Nicklaus (Nick)

[SquidFairy]

Nicklaus (Nick)

Introduction

Please help me improve this OC! Any criticism is fine


Nicklaus Heimirich Leuger, or, "Nick" for short, is a Royal Guardsman. He doesn't own any specific title within the Royal Guard. Seeing as he is a senior, he is only allowed to patrol certain areas and towns, even though he highly disagrees to the idea. He prefers to at least fight one human until he retires.

Basics

Name: Nicklaus (Nick)


Series/Fandom: Undertale (Can easily be changed to a non-fandom OC)


Age: 58


Race/Species: Monster, Human-like.


Gender: Male


Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual


Occupation: Royal Guard, Dad

• Appearance
• Personality
• History
• Equipment
• Inspirations

• Appearance
  
  Height: 6'7"
  
  
  Hair: White, No fringe, combed back but also messy at the back.
  
  
  Eyes: Grey
  
  
  Body: Athletic, very bulky.
  
  
  Attire: Light grey T-shirt, black and dark grey varsity jacket, blue jeans, black and white sneakers, long necklace with a tiny sword keychain attached to it.
  
  
  • Fluffy, medium-short length beard, not covering the moustache area.
    
  • Four grey horns, top of his forehead, same colour as his eyes.
    
  • Pointed ears, ears fade to black at the tips. Ears have two silver earrings on each ear.
    
  • Multiple scars around his body. Most visible ones are small, scratch-like ones on his hands, one through his mouth and one zig-zag-like one through his left eye (Our left).
    
  • Pointed fingernails, like claws.
    
  • Fangs.
    
  
  
  
• Personality
  
  People tend to see Nick as a furious, stern and strict man, but in all reality, he is forgetful, childish and a big softie. He snickers at any fart noise he hears and tends to make Dad jokes to his friends and workmates. Nick has a low, rough sounding voice, which makes him seem more menacing.
  
  
  He is very stubborn, and even though he has a dad-like personality, he has trouble making people feel better if they are upset, and accidentally says things at the wrong time, which causes him to blurt out things he doesn't intend on actually saying.
  
  
  Nick prefers not to talk about his scars when people ask where they came from. Instead, he makes up stories about them.
  
  
  But overall, he is a huge sweetheart.
  
  
  Likes:
  
  
  • Big, fluffy dogs
    
  • Dad jokes
    
  • Arm-wrestling
    
  • Protecting others
    
  • Sleeping/Napping
    
  
  
  Dislikes:
  
  
  • Being Manipulated
    
  • Being lied to
    
  • People who hurt his friends or family
    
  • His ex-wife, Vivienne
    
  • Seafood
    
  
  
  Strengths:
  
  
  • Strong
    
  • Kind
    
  • Loving
    
  • Charismatic
    
  • Motivating
    
  
  
  Weaknesses:
  
  
  • Loud
    
  • Air-headed
    
  • Very Stubborn
    
  • Forgetful
    
  • Childish
    
  • Doesn't take many things seriously
    
  • Easily manipulated
    
  
  
  
• History
  
  (Sorry if this is cringy :,))
  
  
  Trigger Warning: This contains graphic scenes consisting of abuse and domestic violence.
  
  
  In his early 20s, Nick experienced love at first sight. He met a beautiful woman with long, brown hair with a half-fringe; with cat ears and tusks. The woman, named Vivienne, got along well with Nick. Laughing at his jokes, endless compliments and constant smiling. They became boyfriend and girlfriend, and after a few years, happily married. Nick had the best time of his life. All was great until they had a daughter named Amelia. Vivienne's personality suddenly grew sour, for Nick saw that it was for no reason.
  
  
  Vivienne threatened to murder Nick on a daily basis, causing him to have second thoughts about true love. Nick kept this a secret from his family, as he tried to hide all the wounds Vivienne gave him. He didn't treat his wounds, which ended up with him having multiple scars across his entire body. Vivienne also abused him verbally; insulting his looks, personality and body shape, which he was quite a thin lad at that time, lacking muscle.
  
  
  One unfortunate day, Vivienne found a sharp, big kitchen knife, which Nick had tried to hide from her. She attempted to, as one would call, "Cutting out ones eyes". Nick fought back, well, fighting back as in trying to push her away without hurting her. She managed to injure his face, including mildly scratching his eyeball, which lead to his visible face scar.
  
  
  Nick escaped her grasp, running to his family for help. His parents completely distanced Nick and Vivienne, disallowing Vivienne to ever visit him again. As Nick slowly healed, with a bandage across his face, saw Vivienne carrying their baby when he was wandering outside. Nick nervously approached her, apologizing multiple times, pleading for her to stop her sudden lust for hurting him. She looked back at him, menacingly and responded with something along the lines of, "I never loved you. I pretended to love you so I could have a child. You're worthless to me now.".
  
  
  Nick felt like his heart shattered into pieces. He lived in despair for years, slowly overcoming and recovering from what she has done to him. Once his eye had fully recovered, leaving a scar on his face and a small scratch on his eyeball, he thought it would be best to try to apply for the Royal Guard, so he would be able to patrol multiple locations, in search for his daughter, so he would at least be able to see if she has grown to be a lovely child, or a clone of Vivienne.
  
  
  
• Equipment
  
  Nick's weapon is a giant battleaxe, which he has trouble travelling with due to it being heavy and big, even though he says that it is light as a feather. He still brings it with him everywhere when he is doing his job, despite giving him slight back injuries.
  
  
  Even though he is not allowed to battle, he likes to carry his battleaxe around to make people think that he is a fighter. Also he likes to show his battleaxe off.
  
  
  
• Inspirations
  
  • Reinhardt from Overwatch (Sorry that he looks too much like Reinhardt, I tried to not make him look like Reinhardt, but still be old and have scars.)
    
  • ORAS Archie from Pokemon
    
  • Lysandre from Pokemon
    
  • Joseph Joestar from JoJo's Bizarre Adventure
    
  • Kotetsu Kaburagi from Tiger & Bunny
    
  • A Dad.
    
  
  
  

 

[Contactor]

Eyy squidy, nice to see you on this Forum, Anyway, nice page.

 

[Contactor]

My advice, well i don't have much But i believe you should made another version like a Non Undertale Version To The undertale version, just in case if you are using nick in another RP. Maybe making use of a tab. Or use the Accordions BB Code

 

[SquidFairy]

My advice, well i don't have much But i believe you should made another version like a Non Undertale Version To The undertale version, just in case if you are using nick in another RP. Maybe making use of a tab. Or use the Accordions BB Code

Mmh yeah, all I would really need to do is change his story a little bit to make him a non-undertale OC.


Thanks for the advice!