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[Razgriz]

May I ask why is Hiyori 6'0"

That's when her future best friend and future rider on death row mountain

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[Anem]

I just realized were all speed types aren't we

 

[Razgriz]

Alright. I have finished looking over the cses. I will be addressing each of you in this post with what I need fixed before accepting you. Only after you have fixed the issues I have addressed with the appropriate fixes I will accept your cs. As for the number of characters at the moment, for now it is fine. Before looking for more characters I would rather work on getting the current characters accepted.


Now then what needs to be fixed. Well first of all our characters are first years, now for those of you who don't know how the Japanese school systems works I will elaborate that. They have four years in junior high instead of three, and in high school only have three years instead of four. So most of the characters should be 16. So please change that, I don't mind maybe one person being 17 but not everyone else.


Also for the fighting style, skills, and traits. It is my fault for not specifying things in the cs, so this is my fault. But I was looking for something such as what @Eagershadow3 or @Anem has.


For the fighting style:


How they fight? Are they a speed or strength type? Do they rush in and rely on instinct? Or do they plan their attacks? Do they prefer to fight up close or keep their distance? Are they stronger at offense or defense. These are just a few questions and examples.


Skills and traits:


Do they have good observation skills? Are they quick thinkers? Do they work really well with a partner? Do they break under pressure or stay calm? Again some examples.


Please make the changes to this. I will be pointing things out to each person now. Some things might include the fighting styles and skills/traits.


@ScaraByte


First with your character's personality. I think it would be better if you would specify why he would "flip" to his other personality. It sounds sorta like an split personality to me. If he would act different when he is fighting that is understandable and acceptable. Now I use the word "act" since he isn't changing completely but instead of being his usual friendly self he is calm and collective during a fight or whatever you want to say.


Your fighting style is fine. Just some of the word usage can confuse me at times lol. Anyways I do have two things I need.

Power hasn't been to kind to him since he fights ranged and he often hesitates when faced with people he knows as his enemies.

Elaborate please?

His Heart Sets what he does and how his attacks are in power (If he is accurate or not)

Elaborate on this. Since I do not understand.
@Eagershadow3


Your cs is mainly fine. But you don't meet my two paragraphs for personality and for his history. Just add a bit more to both if you can. I will help you with this if you need it.


As for the rest the cs seems fine, but I would like to ask you about this?

and the skill of predictions.

@Anem


You are good to go and are accepted.


@Idea


Sorry but after thinking about it, I just can't get the split personality to sit well with me. unfortunately everything about your character is based off of that.


@Mena


Well I looked for what I asked in the rules, but I didn't see the thing I asked you to add to the cs to prove you read the rules. Please add that, since I can't accept your character until you do.


Just wondering why she is 6'0" She will be the tallest of our characters.


Next her personality. I know I didn't get back to you about that. I am sorry, my life has been very busy for the past few days. Anyways, she didn't grow up as a killer or assassin so why would she be acting like one all the time now? She could be quiet and reserved, but I don't see why she would have a killer personality. Also she isn't going to be an assassin, or do any "jobs".


For her fighting style I am sorry, but please use the follow examples I listed you re-do her fighting style


And for her Skills do the same please. Since she is an el awake you will need to add that she can use her curse. Now I can tell you tried to do just that, but you made is a copy of akame ga kill. Sorry but I won't be accepting that. To describe her curse you can use something like this.


Since Hiyori is an el awake she can use the power of her curse. Her curse as an el awake can only be used when under extreme emotional distress. When her curse is activated her speed and strength are enhanced. As well she is surrounded by a dark aura. However using this power has a cost, since it places great strain on her body causing her to take damage while using it. If not stopped the curse will end up killing her.


overall Mena I feel like you tried to take akame from akame ga kill and put her into this rp. I am sorry but that just won't work with me.


Alright I think I covered everyone. Now if you have an questions ask, I will answer to my best of my abilities. I know that most of these issues are do to the lack of guide lines in the cs. So this is my fault. However despite that the issues I pointed out will need to be addressed. I am sorry if you felt like I was harsh in anyone way or anything. I am not trying to be, but I said what was needed. I tried to be as constructive as I could with my criticism.

 

[Razgriz]

@Idea @Mena


I feel like I was the most harsh on you two. I am sorry about that, but I just feel like both of your current character ideas just don't fit with the rp. They are both great characters don't get me wrong, but I don't feel like they fit all that well in a absolute duo rp. They seem more fitted for a akame ga kill rp. Anyways if you two are upset with me I understand, and if you decided to leave the rp I don't blame you. Do I want you to leave no. I will work with you on fixing your cses if you want. Just ask.

 

[Anem]

So if I have this just up my age by one and I should be good to go okay will do that.

 

[Razgriz]

So if I have this just up my age by one and I should be good to go okay will do that.

yeah

 

[Anem]

Hmm thought I would have other issues then that but okay the age is changed

 

[Razgriz]

Hmm thought I would have other issues then that but okay the age is changed

what else did you think would be an issue

 

[Anem]

Its just i'm use to people point out problems with my characters and stuff so It kinda of took me by surprise. But if I had to nick pick myself would say I could of done the blaze and skills and traits better

 

[Eagershadow3]

@Dai tenshi


I added a bit more,to the personality, and history. If there is any more that needs to be added then please let me know.


I've also cleared up the confusion with his prediction skill. Sorry I should have explained it better beforehand.

