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[QUOTE="mayhem TR4NQU1L17Y]Creep away. I regularly post stalk users. -no shame-

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You were right! I have a kohai....


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[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]I've got a few issues with your CS. Just gonna go over them real quick.
Personal preference, you don't need the picture to describe your weapon. Just type the weapon and we're good.


I'd prefer that she not have a second field of expertise. Its not required to have, and I feel it would be WAY too much if she did Exorcismos very well and still did Domare. It wouldn't be useful to her as an Exorcismos of her grade to be a Domare.


I think this is something people get a little confused with, so I'm gonna mention it here. Usually Exorcismos are stationary. A lot of their spellcrafting uses a lot of energy and focus, and it could even be straining on the body. So being able to stand strong and stationary is a great feat--and yes, that could require stamina. This could also leave them vulnerable to attack, which is why Tempesta and Ensis in your team is a good idea. Each class has their strengths and weaknesses, and each weakness is covered by someone else's strength. This is why people generally only have ONE proficiency. I encourage one proficiency so better to work in your teams.


Also, remember as a Regimen, you are going to be playing a team captain that leads others in group decisions.


I am assuming the wolf is meant to be a daemon?

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Alight, going to fix it up ASAP.


Yup!


EDIT: removed the pics, added a year to her age and her year in the Chapter
 
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[QUOTE="mayhem TR4NQU1L17Y]No. :U

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Well damn. That's a shame :/
 
[QUOTE="Suzuki Mine]
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PRESENT~!

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Good! Now we just need teh Err0r-senpai.
 
Ughhh I've been so busy with work and migraines... Finally I'm not in pain. Now... to catch up.

Tobi Neafearn] [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/profile/12390-critical-err0r/ said:
@CRiTiCAL ERR0R[/URL] Senpai, i wish for you to read over Saverio's bio and tell me if i need to change anything. Please and thank you~
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Looking it over in a moment.

Saturnity said:
I'm sorry for the delay on my profile Yuuki... I've been really busy these past few days =<
Plus I'm a lousy overachiever with my characters...


Edit: I read your reply to my character idea, so I'll come up with a new one xD


Edit of Edit: Seems like slim pickin's left for character slots... thanks Work, thanks a bunch.
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Its okay. I've been busy with work too. eAe;;


Slim pickings only for now. More will be available after the rp starts and people post.

[QUOTE="too much idea]Alight, going to fix it up ASAP.
Yup!


EDIT: removed the pics, added a year to her age and her year in the Chapter

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Wait, why are you adding years?
 
[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]
Wait, why are you adding years?

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Nothing special, really. I just want to make her older (23~25)
 
Just real quick

[QUOTE="Tobi Neafearn]s his teen years flew by, Saverio gained a mastery over his Tempesta skills and he started looking into the profession of Exorcismos.

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Its takes some people a lifetime to master one field of expertise. Even if he was a child prodigy, I couldn't say he mastered Tempesta by his teen years. He could be extremely good, but not master. And Along with that, I would actually prefer him to only recently be able to look into exorcismos as a second proficiency. Even Regimen must depend on their team to back them up. So I'd rather not start off with so many double proficiency.
 
[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]Just real quick
Its takes some people a lifetime to master one field of expertise. Even if he was a child prodigy, I couldn't say he mastered Tempesta by his teen years. He could be extremely good, but not master. And Along with that, I would actually prefer him to only recently be able to look into exorcismos as a second proficiency. Even Regimen must depend on their team to back them up. So I'd rather not start off with so many double proficiency.

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Okay, i think i was just trying to get a word of really good, and that just slipped out. And the timing can change, though all he's gonna use it for is healing in the long run.
 
[QUOTE="Tobi Neafearn]Okay, i think i was just trying to get a word of really good, and that just slipped out. And the timing can change, though all he's gonna use it for is healing in the long run.

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That's fine if he wants to use Exorcismos for healing in the long run. But it makes it easier to add character growth if its not completely established yet.


I love aiding in character development. B|
 
Alright @CRiTiCAL ERR0R Senpai. I thought of another question!


Are those in the Dark Chapter considered Fathers, Nuns, Brothers, or Sisters of the church? In other terms, would they be addressed as their rank, or could they be addressed as Father if they were male per sa?
 
Tobi Neafearn]Alright [URL="https://www.rpnation.com/profile/12390-critical-err0r/ said:
@CRiTiCAL ERR0R[/URL] Senpai. I thought of another question!
Are those in the Dark Chapter considered Fathers, Nuns, Brothers, or Sisters of the church? In other terms, would they be addressed as their rank, or could they be addressed as Father if they were male per sa?
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I think I vaguely mentioned this. Only if they were ordained as such. Some Dark Chapter members aren't, so that they could have families and whatnot but a good majority are ordained. Ones that aren't going by titles of 'Sir -insert name-" and "Lady -insert name-"
 
[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]I think I vaguely mentioned this. Only if they were ordained as such. Some Dark Chapter members aren't, so that they could have families and whatnot but a good majority are ordained. Ones that aren't going by titles of 'Sir -insert name-" and "Lady -insert name-"

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Okay, i couldn't remember and it was one of those things that you think up while either going to sleep or waking up. So thank you~


Also, did a update on the bio, so when you have a moment could you check it? :3
 
I'm on my phone and I'm gonna start getting ready for work soon so responses will be slow.
 
[QUOTE="Tobi Neafearn]Okay, i couldn't remember and it was one of those things that you think up while either going to sleep or waking up. So thank you~
Also, did a update on the bio, so when you have a moment could you check it? :3

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Take off the secondaryfield of expertise. I know he wants to start studying more into exorcismo, but for now I would like him to only have one proficiency.


He would be stationed at San Circa.


In your bio, it makes it sound like he mastered Tempesta still. I think it's the wording. Remember, he is extremely good, but not an expert or master. You've gotta have some long years of wisdom for that.
 
[QUOTE="CRiTiCAL ERR0R]Take off the secondaryfield of expertise. I know he wants to start studying more into exorcismo, but for now I would like him to only have one proficiency.
He would be stationed at San Circa.


In your bio, it makes it sound like he mastered Tempesta still. I think it's the wording. Remember, he is extremely good, but not an expert or master. You've gotta have some long years of wisdom for that.

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Alright, thought the whole reason i have that secondary field was because you started before that if he was Regimen that i could have the secondary field. And what sort of wording could i use to make it not sound like that? Also, not trying to be annoying, but usually being extremely good at something makes you an expert on it, that's why i used that term.
 
[QUOTE="Tobi Neafearn]Alright, thought the whole reason i have that secondary field was because you started before that if he was Regimen that i could have the secondary field. And what sort of wording could i use to make it not sound like that? Also, not trying to be annoying, but usually being extremely good at something makes you an expert on it, that's why i used that term.

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Regimen CAN have second fields but for right now and looking over all of the characters as a whole, I don't want any more double-fielding for character growth purposes.


You can easily put "by his teens, he got top marks in the Tempesta field" or something.


There's a thin line between being extremely good at something and being an expert at something. Experts are the equivalent of masters in this thread and each expert knows something OP and broken about their field that others can't possibly know. It is usually a technique or idea that is passed down from one expert to their pupil. Also, no, I'm not going to answer questions about this because you will have to find out IC. xD
 
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