Fantasy Avarice:// The Thread That Never Should Have Been (ACCEPTING) (OOC)

[Ambiloquous]

Alright! Done my first post, yo! *Waits for the praise to shower* uwu

 

[ShadowHounder]

One thing I will say now... Be careful with the use of swearing. I wouldn't want the glitch Queen to lose her throne because she had to drop an f-bomb every sentence (I have a personal belief that swearing is meant for charactization and should never be the focus of dialogue... So I feel it would devalue the character if you keep going like this)

 

[Ambiloquous]

Ahhh, I usually don't make my characters swear all that much and I understand your worries but also understand that's how I thought of her when I made her. She swears a ton when's she's pissed from how she grew up and I don't want to change that because it "devalues" her. But if you're worried if she'll always speak like this, she won't (or I'll lessen it some if it makes ya uncomfortable).

Oh, wait, did you mean in the actual dialogue? That was an example so there's an idea of how she talks because I didn't want to make it just description.

 

[ShadowHounder]

Ahhh, I usually don't make my characters swear all that much and I understand your worries but also understand that's how I thought of her when I made her. She swears a ton when's she's pissed from how she grew up and I don't want to change that because it "devalues" her. But if you're worried if she'll always speak like this, she won't (or I'll lessen it some if it makes ya uncomfortable).

Oh, wait, did you mean in the actual dialogue? That was an example so there's an idea of how she talks because I didn't want to make it just description.

And one things I try to avoid in RPs is Stereotypes. Someone who swears essesively whenever they pissed off (which is bad writing by the nature of swearing alone) is a stereotype... And not even a good one. :/

 

[Ambiloquous]

And one things I try to avoid in RPs is Stereotypes. Someone who swears essesively whenever they pissed off (which is bad writing by the nature of swearing alone) is a stereotype... And not even a good one. :/

I'm sorry? WHat? I wanted to add this before but I didn't. I swear excessively when I'm pissed, am I a stereotype? I'm not just "swears excessively when pissed". I have more traits than that. That's just one habit I have and not even the one that appears most often. It just happens to appear first for her because she started off in a bad mood.

 

[ShadowHounder]

I'm sorry? WHat? I wanted to add this before but I didn't. I swear excessively when I'm pissed, am I a stereotype? I'm not just "swears excessively when pissed". I have more traits than that. That's just one habit I have and not even the one that appears most often. It just happens to appear first for her because she started off in a bad mood.

A character is not a real person... Meaning the idea of personality works different for them (which is where the concept of stereotyping comes from.) If a character exerts reused traits to show a reused personality... That is a stereotype. Writing often has to utilize subversions to captivate an audience (which I find important in RPs, where the "audience" is helping build the story... So losing an audience will cause the story to crumble). But I'm not about to argue definitions and fiction vs irl bullshit because we have differing opinions. I've stated what I think, take as you will and we will see where things go from there.

 

[Elenion Aura]

Alright! Done my first post, yo! *Waits for the praise to shower* uwu

I FOR ONE welcome our new glitchy overlord!

 

[Ambiloquous]

A character is not a real person... Meaning the idea of personality works different for them (which is where the concept of stereotyping comes from.) If a character exerts reused traits to show a reused personality... That is a stereotype. Writing often has to utilize subversions to captivate an audience (which I find important in RPs, where the "audience" is helping build the story... So losing an audience will cause the story to crumble). But I'm not about to argue definitions and fiction vs irl bullshit because we have differing opinions. I've stated what I think, take as you will and we will see where things go from there.

Alright...? And she reused it how...? Yeah, we have differing opinions. But I'm not writing this to captivate you, I'm writing this for myself. Remember that some people RP without the same characterization beliefs and that not people will take well to advice that sounds overbearing. Again, my own opinion. Ending here.

 

[Ambiloquous]

I FOR ONE welcome our new glitchy overlord!

Thank you very much! C: You have no idea how much that message and cookie uplifted my puny heart.

