Fantasy [OOC] Riftwalkers 2033

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First off, I absolutely adore each and every one of the characters so far! I am very thankful for everyone's efforts and dedication in reading and incorporating the lore. I'll just be jotting down some comments, questions, and suggestions to ensure that everything will seamlessly fit into the plot.

1. Marielle "Ari" McCoy ( AI10100 ) - I love your attention the lore! I think it's interesting how she originated from a lost timeline. Her magic is also very unique! I think this is the first time I've encountered Typhokinesis as a magic in an RP. Although, question: for her spell "Hallucinogen", you specifically wrote "people" so I take it that this has no effect on anomalies with the right organs for inhalation? And will the people be cured of their hallucination once they step out of the smoke?
2. Rex Gideon ( Indominus Fett ) - The big guy sounds like an interesting addition to the cast. I love the Jurassic theme! His abilities sound pretty straightforward too. I'm not sure if your CS is already finish, but you might have missed giving him an age and a weakness write-up. Additionally, a quick description of what each spell does will help us envision the range of his powers.
3. Elki Viren ( DirtyBirdyAK ) - First off, thank you for putting all the effort to make your sheet look so pretty! I'm having fun clicking all the fun stuff! I also like how she came from a defunct timeline. Although a quick revision might be needed regarding her birth. A rift would have opened the moment she was born and an anomaly would've attacked. She could've somehow survived that and escaped the Infinity, but strange events would be following her throughout her life. It could be seeing "ghosts" every now and then, or minor mishaps like light bulbs exploding when Elki have an "aha!" moment. The rest works fine! Love your creativity!
4. Karin Nakamura ( Topless ) - Aww, I adore her. I don't really have much to say since her ability is pretty straightforward and everything else checks out! You're accepted!
5. Mercurius “Merk” Cyphus ( Doomyfish23 ) - Oooh, interesting concept, love how he came from a post-apocalyptic timeline and is our local mutated cowboy. I might need a little clarification on the "Can double or triple charge spells by using additional hands" phrase though. Can you help me understand more thoroughly what you mean by that, and maybe give an example?

As requested, I skipped Dan for now Colorless Spectrum . Let me know when you want me to review her!

 

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It goes without saying that I appreciate each and everyone's time and effort dedicated into making your character sheets! I'll be jotting down some comments, suggestions, and questions for you here to make sure that your characters will fit in nicely into the story and its lore.

1. Rex Gideon ( Indominus Fett ) - Thanks for working on my prior comments! Rex is now accepted, but I just want to clarify that any force akin to an explosion of a rocket or missile will affect Rex (while using his dino skin and transformation). This is for balance sake since anomalies don't really employ such weaponries.
2. Danielle "Dan" Moore ( Colorless Spectrum ) - There's our Doraemon! I love Dan and I'm excited to see her work with the team. I just want to point out a little thing in her backstory: She would have graduated and been assigned a platoon at the age of 18. Riftwalkers can only be deployed to a platoon after that age. Apologies, I forgot to put this in the lore. Aside from that, you're pretty much accepted!
3. Siaosi Esau ( Ambiloquous ) - I love everything about your sheet! It is very aesthetically pleasing, and Siaosi is a very unique addition to the cast. I also love the creativity behind his tattoo magic and the irony of his phobia! I just have a quick question for his "Become Blob (star)" spell: can he stay as a tattoo indefinitely without interference?
4. Sophia L. Hamilton ( Lily_G ) - It's nice to have another healer in the team! I think Sophia is an interesting character, but I just want to point out a conflict to the lore and my personal comfort. The Infinity wouldn't deploy her to missions if she is physically a child not only due to its fragility but also story reasons. This is also why Riftwalkers are only allowed to be a part of a Platoon once they've reached 18. I am also personally not fond of the "adult but in a child's body" trope. Riftwalkers can't volunteer to be a part of the platoon but are instead designated into one once they're deemed capable enough. My suggestion is that Sophia could've been reverted to a young adult version of herself and was delegated to Platoon 5 due to the usefulness of her healing magic and past contribution to the organization. Edel is one of the best soldiers the Infinity has and can ensure her safety in the field.
5. Noc Calde ( mysteryxio ) - Noc is a very cool character and I can't wait to see him in action. There are just a few conflicts in his backstory that I think we can fix quite easily. First off, every Riftwalker is usually taken by the Infinity immediately after they were born. Elki and Ari are special case, and I'm unfortunately not accepting anymore. My suggestion is that he was taken and grew up in the Infinity headquarters but maybe he never wanted to be a soldier and instead longs for a normal life. Riftwalkers are also rarely allowed to work alone, so perhaps he was instead assigned to a small platoon that specialized in recon missions where mostly everyone kept to themselves.

Alright, phew, I hope that's everyone. As usual, feel free to tag or privately message me if you want to discuss certain things. Thanks!

 

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Hello, everyone! My apologies for the delay as I had more things on my plate than I expected. Anyways, thank you again for all your time and effort into making your sheets! I'll be reviewing them now without any further delay.

1. Noc Calde ( mysteryxio ) - Thanks for following through with my recommendations! Noc is officially accepted. It's intriguing to see someone who's more interested in living a normal life than being a part of the Infinity!
2. Seren "Ser" Fane ( Rohan ) - Seren sounds like an interesting addition to the team! I just have a few comments. First, you might have forgotten to include the "skills" category in your sheet. Additionally, Seren's birth would have caused a rift formation and an anomaly attack which would've led to him being rescued by the Infinity as a newborn. You may consult the lore page for more information about this. I wanted to cap the special exceptions (which are Ari and Elki) to two. Aside from these, everything else checks out!
3. Erwin Eugen Heinrich ( Crimson Baron ) - Ohhh Erwin sounds like another fun and useful addition to the cast. I don't have much to say since everything checks out in his sheet. I'll also be privately messaging you about the Neurochip since he managed to touch into it. Anyways, he's accepted!

I haven't had any sleep yet so I might have missed something. Please do let me know if that's the case.
I hope everyone enjoys their day!