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[AlbionCrusader]

I recently started writing my own songs now. At the moment for the first one, I'm a bit blocked in finishing it. Here's what I got so far. It sounds a bit better with the guitar. I have the mind set on what I want it to sound like. The truth is wanted, as if I get good/bad feedback will help me improve. I'm trying to go for a Neil Young type.


I know the Work for a living, working for the living might not make sense. But hear me out. You work for the living being alive. Work so long, you become dead inside, thus working for the living who take the credit you work for. Them just sitting on there butt not doing anything. Make any possible sense?


You spend your life, so care free.


Spending it running free, not a care


in the world. Not ever feeling any sorrow.


For the one's you left behind.


Working 24 Hours in a dead end job.


unappreciated, under paid, you just can't


take it anymore.


You work for a living


Working for the living.


Your dead inside.


You might as well be in your grave.

 

[TagochiRein]

Yea. maybe with the guitar it would be better. Me reading it without a melody is kind of throwing me off. And the words are Neil Young/ Woody Guthrie-ish. They are good artist but they know who their audience were. Do you know who your audience is?