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[Tokyo Ghoul: Devour or Perish]Timoteus Shiro
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Hey there!
First of all, thanks for the interest. There are, however, a few problems here. For one, a solid chunk of his personality appears to be more of a background thing than his personality. And in addition, the requirements listed on the character sheet weren't quite met, if you'd be so kind to take a look at them again.
Also, it appears to be a bit shakey with the grammar, which we'd like to have people pay attention to.
Ideally, you'd also develop a reason for him to be involved in any ghoul/CCG business. By that, I mean, how would he be integrated in the story realistically?
First of all, thanks for the interest. There are, however, a few problems here. For one, a solid chunk of his personality appears to be more of a background thing than his personality. And in addition, the requirements listed on the character sheet weren't quite met, if you'd be so kind to take a look at them again.
Also, it appears to be a bit shakey with the grammar, which we'd like to have people pay attention to.Ideally, you'd also develop a reason for him to be involved in any ghoul/CCG business. By that, I mean, how would he be integrated in the story realistically?