LAST person to post is the winner!!!

Anyways out of curiosity how do you guys enjoy looking at random pic this is the last thing if i get an answer
 
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why tf am i still here when I could be playing cod im closing the site this time!
 
How good is my writing?/jk

· … their childhood: Sebastian, born Sebastian Helge Shepard, was the youngest child for years, highly spoiled and loved by his parents, until Johnathan was born. He just accepted being the middle, and forgotten, sibling, preferring to keep to his books.

· … their teen years: Sebastian was pretty much antisocial once his teen years hit, barely even saying a single word to even his own brother. Who was like his best friend. Sebastian found out he wasn't really into love, only one guy capturing his heart in all the seven years of his teenagehood. Sebastian got accepted into Harvard when he was only 16.
 
Garrett.Hawke said:
How good is my writing?/jk

· … their childhood: Sebastian, born Sebastian Helge Shepard, was the youngest child for years, highly spoiled and loved by his parents, until Johnathan was born. He just accepted being the middle, and forgotten, sibling, preferring to keep to his books.

· … their teen years: Sebastian was pretty much antisocial once his teen years hit, barely even saying a single word to even his own brother. Who was like his best friend. Sebastian found out he wasn't really into love, only one guy capturing his heart in all the seven years of his teenagehood. Sebastian got accepted into Harvard when he was only 16.
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I would say use the name a tad less. Use he and him a few but other wise it’s better than mine!
 
Garrett.Hawke said:
How good is my writing?/jk

· … their childhood: Sebastian, born Sebastian Helge Shepard, was the youngest child for years, highly spoiled and loved by his parents, until Johnathan was born. He just accepted being the middle, and forgotten, sibling, preferring to keep to his books.

· … their teen years: Sebastian was pretty much antisocial once his teen years hit, barely even saying a single word to even his own brother. Who was like his best friend. Sebastian found out he wasn't really into love, only one guy capturing his heart in all the seven years of his teenage-hood. Sebastian got accepted into Harvard when he was only 16.
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you placed a period within an area a coma/dash (or it could've just continued) was supposed to be - {before} "Who was like his best friend."
the first paragraphs' first sentence holds too many comas in the first sentence. Narrow it to :
Sebastian, born Sebastian Helge Shepard, was the youngest child for years. He was highly spoiled and loved by his parents until Johnathan was born.
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Though, I fear it was just a pressing mistake of keys on your part.
 
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