Caroline Johnson (Carbon)

[The Suspicious Eye]

Name: Caroline Johnson

Gender: Female

Age: 20

Appearance:

"What, I'm not pretty enough for you? Great I didn't put this make up on for you so beat it!"

Bio: Caroline lived a normal life, nobody hurt her or tried to kill her. She was a regular student who stared in athletics. She was a star track, gymnastic, archery and tai chi student. She loves to play sports and never backs down from a challenge. She was majoring as a engineer at a prestigious college. One day she was runnig on the track in the early morning when she was almost hit by a incoming piece of debris. She collided with the debris and was rushed to the student medical center. not seeing anything wrong with her they kept her under observations. That night every cell in her body began to turn into Carbon. Her hair turned silver gray as her boy burned with a searing pain. She screamed as her body shifted and morphed into the three main/stable solid forms of carbon. The doctors were perplexed as she continued to shift. It wasn't until 2 weeks later that she was able to control her new ability. She broke out of the hospital observation room, by tuning into graphite dust and floating throughout the air vents. Trying to pick up the pieces of her life she moved to the city to have a fresh new life. Dropping out of her junior year of college early she's started a new job as a barista at day and a bartender at night. (Yes, If it happens I will do a Au get out of my bar joke). Her goal, stay away from, crazy government types that want to hunt her down for experiments.

"Because I don't want to be caught and experimented on like a lab rat. You do you, I'll do me."

Element: Carbon, C

"I dare you to make a carbon dating joke. I DARE YOU"

Abilities: She can turn her body into Graphite, Charcoal and diamond. Has super strength , fireproof and can turn into dust.

"yay, powers. I wonder how this will turn out. Why couldn't I have gotten something that wouldn't ruin my college career? Is that too much to ask for?"

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Spoiler

Personality:

+

Intelligent

Skillful

Athletic

Manipulative

-

Headstrong

Stubborn

Temperamental

Rude

"You think I'm rude? This is not rude this is uppity. I'll show you rude. You f***king piece of...."

Side: Neutural

Other Info:

Theme song:



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(And done, please tell me if there is anything I need to edit.)

 

[Soulslike]

This character is... okay.


The premise is strong. Very strong. You had a great, original idea.


Unfortunately, a number of things soured this.


1. OP as frick, but then only kinda. She's waaaay stronger than most people defensively- you can't really kill graphite dust, especially not fireproof graphite dust. But then she doesn't have the offense to make her on par with the big shots, meaning she'll struggle to fit into a roleplay.


2. Mary Sue. Her personality seems to be 'headstrong rude girl with a soft side.' Aka the 'tsundere' archetype, which is so incredibly overdone you will probably know of it.


3. Origin of powers. 'Hit by debris.' Debris from what? How did it magically not kill her? How did it alter her? Also, how is she even alive if she's made of carbon?


4. Diamonds. They're not as tough as you'd think. As crystals, diamonds have a weak angle. Hit it hard enough and they shatter, making her diamond powers pretty useless.


HOWEVER. Despite all my nitpicking, she IS an interesting character, and with a bit of work, will go very nicely in any supernatural roleplay.

 

[The Suspicious Eye]

This character is... okay.
The premise is strong. Very strong. You had a great, original idea.


Unfortunately, a number of things soured this.


1. OP as frick, but then only kinda. She's waaaay stronger than most people defensively- you can't really kill graphite dust, especially not fireproof graphite dust. But then she doesn't have the offense to make her on par with the big shots, meaning she'll struggle to fit into a roleplay.


2. Mary Sue. Her personality seems to be 'headstrong rude girl with a soft side.' Aka the 'tsundere' archetype, which is so incredibly overdone you will probably know of it.


3. Origin of powers. 'Hit by debris.' Debris from what? How did it magically not kill her? How did it alter her? Also, how is she even alive if she's made of carbon?


4. Diamonds. They're not as tough as you'd think. As crystals, diamonds have a weak angle. Hit it hard enough and they shatter, making her diamond powers pretty useless.


HOWEVER. Despite all my nitpicking, she IS an interesting character, and with a bit of work, will go very nicely in any supernatural roleplay.

Lol thanks for the criticism. Although, I just put it up here so if the Rp ever gets deleted I won't loose the pictures I found and the stuff I wrote. Ever since the showcase button magically vanished and all my CS's from the showcase appeared here. So I thought 'why not?'