World Within a Box

[CelticHero37]

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<span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><span style="font-size:36px;"><span style="color:#663300;"><strong>World Within a Box</strong></span></span></span>


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<span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><span style="color:#808080;"><em>by Celtic Hero37</em></span></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><span style="color:#808080;"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I live in a world within a box.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>In the box is a room.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>In the room it is dark.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>In this darkness is nothing but me.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I was locked away here long ago.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>They said for my protection.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>For mine or for yours?</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I cannot remember anymore.</em></span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>You cannot have dreams in my world.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No fairy tales.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No happy endings.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Only nightmares can exist in nothing.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I am surrounded by a cold, dark emptiness.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No blankets.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No comfort.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I drown in invisible tears.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>The box has grown tattered as it's tossed away.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No one cares.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>No one looks inside.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Passing from one to the next.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I am plagued with a light off in the distance.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Too far to touch.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Too close to forget.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Could it be a hole for a key?</em></span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><em><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';">I saw your world through this crack in the box.</span></em></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I saw hopes,</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I saw dreams.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Yet you seemed as lonely as me.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>So that is why I sent you this dream.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I don't know if it worked,</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>but if you get it,</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>please cheer up for me.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>When you smile it lights up my room.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>With light I can hope.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>With hope I can dream.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>That dream can set me free.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Free from this darkness.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Free from this room.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Free from this world.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Free from this box.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Please open my world within a box.</em></span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>I with you.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>You with me.</em></span><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"> </span></span>


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<span style="color:#B22222;"><span style="font-family:'Book Antiqua';"><em>Together our dreams will come true.</em></span></span>


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[Inmento Riku]

That, made my day. Seriously this was beautiful.

 

[CelticHero37]

Thank you! I'm glad someone appreciates it

 

[CelticHero37]

Even if you feel like you're stuck in that box. There's someone looking through the crack in their own box at the light, the goodness of your world. Let that light shine for all to see. Lift them up and they shall lift you up. Together you can reach your dreams.

 

[Hercynia]

World Within a Box


by Celtic Hero37


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I live in a world within a box.


In the box is a room.


In the room it is dark.


In this darkness is nothing but me.


I was locked away here long ago.


They said for my protection.


For mine or for yours?


I cannot remember anymore.

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You cannot have dreams in my world.


No fairy tales.


No happy endings.


Only nightmares can exist in nothing.


I am surrounded by a cold, dark emptiness.


No blankets.


No comfort.


I drown in invisible tears.


The box has grown tattered as it's tossed away.


No one cares.


No one looks inside.


Passing from one to the next.


I am plagued with a light off in the distance.


Too far to touch.


Too close to forget.


Could it be a hole for a key?


I saw your world through this crack in the box.


I saw hopes,


I saw dreams.


Yet you seemed as lonely as me.


So that is why I sent you this dream.


I don't know if it worked,


but if you get it,


please cheer up for me.


When you smile it lights up my room.


With light I can hope.


With hope I can dream.


That dream can set me free.


Free from this darkness.


Free from this room.


Free from this world.


Free from this box.


Please open my world within a box.


I with you.


You with me.


Together our dreams will come true.

Very nice, and I like how alot of this is written - particularly the first and last verses. Something I did notice though, is how the flow of the poem is broken at a few places. I'm not sure if that was intentional or not, but apart from that, I liked this and the idea behind it.

 

[CelticHero37]

Very nice, and I like how alot of this is written - particularly the first and last verses. Something I did notice though, is how the flow of the poem is broken at a few places. I'm not sure if that was intentional or not, but apart from that, I liked this and the idea behind it.

Thank you! I appreciate the input as well. No, I didn't intentionally break the flow. That may have been a side effect of when I was editing it. Are there any parts you think I should look at to smooth out?

 

[Hercynia]

Thank you! I appreciate the input as well. No, I didn't intentionally break the flow. That may have been a side effect of when I was editing it. Are there any parts you think I should look at to smooth out?

The part that stands out to me as most disjointed is the second verse, but that's just my opinion and how I write poetry there. I don't mean to force my style of writing onto you. And you're welcome for the input - don't worry about it.

 

[CelticHero37]

Okay, thank you! I'll take a look at it.

 

[CelticHero37]

Looking at this now, I'm wondering where this came from. It's kinda dark compared to what I normally do.

 

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I like the beginning and end. The middle was a bit cringe-cringe-cry-cry.


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[CelticHero37]

I was kinda goin for the crys there for added affect xD