 

[ShadowHounder]

Alright...? And she reused it how...? Yeah, we have differing opinions. But I'm not writing this to captivate you, I'm writing this for myself. Remember that some people RP without the same characterization beliefs and that not people will take well to advice that sounds overbearing. Again, my own opinion. Ending here.

Not sure how a simple reminder of the importance of character depth is overbearing... But I guess my wording wasn't the best, so ya got me there XD

 

[Ambiloquous]

Not sure how a simple reminder of the importance of character depth is overbearing... But I guess my wording wasn't the best, so ya got me there XD

Yeah? I mean, online ya can't see faces and tone. Also, I ain't close to you at all so I'd get very defensive about it.

 

[ShadowHounder]

Yeah? I mean, online ya can't see faces and tone. Also, I ain't close to you at all so I'd get very defensive about it.

On the topic... What are your thoughts on my characters?

 

[Ambiloquous]

On the topic... What are your thoughts on my characters?

Erm, that'll mean I'll have to reread your posts (or do you mean CS?) and I'm not in the mood to do that right now. When I am, I'll give ya a call and tell you my thoughts. Cobra, was it? And that dark organization gal?

 

[ShadowHounder]

Erm, that'll mean I'll have to reread your posts (or do you mean CS?) and I'm not in the mood to do that right now. When I am, I'll give ya a call and tell you my thoughts. Cobra, was it? And that dark organization gal?

Cobra and Caster are their names. No need to worry... Feedback is always best when the critic (for lack of a better term) takes their time

 

[Euclid Leaf]

Wow. I know my character is an annoying brat, but you really trying to hurt him, huh? To be fair, I'd want to kick his ass too...

 

[Elenion Aura]

Wow. I know my character is an annoying brat, but you really trying to hurt him, huh? To be fair, I'd want to kick his ass too...

Hehe you scared the cat!

 

[Elenion Aura]

Tbh I wasn’t sure how Star would react. He has no idea what’s going on!!

 

[Elenion Aura]

Speaking of having no idea what’s going on SniperBus what’s the aim of our fight exactly? Get the capture fruit to the portal at the bottom of the basin? Then what’s the top portal for?

 

[SniperBus]

Speaking of having no idea what’s going on SniperBus what’s the aim of our fight exactly? Get the capture fruit to the portal at the bottom of the basin? Then what’s the top portal for?

You are to get it to the top or bottom portal, whichever one works best for you. Last person to touch it before it goes in gets the win, next is 2nd place, other two are booted from tourney.

 

[Elenion Aura]

You are to get it to the top or bottom portal, whichever one works best for you. Last person to touch it before it goes in gets the win, next is 2nd place, other two are booted from tourney.

Oooh makes sense!!

 

[SniperBus]

Alright! Done my first post, yo! *Waits for the praise to shower* uwu

no u

(he loved... pies)

I love... starchild.

He has no idea what’s going on!!

Same here, tbh

I'd want to kick his ass too...

Until he's all like: New Command: No one can kick my ass.

 

[Ambiloquous]

no u

Hmm... Alright, I'll give it a go. Ahm. You're nice and give fulfilling praises. uwu

(Also, yes, that pie line was so cute. So damn cute. *Heart squeezes*)

 

[SniperBus]

Ambiloquous Ok but actually, before I write my new post: Firstly, I love the formatting of your post. I know, it's a small thing, but it's just so pleasing to look at, everything flows together nicely because of the way it's formatted (especially with the indented italicized text for the flashback) your paragraphs are spaced perfectly, idk. I just.. it looks nice. ok? don'tjudgeme.

Actually, that said, Elenion Aura CherryTart Sludge , I love all of your formatting too! For Elenion Aura , I like the way you have the quotes from Starchild at the top of your posts; it sets the mood of the post in a satisfying way and allows me to ease into your writing style for Starchild every time I sit down to read your post. For CherryTart , just the simple act of centering Lorette's posts makes them visually more interesting, to me at least, plus I like the way you put her name at the top in a fancy font. It's so her. And for Sludge I like the way you set the scene using the "//Two" , "//Whatever is going on", "//Whoever Two is with" at the top of your posts. Plus, the way you center your posts in the middle of the screen makes them surprisingly mobile friendly (which is super helpful when I wake up and want to read some posts lmao). Crazy Trey-n does a similar thing at the top of his post (will hopefully be able to add an S to that in the future lol), and I just want to tell him that it looks really nice!

