Fandom RWBY - Beacon Academy: AotWF

[spacepossum]

Hey Starry, do you have the species and gender ratios counted up?


I'm busy at the moment, so can you please do that for me? Pretty please?


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

[QUOTE="Alad V]If memory serves,Faunus and Humans can't interbreed.

[/QUOTE]
Actually they can because Monty or someone from the team of RWBY sent out a tweet that their is a Half faunus and half human character...

 

[Riddle78]

Aah. I don't watch Twitter. My bad!


However,Starry,forgive me for doing it,but... I have an entire battery of balance and psychological issues to express that I've spotted in Kuroko's sheet. I'm sure you've noticed them,too. Mind if I air them here? It'll help future applicants,too.

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

Hey Starry, do you have the species and gender ratios counted up?
I'm busy at the moment, so can you please do that for me? Pretty please?


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

9:5


M:F

[QUOTE="Alad V]Aah. I don't watch Twitter. My bad!
However,Starry,forgive me for doing it,but... I have an entire battery of balance and psychological issues to express that I've spotted in Kuroko's sheet. I'm sure you've noticed them,too. Mind if I air them here? It'll help future applicants,too.

[/QUOTE]
That is fine Alad, please do.

 

[Bishop The Corgi]

I think I can see what Alad is gonna say before he does say anything... Also *raises Soma* I'm watching you...


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[spacepossum]

9:5
M:F

Um, what about Faunis to human?


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

 

[The Prophet]

@StarrySkyofLostSouls do I have to do the exam , or do I walk right in? I think its a long time since people did that.

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

Um, what about Faunis to human?
"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

7 1/5: 6 1/5


F: H


 

@StarrySkyofLostSouls do I have to do the exam , or do I walk right in? I think its a long time since people did that.

Well everyone is in the middle of initiation which is important to determine teams and team members.

 

[spacepossum]

7 1/5: 6 1/5
F: H


 



Well everyone is in the middle of initiation which is important to determine teams and team members.

1/5?


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

oh shit, sorry 1/2

 

[Bishop The Corgi]

I think she means 7 1/2 Faunus: 6 1/2 Human


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[spacepossum]

1/2? Is someone half a person?


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

yes cuz Kuroko's character is half and half.

 

[spacepossum]

Ah okay.


"Would you destroy something perfect in order to make it beautiful?" ~ Gerard Way


MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE: 2001— FOREVER

 

[Riddle78]

Alright. Let's break this down, @Kuroko .


Balance





Issues with Mark Anderson that fly in the face of intercharacter power balance,and the preservation of dramatic tension.


-Mastery of swords and firearms. This feat,on its own,isn't the problem. The problem is being trained in such weapons,as well as karate (one of the least useful martial arts on Earth in an actual fight,by the by),starting at TWELVE MONTHS OLD. An absolute impossibility; Mark's mind wouldn't be able to understand the instruction.


-"Three Strike Kills". If you're doing it right,all you need is one. But,that's an ideal scenario that will never happen. Period. This is nothing more than a baseless boast; A feat that anyone attending Beacon should be capable of. However,due to the reality of combat,it'll take a great many more than three strikes to deal with an aware opponent. And woe betide you if you kill your opponent in a sparring match...


-Your Semblance. Can you say "I win"? Because that's what your Semblance looks like. Total,crippling,pants-shitting terror. Which means,all resistance will cease to exist. See how that would make for an absolutely awful writing experience?


-Venom. You're a Huntsman,not an assassin. You fight in order to protect the people of the world,not because you've been paid to kill a dude. Sometimes,this might mean beating a non-Grimm threat into submission for detainment and interrogation. And poison can go wrong in so many ways; A single button,without safety features,is disaster waiting to happen.


-Your Weapon. An element of confusion,on top of the energy blade. Energy is weightless. The weapon lacks any form of physical balance; You'll never be able to intuit the blade's exact location if you can't see it. Furthermore,the assault rifle and sniper rifle... Are they the same weapon? Or separate? Does any weapon transform into another?


Psychology





Elements of Mark Anderson's psychology that either do not work,or warrant immediate,permanent incarceration in an institution.


