We Who Can't Forget The Past (Prelude)

[EasternGhost]

(Voice One)


They call him Blue Ghost within the Dream World. Maybe he was a Dream Eater once upon a time, that would explain his strength. I'm not sure though.


(Voice Two)


Maybe he was a Dream Eater? What're you a fool? He had to be!! He easily manipulates Essence at Class A levels!! The strongest "Wild One" we've encountered in decades was incapable of surpassing Class B, and she only scratched the surface of that!!


(Voice One)


There is no need to remind anyone of us what happened with Inmate #3221, I was present myself after she was captured. I saw the damages.


(Voice Three)


Inmate #3221 was only a powerhouse when considered within the limits of Class C strength. As my colleague mentioned, she had only begun to scratch at the surface of the glacier that is Class B. It's like leaving a claw mark upon the highest floor of a pyramid and calling it progress in a dig site. I find it amusing that anyone even feels the need to mention Class B and her in the same breath.


(Voice Two)


Amusing? Are you insulting us? You weren't even there!!


(Voice One)


Relax. He's only trying to goad you. He wasn't present, and he knows it. You and I were, we both know what happened, he doesn't. Why let him get under your skin any further then neccessary?


(Voice Two)


Agreed. Inmate #3221....she was something else. The Dream World for whatever reason brought her here like it did all of us. I feel like it was a mistake somehow. From the moment she appeared, malcontent stirred. Conflict erupted wherever she was. I don't understand what drove her to the lengths that she went to. What was her goal? It was never made clear because she never spoke of one.


(Voice Three)


Maybe she came into contact with a Nightmare? They haven't been sighted within the boundaries of Lucid City or any of the territory it claims under it's jurisdiction, but that doesn't mean one wasn't present. Or at least nearby if nothing else.


(Voice One)


That's what most thought. I don't know though. I suppose I never will. She refused to respond to any questioning. We even attempted to torture something out of her. Anything at all. Even then though she said nothing. She spat blood in my eyes when I finished with her. I was exhausted from my efforts...and I still failed to learn anything. Her defiance was....extraordinary.


(Voice Two)


It's fortunate she's dead now. Imagine what someone like her could have been capable of in a few more years? Decades? Centuries? It's almost terrifying if I consider it long enough.


(Voice Three)


Yes. The reports say she was quite the handful. I assume they weren't exaggerated?


(Voice Two)


Hell no they weren't!! Over two dozen dead within the security team!! Dream Eaters were called in to handle the situation. Even then, I've heard the stories I admit secondhand, from someone who spoke to a Dream Eater who participated in the pursuit. She made one memorable last stand.....


(Voice Three)


Well how did she escape from Cerebral Prison anyways?


(Voice One)


No one has any explanation for that mystery. Luckily she didn't get hardly anywhere before it was noticed.


(Voice Three)


Back to the original discussion however. Blue Ghost. Class A from the intelligence we've been given. I find this...difficult to believe myself but the source it comes from is very promising and reliable.


(Voice Two)


That makes...what....four?


(Voice One)


Yes. Four individuals with the ability to use Essence who have eclipsed even Inmate #3221 in strength. Everyone of them considered under the state of "Wild One".


(Voice Three)


Four!!?


(Voice Two)


Yes. Their identities as we know them are Obsidian Dragon ranked Class B, Emerald Shield ranked Class B, Scarlett Pirate who is also ranked Class B. Scarlett Pirate recently participated in a bloodbath that resulted in the deaths of three Dream Eater operatives.


(Voice Three)


Thats...unsettling.


(Voice Two)


Indeed.


(Voice One)


Then there is Blue Ghost. The first considered Class A in I think five hundred years? He's very hard to find or even spot however. I wonder if that's where the codename originated from sometimes. I'd believe it.


(Voice Three)


Four. Insanity. I wonder if the Dream World truly does live and breathe like some of those lunatic priests in that bizarre religion believe.


(Voice One)


Bizarre Religion? In some ways I find the beliefs of the Church of Reverie to be quite....competent.


{Extended Silence.............}


(Voice Two)


Regardless, we have four threats that we need to apprehend. Let's get started then?


(Voice One)


Yes, we might as well. I won't be sleeping well until otherwise.


(Voice Three)


Sleep? Who does that anymore?


{Brief laughter from all individuals present....}


(Voice One)


See you all in the field. Dismissed.

 

[Grey]

Is this intended to be a script for stage, screen, or game?

 

[EasternGhost]

Is this intended to be a script for stage, screen, or game?

Just a prelude idea for a story I wanted to write, that was my attempt to get myself started and pumped into writing it.


 
Lemme know what you thought of it if nothing else. Not sure what could be said about it though.

 

[Grey]

Well, structurally this is a bit bold, for a novel. No bad thing, but certainly something to be aware of. You may need a cleaner way to indicate the alternating voices.


As to the content of the conversation, it becomes cliche anime jargon seguing into vague exposition. The conversation doesn't feel natural but at least each voice appears to have a distinct character - it just feels like you're trying to namedrop as many elements of the setting as you can.


This is an opening you could get away with in a more audio-visual context, but I have my doubts about it catching readers in text.

 

[EasternGhost]

Well, structurally this is a bit bold, for a novel. No bad thing, but certainly something to be aware of. You may need a cleaner way to indicate the alternating voices.
As to the content of the conversation, it becomes cliche anime jargon seguing into vague exposition. The conversation doesn't feel natural but at least each voice appears to have a distinct character - it just feels like you're trying to namedrop as many elements of the setting as you can.


This is an opening you could get away with in a more audio-visual context, but I have my doubts about it catching readers in text.

It's just a prelude. It has little consequence with the novel in any way.

 

[Grey]

If it's of no consequence, you might as well cut it rather than worry about feedback on it.

 

[EasternGhost]

If it's of no consequence, you might as well cut it rather than worry about feedback on it.

This was just to get me pumped to attempt writing it. I was thinking to add it as a prelude/prologue or something but I was going to flesh it out with something extra. This isn't the format the story will be written in. This was almost like a recorded phone call or something like that but not quite.