Eonivar You like it that much? That's great! I was just hoping to spark ideas. This makes me feel good. Thank you! =)I like the story. I will get Ando updated today and configured to be a Police Officer, and redo his back story to fit what has been discussed.
Just read his backstory. Very deep, very telling! Eon, you never write "cardboard characters" and I really like that!
Again, use or discard as you please. As Sherwood and Psychie can tell you, I tend to be very detail-oriented and I spotted a few things. When I get Snowfall's character sheet done, feel free to tell me about any of mine? =)
This whole backstory just heaps on details about Ando that I find very telling about the guy. I love the very personal tone of it all. It adds depth to his character. All of this sounds true as well. No crazy drama. Just down to earth writing. I almost feel like I am walking alongside Oda through his life. I also like how he gave his daughter the pearl and now she is starting to "follow in her Dad's footsteps" as it were (where will this leave Mom later on in life?). It is sad to read about their divorce but I really enjoy how you've written it. This is serious business in his life and I can't help but care for the guy (and all three of them, really) as they go through it. I don't know why (I don't even think this is implied), but I just get the idea that Oda's grandpa is just a cool dude to be around! One of those old guys with lots of *something* that make him pleasant company? Maybe it's just my (overactive) imagination. Nice writing, Eon! I enjoyed this! =)
(bold mine) Policy Academy! Ando is really in the business of helping people with their policies! Hee hee! =)Oda attended Policy Academy in Hiroshima while Reina went to University and became an Accountant.
(see below)It was in High School he met Reina, they were a family meant to be at that time.
Is it Reina or Raina, please?About the time both of them graduated , Raina was pregnant with a girl, whom they named Mei.
(bold mine) "Ando?"Ado spent most of the time in a boat on rescue duty in the flooded river.
(bold mine, see below)He saw on the Empire side a flood had washed out one of the roads and had caught a wagon with a family onboard,
New Empire and Republic (or Republic of Japan)? This one confused me left and right when I first picked up Rifts Japan. Hiroshima is new to the Rifts world, right? Aren't they the "new" kids on the block? No, says the book. The "old" empire vanished during the Meiji Restoration Period and now this is the "New Empire." Okies! =)The New Republic Police Force recognized his new talents and assigned him to work
This whole backstory just heaps on details about Ando that I find very telling about the guy. I love the very personal tone of it all. It adds depth to his character. All of this sounds true as well. No crazy drama. Just down to earth writing. I almost feel like I am walking alongside Oda through his life. I also like how he gave his daughter the pearl and now she is starting to "follow in her Dad's footsteps" as it were (where will this leave Mom later on in life?). It is sad to read about their divorce but I really enjoy how you've written it. This is serious business in his life and I can't help but care for the guy (and all three of them, really) as they go through it. I don't know why (I don't even think this is implied), but I just get the idea that Oda's grandpa is just a cool dude to be around! One of those old guys with lots of *something* that make him pleasant company? Maybe it's just my (overactive) imagination. Nice writing, Eon! I enjoyed this! =)