But anyway, back to Ambiloquous , smh. Your writing style reminds me of how I aspire to write. To be honest, it's been a long time since I've written fiction and my writing is a mess and lowkey all over the place with tenses, what I want to get across, and how I say it. But yours isn't like that; it's concise, focused, has a consistent voice, and you give out information both about your character and the world she's living in seemingly effortlessly while also providing something engaging and fun to read. Can't wait to read more of your posts and I can't wait to see Glitch Witch in action

 

[Ambiloquous]

Ambiloquous Ok but actually, before I write my new post: Firstly, I love the formatting of your post. I know, it's a small thing, but it's just so pleasing to look at, everything flows together nicely because of the way it's formatted (especially with the indented italicized text for the flashback) your paragraphs are spaced perfectly, idk. I just.. it looks nice. ok? don'tjudgeme.

But anyway, back to Ambiloquous , smh. Your writing style reminds me of how I aspire to write. To be honest, it's been a long time since I've written fiction and my writing is a mess and lowkey all over the place with tenses, what I want to get across, and how I say it. But yours isn't like that; it's concise, focused, has a consistent voice, and you give out information both about your character and the world she's living in seemingly effortlessly while also providing something engaging and fun to read. Can't wait to read more of your posts and I can't wait to see Glitch Witch in action

Oh. My. Gosh. Thank. You. Just to let you know, I try my best to make the formatting of my posts evenly spaced out while still making sense to be in the same paragraph (or not) so what you said means a lot to me. Actually. And that indent? I was debating on that but I'm glad I added it since it seems to make a difference. (It also changes with the screen size so no need to worry about a really far indent on a phone screen.)

My heart is dying right now. Spurting blood. *Clenches chest* I never thought I'd one day hear that I'm similar to what others aspire to write like. It's always been me with others. Thank you. So much. That means the world (and a half) to me. You deserve a cake. Or three. But really, I think your writing is quite nice. I thought you were better than me, tbh. ¯\ _(ツ)_/¯ I find my short sentences sometimes off-putting since most people tend to have flowier sentences. (Don't hope for too much, but I'll try to live up to your expectations. XD)

 

[Elenion Aura]

Ambiloquous Ok but actually, before I write my new post: Firstly, I love the formatting of your post. I know, it's a small thing, but it's just so pleasing to look at, everything flows together nicely because of the way it's formatted (especially with the indented italicized text for the flashback) your paragraphs are spaced perfectly, idk. I just.. it looks nice. ok? don'tjudgeme.

Actually, that said, Elenion Aura CherryTart Sludge , I love all of your formatting too! For Elenion Aura , I like the way you have the quotes from Starchild at the top of your posts; it sets the mood of the post in a satisfying way and allows me to ease into your writing style for Starchild every time I sit down to read your post. For CherryTart , just the simple act of centering Lorette's posts makes them visually more interesting, to me at least, plus I like the way you put her name at the top in a fancy font. It's so her. And for Sludge I like the way you set the scene using the "//Two" , "//Whatever is going on", "//Whoever Two is with" at the top of your posts. Plus, the way you center your posts in the middle of the screen makes them surprisingly mobile friendly (which is super helpful when I wake up and want to read some posts lmao). Crazy Trey-n does a similar thing at the top of his post (will hopefully be able to add an S to that in the future lol), and I just want to tell him that it looks really nice!

But anyway, back to Ambiloquous , smh. Your writing style reminds me of how I aspire to write. To be honest, it's been a long time since I've written fiction and my writing is a mess and lowkey all over the place with tenses, what I want to get across, and how I say it. But yours isn't like that; it's concise, focused, has a consistent voice, and you give out information both about your character and the world she's living in seemingly effortlessly while also providing something engaging and fun to read. Can't wait to read more of your posts and I can't wait to see Glitch Witch in action

This is so nice!!!! Heck!