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Kaoru Asuna

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Hi everybody. I just started back up on this site again and I was just wondering what you guys think of this Chara? Thanks.

Name: Elisabeth Rost (Liz, Elisa, Beth, Eli, Lisa, Liza, Lizzy, Lizbeth. She goes by all of these by different people, but prefers Elisa)



--Sex: Female.



--Age, Height, and Weight: 23, 5'6", 119 lbs.



--Appearance: Medium length blonde hair, fair skin with slight acne scarring across her nose, aquamarine eyes.

She tends to wear athletic clothes, tank tops, print t-shirts, jeans, jackets similar to the one in the image below, and hiking boots or tennis shoes. If she's dressing up, she wears floral-print or deep black dresses, blouses and slacks with heels.

She wears delicate necklaces and stud earrings, and natural looking make-up.
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--Prefferences:

-Likes: Reading, writing, drawing, flower arrangement, snow but not the cold, swimming, sitting lakeside in the sun, hiking, nature, plants, anime/manga.

-Dislikes: Explosions and fireworks, rain (except the warm summer kind), technology, rudeness, crowds, screaming and yelling.



--Personality: Elisa has a sweet temperament, is smiling softly most of the time, and is difficult to anger or offend. She's very understanding, but has her own needs for personal space and being alone now and again. She's get nervous in crowds, though it doesn't show much. Like most people, she has an affinity for beautiful things, tiny things (she has a small collection. Pun accidentally intended), and manga and anime.



--Background: She grew up in Denver, hiking, playing in tree forts, and reading adventure fiction. In high school, she started getting into books on philosophy (though has now forgotten most of it) and romantic fiction, started growing strawberries and succulents, and aced her English tests and essays.

She's now working as a "reader" for a publisher, reading through submissions and passing the better ones on to the editor.

She's never dated before, but isn't afraid to try.
 
I'll be honest, I think in this character simple girly girl exterior, it actually is the first feminine girly girly I've seen on the site. 😄 🤣 no string attached or strange quirks. She likes pretty things and cute trinkets. Very kawaii.

I suppose if you wanted to improve it, you would expand each section, but focus on what is important. If I wanted my audience to know my girl oc had a strange duality of being simultaneously like a Tom girl and a girly girl with heels, I'd accentuate that. It's a good duality and could be interesting if she dabbled in a bit of carpentry because of the tree forts.

Slowly trying to paint a picture further could add more depth to her, but it's up to you. That's my feed back. Ty for coming to my Ted talk
 
I love everything you just said, thank you. That was great (and the only) feedback. I actually wrote her for an RP I was going to play that never came to fruition, and I paired her with the male artist character. I see what you're saying about her being pure girly girl, but I'm surprised that you've not seen another character like that (though if I looked at my female chara, they all mostly have tomboy personalities -- and that's probably because I am one, so...) And you're funny to boot. Please tell me your signature is a SpongeBob quote, because I remember that.
 
I'll be honest, I think in this character simple girly girl exterior, it actually is the first feminine girly girly I've seen on the site. 😄 🤣 no string attached or strange quirks. She likes pretty things and cute trinkets. Very kawaii.

I suppose if you wanted to improve it, you would expand each section, but focus on what is important. If I wanted my audience to know my girl oc had a strange duality of being simultaneously like a Tom girl and a girly girl with heels, I'd accentuate that. It's a good duality and could be interesting if she dabbled in a bit of carpentry because of the tree forts.

Slowly trying to paint a picture further could add more depth to her, but it's up to you. That's my feed back. Ty for coming to my Ted talk

Hey, you seem really good at this critiqueing chara thing. Would you be interested in looking at more of my characters? I could just give you access to a Private Workshop thread and you could look over it at your leisure? It's fine if you don't, I'm just curious about at least my chara currently in use ( and right now, I'm only using 3). You could either message me about them or post critiques after the chara profiles (maybe with your username, so I know who wrote the critique)?
Again, if your done with this already, that's totally fine. Just post here or message me with a year or nay, okay? Thanks.

(Since posting this, I set up the permissions. Here's a link to the thread: https://www.rpnation.com/threads/all-used-chara-profiles.552445/. If you look at the threadmark index, the first three posts are my chara currently in use. You can look at and critique any or all of them as you see fit.)
 
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Hey, you seem really good at this critiqueing chara thing. Would you be interested in looking at more of my characters? I could just give you access to a Private Workshop thread and you could look over it at your leisure? It's fine if you don't, I'm just curious about at least my chara currently in use ( and right now, I'm only using 3). You could either message me about them or post critiques after the chara profiles (maybe with your username, so I know who wrote the critique)?
Again, if your done with this already, that's totally fine. Just post here or message me with a year or nay, okay? Thanks.

(Since posting this, I set up the permissions. Here's a link to the thread: https://www.rpnation.com/threads/all-used-chara-profiles.552445/. If you look at the threadmark index, the first three posts are my chara currently in use. You can look at and critique any or all of them as you see fit.)
I'll give it a gander in due time :)
 
I love everything you just said, thank you. That was great (and the only) feedback. I actually wrote her for an RP I was going to play that never came to fruition, and I paired her with the male artist character. I see what you're saying about her being pure girly girl, but I'm surprised that you've not seen another character like that (though if I looked at my female chara, they all mostly have tomboy personalities -- and that's probably because I am one, so...) And you're funny to boot. Please tell me your signature is a SpongeBob quote, because I remember that.
Yes it's a SpongeBob quote when pearl was sabotaging the crusty krab to get out of working for her old man xD
And ty haha.
 
Cool, thanks Ty. (⁠ㆁ⁠ω⁠ㆁ⁠)
 

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