 

[Razgriz]

Its just i'm use to people point out problems with my characters and stuff so It kinda of took me by surprise. But if I had to nick pick myself would say I could of done the blaze and skills and traits better

Well I was able to understand what you were trying to say. Plus that part of the cs I just wanted simple

 

[Anem]

Hmm well okay then will put this as a win in my book

 

[Entity.Eclypse]

I think it's fixed... Maybe.


I have to go to school now but when I return I will fix it if need be.


~Ciao

 

[Mena]

Alright, time to redo my entire character sheet!


This might take another week and a half....YAY~

 

[Idea]

@Idea[/URL] @Mena
I feel like I was the most harsh on you two. I am sorry about that, but I just feel like both of your current character ideas just don't fit with the rp. They are both great characters don't get me wrong, but I don't feel like they fit all that well in a absolute duo rp. They seem more fitted for a akame ga kill rp. Anyways if you two are upset with me I understand, and if you decided to leave the rp I don't blame you. Do I want you to leave no. I will work with you on fixing your cses if you want. Just ask.

No worries. You did warn me in advance, which I thank you for since it gave time to think up an alternative. Also, I think I may have some blame on Mena`s profile`s issues, since I helped doing a first revision and failed to realize the issues you pointed out.


I shall be editing my cs, thanks for looking over it.

 

[Anem]

Alright, time to redo my entire character sheet!
This might take another week and a half....YAY~

Nah you will be fine besides if you need we can help ya out

 

[Idea]

Nah you will be fine besides if you need we can help ya out

Don`t worry I got it covered.

 

[Idea]

@Eagershadow3[/URL] or @Anem has.


For the fighting style:


How they fight? Are they a speed or strength type? Do they rush in and rely on instinct? Or do they plan their attacks? Do they prefer to fight up close or keep their distance? Are they stronger at offense or defense. These are just a few questions and examples.


Skills and traits:


Do they have good observation skills? Are they quick thinkers? Do they work really well with a partner? Do they break under pressure or stay calm? Again some examples.


Please make the changes to this. I will be pointing things out to each person now. Some things might include the fighting styles and skills/traits.


@ScaraByte


First with your character's personality. I think it would be better if you would specify why he would "flip" to his other personality. It sounds sorta like an split personality to me. If he would act different when he is fighting that is understandable and acceptable. Now I use the word "act" since he isn't changing completely but instead of being his usual friendly self he is calm and collective during a fight or whatever you want to say.


Your fighting style is fine. Just some of the word usage can confuse me at times lol. Anyways I do have two things I need.


Elaborate please?


Elaborate on this. Since I do not understand.


@Eagershadow3


Your cs is mainly fine. But you don't meet my two paragraphs for personality and for his history. Just add a bit more to both if you can. I will help you with this if you need it.


As for the rest the cs seems fine, but I would like to ask you about this?


@Anem


You are good to go and are accepted.


@Idea


Sorry but after thinking about it, I just can't get the split personality to sit well with me. unfortunately everything about your character is based off of that.


@Mena


Well I looked for what I asked in the rules, but I didn't see the thing I asked you to add to the cs to prove you read the rules. Please add that, since I can't accept your character until you do.


Just wondering why she is 6'0" She will be the tallest of our characters.


Next her personality. I know I didn't get back to you about that. I am sorry, my life has been very busy for the past few days. Anyways, she didn't grow up as a killer or assassin so why would she be acting like one all the time now? She could be quiet and reserved, but I don't see why she would have a killer personality. Also she isn't going to be an assassin, or do any "jobs".


For her fighting style I am sorry, but please use the follow examples I listed you re-do her fighting style


And for her Skills do the same please. Since she is an el awake you will need to add that she can use her curse. Now I can tell you tried to do just that, but you made is a copy of akame ga kill. Sorry but I won't be accepting that. To describe her curse you can use something like this.


Since Hiyori is an el awake she can use the power of her curse. Her curse as an el awake can only be used when under extreme emotional distress. When her curse is activated her speed and strength are enhanced. As well she is surrounded by a dark aura. However using this power has a cost, since it places great strain on her body causing her to take damage while using it. If not stopped the curse will end up killing her.


overall Mena I feel like you tried to take akame from akame ga kill and put her into this rp. I am sorry but that just won't work with me.


Alright I think I covered everyone. Now if you have an questions ask, I will answer to my best of my abilities. I know that most of these issues are do to the lack of guide lines in the cs. So this is my fault. However despite that the issues I pointed out will need to be addressed. I am sorry if you felt like I was harsh in anyone way or anything. I am not trying to be, but I said what was needed. I tried to be as constructive as I could with my criticism.

Fixed, I believe.

 

[Entity.Eclypse]

School... drained...


how was everyone else's day?

 

[Anem]

Its gone well so far about to go hunt down lunch in my fridge

 

[Entity.Eclypse]

May your hunt be ever successful then

 

[Idea]

I had full day. Not done yet...

 

[Mena]

Well...im eating ramen right now ^-^

 

[Entity.Eclypse]

I had full day. Not done yet...

Well when the day comes to a close it would be a complete full day for you

Well...im eating ramen right now ^-^

Lucky. I'm stuck with making food for my brother.... I could make something else though I guess.

 

[Idea]

By the way, @Dai tenshi , if you read this, I`d like to propose for me to go look for two more people to join our group before the rp starts.