate how my mom always wants to pick a fight with people who do something that interferes with her life or whatever. Like, for example, we were just walking to our car and some lady didn't stop for the four of us (mom, sisters, and me with my medical boot on). As we were getting in the car, my mom was being completely passive agressive and rude towards the lady, as she waved at her while she got out of her car, saying hi in an overly rude tone. I had to talk her down from it and get her in the car before the lady saw what she was doing and a fight erupted over something so meaningless. -.-
 
Lioness075 said:
I hate how my mom always wants to pick a fight with people who do something that interferes with her life or whatever. Like, for example, we were just walking to our car and some lady didn't stop for the four of us (mom, sisters, and me with my medical boot on). As we were getting in the car, my mom was being completely passive agressive and rude towards the lady, as she waved at her while she got out of her car, saying hi in an overly rude tone. I had to talk her down from it and get her in the car before the lady saw what she was doing and a fight erupted over something so meaningless. -.-
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oh dear.
 
Lioness075 said:
I hate how my mom always wants to pick a fight with people who do something that interferes with her life or whatever. Like, for example, we were just walking to our car and some lady didn't stop for the four of us (mom, sisters, and me with my medical boot on). As we were getting in the car, my mom was being completely passive agressive and rude towards the lady, as she waved at her while she got out of her car, saying hi in an overly rude tone. I had to talk her down from it and get her in the car before the lady saw what she was doing and a fight erupted over something so meaningless. -.-
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Shame man xD
 
In a world full of such a variety of different races, religions and cultures, there is no doubt about the existence of discrimination against people who are different to us. Politically correct language (or PCL ) has been born into existence and made necessary in an attempt to dull the sharpness of potentially offensive language. To clear any confusion, the term “Politically correct” (or PC ), according to the Oxford Dictionary, means “the avoidance of language or behaviour considered to be discriminatory or offensive to certain groups of people.” An example of this would be calling a short person "vertically challenged" or addressing a crippled person as "differently abled". Now despite the seemingly good intentions behind the creation of PCL, whether it is a sign of maturity or just plain misleading and confusing is still under debate.


Is this fine for an introduction paragraph? @.@
 
SilverFlight said:
what happened?
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I work in an interior design type store, lots of rugs, art, furniture, that kind of thing.


We recently switch to a new point of sale system. A lady (who has purchased from us before) bought a table and chair set, upwards of $2,500, shortly after we got the new system started. She decided that she didn't like it and wanted to return it. Return policy at the store has always been if you have the receipt, and it's within 7days we will do a full refund. After 7days, it's a store credit.


Before switching the system, that was printed in the bottom of every receipt. But when she bought this new table, the owner hadn't gone in to put it on the new receipts (just not a priority) so it wasn't on there. Naturally, because it wasn't on there, she wanted a full refund even though it has been several weeks. She made such a big fuss, that not only did the owner immediately put the policy on receipts, they went as far as setting everything up for me and telling me all the details. Clearly, they were expecting this lady to give me a very hard time, they even said "Don't let her yell at you, if you have to, you can hand her the card and kick her out of the store. And don't let her make you unload it."


Naturally, that made me nervous. I was on edge for like three hours expecting this lady.


But when they knocked on the back door, it was her husband and his friend and they were both super nice and even asked me for a resturaunt recommendation. I don't think the lady was even in the truck with them.


This was a good kind of interesting, which was great after I was expecting the very bad kind of interesting. I hate being yelled at by clients.
 
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It sounds quite scientific for sure - though if someone were to call me 'vertically challenged' I would surely bitchslap them without hesitation :D
 
@Dominaiscna I would go with something like "has become prevalent"


Or "Our speech has evolved to include politically correct language (PCL) in an attempt.." maybe even "Our vocabulary as a society has evolved to include.."
 
Yeah, listen to the clever girl, she brings up some cool alternatives.


My brain is fried right now, it is a bit difficult to find the fine line between being overly complicated and too plain.


The choices Flutter offered can satisfy perhaps the pickiest critics as well.
 
Dominaiscna said:
In a world full of such a variety of different races, religions and cultures, there is no doubt about the existence of discrimination against people who are different to us. Politically correct language (or PCL ) has been born into existence and made necessary in an attempt to dull the sharpness of potentially offensive language. To clear any confusion, the term “Politically correct” (or PC ), according to the Oxford Dictionary, means “the avoidance of language or behaviour considered to be discriminatory or offensive to certain groups of people.” An example of this would be calling a short person "vertically challenged" or addressing a crippled person as "differently abled". Now despite the seemingly good intentions behind the creation of PCL, whether it is a sign of maturity or just plain misleading and confusing is still under debate.
Is this fine for an introduction paragraph? @.@
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Its good for an opening statement, in your intro paragraph you should also state your argumentative points for the body of the essay.


basically writing an essay breaks down into three simple parts: Tell then what you're going to tell them, tell them, then tell them what you told them.
 
SilverFlight said:
Its good for an opening statement, in your intro paragraph you should also state your argumentative points for the body of the essay.
basically writing an essay breaks down into three simple parts: Tell then what you're going to tell them, tell them, then tell them what you told them.
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Unless it's an essay for science. :P


But that's definitely what it is in a nutshell lol.
 
When writing an argumentative essay you should also pay attention to the cohesion: despite looking at it from different perspectives you should connect the entirety of the essay with special linking words or smaller sentences ( such as: You might think x to be the most prominent problem, but that is a misconception. The fact that y exists proves not only its relevance but also that it affects the topic. In the next paragraph I shall elaborate why. )


If you can make a good, whole text then everyone will love you. Also try to avoid plagiarism if possible because it is a big crime - try to incorporate your own thoughts and words, drawing your own conclusions.


Then again this is what I studied now, your essay might have a different connotation to it.
 
DawnAntalios said:
When writing an argumentative essay you should also pay attention to the cohesion: despite looking at it from different perspectives you should connect the entirety of the essay with special linking words or smaller sentences ( such as: You might think x to be the most prominent problem, but that is a misconception. The fact that y exists proves not only its relevance but also that it affects the topic. In the next paragraph I shall elaborate why. )
If you can make a good, whole text then everyone will love you. Also try to avoid plagiarism if possible because it is a big crime - try to incorporate your own thoughts and words, drawing your own conclusions.


Then again this is what I studied now, your essay might have a different connotation to it.
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I'm going to guess it works the same for a discursive essay?

SilverFlight said:
Its good for an opening statement, in your intro paragraph you should also state your argumentative points for the body of the essay.
basically writing an essay breaks down into three simple parts: Tell then what you're going to tell them, tell them, then tell them what you told them.
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Mmmmm okay i'll add to the first paragaph then.
 
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