-Militant childhood. While the average Hunter initiate has a more militant childhood than most,Anderson takes this up to eleven. As he is currently written,he's been brought up as a human weapon. Why Child Services didn't take him away is beyond me. And his current emotional state,directly because of this upbringing,requires intense,specialized care to repair.


-Clinical Sociopathy. Get him in an asylum; He has no grasp of emotion and social norms. He simply cannot function as a human being.


-Overreaction to Life's Issues. A Grimm ate your arm. Most people would take that as a reason to be angry with Grimm,and develop a complex to protect others from similar things,not develop a seething hatred for all of creation.


Final Verdict: Angsty Anime Protagonist #1,930,103. If I were in charge,I'd have you do a complete rework.


Cruel delivery? Maybe. But,it's direct. Direct works.

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

@Kuroko[/URL] .
Balance





Issues with Mark Anderson that fly in the face of intercharacter power balance,and the preservation of dramatic tension.


-Mastery of swords and firearms. This feat,on its own,isn't the problem. The problem is being trained in such weapons,as well as karate (one of the least useful martial arts on Earth in an actual fight,by the by),starting at TWELVE MONTHS OLD. An absolute impossibility; Mark's mind wouldn't be able to understand the instruction.


-"Three Strike Kills". If you're doing it right,all you need is one. But,that's an ideal scenario that will never happen. Period. This is nothing more than a baseless boast; A feat that anyone attending Beacon should be capable of. However,due to the reality of combat,it'll take a great many more than three strikes to deal with an aware opponent. And woe betide you if you kill your opponent in a sparring match...


-Your Semblance. Can you say "I win"? Because that's what your Semblance looks like. Total,crippling,pants-shitting terror. Which means,all resistance will cease to exist. See how that would make for an absolutely awful writing experience?


-Venom. You're a Huntsman,not an assassin. You fight in order to protect the people of the world,not because you've been paid to kill a dude. Sometimes,this might mean beating a non-Grimm threat into submission for detainment and interrogation. And poison can go wrong in so many ways; A single button,without safety features,is disaster waiting to happen.


-Your Weapon. An element of confusion,on top of the energy blade. Energy is weightless. The weapon lacks any form of physical balance; You'll never be able to intuit the blade's exact location if you can't see it. Furthermore,the assault rifle and sniper rifle... Are they the same weapon? Or separate? Does any weapon transform into another?


Psychology





Elements of Mark Anderson's psychology that either do not work,or warrant immediate,permanent incarceration in an institution.


-Militant childhood. While the average Hunter initiate has a more militant childhood than most,Anderson takes this up to eleven. As he is currently written,he's been brought up as a human weapon. Why Child Services didn't take him away is beyond me. And his current emotional state,directly because of this upbringing,requires intense,specialized care to repair.


-Clinical Sociopathy. Get him in an asylum; He has no grasp of emotion and social norms. He simply cannot function as a human being.


-Overreaction to Life's Issues. A Grimm ate your arm. Most people would take that as a reason to be angry with Grimm,and develop a complex to protect others from similar things,not develop a seething hatred for all of creation.


Final Verdict: Angsty Anime Protagonist #1,930,103. If I were in charge,I'd have you do a complete rework.


Cruel delivery? Maybe. But,it's direct. Direct works.

Thank you for the break down Alad, and as a mod, i realize i should have been paying more close attention since i seemed to have let this slip by, i realize that i agree with Alad's point that you should rework your character.

 

[Bishop The Corgi]

@Kuroko ^


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[Pequeno Burraidh]

Let's all move the none character sheet stuff to the ooc? and we need to get passed the partner teaming first.

Hadn't realised that it had strayed into the CS's and out of the OOC =P


But yeah, sounds good.

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

lol okay, good.

 

[Riddle78]

Whoops! My bad! Didn't notice.

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

hehe~ it's fine!

 

[Riddle78]

So,Ebony,Ambre,Kassie,Saphir,Sparrow and Arthur are all partnerless,to confirm? Who wants the twelve foot tall amazon?

 

[StarrySkyofLostSouls]

also Alad are you accepting the position as my co-mod?

 

[Pequeno Burraidh]

I'm just saying, put the twelv e foot tall amazon with the four foot five faerie lass, and get an ICBL, or Intercontinental Ballistic Lazuli xD

 

[Riddle78]

I do accept. Might as well,considering my habits.