Poetry The One In The Mirror.

[Heart]

Who is this girl,


Staring me down,


Looking through me,


As I am nothing.


All I see,


A stranger,


A danger,


Unknown memories.


This alien glares back at me,


Nothing but an entity,


A nightmare I have yet to be aware of.


Scared silent,


An unnamable presence in front of me.


This is a horror,


This thing is not me,


Painted across my reflection,


Of more than appearence,


Of less,


A smile.

 

[Heartsteal]

Interesting. I'm no expert on poetry, but this seems almost like the chorus to a song, though unfortunately that doesn't mean much lately.


appearance* is the only mistake that seems to jump out at me, but nicely done.


On a side note:


Haikus are simple


But sometimes they make no sense


Refrigerator

 

[Hatchet]

It's confusing; for the better part of the poem we're under the impression that the author is being confronted by someone, and it switches without warning or prior hint into the idea that it's the author's reflection, which feels random


Bits of it are nonsensical:


"Painted across my reflection,


Of more than appearence,


Of less,


A smile. "


What does that mean? What am I supposed to take away from it?


*Unnameable

 

[Heart]

Thank you, I had no idea how to spell Unnameable xD


"This is a horror, this thing is not me, painted across my reflection, Of more than Appearence, Of less, A smile." It means that her appearence hasnt changed much, but the nightmare she sees in herself is because she no longer smiles. "painted" just putting atristic value into it.

 

[Heartsteal]

Valid points Hatchet, although in a poem this short, I believe the title actually carries weight. (I won't pretend to know poetry, but I will observe possibilities.)


*missed unnameable*


Well, I've failed you all, you'll need to go on without me, I missed a spelling mistake. XP

 

[Heart]

Haikus are simple


But sometimes they make no sense


Refrigerator


Your comment will live on forever xD