Novel Intro.

[Easton]

Starting a sci-fi novel~


Doctor Mendez strode down the hallways of the Arbitron-145, making her way to the command center. Her metallic tablet of e-notes in hand, she made her way to the room with precision and speed. She was lucky to be chosen to be a part of Project: Genesis. Genesis would bring a new era to the world, a new life to be exact. Millions of light years away from Earth, the Arbitron-145 sped into the depths of space, in search of desolation and quiet. The crew of 1,256 were looking for a new station, a spot to place life. Not to selfishly expand human life, which they already did across their own galaxy, but to start life anew. Earth and its people across the outer planets voted and came to the conclusion to send a spacecraft off into far reaching space to explore interests of the human race. But as only leaders of government and members of the crew know, they also came to start new research. Research so groundbreaking and formidable, it would be a few more steps forward than humanity could deal with alone.

 

[Grey]

There's potential here, but it's very... dry. No simile, no metaphor, no personality. It's more like an unwieldy synopsis than an introduction. You should characterize Dr. Mendez, draw things out more (this is a mistake I see from a lot of young writers - remember a novel is around 40,000 words long), describe the locale a little more luridly.


You tell a lot, but there are elements here you can convey through scenery and dialogue, or internal monologues, rather than an expository dump. Do you read much sci-fi?